Trixie and Spitfire fall in love and life is always throwing curve-balls at them around each turn. Join them as they venture through life and all the unexpected turns it has to offer. Now an Arc series.
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I am not sure, but maybe it is Silver Spoon right there, i actually would like that. I think i remember her the way you describe her, but actually i think i saw a story where Silver Spoon is something like Octavias sister.
I think i start to finally warm up with Fleetfoot, Fleetfoot was really obsessed of Spitfire, i think it was important that Spifire finaly told her about that time.
PS: I thought i would like it not as much as the other one but the things with Fleetfoot´s new girlfriend there was somehow nice. I probably thought i would not like it, because it remembered me a bit of episodes from animes, which tries to show every side of every important people at the same time and in the end nothing good happend. But i like it, and i am just glad that you manage to write some good romance, it seems to be like it.
I don´t know to 100% what i like and when something starts to get bad for me, but i think i can be sure that your romance storys are more or less the way i like it.
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I was thinking along the same lines
5223341 I probably missunderstand something, but i still hope you make this a Spitfire, Trixie romance.
I think you mean it like that, that Spitfire is just Trixies first Mare and she liked mostly Stallions till now.
5223473 No misunderstanding. This will be a Spitfire Trixie romance story, I just like to build up connections before I hook random ponies up. You know, make mutual friends, establish a place for them, make them understand each other. Kind of like a Spitfire Dash story called Fire and Rain I think.
I'm actually surprised no ones said anything about Trixie's obsession with getting back at Twilight yet. O.o
5223473 PS. straight as a door knob. I think I see what you mean. You see i implied that Trixie was 'straight', in the sexual preference, as an object that isn't straight at all. Hence shes actually gay. Spoilers Trixie isn't straight, but she's not gay either.![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Make sense?
If it doesn't I'll tell you straight up next time.
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And YourBronyGod lives yet again! Happy to see you're still on this ship! Get it?
So you like where this is going huh? You Texus, and Crow are my best ship mates on this voyage. Glad to see you haven't abandoned ship yet! Glad you like where I'm going with the build up makes me all warm and fuzzy inside.![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
5223808 Oh yeah. Any new Trixie ship I stick with.
5223798 No i think i got it know^^ It is good to learn more, as a child i learned a bit english from the old games, and today i learn to understand a bit better from you![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
It is strange, but i think i was better with my english than other kids because i played an english game befor and tried to understand what the words could mean in the situation.
I don´t like it much if i make a mistake, but well if i am not sure my english is good enough then i just ask, i understand much but not everything.
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That sounds quite good, i think that is something i often miss in other fanfictions. They always meet and within two sentences they are together and have their first 3-4 times sex, till they maybe think they actually don´t want to be together or something like that.
You maybe think the same if you say it like this, but there are many things i don´t like about a romance if i am not able to feel like the ponys should be together. I hope you know what i mean.
If Soarin would get someone too, than they could have an unusual date with six ponys. I don´t care if Soarin get a Mare or a Stallion. Somehow it could be interessting to make them all gay in some way. I think it is still called gay in english if a Mare and Mare are together right?
PS: I don´t know why the waitress was waiting so long for Fleetfoot if she is that cocky toward her but i could think that she could be good for Fleetfoot. If they should have foals, she would be probably more the motherly type than Fleetfoot, and i think she would console Fleetfoot very much. I don´t have much to say why i think that, but i have that image about her somehow.
Awh Fleetfoot's gotten herself a date, how cute. Maybe she will calm down alittle once she isn't quite so pent up.![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
Incidently, I am amused how the topic pretty much leaps from "So yeah, I tortured, mutilated, and crippled another pegasus, and I loved it! I got away scotfree too. Oh, speaking of love, how about that waitress?"![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
Actually, it is kind of dark how Spitfire seems incredibly casual about this. To the point that she seems to consider what she did to be "no better or worse" than Trixie, who could be at worst accused of lying, or acting in self defense to escape. (Even if the rumors were true, Trixie did not succesfully hurt anyone.)
Notes:
Though you have certainly improved, I just want to highlight these in particular:
1. Name of the addressed+comma's:
"Twilight, I hate you with all my heart!"
"With all my heart, I hate you, Twilight!"
"Did you know, Twilight, that I hate you with all my heart?"
2a. saidtag comma's behind dialogue + lower case:
(If you start with her name the case won't change, but you still need the comma instead of a period.)
"With all my heart, I hate you, Twilight," said Trixie
"With all my heart, I hate you, Twilight," Trixie said
"Twilight, I hate you with all my heart!" screamed Trixie.
"Did you know, Twilight, that I hate you with all my heart?" asked Trixie.
2b. saidtag comma's before dialogue:
Trixie screamed, "Twilight, I hate you with all my heart!"
Trixie said, "With all my heart, I hate you, Twilight."
Trixie asked, "Did you know, Twilight, that I hate you with all my heart?"
2c. Dialogue + actiontag instead of saidtag. (no case changes)
Trixie sighed. "Twilight, I hate you with all my heart."
"With all my heart, I hate you, Twilight." The unicorn turned away from her.
Of course, I only think of this after writing all this... but here's a webpage that may explain it more clearly than I can.
Hey, Zalla.
I stumbled across this while I was browsing, maybe you can make use of it?
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5226794 If you think that's crazy see what I have in store for next time. A lot worse indeed since Spitfire wanted to hurt Vector sure, but like you pointed out which story is true?![:rainbowderp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowderp.png)
And once again the bane of my existence the comma. I hope the comma thing gets better cause I'm trying so hard with them that now it feels like beating my head against the wall. Oh well, at least you showed me an awesome picture of Spitfire and Trixie. That was nice!![:twilightangry2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightangry2.png)
Also, the comma examples I'll print them and use as a format of sorts for future reference. My hope is to reduce the comma issues, I know most people here that I read anyway, tend to ignore the comma rules. I'm trying not to, but I i'll let you in on a secret. I failed English 105 in college three times before I passed. I am a native speaker, but writing was never a strong suit. IN fact, I'd dare say English writing is my worst subject aside from math. I hate math. Twilight would not be pleased.
Do you think using the waitress as an excuse was too weak for topic change? I feel it was.![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
5229390 PS. I loved the picture. I'm gonna ask the person if I can use it for my story cover art until I make one myself.
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Too weak? Well, maybe, but on the other hand I could understand them both grabbbing hold of the first chance they got to get away from the topic.
True, the stories right now do not fully sync up. So there is something going on I dont know. I originally thought Soarin simply missunderstood, but there may be more to this.
About comma's. They are the worst. I'm also learning how to use them myself too. I have a decent grasp on those two rules now, but there are so many more it is maddening. I do not have the confidence in my understanding of the other rules to offer corrections.
Funny story, I was always scoring worse on my native language than English.![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
ok maybe I missed something, has I have been known to do, but is Spitfire flying around with blood dripping from her leg and Trixie looking like she took a brick to the face still?
ps, I love the story so far, the way the charters build off of one another, and how you show where they once where and how it effects them today.
6261657 Yes and Trixie is with Soarin to tend to her trashed face. No, you missed nothing.
Also, glad you like it so far. Honestly this story is far too complex for my liking. Once it's over I'll never do this kind of complicated story ever again!
Let me know what you think in the comments and if you feel like somethings wrong let me know so I can tell you if it is or if I need to fix it.
Yeah if I'm trixie I'm not apologizing for anything. I am not the better mare and I do not turn the other cheek. I prefer words as my weapon and will use them if I deem fit. Not someone else.
AMD I will buck a bitch