Trixie and Spitfire fall in love and life is always throwing curve-balls at them around each turn. Join them as they venture through life and all the unexpected turns it has to offer. Now an Arc series.
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So Silver Spoon is related to Octavia? I believe it.
Interessting, is Fleetfoot maybe related with the enemies?
I think this chapter helped me to accept everything about the story. I mean the problems i saw earlier doen´t exist anymore, but you explained pretty much to me back there.
This is a nice chapter, i liked what happend there, even if i am not sure what happend in the last scene. I read it again later, i got a bit distracted today.
dun dun dunnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
Wait so, Blaze just burst into a pie shop, gave Trixie minor headtrauma, but killed two completely innocent random ponies? Right in front of everybody? In an attempt to coverup Fleetfoot's involvement, and to test out a new device? This seems like a really bad idea on her part that could very easily backfire.![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
Moving right along, Fleetfoot knows them? Well, that is interesting. Not just that, but apparently she's on first name basis with them.
That spell Blaze cast on Trixie must be something special, though I am not clear what it is. My first guess would be some sort of memory spell, but if the whole goal was to keep Fleetfoot's cover, she could have just killed Trixie, so there's presumably more to it than that.
Notes:![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
- Name commas, be wary of them.
1. Fleetfoot said Ruby, not Solarflare. Solarflare is not mentioned in this chapter until Trixie brings it up.
2. Trixie says "first/second" but she is making the same point twice. It will work better if you remove those two words.
Looking at it now, I think you meant to have Fleetfoot mention Solarflare in a seperate sentence first, which would resolve the whole thing.
5255643 Yes i always thought the two looked similar, so after I decided to make them aunt and niece. I always thought it'd make Silvers life more interesting what with her being a bully at school. Having someone like Octavia in her life would be essential to her growth as a pony.
5255940 Which problem were you referring too? My story has had a few of those.![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Other than that glad you liked the bombshell. REMEMBER THAT IT'S IMPORTANT!
As for the last seen it ties in with what I was doing the last few chapters. Back right after the fight between Trixie and Fleet in Spitfire's apartment. Just after that. I don't want to spoil anything so without spoiling too much, but remember the fight in the alley between Trixie and the Kindle Trinity and the threats they made promising to always watch her and no matter where she went yadda yadda, bad guy raving on about revenge and what not.
Next chapter will be more sensual that WTF is going on.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
5256054 Welcome to the ship Sniper! Thanks for the comment, fav, the follow and so on and so forth. Hope you like where we're currently heading! And yes this was a very dun dun duuuuun moment. Hope you love the story! It was my first!![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
5256203 Letting Trixie live has to do with the promise Solarflare made back in the alley the previous night. Well, I guess threat is more appropriate but you get my point. This is what I feel best explains Blazes motives.
The other thing is something I wrote you told me to correct was in fact correct as is but I'll never tell cause it was a hint!
And as for those accursed commas I'm defaulting back to my college notes for that from my Professor. Speaking of which anyone care to guess who this mysterious professor is?
5257031 also congrats this is the six story i have ever read what has made me cry! you get fifty![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
5258328 I get fifty what?
Do I get Rainbow dollars?!![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
5258734 yess
5257114![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
So was your plan to not fix a couple of things to create a smoke screen? Cause I can't imagine some of these were actually intentional.
Yes I figured that Solarflare didn't kill Trixie because she wanted to torture her, It's just that she was lurking nearby and had a specific spell prepared, so I have to wonder if it just an amnesia spell or some kind, or something more sinister like mind control to set Trixie up later. Of course, it could just be a magic punch to the back of the head.![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
5259108 No actually only one thing you mentioned was legit something important. But don't worry it'll all come out later. For now though Trixie and Spitfire will get some quality time is my intention. Also nice try on the spell but I have something else in mind for that.![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
5257021 sorry i actually only meant the few things i didn´t understood right away and what i said in every comment. Looks like i choosed the wrong words sorry.
I know i not make the only comments, but maybe you remember the few times i thought there would be something wrong and then there was the one time i didn´t liked a scene because i didn´t really understood it.
Now i can say i have enough informations, that means i have no problem with the whole story anymore, i mean with each aspect.
You can be sure i really like the story, sometimes i am just a little bit uncertain, about what i should think about a few things.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
PS: It could be that i have an idea what i should think of Fleetfoot and other things right now, thank you![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Geez another chapter that hurts my brain. Okay lets try to untangle this mess![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
Okay so at first Trixie initiates them talking alone at the bar, but then
Which implies that Fleetfoot started the conversation. Then later
Fleetfoot must have transformed into a unicorn for a second; otherwise I don’t know how Blaze could be looking at two unicorns.![:derpyderp1:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/derpyderp1.png)
Then there are those two earth ponies hit by those crystals. It looks and sounds like they’re dead due to the narrative description and how Ruby tells Blaze which she basically confirms
That passage causes further confusion because you didn't have separate paragraphs for separate speakers because I didn't pick up the Blaze part when I first read it.
Adding to the confusion, none of the main cast react to the fact that those two mares were just killed. I suppose this could be something you’re going to expand upon in the next chapter, but it is bothering me that no-one really reacted to them supposedly dying.