Applejack made a mistake a few months ago and has been carrying it around with her ever since. Literally.
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Sounds like post-partum depression took AJ and AB's Ma.
Oh, Trixie; I do hope you have enough mayo and mustard to eat your words.
How did Apple Bloom know who Starswirl the Bearded is? Is she a secret magical history buff?!
Or maybe Twilight went ahead with her history class idea and lectured everyone in Ponyville. That sounds much more likely.
Oh ... my ...
Damn Trixie.
Excellent work again Sue. You really are a very good verbal writer. Seriously was not expecting the Flim-Apple Bloom scene but it just fits so well, even the temper (Wow that runs in the family, wonder from who's side though, sire's or dam's?) All three scenes are just so well done and the clifhanger ... I tip AJ's hat to thee (and expect she's gonna eat it soon). Albeit I think she'd demand that Trixie pony up the 100 bits at the same time since it's a certainty that AJ is in foal by Flim. Let the stubborn games begin!
Methinks Apple Bloom rather likes the idea of having her very own personal crazy uncle around. That was some expert emotional blackmail right there.
Oh dear, the scene with Trixie. Oh dear, now the other scene with Trixie.
Um, girls? Do you mind not using Flim as a blunt instrument to beat each other over the head? You're going to break the bat. And he's already in the hospital. Don't make it worse.
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Why would Trixie be eating her words? They were both wrong, but AJ was the one who made the only solid bet.
I kind of wanted to do a side-story set when Cheerilee and Mac were still dating, when Ma and Pa's various health problems were coming to light; this would obviously be before AB was born, but would lead up to it. I don't know if that's a good idea, though, but it would tie in to what Cheerilee said earlier about 'the one they lost'.
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Wouldn't it be a crazy 'brother-in-law'? Or would he become her honourary uncle? I don't know if what she was doing was consciously blackmail (I'd like to think AB's above that)---it seemed more like a question borne of childhood innocence to me, but your take is interesting... AB with a manipulative streak? Hm...
I know, right? Straight girls are crazy.
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No, you're right, it'd be her new crazy big brother. That sums their relationship up much better, even. I think I went with 'crazy uncle' since it's such a catchy stock phrase, you know?
As to Apple Bloom's manipulative streak—well, she's gotten better at it:
Well. If he can get to a wheel chair fast enough, he'll at least have a shot at outrunning AJ what with the baby and all.
Lots of people try to write Trixie with secret-low-self-esteem and a troubled childhood. You're the only one I've seen to really make it work in a way that doesn't feel cheap and contrived.
I loved this chapter it was sweet and funny. You can see Flim relly it in love with AJ but is to blind to see it. And I'm happy Flam and Trixie are back together. And I hope AJ and Flim can get over what Trixie is about to do and be together because they are so sweet together and they belong together please ? and have they never hear of bisexuals before?
Poor Trixie, she needs some therapy! Oh, snap!
Okay, I am absolutely loving this story. Just going to admit that right now. When Apple Bloom told him about her mother, I whimpered out loud. You made me flail my arms around like a giddy girl over how cute this was (shame on you).
Hot Sauce.
You're going to want Hot Sauce for your hat, Applejack. :|
yes. YES. YEAAAAAASH another excellent chapter.
Just remember Trix... Shit rolls downhill.
AJ: Flim, I need you to be honest with my right now. Are you straight or are you a coltcuddler?
Flim: Yes
The first part of this chapter was incredibly sappy, and I loved it as such. Looks like Flam has really blossomed here, I guess feeling responsible for your crazy girlfriend makes one more mature than running around hustling with your brother.
The scene with Applebloom was cute, and I'm also curious about the health reasons, but I'm way more curious to learn more about Mac and Cheerilee dating, so either way that side story sounds like a great idea. I hope the fact that Applebloom returned Flim's pictures isn't because AJ was trying to "break up" with him.
Oh, and I really like this last scene for Trixie, it's kind of full circle. We've seen horny Trixie, sad Trixie, crazy Trixie, but this section, especially:
is just pure Trixie Trixie. I like how we've seen her character grow to the point where she can put somepony else before her, but only one pony, and no one else. How I hope she ends up having foals with Flam, and they are all earth ponies!
I would really love to see Rainbow's reaction to the pictures in that newspaper. Flim might have to start worrying about death from above. If he's lucky.
:"So, you and Soarin did all that? Really?"
Flim: "Yes we did! Both really and quite vigorously I might add."
: " .... Can I smell your breath?"
And it's been awhile since we've seen much from the rest of the Mane 6 if I recall correctly. Are they afraid that pregnancy is contagious?
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Okay, that made me laugh like crazy.
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Thank you! I don't know if I do sappy well, but I'm glad someone liked it. Trixie's going to have to learn to put more than one pony ahead of herself if she wants to be a mother, though---or a good auntie.
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Pictures in the paper? Soarin' was the one who went to the presses, and he doesn't have the photos. Flim has half, and Flam (and Trixie, hee hee ) have the rest. Well... AJ might have some, now, too...
I actually had a scene with AJ talking to Twilight and Spike, but I didn't feel like it added to the plot, so I left it out. (It was basically AJ being cranky about Twilight's treatment of her, and Spike's unique take on pregnancy, what with him being a) not a mammal and b) adopted. But, as I said, it seemed to lag). They will appear soon, though, and there will be probably a whole chapter of the six of them (plus an uninvited guest) having some 'girl time'.
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"When a student and a teacher love each other very much, a huge fire-breathing stork leaves an egg in a cabbage patch, and the teacher finds that egg and lets her student hatch said egg as an admissions test. That's where babies come from!"
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She doesn't have to eat it right away, does she? I'm sure she can get Flim to agree to some other deal for the knowledge Trixie shared with her about him.
Excellent writing. You have fleshed out these characters to points where I cannot hate them anymore and you even have me questioning my bestest, favorite pone; Applejack. You have given the main characters(and even some minor characters) motivation for their actions and make them feel and sound down-to-Earth(pun intended).
I'm a little surprised and concerned that Applejack's friends haven't made more appearances, but I imagine writing them in is difficult with everything else you have planned.
And that foreshadowing gives me the chills.
Do you understand now when I asked if this was based off of real life? Some of those things(Applebloom's especially) hit really close to home for me.
OK, so as much as Twixie is my OTP, my headcanon now has Trixie and Applejack as sisters-in-law.
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Do you really think Twilight would tell him that? She'd probably get out a pile of books, a whiteboard, and a bunch of anatomical models... just like my mother did.
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I did have a few scenes with her friends, but I thought they'd slow down the storyline. (For example: AJ going to visit Twilight after the ultrasound; Flim, before he was hospitalized, having to run an errand at Sugarcube Corner and discovering Pinkie has a dark side; and the two of them visiting Fluttershy, who tells them something interesting about childbirth in other cultures.) I might work these scenes in as flashbacks, if possible. What do you think?
Really? What do you mean?
Yeah, now I do. Bits and pieces here and there were taken from real life. I'll let you guess which ones
5510513 Oh of course, I figured that description was given to Spike by Cadance when she was watching him while Twilight was taking a big admissions test. Mad props to your Mom, by the way.
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They sound interesting as long as they don't detract from the main story. You have a beautiful and solid story here and I don't want to mess that up for you. You did great with Twilight and gave life to her feelings of longing for...something indescribable and some foreign and primal awakening within her(Motherhood? Jealousy? Something else?) as she helped Applejack in the hospital with the ultrasounds. Whether you intentionally wrote it to mean that way or not, that is how I understood it.
Do you accept the challenge of this precision of storytelling again? I would not find fault if you do not. Merely by observing and making a comment about something I saw behind your writing has put stress on you to do something you did not intend.
Heh. Stumbled across a little something:
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Thank you!
I'm not exactly sure what you mean here. What challenge? Writing another story, or adding to this one?
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That's so cute!
*one reverse image search later* It got -12 on Derpibooru? WTF?! I've seen scat pics with higher scores than that!
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This story, of course! You cannot leave this one unfinished as far as you have gotten. I would be disappoint.
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Oh, I gotcha! Yeah, don't worry, I'm not going to leave this one alone... and vice-versa. I know pretty much how it's going to go down.
oh shit
its really going to hit the fan so hard it breaks though it and into another fan XD
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Probably because of the "official" note in the pic, if you ask me.
I just wanted to say that I'm really working on my comment to the latest chapter XD
Sorry that it takes so long, but everytime I start to write it I feel that it's not good enough, you know? I love your story so much and it's just so hard to explain how I feel everytime when I read it. When I find stories like this one, stories that really make me FEEL something, experience something, I always feel obligated to at least try to show the writers through my comments how much I appreciate their talent and work. And, well... I'm not really that good with words + English isn't my first language and it kind of complicates things even more
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Oh my god! Don't ever worry about that; you leave such wonderful comments. They always make my day!
I hate to break it to you, Flim, but I think we all know that it's not going to happen.
It was... intense chapter to say the least. I really can't wait to see Applejack's reaction to this news about Flim. At this point it's really hard to tell how she would react, considering everything that happened, her fragile emotional state and pregnancy, which complicates everything even more. I just hope that Trixie isn't so cruel and won't force her to really eat her own hat
Think about the baby, Trixie! She needs vitamins! Apples! Not some nasty hats!
That scene with Apple Bloom and Flim was very touching. I wasn't even expecting something like that, but it was a great idea. Also, it's nice to see some Flim x Apple Family bonding. And AB's fear of losing AJ, because of what happened to their mother... ouch >.O'
+ Trixie and Applejack as sisters-in-law... THIS. NEEDS. TO HAPPEN.
Love the story, and im totally into the characters and love he way they just feel, excuse the euphemism 'human' but they are, they act and react as normal people do.
This story gets better with every chapter you post. It gets more dramatic, more hilarious and more indepth. I applaud you for your awesomeness.
Uh oh, trouble's a brewin'!
Was oddly satisfying to listen to AB teach Flim tact, though.