Applejack made a mistake a few months ago and has been carrying it around with her ever since. Literally.
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AND THIS IS WHY I LOVE YOUR STORIES.
They seem straight out of a romantic comedy, only with ponies! It's pure perfection!
This chapter... Was beautiful. There's so much here I could praise.
The characterisation is interesting, deep, and still perfectly believable. That's a feat in and of itself, especially regarding the subject. It's so easy to twist the characters into what the story demands; and you avoid that pitfall perfectly. Your story evolves around the characters, not the other way round.
Aj's and Flim's difficult, mutifaceted relationship is wonderfully explored.
Lastly, I want to praise something that might seem inconsequential in comparison, but it still struck me: The way you described how Applejack put on the wedding dress. That was very vivid, very clear. I hardly see any writer make an effort to describe such banal a motion, but the way you did it created a picture that could've been taken directly from the show.
Bravo on another great chapter. Seriously, the depth this chapter gave to your characters was fantastic. It's a bit of a shame that AJ is so dense, though.....she was so close to getting Flim to seriously like her.......
Next chapter: Applejack and Flim run away to Los Pegasus to not get married.
this update just made my day. I can't wait for the next one.
yay and she has no idea how dead on she was! XD
though wouldent that be a good thing? "hey my babies daddy slept with a celebrity :P"
Gah! This chapter to chapter progression is painful! This is a wonderfully complex story that just refuses to let me go!
This story leaves a tight feeling of impending dread in my chest
Another heaping serving of Awesome Sauce there Susie. Your sense of dialogue continues to dazzle me I know I made some waffling comments on earlier chapters, but I now see this tale has found its feet and I'm all ready to follow it to the end of its trail.
Damn. This is equally amazing, though AJ's stigmas and Flim and Flam's awkward past is heart-rending. I really love your Granny Smith though and as soon as I found out it was a wedding dress, I knew what she was gonna reveal, but that's just proof it was a great idea. I like that the Apples aren't perfect here and even Flim and Flam have their good traits and moments. Flam with Trixie was also quite sweet. I really want Flim and AJ to hook-up, but only if she can wrap her head around some things and either one can be comfortable with it. You've made them both really complicated though and I love that.
Also... those other little hints about objects. Either that's the baby or it's Discord. Either one will make me die laughing. If it's Flim or something else, then I just don't know.
I guess realistically, after thinking about it awhile, I don't necessarily want them to hook-up, though I think they'd make an interesting couple, so much as I want Applejack and Flim to be happy again. If that is even possible. (But I'd still squee with delight if that could happen.)
And I do feel it's perhaps an exceptionally deep hole that they're in, perhaps too deep, but I'm preferential to this whole idea and it's not as if you've really pulled your punches much. You've still made them rather complex and complicated ponies, even if some of it could count as reader manipulation, with everything having its consequences within the framework of the world that they live in.
My only real qualm comes in AJ's expertise versus her experience overall, but the sex has been uniformly hot through-out both stories (and it's generally held true that the best sex isn't even with who you're in love with, since that's a different context from what people tend to understand it as.) I love the banter, I love the pacing, and I love the silliness evening out the sadness and the bittersweet possibilities. Plus I like your sense of humor and your dialog overall is amazing.
I'm content to see where this is going and how it will play out.
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Wow, thank you! Haha, I didn't think such a little thing like that would get someone's attention!
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Is that something to brag about??
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Could you elaborate on that a bit? I'm not quite sure what you mean.
Oh, that's a good point. This might come up in a later chapter, but, basically: even though she hasn't had very many sex partners, the sex she has had was great. It's a quality > quantity thing. (Hm, where have we heard that lesson before? ) I'm not sure if this is true for everyone, but to me, sex is like riding a bicycle---you don't forget how. No, I take that back. I have forgotten how to ride a bike... dammit...
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idk maybe? im just dieing for when she finds out hes Bi XD
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Well, in the hands of a more melodramatic author, the exceptional amount of pain and suffering that many of these characters have been through could drown out the significance. You've kept a tight enough rein on it that the past and the present never seemed more than a matter of fact and unfortunate predicament, except where more sadness and anger and anxiety would be natural, which I count as a good thing. And their reactions to everything have consequences as well, as do the various general problems that you've given them, Flim especially, so it adds to the realism overall. Nothing feels like it's there purely for the sake of woe, even if it could come close.
It makes me a little nervous that the characters may be down too deep to pull themselves out of the holes they're in, but I have some faith that you can make it work in a satisfactory way, no matter how the ending turns out. If that makes more sense. Sorry I didn't explain it better the first time.
Well, whether that works or not, I really don't mind. Everyone makes some exceptions when realism comes in a sex scene. If they didn't the amount of realism wouldn't leave much room for any sort of fantasy.
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Someone FINALLY asked it!
Well, here's what I pictured: griffons developed guns because they have fingers, and the non-unicorn ponies modified them to either a) fit hooves, b) have a hook sticking out from the trigger, or c) have a string/pulley connected from the trigger to a back hoof, so that a kick could activate it.
Seriously, though, you get a pile of cookies for asking.
I loved this chapter but I hope he is just bisexual please let him just be bisexual.I can't wait to see what happens next to them.And let be in love with her 100ยท/.please.
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I'm glad you like! But, uh, what do you mean by
? Are you worried he's gay or something?
4154246 I just love seeing them together and I want them to get together. I'm ok if she uses a dildo on him.Again I just love seeing them together and I want them to say together.that pretty much it.
4154246 You do know what being Bi means right?
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Of course. But the person I was quoting said "please let him be just bi", ("just" being the operative word) which is something I've actually heard a lot; usually when people say "just bi"---at least in my experience---it means they either think it's a phase, or confusion, or not "really queer". I guess the semantics of that particular comment confused me, which is why I asked for clarification.
4167062 You got technical. Too techinacal.
NIGGA (sorry if black, I would never say it to you at all)
NEVER GO FULL TECHNICAL!
Ugh, dammit. I want moar of this exquisite morsel of brain tasties. I know I say things like that a lot, but this is an incredible story, even with smut, which normally knocks things down a peg. I have no words right now other than "MOAR"
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I never question ponies when they have guns in my faces. I just went with it. Glad you had an answer though. That does sort of bug me. (And yeah, I assume griffons also invented bowling, because of the holes.)
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I think the reason the person said "just" (and I'm guessing here) is because we only know of two mares that Flim has bedded. One of them surprised him and the other he actively sought out, but the implication seemed to be (though that might not be accurate) that Flim has mostly been sleeping with stallions between those two mares. I assume it's possible Flam's assault just left him in an awkward place regarding mares, or stallions are much easier to bed (if you know how to pick the ones who would be interested), or Flim has a stronger preference for stallions, though no idea how much stronger, is currently uncertain.
I think the worry is that Applejack is unique in turning Flim's head. I kind of doubt that. I'm pretty certain it's a matter of qualifiers. Although I am very curious if Flam is not bisexual at all (though I'm assuming he just didn't want to see his brother having sex, hence his revulsion at the photographs.) I've also been wondering if Flam has the same hemophiliac problem. I would assume so, since they're identical and anything genetic should have been more or less inherited between them.
But that's just my guess. I might be completely wrong, since I can't read minds.
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I pretty much have to echo this comment completely. It's definitely the little things (and not just describing actions) that really sets this one apart, Susie. Like how... real Granny Smith is. Or how, even with all of his experience, cunning/cleverness, and street smarts, Flim is hopeless when it comes to just talking around Applejack's family, even if the seems of them are showing with the stress of the pregnancy. And I can tell AJ finds it endearing about him. This whole ride is just being so enjoyable, I'll be sorry to see the end of this fic.
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Wow, you've really put a lot of thought into this! Thanks for the feedback... that'll help fuel some of the future chapters, with any luck. Though I'm not divulging anything now
Both of those have been very briefly touched on, actually---while Flam was arguing with the clerks in the photo store, he was upset that they thought he was gay, and later on, when Trixie gave him a love bite, she was careful not to draw blood.
WARNING: nerd mode activated
There have been many twin studies with regards to sexual orientation, but with mixed results. It's actually more likely than not that one identical twin will be queer while the other won't be. This doesn't necessarily mean that sexuality isn't genetic, but that it's the kind of gene that can be present, but not activated. (For example, most chickens are born with a gene that promotes the growth of teeth... so why don't they have teeth? Because that gene has been 'switched off'. Mutations, in extremely rare cases, 'switch on' this gene, producing toothed hens, hence the saying "Rare as hen's teeth".) Also, having the same DNA does not mean that they'll have the same experience in the womb, which is why twins are sometimes born with startlingly different birth weights, have different fingerprints, etc. I mean, there's a pair of conjoined twins in the States who share a THIRD of their brain, and one is very girly, whereas the other is butch.
nerd mode off
TL;DR: Flam's sexuality is still up for grabs at this point.
About time i got around to read this chapter. Story still as good as i remember it.
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Happy to be of service! I over-analyze everything ever.
Ahhh, that does explain a lot. I forgot about that, but you're right. Makes perfect sense too.
I loved nerd mode! Yeah, I knew there were some differences between twins, even identical ones (since they split off at some point and carry on splitting cells after that), but I didn't feel like looking up if sexuality was one of those, since I wasn't certain if they had done studies on that and I know there is still a lot of research to be done on how our sexualities are formed (though I did know some, if not all, of it seems to lead to biological origins.)
Long story short, I didn't want to assume Flam was anything particular, but I am curious to know more. Then again, I'm reading a mature shipping fic, so of course I want to know more!
Btw, may I make a small request if there is any more clop in the foreseeable future between Flim and Applejack? I would love a scene where Flim nurses on her teats and she lactates. One of my bigger kinks regarding the whole pregnancy thing.
Beyond that, I just can't wait to hear their conversation on the way to the market and for Flam and Trixie to get there eventually.
Sneaky Edit: Btw, maybe Trixie should be tagged. She is growing in importance to the plot... though I would understand if you disagreed.
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I shall do my best to provide! Clop for some, miniature Equestrian flags for the rest!
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Yes!
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Uh... I'm going to note you about that.
Heh. Halfway expected Granny to say, "Put the dress on! It don't bite, but ah sure as shit do!"
Funny story, I've a little bit of headcanon that says a Timberwolf bedded Granny before her husband did... And that AJ's pa was named "Woody."
getting to the part where flims starting to panic, i honestly intially thought it was because seeing applejack in a wedding dress had flim seeing his mom in applejack and thinking that the two of them might be related somehow
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Ooh, yikes! I never thought of that
This chapter was so beautiful! I loved all the cute moments between AJ and Flim! So cute how he calls her sweetheart. I love this story!