I get so excited every time you update because this story is just too good, but now I've realized I have to wait until the next update asdfghukl

I noticed that Flim didn't you gender nouns when talking about the Headmaster's kid.

Why do I have the strange idea that Cherry Jubilee is Flim and Flam's sister?

I do hope AJ pops out a unicorn. Given the conservative nature of the Apple family(Earth pony way is best way RAWR), that would create some lovely drama.

Five quatloos on Flim getting hospitalized by Mac insisting he do his slave labor job as an earth pony does.

Poor Trixie. She obviously has some things to work out.

And yeah, Flim totally lost his cherry to a dude. And I'm glad to see he and Applejack getting a bit closer.

Susie, you never fail to astound me. This chapter, this this chapter... is just magnificent. I don't know how you keep doing it, but each chapter is a beauty in its own right. Each chapter we learn just a little bit more about the characters, you really know how to slowly space everything out and give us time to digest what happens. What I really like about your way of telling us new things, is that you don't just give the important information that is critical to the plot, you mix it in with little tidbits we don't really have to know but allows us visualize the characters a whole lot better as as a lot more three dimensional. With this way of having the readers learn more progressively here's always the pitfall of having the story just drag and drag but you manage to avoid these pitfalls by, like I mentioned earlier, including information and backstory that is important, and having the "filler" actually be pretty interesting; letting us see the characters interact with each other in different scenarios/conversation topics.
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My lunch break is just about over, so have my thoughts on just the technicals for now. I'll come back and write a long ass comment about all the other awesome things in this chapter (because theres a lot of it) when I get home.

Oh man... Not the one I asked for, but you gave me a few of my other kinks. As always, it was hot.

Poor Trixie, though. Flim, you ruin lives!

I don't know. I can't even form words after reading this. I'm envious of your everything.

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Also, everything that they said.

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Honestly, I have no idea. Maybe you're just weird. That's a good thing.

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I don't know what a quatloo is, but since I'm the one writing this, I don't think I'm allowed to place any bets...

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Aww! Your comments always make my day! Thank you so much!

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What does it say about me that I didn't find this particularly kinky??

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I never said it was kinky. Just that it fed into some that I have.

I don't get why a guy wouldn't want to eat his own jizz, other than saltiness factor, but I like it. (And Flam has issues, poor guy.) Plus shame is one of my major things, but not in huge doses. I can't explain that. Then again, everything is hotter because of shame.

It's like sex spice?

I dunno how that works. Eh.

If Flam gets Trixie pregnant... hrmmm. The reasons not to sleep with your ex. Maybe he should have sucked up more of it.

Not big on the unicorn horngasms but I liked how you used it.

Also, Flim in a school uniform... or rather, not wearing it.

Oh, but Flim's enjoyment of that compliment was definitely kinky. The kinkiest. Because of accuracy. And ego. That's a kink for everyone.

I ramble, I know. My mind is train of thought gibberish at the moment.

Flim needs to pull more wagons. We'll hitch a wagon train to him. It'll be magnificent.

I loved it all boy Flim and Flam I feel sorry for them and Trixie to she needs to see a psychologist and Flam to really get better.she has some serious abatement issues that need to be dealt with.I can't wait to see what happens next between them all next and what happens to them all next.

another fantastic chapter!
though trixie was a bit crazy O_O
though i wonder if Applejack was right to trust him O_O
i hope he does the right thing they make a cute couple! X3

Whoot, good chapter, little naughty, little background, lot of development. Looking forward to the next one. I'll have to say that the part with Trixie was poignant. I actually could feel for her, brava, brava. I am a little intrigued with her internal conversation when she thinks Flam had abandoned her, seems familiar some how.

4267143 Hmm, I'll buy that theory, actually I'll buy into both of them, but you know Quatloos haven't been legal for wagering since they closed the betting office on Triskelion.

4267809 The brother's do have a sordid and deviant past ... AJ keeps calling the headmaster's kid 'her', and Flim doesn't deny it, but nor does he directly confirm it.

4274928 Yes, Trixie in a bind from her hind. Ho, the plot may thicken, along with The Great and Powerfully Gravid Trixie's midsection.
Waiting for the Great and Powerful Hissyfit of "You knocked Me UP!"

Again, good job Sue, a pleasure as always.

4266897 - Cherry Jubilee is way too nice to be Flim and Flam's sister. Its a possibility though.

Awwww, that bit with Trixie and Flam just melted my heart!