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Good chapter! The only thing is...stop teasing us with Twiluna and just let them fuck already !
Already thumbs'd up. Would do it again if I could, just on the strength of this chapter alone.
Eagerly awaiting more.
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I'm so sorry...
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Oh, you poor soul...
Amazing! Who is Twilight going to fuck? But seriously, MOAR.
Moar and faster pwease :3
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Ha!
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Can't wait for the next chapter
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Iroh and I have seen fit to share a line from the next chapter with you. We are not trolling. We are not kidding. This is a true, post-edit line from Chapter 6:
"Twilight was cumming again. Her back arched from the bed, her walls pulsing around the invading tongue. It wriggled around inside of her, stirring her up in ways that she thought were downright criminal. Nopony should ever be subject to such a sensory overload."
1758594That's just cruel...
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Don't worry, the next chapter will be uploaded tomorrow morning at the latest... and in an hour at the earliest.
Loving this story!
Keep up the good work and considering the pace of the chapters you could probably pull 2 more chapters off (perhaps more) before the actual TwiLuna stuffy or something.
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I actually can't wait!
1758594 In honor of Twilight losing her virginity i award both you and Iroh filly Twi wearing a pimp hat. and for the next chapter coming out so soon...
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the thing I don't like about this is that the clop feels out of place and contrived, and some lines are badly written. really it would be better sans clop imo.
however, i really like the idea and the storyline. honestly it's the only thing that keeps me reading.
Agree with AdobE in the sense that the clop was kinda random for this chapter. Maybe later?
If the segment within is how you write your erotica, then I am VERY pleased.
Yes, I do read clop to, but you wrote erotica there, which, to me, is way more enjoyable. VERY few others here have shown themselves to be able to do so, and I can only hope that, when it is time for me to do mature scenes within my own fic, I do even half as well.
Overall, I really appreciate how you are letting things develop and flow. it feels real to me; not as fiction, but real as life itself.
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inb4 it's a dream sequence.
Well then, that ending was some terribly heavy foreshadowing, and it practically oozed with ominous undercurrents.
I like this story. I like it a lot.
Real quick before I get back to reading: I adore your characterization of Luna. It's brilliant really, her short and cool manner, and all that warmth underneath. It's really great, and the parallels she draws with Celestia are striking, how different they act.
The dialogue is astounding as well, really just a heap of fun to read.
So good
And so do I. This all powerful night Twilight changes everything.
I'm pretty impressed so far. It's been said, but I couldn't help but feel a sense of foreboding. Mainly because of the Darkling telling Twilight to mourn the bloodshed that he inflicted upon her and Luna (seemingly) making a reference to NightMare Moon. The whole "Pay the price of your soul" conversation between Twi and the Darkling really stuck with me. I kinda expect to see that come back in a later chapter.
I'd like to see fluttershy use shadow magic.
1907239 oh danm with her amount of kindness for everything, well i feel sorry for anypony who makes her angry
She had nearly blasted him through the wall.
You should really remove that "nearly"
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Aaaand this is why I normally check for the "sex" tag before diving into reading... Lol. Reading during my class, suddenly MASTURBATION. umm. Yeah.
Good story so far... but now I need to read it when noone is around because... yeah. leeetle uncomfortable.
Just wondering...have you read the Inheritance Cycle? I'm asking this because eldunari are called heart of hearts for dragons. Then you also mentioned scrying.
I must say, I discovered this story a few months back, but it has simply sat in my read later till today. Now, I am undeniably hooked. I will be caught up within the next few hours, likely, and I will enjoy every single millisecond of it. I love the way you have interpreted shadow magic, requiring respect rather than control, which is the reverse of everything else I have ever seen. It is like you treat light magics, which can be more easily controlled, as a force to serve, where as darker magics must be served by YOU. The idea of it gives me shivers.
I simply have no more words for it at the moment. I will read the rest with gusto, and give my thoughts then.
At this point, I have one thing to say:
THE BEST FUCKING STORY EVER.
It has everything I love in a story! Mainly, magic.
I feel like biting myself in the backside(I bet i could with a bit of Yoga!) for not reading this story sooner.
Only few chapters read and i'm already hooked, there are so many ways this could go! Twilicorn? Some sort of world saving event? Or something totally different? Argh looks like it's no sleep tonight.
Any one else replace the word darkness with Charlie murphie, and play the song "hello darkness my old friend"??? Or was it just me ^_^ lol amazing story, so much to read but I got 2l of coke and a salad , I'm in for the long haul!
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I swear, I could not stop myself from laughing during this chapter... What is it about reading about ponies masturbating so... funny?
Okay, after months of seeing it in the box, I finally started reading this, and I really like it, but a bit of advice. The reason I never read it before was because the synopsis made this sound like a poorly-conceived clopfic with a plot like, "Twilight now has to have sex with all three princesses because hardcore lesbian sex is the only way to achieve true enlightenment." Granted, that could still happen—and if it does, I shall gleefully "nopenopenope" right out the window—but if it's not, then you might want to reword the synopsis.
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I agree completely. xD I only came back to read this after reading its sequel, which did not include gallons of princess-on-princess sex.
Please, do rework the synopsis. It really does sound like a clopfic between all princesses and doesn't do the story justice.
Excellent chapter! The little masturbation session was well made, and the short interaction with the night was nice. I'd normally read a story like this in a few days, but with school and such, this will take me a couple weeks. Oh well, it's time well spent.
~SolidFire
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Same story for me too.
I find myself thinking deeply about evil and darkness and how it demands your respect or it will crush you.
The darkness is like an ocean, vast and unknown, challenge it and it only pull you down. But if you respect and understand it, great things can be achieved on it's waves.
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I'd like to amend your statement. While evil often clings to both darkness and shadow, those things are not of themselves evil. They are like death; they simply exist. There are stories where the darkness shielded someone fleeing from someone with evil intent. Darkness itself doesn't protect just evil, but all who seek it. That's why it needs respect. It doesn't care about strength or power, since it has all it needs.
...Well, I had to at least see how that cliffhanger wrapped up, even if Twilight couldn't be killed off so early.
I thought at first that Luna deliberately set it up so Twilight would get herself noticed by the darkling and learn her lesson. Because, really, Luna, summoning some creature you literally vowed not to summon in public for pretty much no reason other than showing off to your pupil? Kind of a bitch move. Especially with all your talk about respecting the night.
is it ok If use certin things from this chapter in my story?
hold on to that fear twilight. that fear will keep you safe
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I'm pretty sure you got that from Doctor Who.
I can only imagine what twilight must be feeling right now if that the case.
7369980 Actually, that's: Fear keeps you fast.