Thomas, a human, has appeared in the magical land of Equestria, though it is much different from the show. Ponies of this world are all anthros. What's more, Thomas has been assigned as Princess Luna's royal concubine.
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This is one of my favorite chapters. The dynamic between Moonlight and Thomas about science was entertaining and I liked watching them argue. Likewise, I found it awesome that Thomas managed to make Talon horny and nervous by being dominant through bluffing and then taking charge of her during the clop scene. It was also hilarious to find out that Talon doesn't realize what bitch means in human context, that Celestia's new positions came from Luna telling her of Thomas' position, and that Moonlight got honey from smelling the results of the clop scene at the epilogue. Thanks for the chapter.
Took me a while to think through what few movies and stories Ive seen to find a non villain based, and the best I could get is Winny the Pooh. Although I think Thomas The Tank Engine comes a close second? Not sure about the Moomins. The Raccoons would defintiely be over the line, even given how usually incompetant as a villain Cyril Sneer is.
Wonder if Celestia or Luna know any size alteration spells. Lets see Talon trying out being Medium or even Small for Thomas. Then would there be intrest, given all the various species of Equestria, eventually, of seeing where Sphinx and Harpies might come from?
thanks for the update!
7007161 Always happy to serve, and thank you for the nice words.
7007182 It was the first story. Good guess.
Such spells do exist, and will come into play eventually. However, I'm hesitant to introduce any species that haven't been depicted in either the show or the comics.
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Well, the Sirens had to create Equestria Girls mythology somehow.
7007161 Yes to all of this, I could not agree more! I loved this chapter as a whole and I love that I finally t to see Tom get some hot Griffin!
Oh main I can just picture Moonlight at the end, one day she has got to just snap and start making out with him. LOL! Oh man the love and frustration is building, I'm loving how Tom is as a character, shy but also a beast when it counts.
7007326 I'm increasingly relieve to hear that.
O a vary interesting chapter. aww who am I kidding this is a smoking hot chapter Talon got road hard and put away wet.
7007378 I am as well. I also can hardly wait to see when the next set of candidates for the Harem will come in and what new twists that will bring into the relationship when it happens.
7007378 Yeah, about that... Originally, that was supposed to happen here, instead of being with Talon. But I went through some rewrites and now we have this. For Moonlight, you're gonna have to wait a bit longer, I'm afraid.
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
That was so sweet/awesome read so far .ah when will Moonlight realized she loves him?and can you give him a dick upgrade soon ?It be awesome that he be that small but has a huge dick .
7007758 Thanks. Been thinking about it, but not before a certain upcoming clop.
Breakfast hall
"And Thomas said they record these movies and show them in the home and big rooms in their towns"
Celestia looked up and thought for a moment "we used to have something like that for information distribution, it was called a film reel"
"I think I still have one in storage"
Moonlight looked to the princess "your highness could we use it, we could try to record the robin hood play for everyone to watch"
Thomas started to cough as he saw what was going to happen.
A small smile graced Tia's mouth "I think that would be wonderful"
Talon lightly tapped Thomas's back "at least you have to re-do it in front of a live audience now"
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Storage room (solar wing)
Here's the camera said Talon holding a large dusty box over her head, and here's some of those old film reels..
Thomas looked at some of the stickers "cloudsdale weather and you, dangers of the everfree forest"
" what do you have there Moonlight" as Thomas saw her bring a few more to the pile.
"I don't know most of these don't have any writing on them, but this one says The painted princess"
it's just with the last two chapters of this great story an idea popped into my head..
keep up the good work and I cant wait for the next one
7007840 Huh. Not bad. Not bad at all. That does seem like how I'd do it, which I eventually will. However, not before a certain other mare gets involved. Believe me when I say I'm as eager to see it happen as you are, if not more so.
I really enjoyed this chapter.
I am not going to lie here, I am very surprised that Thomas was the one on top, I always pictured the first time between these two with Talon having the leading role and Thomas the submisive one, or for that matter having Thomas in a submisive position at first enjoying Talon having control over him but then having a change or roles in a second round.
I enjoyed it regardless.
7007922 Subconsciously, I think we were all expecting the same. But as the story went on, it just felt right go against expectations.
Well tom to me is the best i can think of when i think humans, neither submissive or dominate just us
I listened to pirate metal while I read this chapter. You also put 'hi' instead of 'high' once, that I saw.
7007990 Maibe Tali will teach Thomas a lesson and put him in his place in later chapters, that is what he gets for messing up with a lady griphon
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I try. :)
I see i was not the only pne thinking that Thomas should go under a growing spell or something. Say, being Thomas the 'inferior' when compared to ponies how come no one has yet to try something for being Lunas senior concubine? I don't remember if this topic was already discussed.
7010071 Because the only other applicants failed to appeal, meaning he got the job by default.
Fantastic chapter ! Thomas is progressing ! That is really good news !
I'm starting to love that Thomas/Talon duo !
Expecting more fun in threesome times with Luna ! 8D
I literately took one look at his name, and I think I have a good guess.
Thomas the Tank Engine.
Either that, or Peter Pan.
Please be Peter Pan...
7010511 Always good to hear from you.
7010763 Wrong on both accounts. Also, Peter Pan has a villain, thereby automatically disqualifying it.
7011104 Is the answer MLP FiM ? 8D
Hmm, wicked idea... Too bad Thomas couldn't bring certain books with him. It would be interesting to see if Tantric Sex Magic positions really make magic in Equestria...
7011124 No. That also has villains.
7011145 Not to spoil anything, but wait till the next chapter.
7011484 While size hasn't been established, it has been said that ponies are especially sensitive and that size holds little relevance to them.
7013718 Lucky Star ? =D
7013806 I already confirmed that someone else guessed right.
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After reading that I can see Thomas introducing a new form of entertainment to Equestria. Using moving pictures for story telling and I can see Thomas also introducing pony versions of hit shows and movies from his world by making a pony reenactment versions for the castle's staff first.
EDit: Now thinking about it that idea kinda reminds of the tenth episode of the anime Outbreak Company.
Kinda weird seeing my last name and the name of a small bird used in such a way I mean seeing my other last name dare well that's just expected to be used a lot but Wren? (BTW yes I have 2 last names on my birth certificate legally making me a bastard even though my parent's married a year later and still are)
7027530 Aaaand now I feel like re-watching outbreak company. Man I wish that anime was longer
It was interesting the focus you put on Talon and her age-play kink. Are you going to elaborate on it any further?
How does she know what a Greek skydiver sounds like?
This seems an odd word here, 'clopped' maybe?
Tali nearly got a sore neck watching a tennis match.
rise
to
Should that be 'tip' ?
(chuckle) 'fingers'
he's
monkey (monarchy, I thought it was a diarchy?)
Arrgh, I just wanna slap Tom & Moony together til their bits connect!!!
And in no time, you have things like gender-changing ray guns and popcorn that microwaves itself.
*Y-you're
Commas after talking, and stuff.
I dunno, maybe he'll take a lesson from another HiE and punch Celestia in the face.
*high
He should tell her about The Joker: the guy is feared by beings more powerful than he is. Heck with it, villains scare each other with stories about him
:D
Y'know, I'm glad Thomas was on top here. Good way to show how confidence boost.
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which, according to Moonlight, was a lot
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though," she analyzed (make it all one sentence)
You probably meant to use a period
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Change this "she" to Moonlight. Last sentence was taking about Talon, so this doesn't make sense.
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Spiffy job, as always.
Was the story Thomas used as a threat, "Winnie the Pooh" by chance?
There is a fine line between genius and madness
The play at the under-aged kink, even if not really the fore-front of the scene, was somewhat uncomfortable; I just hope it doesn’t become a more prominent thing in later chapters because I’m really enjoying this story more as I read, and that might just ruin it for me.