Luna and Nightmare Moon are transported to the Capital Wasteland during the final battle against her sister. Join them in their attempt to return home and reclaim her birthright with the help of a girl named Sarah, fresh out of Vault 101.
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As soon as i get on fimfiction, BOOM update.
#perfect timing.
ah, a nice chapter indeed, cool dreamscape too.
hmm???
how about, "into the side of her neck."???
Yay!
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Whoops, many thanks
Why do I have a feeling that if they get back to Equestria, Celestia is going to try to blast Sarah since she's Nightmares host.
4373053 That OR gush about Sarah being little Lulu's special somepony
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Thanks
4373336 you know i think Nims finally getting a healthy sense of self, the fact that luna and her are pretty separated allow for development of a unique personality. if james was still around could be cool to see him having a talk with the two about that.
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Oh good, that's shining through nicely then, excelent
4373422 so any hint on if nim will still wants to fuse with luna completely or half way alowing for the two minds one body thing?
hell if i had the choice to be my own being id take it
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Well I don't want to give away the game, that's for you guys to figure out... all I'll say is that I left in a small hint this chapter.
4373447 lets see if she has as strong a sence of self as the majorhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=esjpfnlQE0Q
>unweilding
Unyielding is the word you're looking for.
>mfw I saw the update
i.imgur.com/iCjYVt2.gif
Wait what happened with Amada? did she agree to have the vault open or not?
I personally hope Nim stays separate from Luna... and Luna possibly finds a way to give her her own body, even if for only short periods of time, ie when the moon is up. It would be cute to see Sarah cuddling between Luna and Nim, plus double the alicorn equals double the fire power or one going into melee and the other providing ranged support.
You have an extra 'the' in there.
Alright, I came into this chapter hoping for some sort of recovery from the last one, and I am pleased with the outcome. All the things that were detrimental to the last chapter were touched on and resolved, in a complete and believable manner. I think your strongest point here was Sarah coming out of the five stages of grief. I was very excited to see her return to her normal, determined self, and I think this will have a positive effect on Sarah and Luna's relationship, as well as Nim's behavior. Of course, Harkness still needs to be spoken to, but it is probably fair to assume that you'll be resuming the main quest line in the near future. I'm glad that Wandering Moon has stopped wandering; it was getting a little bit stale, I'll admit. This chapter sets up a lot of things for you to deliver on, as well as some major development for our heroines. Little Lamplight, Paradise Falls (if Sarah doesn't have Child-at-Heart), and meeting Fawkes should all be a fun read. I can tell that Mayor MacCready messing with Sarah will be hilarious. All in all, this chapter gets a Yay-for-primary-story-arcs/10.
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I'm glad that you enjoyed it; I did as well and you're right... it's good to be done 'wandering'.
What did you think of Nim's little scene by the way? It seems to be what most people are touching on and I'm always interested in your (and everyone else’s) opinions.
Agreed
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I thought it was a nice touch to the chapter. While not entirely necessary, it did remind the reader that Nim is her own person, with her own personality, etcetera. The whole kissing thing, though, I felt was a bit out of place, because of the fact that Nim both is and isn't Luna. I dunno, that probably is just my own bias. But, the segment provided some important closure as well as set up the parameters for any major battle scene you do in the future. The way you wrote the scene makes it seem like Nim's little dream space will become a more prominent part of the story, to provide Sarah with a little bit of background of Nightmare Moon. I hope this is the case, as it would develop Nim further. But anyways, I liked the scene. It was well written, and canonically significant.
"There was a great deal of space, so I moved in."
What are you trying to say Nim?
It is a little distressing that Nim still considers herself a shadow apparently. Sure, she's a part of both of them, but in the same way they are a part of her. Were they to acquire a phylactery to put her in, she would be able to function just fine. (phylactery used here is in reference to how it's used in Sufficiently Advanced)
Glad some ground rules have been issued, and a good reason not to require Luna for everything just-because.
I'm curious though. It seems like it was a month or so when Luna was (semi successfully) summoned back to Equestria. Assuming the time correlation is equivalently ratio'd the same, how long do we really have before Celestia does it for real?
Keep going! ;)
4375964 how to answer that:You have a large brain.
I'm sure she meant that Sarah had a lot of unused potential waiting to be utilized ... right?
Another swell and awesome chapter well done my friend ^^
This was a good chapter legitness~
Looks like Nim (Love that name) is starting to be a little, nicer? X3 (can't think of a better sentence) She's becoming less antagonistic and angry.
There's some good character development here, approved.
All in all good work man, legit! :D
I look forward to the next well done chapter from ya buddy
~Dustchu
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Three ways to think about it; 1. Humans use very little of their brain's full potential; we don't actually know what those sections do. 2. She was saying that Sarah didn't use her subconscious very thoroughly. 3. She was jokingly calling Sarah stupid; I'll let you guys think what you will.
4377033 From what I know, people only think with ten percent of the brain. The rest is used for other things like movement, subconscious, emotions, and other things. Also, an emptier subconscious is the the same as being dumber. Anyways, another great chapter, can't wait to see Luna and (hopefully) Sarah in Equestria.
Yay!
Yay friendship!
4389216 More like 90% is conscious, 10% emotions, basic things (I.e. heart:beat.), and subconscious.