Relations begin to break down between Equestria and the griffon tribes. As war approaches, new foes and alliances emerge. The mane six find themselves in a race against time to uncover dark plans and stop the griffon chief from ending their world.
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A lot of stuff going on here in this chapter which isn't bad. Guessed that the gryphons would be rather hard to persuade and that went about as well as I had expected. I guess Soarin is Dash's brother which I either missed (a high probability) or it just came up now which I actually kind of like. Oddly enough wasn't expecting the two ending scenes at all- the Crystal Empire and the final one kind of caught me off guard in a good way. Especially that final scene cause I wasn't expecting that development until far later in the story. I knew that was probably going to happen but that's going to complicate matters to a level that the coming conflict isn't planning for.
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Thanks.
The 'it's not bad' makes me wonder you mean if it's not as good as it could have been. Was it too much? The chapter did start off a whole lot smaller...
Giving some surprise with the last two scenes is good. Encouraging as there's more of that incoming
A update after 5 years?
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No, I should have worded that better, I meant that it was a lot to take in all at once and while the last few chapters have had worldbuilding in them, this one was a lot more worldbuildy and so it had a lot for me to take in- I mean this is one of the most gryphon heavy chapters and that kind of medieval infighting and factions and everything was a lot to take in when we really haven't had a council of gryphons in a while if at all- and now because I guess we have the always advancing conflict, now I'm trying to figure out if or when Dash becomes a Wonderbolt cause they sound like they would be most important in any coming gryphon fights unless you somehow have like unicorn airship battalions cause at least pegasi can fly. Then compound that with all the stuff with now the Crystal Empire or at least Shining Armor and Cadance being involved and then ending scene. Just a lot of stuff that I like but now I wonder what will truly set off the hostilities- besides that whole incident that Luna's trying to fix. Like I can see the chesspieces and I love them, I just don't know what the endgame might look like in the future with the new stuff in this chapter. Bit rambly, but yeah I like it a lot.
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Correct. The story has been reborn. Edited (heavily), updated and now its been expanded on. I'm working on the next chapters now actually...
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I probably won't read it til I know it will get updates again sorry. I just hate putting time into reading a story that never gets finished
9368017
Fair enough.
You’ll see from my latest two blogs that I fully intend to finish it. Proof will be in the set of updates I have planned that will hopefully show you that I mean it
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I might wait til its finished tbh. I feel bad, But I see your story has a lot of potential.
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Then you will be waiting at least a year... this story has a lot of chapters.
Nice to see some interest though, thank you.
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Probably. But I don't like waiting for weekly or bi weekly updates for stories that seem really good.