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BronyWriter

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I write MLP fanfiction. The best story of mine is The Secret Life of Rarity. Pretty simple really. Donate to my tip jar. help me get married!

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Princess Celestia, tired of the constant pressure that ruling a nation puts on her, decides to take a day off and let Luna take her responsibilities for a day, something the younger alicorn is more than happy to do. She disguises herself as a pink maned pegasus pony named Sunny Skies and decides to go walking around Canterlot without any supervision. Unfortunately for her, not all parts of Canterlot are as safe as the palace, and she finds herself at the wrong end of a gang of muggers, who decide to kidnap her for a ransom when they see how much money she has on her.

Luna freaks out.

Celestia thinks it's hilarious.

Featured on Equestria Daily 8/15/13

Edited wonderfully by sqarishoctagon and Cloud Hop

Updated cover art by Dominatore

First Published
30th Apr 2013
Last Modified
25th Jun 2013

Comments ( 1,245 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · 34 · 1 ·

This could be good.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · 5 · 2 ·

:eeyup:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 11 · 70 ·

I have to say a typo in the second paragraph isn't very promising

#4 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 11 · 3 ·

I'm assuming this is a spin-off of Sunny Skies All Day Long?

If so, I commend you for doing it. :twilightsmile:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 22 · 3 ·
#6 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 29 · 2 ·

if this doesn't get Featured, I'm going to riot.

#7 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

>>2507134

Definitely thumbs upping and faving so this gets featured. :twilightsmile:

#8 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 5 · 19 ·

>>2507131 Are you trying to say you're a person that exists outside my trolling on mod blogs?

#9 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

Ah, Celestia and her pranks...:trollestia:

#10 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 5 · ·

Awesome.

ZE MIGHTY PILLOW STRIKES AGAIN!:flutterrage:

But seriously, I look forward to more of this story.:twilightsmile:

#11 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 13 · ·

>>2507134 You aren't the only one! D:

Being the princess of the sun and the sole monarch of Equestria for a thousand years meant that Celestia had a very specific image that she upheld when in the public eye. It did her little ponies good  and gave them courage when they saw her as a regal, unshakable rock that could protect them from anything and who was seen as everlasting just by her aura. It would have confused her ponies to see her giddily bouncing around her room like a school filly on her first day of school, throwing a few items into a simple saddlebag that she rarely used.

(Noble 1) D: What.... what is she doing?

(Noble 2) I .... I think she's leaving...

(Noble 1) ...Oh shit, those two idiots from earlier drove her insane, and now she's quit, didn't she? WE'RE BUCKED! WE'RE COMPLETELY BUCKED~! D:

#12 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 2 · 1 ·

>>2507149 How was the rest of the story?

#13 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

This story already has premise I've yet to find anywhere else. Can't wait to see what happens. Trollestia's coming to play.

#14 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

Getting hit in the head by a pillow(In her mind) and pretending to be knocked out? You troll! :trollestia:

I just love your works!

#15 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 1 · ·

Before I start giving this praise, just a couple of things I need to nitpick.

"In truth I envy you your trip, sister."

You your? :P

"I well help in any way that I can!"

*Will  There are other typos here and there, but this was the most noticeable.

Also, both of these lines Celestia basically repeats not soon after she says them.  Just small little scenes to go back to and gloss over at some point.  Those are really my only grammatical/dialogue based gripes.  Granted, I could also complain how there aren't enough commas used at certain points, but that's likely just me.  I, use, way, too, many, commas, for, my, own, g,o,o,d,,,.


Sorry if I sound like I'm just complaining about certain things, but I'd like for the first part to be well polished and well presented, because what you have here is actually pretty interesting and funny so far, and I'm really looking forward to seeing what you do with this.  What I'm saying is I'd actually like for the story to do well, because you have a good setup going right now.  

But yeah, all I'm asking is that you just take some time to pre-read your story a bit more.  Or perhaps hire a few volunteers to do it.  Whichever works.

#16 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 2 · ·

>>2507193 It could use polishing, but I do like where it's going. BronyWriter usually has interesting stuff

#17 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

Trollestia at her finest. :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

From BronyWriter, no less! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 10 · ·

Great twist on the usual Celestia day off fic!  

#19 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

Ok, this looks promising.

I, dear writer, shall fave, track, and up vote.

Don't let me down now.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#20 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 1 · ·

Lol.

#21 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

                Catching a tiger by the tail is not hard. Letting go is!

Also I wonder if Equesteria has the equivalent of our saying “To Catch a Tartar”.

   Meaning to catch someone or something that turns out to be more formidable than expected.

   More please.

#22 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · · ·

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2Z4m4lnjxkY :trollestia: :trollestia: :trollestia: :trollestia: :trollestia: :trollestia:

#23 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 23h ago · 3 · ·

Uh, why is Luna using Old English? The last time I heard her speaking on the show, she used Modern English

#24 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · 1 · ·

Thy princess approves. Tia always did have a most awful sense of humour. Continue at thy will hoof servant.

#25 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · · ·

Come on! I was expecting a one shot...

#26 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · · ·

Sounds like the Sunny Skies All Day Long  fanfic by PhantomFox, but with a twist. I shall watch-or read I guess.

#27 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · · ·

Now this is what I like to see in my notifications :twilightsmile:

Hope that this gets done quick, cause this just has sooo much comedic potential :pinkiehappy:

Only gripe I have is that "she felt what seemed to her to be something akin to being struck" sounds really awkward. I'd suggest cutting it down to just "she felt something akin to being struck with a pillow". It's simpler, and, combined with her realization about them trying to knock her out, gets across the message that they couldn't even hope of harming her.

That... doesn't sound overcritical does it? Oh dear..... :fluttershyouch:

#28 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · · ·

:trollestia: and that's why they call her trollestia :trollestia:

:pinkiehappy: MORE MORE! MORE!? :pinkiehappy:

#29 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 22h ago · · ·

This will be funny.

#30 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 21h ago · · ·

Exellantay.

#31 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 21h ago · · ·

MOAR!

#32 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 21h ago · · ·

Trollestia strikes again!

Luna is going to go ape-sh%&, but why... really? I mean... doesn't she know just how powerful Celestia is? Assuming she knows that it's Celestia anyways. Still, the reactions are going to be priceless, though I'm more interested in what Twilight would do if she found out. Rage-shift to end all rage-shifts, ripping the roofs off of the entirety of the Canterlot slums, while burning like an infernal star in the sky? Entirely possible. Spike would probably attempt to calm her down and be a voice of reason, but we all know that isn't going to happen.

#33 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 21h ago · · ·

Hoo boy, this is gonna be interesting...

#34 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 20h ago · · ·

I'm going to enjoy this. :yay:

#35 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 20h ago · · ·

*thinks*

*the muggers about to stab her*

celestia :twilightoops:*changes back*

muggers:aww horse feather *gets zapped*

#36 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 20h ago · · ·

this story is going to be a good one. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#37 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 20h ago · · ·

Hehehehe, I couldn't help but laugh in certain spots. I'm very interested in how this will develop! :pinkiehappy:

#38 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 20h ago · 1 · ·

>>2507371 I always liked that character trait of hers. Plus, there's no indication that I'm giving of when this is. It could be two weeks after the Nightmare Moon thing.

#39 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 19h ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh::heart:

#40 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 19h ago · · ·

Care to guess what I'm going to point out?

#41 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 19h ago · · ·

This will probably go quite well...right up until the muggers try and figure out who to send the ransom note to.

Even if they take it straight to the palace, nopony knows that's Celestia's mortal disguise, probably not even Luna!  How will they react to having caught a noble nopony recognizes?

#42 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 19h ago · · ·

This is glorious

#43 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 19h ago · · ·

>>2508582 I have an editor going now.

#44 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · · 1 ·

>renovate the hoofbal fields

*hoofball

>Your sister too the last of it not ten minutes ago

*took

>It did her little ponies good  and gave them courage

You have two spaces between "good" and "and" :moustache:

>the best pastry chefs in her castle hasn't quite gotten the recipe right

*hadn't

#45 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · · ·

Take me away and regale me with an  with an enchantingly gripping  tale, good sir. I shalt be waiting for further continuation, because this was what the nobles of the olden world referred to as: dat real good literary shit, ma *racial explicative removed*.

Loathe,

Your Antagonist

#46 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · 3 · ·

>>2508754 Fixed. Danke.

#47 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · · ·

>>2508790 Bitte schön :moustache:

#48 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · · ·

Oh, this is gonna be good. She is far too naieve in the ways of normal ponies, but hopefully she'll lose some of that as the story progresses.

Also, if she gets Stockholm Syndrome, then I totally called it.

#49 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 18h ago · 5 · ·

a mugging felt like a pillow fight......

YESH

#50 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 17h ago · 2 · ·

Oops you kidnapped the wrong pony.  

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