The Silent Guardian

by Not_available_now

Ch 13. What timberwolves?

Ch 13.

I hear the howling again. It scares the crap out of me and I feel a shiver crawl down my spine. I have no idea if Mac is back, where Applejack and Applebloom are.

I see something moving in between the trees and that something is growling at me. My first thought is to run, but then they would simply come after me. I could call for help, and being the hero that I am, I do.

My efforts are mostly fruitless, the only result is that the timberwolves now know where I am.

If I don’t make a stand then the whole Apple family will be in danger. I can’t let that happen.

A few leap out from their hiding and slowly walk towards me, as if they were seeing if I was a viable prey. They growl at bit and I growl back.

I take a defensive post and flare out my wings to make me look bigger.

The one closest to me jumps and I step aside to avoid the fangs. I turn 90 degrees and buck him in the side, throwing him back a few meters. The timberwolf stays down, I hope for a bit longer then one minute, I guess practicing my bucking really helped. I feel very content with how the first one went, but then more emerge from the tree line. My odds weren’t going to improve at this rate.

I flare my wings out ever more and, because I am a freaking alicorn, I think that I look quite big. They halt their approach a bit, but when they notice that I am not attacking they come closer once more.

Two attack at once, one jumps towards me and the other one comes in low. My hooves are made of a very hard substance, not unlike nails, so I hit the one that goes low very hard on the side of his head. A lot of branches go flying off his face and I see a large smear of tree sap on my hoof. There is a large hole in the head of the timberwolf.

I feel satisfied until I feel a ripping pain go through my left wing. I fall onto the ground and see smears of blood on it and a timberwolf with a few feathers in its mouth running towards me, fangs smeared with blood.

I stand up and turn around, holding my right wing stiff as I make a pirouette, hitting the timberwolf on the head and knocking him out cold.

The first timberwolf that attacked me is back on its feet and is running towards me. I hope that I can do something with my magic, but the only things that happens when I concentrate is that a couple of sparks come out of my horn.

But it has been very dry lately and the sparks land right on the back of the timberwolf, setting him ablaze. The fire spreads quickly and the wolf runs away as he lets out a sharp whine. Leaving a trail of burning leaves, twigs and branches behind.

I walk over to the unconscious timberwolf. The branches near his middle are snapped and bent. It’s breath is slow and irregular. I put my hoof on its neck and press down hard, snapping it and killing it instantly.

I sit down, letting the adrenaline flow out of my body. I have to let my breathing become normal again and I look at the carnage. There is a trail of smoking leaves and branches, a timberwolf that is missing half its head and one with a snapped neck.

I don’t want to let this lying here, so I grab one of the paws with my mouth and drag it towards the tree line. It tastes very sour and I have to drink something strong soon to get that taste out of my mouth.

As I walk towards the next one I hear something else. I feel relieved when I realize it is the sound of hooves and it is very close. Finally somepony who can help me.

“What in tarnation is goin’ on here?” Applejack asks as she emerges from the tree line. “And why are ya still here? It is 8 o’clock, ah though that ya had gone home long ago.”

“Aren’t you seeing what just happened here?” I ask her, unable to believe that she isn’t seeing the corpses of the timberwolves.

“Ah just see one frazzled lookin’ stallion.” She says casually. “And ah think that he needs ta get home.” She says honestly. I know that she couldn’t lie, so something must be wrong.

“Don’t you see the remains of anything? Or any blood perhaps?” I ask her, most likely sounding very weird.

“Honey, ya need ta get sum sleep. Ya’re hallucinatin’. Ah talked ta Rainbow and she’ll apologize the next time ya see her. Go ta her house and get sum sleep.” She turns around and walks back to the barn.

“Bye.” I yell to her as she walks away from me.

How the hell didn’t she see anything. As I look around I see that the corpses stick out quite clear and are very hard to miss. She didn't even notice the blood on my wings.. My wings sting too. I think that I am going to take a shower in the cloud house. I really hope that Rainbow has some stiff drinks.

I clean up the remaining bodies, laying them in a ditch somewhere. I am tired, but muster up the energy to flap to Rainbow’s cloud house.

I arrive at the cloud house, completely deprived of my energy. I slump through the door and up the stairs, ignoring Rainbow, who is snoring on the couch.

I take a long and refreshing shower, spending extra time to get all the dried up blood out of my wings. I wipe my coat dry with a towel, making sure that my wings are dry.

I walk downstairs, looking for that strong drink. I see that Rainbow is still snoring on the couch. I walk into the kitchen and open a cabinet, grabbing a small glass. I look through the kitchen for something strong. I find a unopened bottle of wine. I want something stronger, but this is the strongest thing around.

I grab a bigger glass and pour myself a drink.

And another… and another… and another…

Author's Note:

Sorry that this one is a bit late, but you shouldn't complain. One chapter every other day, you're spoiled.
Anyway, the schedule is set back one day, so no new one tomorrow.
As always, feedback is requested.
And the next times will arrive.

Comments

[Buckshot2825]

First off, haven't read it. Yet, reading now, just wanted to let you know that this is one of those times I said. I won't be able to access computer until tomorrow when I will gladly go over it and comment the errors I like where this story is going, it is a nice piece in my digital collection of stories I read. So long for now, and have a nice day
Just read it, right off the bat there are some spelling errors. My main concern is that your overusing the pronoun I too much. Start your sentences with "going over... To the kitchen I" just an example not a correction. Anyways, after our hero wakes up with a mean hangover I wonder what he is going to do about the "hallucination" :3
Just a joke: I think, even with his hangover, he will get up before rainbow, she is just that lazy

[Buckshot2825]

"and for the hero that I am," -> "and being the hero that i am,"
"were seeing if I was a viable pray." pray -> prey
"I take a defensive post and my wings flare out a bit, probably to make me look bigger." this just sounds wierd given the current tone of the story (first person) either say "and my wings instinctively flare out..." or "out a bit, as i try to make myself look bigger."
"I hope for a bit longer that 1 minute" that -> than, 1 -> one
"I feel very contend with how the first..." contend -> content
"They halt their approach a bit, but when they notice that I am not attacking they come closer once more." Note: im about to pretty much rewrite this sentence.
"They halt their approach for a moment, but when they notice that i am not attacking, they start to close in once more." my advice, read over yours, read over mine the only "needed" correction is the "approach for a moment"
"Two attack at once, one jumps and goes high and the other one goes low. My hooves are made of a very hard substance, not unlike nails, so I hit the one that goes low very hard on the side of his head. A lot of branches go flying off his face and I see a large smear of tree sap on my hoof. There is a large hole in the head of the timberwolf." yes i just copied an entire paragraph DEAL WITH IT
"...one jumps and goes high..." i believe that this is written incorrectly, no offense. "...one jumping high..."
"...and the other one goes low." also a bit weird. "...while the other one comes in low."
*Underlined text "This needs to be a bit more, evaluated i believe. Your telling the reader that his hooves are made of a hard substance. (probably should put *finger* nails ) here is my version, feel free to discard it "I notice my hooves are made of a hard substance, (very is a filler word, i would refrain from using it. putting a autocorrect of DONT USE THAT or NOPE when the word is typed fixes the usage.) so i decide to hit the wolf that had gone low in the head."
*italicized portion "im currently debating what to do with this, but here is what i got so far "A lot (another set that arent beneficial to writing) of branches go flying off his face as a large hole appears in his head." I dont know what to do with the tree sap portion, it might be just discarded due to it being irrelevant to the protagonist's current plight.
"I feel satisfied until I feel a ripping pain go through my left wing. I fall onto the ground and see smears of blood on it and a timberwolf with a few feathers in its mouth running towards me, fangs smeared with blood." im just going to rewrite this... it feels like the sentence is jumping too much, going from one thought to the next without much transition.
"I feel satisfied until i feel a ripping pain go through my left wing. Falling to the ground, disoriented by the pain, i see blood beginning to flow from it. The other timberwolf that had jumped at me had caught me off guard and was now running towards me, a few bloody feathers still stuck in its mouth, fangs dyed red with blood." i dont know if that helps or not, but im confident that youll be able to glean something off it
"...as I make a pirouette. I hit the timberwolf on the head, knocking him out cold." the second sentence is more of a fragment than a sentence. combining them to make it a complete thought should fix the problem "...as i make a pirouette, hitting the timberwolf square on the head and knocking him unconscious." yes the word choice is different, but i think it makes the sentence flow better
>:( another sentence fragment "...the wolf runs away as he lets out a sharp whine. Leaving a trail of burning leaves, twigs and branches behind." whine. Leaving -> whine, leaving
"Applejacks ask as she..." only 1 applejack applejacks ask -> applejack asks
"...and het sum sleep." het -> get
"She missed the blood on my wings too. My wings sting too." too many toos. also first sentence is a verb tense agreement error. "She had missed the blood on my wings, which stung from the blow i had received."
Dont worry almost done
superficial work! "...I think that I am..."
"...spending extra time to get all the dried up blood out of them." you didnt specify what the "them" was. his wings perhaps?
"I walk downstairs, looking for that strong drink. I see that Rainbow is still snoring on the couch. I walk into the kitchen and open a cabinet, grabbing a small glass." I I I I I I some of these sentence can be combined to make better formed sentences. im not saying you should change these but they might sound better if you combined them using commas or conjunctions.
Wellp, that concludes my report for today, so glad i was able to make the deadline before you came out with your next chapter.
Most of my thoughts are in the comment below so i wont go into that again.
Hey do you like reading as well as writing? i don't know if you can, but look in my favorites, i have like 3 pages of good stories that i have found over the weeks.
WARNING: The stories with pictures of rarity applejack twilight and rainbow have implied sex and some sex scenes. they arent graphic at all or else i wouldn't read them.
EXTREME WARNING!!!!!The story Love has nothing to do with it has many sex refrences and does go into graphic detail with some scenes, overall the story is decent. the author marks the most graphic scenes with ------------------ and a warning, so you have ample space to skip it if you feel a bit sheepish. trust me i would have wished that i had skipped it
A not so bad warning: that story is 200 chapters long and has many off plots (single stories or events that are congealed together but work off one another with memories and references) i stayed up until 3:00 am reading, you have been successfully warned.
The story Inner Glory is a must read. it is excellent and has not in any way broached the subject of sex, it is pure adventure alternate universe, diverse plot story. I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS STORY
Until next time!

[Not_available_now]

2252197
Giant wall of text is scary.
I'll get to it after school.

I have read both Inner Glory and Love has nothing to do with it.

[Buckshot2825]

2253768 dude if youve read love has nothing to do with it, you have my admiration...