Luna and Nightmare Moon are transported to the Capital Wasteland during the final battle against her sister. Join them in their attempt to return home and reclaim her birthright with the help of a girl named Sarah, fresh out of Vault 101.
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..Oh..Oh SHIT...
Arrrg! Cliffhanger... my old enemy. Great chapter though!
Eh, a stim pack or 6 will patch her right up.
This will be interesting. Also, I'm pretty sure the massive radiation from Project Purity will send both Luna and Sarah to Equestria. Sadly, this now means even Broken Steel isn't looking like it'll happen.
God damn it
SOMEONE IS GOING TO DIE FOR THIS!!!!! And I mean in story, not you the author for this cliffy. I totally didn't see this coming, epic shock and I hope Luna can still be brought back. And I hope Twilight got kidnapped by the idiot who shot her mentor... so she can make them wish they were dead! Just don't kill all of them, Luna will want her pounds of flesh as well. Or it could end up being Rainbow, Sarah, Nim, and Luna rescuing Twilight after stabilizing Celestia. But this attempt at regicide needs to be punished... ooooooooo, what if Fluttershy, Pinkie, Applejack, and Rarity got in on rescuing Twilight?? good building blocks to recharge the Elements of Harmony via fighting together for a just cause and to save the day.
I really don't like you right now... Love the story, but seriously! TWO cliffhangers? -.-
Hey look a new chapter and OH SHIT!
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Well.... didn't see that coming!
Reading these reactions of yours is amazing!
Profit DAMN YOU! Stop with the cliffhangers already!
Honestly, not what I was expecting to happen.
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Well said. Now if I may join you, OH SHIT OH SHIT OH SHIT OH SHIT.
Well, we knew something like this would happen eventually. Still, THE INTRIGUE. Also, I can't wait to see Sarah in Equestria. Which WILL happen.
well....
4483333 hell, the do need to fuck some shit up. Cool new icon by the way
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You know - the one where I simultaneously want to kill you and hug you.
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Ya know, I can imagine Luna will going for shock and awe with all the ponies of Equestria with the power of SCIENCE! LAZER TIME!!!!
Trying to bind the Element of Magic's magic? Lol, good luck with that.
Then you get a hooves on demonstration as to just how creative she can be with telekinesis. I know I have quite a few ideas.
So, cue Luna, Sarah, and Fawkes charging in with the power of SCIENCE AND LAZERS?
You and your cliff hangers.....GODDAMMIT
My money is on Luna and Sarah popping in at the right time and gunning all the zombies down
and then they enslave all humans!!!You know I kinda hope that when all the stuff settles down on the Fallout side -aka after Project Purity is recovered- that Luna is brought back to Equestria during the whole issue with who ever is attacking.
The reason...Luna getting help to bring a few friends from the Fallout World to help...such as Liberty Prime maybe...Cause now wouldn't that just be a fun curb stomp battle, Luna, our favorite wander, Fawkes, Liberty Prime, and the Equestria forces just rampaging through the bad guys.
'COMMUNIST THREAT DETECTED!'
"...HOLY CELESTIA, WHAT IS THAT THING?!"
We need a Badass Twilight Stat. or atleast a Competent Necromancer Ally.
I am so conflicted!
I LOVE the Luna in FO3 setting. It is done exquisitely, and is one of my favorite story lines right now! At the start, I always assumed "Queen" Celestia would choose to become "Princess" Celestia to make her sister feel more an equal, and show some humility at her own mistakes. I loved the unique Equestrian history, and always assumed that the Equestrian side would get closer and closer to canon as time went on.
I interpereted Alternate Universe to apply to Earth Fallout universe...
Wow, was I wrong!
This alt Equestria feels weirder and weirder with each deviation. I ABSOLUTELY love the Earth side story, and look forward to every new Earth side chapter... I normally wouldn't have read an alt Equestria universe like this one at all... For me, it is carried 100% by the Luna in Fallout 3 story.
Despite how much I love this story, I gotta pull it down a notch, on that one factor... But I suppose getting an adjusted 8-ish rating ain't so bad. The Fallout story on its own would get a high 9 rating from me.
I truly feel like this story would have been notably better if the Equestrian changes had started at Luna's return, and involved Luna's unique experience. To me, it's a lost story telling opportunity, as well as a world I don't feel as much for as I do the canon world.
Luna goes to Fallout 3s Earth instead of the moon when she is banished. How does this change the mare, as opposed to simple lunar banishment. How does this affect her return to Equestria... instead, we see a different Equestria, so we shall never know what changes would have been... Both sides of the perspective are altered, so no... We never will know how this differently changed Luna would react to the Equestria she returns to.
Still in with my top favorites, but I feel definite discomfort with some of... okay, most of the alt universe Equestrian changes.
This fight scene managed to avoid the problem that the last one to take place in Equestria as well as Twilight's fight with Sombra in Light Wanderings suffered from, namely that when seemingly impressive attacks were thrown around, only to be ignored / blocked with ease to the point where the reader has no way of telling if any given attack is supposed to be impressive until it either succeeds or fails to inflict damage (the fight with Sombra was even worse because we still had no clue about how effective an attack had been until after he regenerated from it, which got really old after about the third time he did it.) Here each attack that was thrown around felt like it had a real impact of the flow of battle, useable taking a target out of the fight in a single hit. Although this scene suffers from a different problem in that you needed to write in a contrived weakness for Celestia in order to have any force be able to reasonably damage her. If your protagonist has become so powerful you need to introduce magufins that are never mentioned until the arc they are used in, and work only against your protagonist, just to allow them to have a reasonable challenge, your protagonist might be beginning to become boring.
This combined with my personal pet peeve (If the AU version of a character you are using has very little in common with the canon version of said character, and the reason that character if different is not the focus of the AU, why even bother using that character at all.) which applies to Twilight and to a much greater extent Spike have left me enjoying the Equestria chapter far less the the wasteland ones.
Edit: after writing this I realized I may have come off as more negative than I had intended, this was still the best of the Equestria chapters so far, but each time the focus has swapped back to Equestria so far it felt the the story had gone from the very high standard that the Wasteland chapters had set for themselves, to bog standard, before returning to the level of quality once the focus returns to the wasteland.
Huh, you would have thought the ceremony would have had tighter security, all things considered. After all, Celestia does not know if Luna can be placated by mere words, so what gives? Also, surely the Magic Bow could be detected if it was that powerful? Gosh, it feels like Nightmare Moon all over-... Wait, is that.... My gosh! We hope that what we think is happening is actually happening! After all, the more things change the more they stay the same...
Keep going! ;)
*sighs* I'm honestly getting a little disappointed how this is getting dragged out. At first the years since Luna's banishment seemed to pass quickly despite only days or so passing for Luna. Then the time difference to me inexplicably slowed down. What was days for Luna was at first decades or centuries in Equestria suddenly became months or years at most. No real apparent reason for it other than to drag out her supposed arrival back in Equestria.
And now that the night is finally here, whoops! Everything goes to heck. Celestia is injured, Twilight is missing, and so forth. And I half get the feeling that once the summoning begins Luna will try to fight it or ignore it to stay in the Fallout world.
The constant drag out is causing me to lose interest.
4484612 It could just be that we're focusing more on it so there are more scenes but time actually hasn't changed
Okay, yeah, I think I agree with 4484612 on this one.
Well, if you're going to make a scene, at least have the balls to make a big one, eh?
Oh dang! unexpected attacks!
Who is it? :3
Good work man, this was great to read~ legitness! ^^
I can't wait to see what happens next :-)
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I understand the way you feel, it's just that I don't see it that way. Now yes I could have simply left Equestria the way it is in canon, but that would ignore the fact that when you change one or two things, you have to have things change because of it. Everything that has changed in Equestria has changed for a reason, namely Luna's method of banishment and what that did to Celestia
4484522
Thanks, I've been working on my fight scenes for a while now trying to improve upon them. As for the added bit of challenge/maguffin, I view writing Celestia a lot like Superman meaning it's not the physical struggle that's difficult but the mental/emotional part along with the struggle to protect those she loves from harm.
As for your pet peeve, sorry but there's not much I can do about it
4484612
I always did say that time flowed at it's own rate. Besides, so far the Equestria chapters have shown important things to do with the Equestria Luna will return to, I'm sorry if you feel like I'm dragging it out, but I don't see it that way
Just as things were going so well
Well... shit. I certainly was not expecting rotting griffons. Ya got me.
Anyways, this chapter is very good. The pacing was phenomenal, and the characters introduced felt real. I really loved how RD knew all of them; most friendships start out through other friendships. I can see how Wandering Moon's events up until now have shaped Twilight. She's much more eager for recognition, and a bit more outgoing, traits which I assume rubbed off on her from Rainbow Dash. Meeting Applejack was a clever scene, and you set up Twilight's embarrassment believably. Pinkie Pie's was fun to read, and I got a good giggle out of the whole 'robbing the pantry' joke. Rarity's introduction felt a little... dry? All I got from it was dresses, dresses, dresses. I think you could've made Rarity a tad more three dimensional than that. Fluttershy and Gilda's introduction was, by far, the best. Immediately I knew what was coming, and I loved that because it made reading the scene all the more enjoyable. Fluttershy, as a character, is much better here than in the show. I could see that she was much more comfortable with new people, but still a bit quiet. Gilda's intro was, personally, my favorite, though that's because I adore her. But I digress; Gilda wrestled with Dash as soon as she saw her, as protocol dictates. But, once you started to open her up, I was refreshed by her light-hearted but smart personality. You still gave her a mischievous side to foil her intelligent side. I loved that she was well-versed in the magical arts. I can imagine her working as a teacher or something in that nature. As for that ending, I was certainly surprised and impressed. I don't remember you hinting at something like that, but that could just be me. Anyways, a great chapter. Definitely beats Season 1's first episodes by a mile. All in all, this chapter gets Best-birdcat-is-back/10.
Wait a moment, if they just pull Luna over,
Well, she wit be happy of she can't bring company....
inb4 1000 year plot by Clover and her descendants for Luna to come back and take the throne from Celestia
BRACE YOURSELVES!! THE SHITSTORM HAS HIT!
Interesting twist by the way.
That was not the shitstorm I was expecting.
Turned out to be much worse than I expected.
do you guys think that this story will go into broken steel to? (i hope so)
And cue the unexpected twist in the plot with the badness and the shit hitting the fan and the cliffhanger ending.*
*Badness does not refer to the quality of the writing.
Also:
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Time for some thrilling heroics.
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I barely comment in story but i have been reading this for a mouth now
Yes i finally made it where i have to what for update and before the story done to Squeeeeeeee and end whet a Cliffhanger lol my night has been made
I be whiting in the shadow my friend and have a Derpy day
Well done sir.
So what were the invincible giant baby mutants in the last chapter supposed to be? Nice plot twist at the end right there by the way.
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The failed experiments you find on the lab tables, and thanks, I try
Is it bad that Iam happy this happened. So Luna and Nim can stay in the wastland? The more I read the more I dread when they go to equestria.
might want to reverse that
Can I just say that it was incredibly stupid to summon Luna back in the middle of a giant stadium filled with civilians? They have absolutely no idea whether she is still Nightmare Moon or not. She could very easily be prepared to seek vengeance when she comes back. Even if she did come back as Luna and seeking forgiveness, putting her on the spot like that is not a good idea: she could have a panic attack and break down or lash out at the ponies around her. Celestia should have summoned her in relative secret, in an area that was warded to hell and back, with the element bearers, the archmage, and some special forces units waiting in the wings.
On a lighter note, I would just like to say how happy I am to finally find someone else that agrees with me that Pinkie has obviously harnessed chaos magic!