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  • T Changing Lives

    The Time Loop Trilogy is a big place, and Twilight didn't see all of it. Cloud Kicker has a very different perspective on how it all went down.  · Eakin
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  • T A Stitch in Time

    A sequel to Hard Reset
    70,648 words · 23,664 views  ·  3,510  ·  50
  • T Hard Reset

    Twilight gives her life to stop a changeling invasion. Repeatedly.
    37,399 words · 43,135 views  ·  4,923  ·  74
  • T A Taste of the Good Life

    A down-on-his-luck chef from Manehattan moves to the rural town of Ponyville as part of a get-rich-quick scheme. But he gets a bit more than he bargained for.
    70,814 words · 10,245 views  ·  1,572  ·  21
  • E Birds of a Feather

    Owlowiscious has seemed distracted ever since Twilight started spending more time in Canterlot. Maybe Luna can help figure out why.
    2,388 words · 2,422 views  ·  454  ·  5
  • T The Moon Glows Gently

    Luna always follows her heart. That's not necessarily a good thing.
    8,774 words · 3,373 views  ·  558  ·  7
  • E An Important Letter

    A love story, waiting for an ending
    1,702 words · 2,960 views  ·  374  ·  4
  • E Eakin's Rapid Fire Pony Fics

    A compilation of tiny random stories
    20,791 words · 5,620 views  ·  563  ·  8
  • T The Sun Burns Brightly

    Celestia is in complete control of her emotions. That's not necessarily a good thing.
    5,775 words · 5,145 views  ·  875  ·  15

Blog Posts71

  • 5w, 3d
    The Dos and Don'ts of OCs

    OCs. An acronym that sends a cold shudder down the spine of so many long-time FimFiction readers, and not without good reason. Nary a day goes by without the ‘New Stories’ box being graced with a story wherein some new pony wanders into town and befriends our beloved cast. And for the most part, these stories are... less than good. Which is a shame, really, because a good OC can open a ton of doors for an author to take their stories in directions that just aren’t possible if they restrict themselves to the canon personalities of established characters. And since I’ve been turning over questions about when and where they’re properly applied this evening, I figured I might as well share (read: inflict) some of my wisdom (read: bullshit-laden ramblings) onto all my adoring fans (read: people who sneezed mid-click and accidentally ended up here) while I try to hash out the things I’ve done right and wrong in the past. Some of the conclusions I’ve reached are common sense, while others are a bit counter-intuitive. And like all ‘Rules for Writing,’ the best stories are often ones that know when and where to break them.

    DO: Make sure your OC has a life and identity of their own

    Nothing makes a world start to feel claustrophobic like a network of characters who all share some pre-existing connection. The mare who just happened to be Twilight’s classmate back in Canterlot. The stallion who became a champion lasso-tosser after he just happened to watch Applejack win some tournament. It’s cheap and lazy characterization, and it defines your new character only in relation to another one. Imagine meeting a real-life celebrity on par with the Mane Six. Sure, they expect that you’ve heard of them, but going on and on about how you went to kindergarten together and you still have a scrap of the blankie they drooled on during naptime and omigosh isn’t it just kismet that we’re meeting again like this is a great way to get a complimentary escort out the back door by a large, burly man wearing a three-piece suit and an earpiece.

    Bottom line: Your character should be able to carry a story that never intersects with the canon cast at all, at least in theory. If you do need to break this rule, try to do it retroactively. See Cheese Sandwich and the events of Cutie Mark Chronicles for reference. The connections are already existed, but the characters would be interesting even if they didn’t. It’s the gravy rather than the meat, is what I’m saying.

    DON’T: Clone an Existing Character

    ‘My OC Tabula Rasa is a total nerd and bookworm! She’s usually pretty level-headed, but she can get totally crazy when she thinks she might disappoint her mentor, Brincess Belestia.’

    Yeah, we already have that character. If you’re using an archetype that’s easily filled by an existing character, an OC might not be the right tool for the job. The exception is when your OC can serve as a shadow archetype to an existing character, a ‘there but for the grace of God go I’ warning who differs from the established character in only minor ways but ended up going in a totally different direction. A Sunset Shimmer to your Twilight, or an Algae Bloom to your Cloud Kicker. These sorts make great antagonists or anti heroes, generally.

    DO: Beat the Shit Out of Them

    Want your audience to like your original character? Make them suffer. Not randomly, mind, but as a direct consequence of one of their own screw ups (corollary: make sure your OC screws up from time to time). It’s a bit of a balancing act; an OC sentenced to death for littering is only going prompt eye rolling from your readers, but when in doubt harsher is better. Actually, I’d suggest making all your characters suffer as a general rule. Letting your universe knock them over and then kick them when they’re down only for them to learn a lesson and get back up again stronger than before is pretty much always compelling. Who doesn't love rooting for an underdog? It can be tough to follow through on this, especially since you probably like this character and want to coddle them. Fight that impulse. If you fudge the die rolls for them, so to speak, your readers will pick up on it. Do you want a Mary Sue? Because arranging events so that they always work out in your OC’s favor for no good reason is how you get a Mary Sue.

    DON’T: Tell Me I Should Like Them

    What makes readers think a character is awesome? That character does awesome things. That’s it.

    Obvious, right? But a lot of people put the cart before the horse and just expect readers to like their OC because they give them attributes that they think are cool and expect it to rub off. If any of the following phrases appear when you’re describing your character...

    ‘Invented a groundbreaking device that gives him the power to...’

    ‘Received numerous awards for...’

    ‘Super-genius’

    ‘The best [whatever] that [authority figure] has ever seen’

    ‘Alicorn’

    And so on and so forth

    ...then odds are I probably won’t give a damn . Nobody cares who your OC is going into the story. What they actually do on the page is a thousand times more impactful. Really, it’s just the old ‘Show, Don’t Tell’ advice gussied up in a new outfit. And don’t think you can slip these sorts of things past readers as long as you give your OC flaws to ‘balance them out.’ This isn’t some sort of point-buy RPG system, it’s a story. Give them core traits and beliefs, sure, but those things can lead to positive or negative characteristics. It’s actually better when strengths and weaknesses both feel like outgrowths of the same attributes.

    DO: Buy a Slow Cooker and Learn How to Use It

    This one has nothing to do with writing, I just really love my Crock-Pot. You can convince a truly absurd number of people you’re some kind of cooking savant when the limit of your ability is actually ‘chop stuff up, toss in pot, set to LOW for 10 hours.’


    Did I miss anything? Let me know in the comments.

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  • 7w, 5d
    Character Roleplay Meme: Azalea and Twilight Sparkle

    Same deal as last time.

    WHO ARE YOU? WHAT’S YOUR RACE/AGE?

    Twi: I’m Twilight Sparkle, alicorn Princess of Equestria. I’m 28.

    Az: Like there’s anypony out there who doesn’t know who you are at this point. We can barely go two weeks without your picture showing up in the paper.

    Twi: Heh, yeah, I guess I have been a public figure for a good while now. You get used to it after five years.

    Az: Five years since your coronation. You weren’t exactly unknown before that.

    NOW WHO’S YOUR LOVER? WHAT’S HER AGE/RACE?

    Twi: That’s actually kind of complicated. Pegasus, obviously, but age is trickier.

    Az: Depending on how you count, I’m some combination of 22, 37, and 6. All us former changelings have the same problem. But hey, three birthdays a year!

    Twi: You might think she’s kidding, but we actually do celebrate two different ones. You’re so spoiled.

    Az: Rotten. And you wouldn’t have it any other way, would you?

    Twi: Never in a million years.

    Az: They’re really more like half-birthdays, though. All the friends and family I knew back in Trottingham celebrate the one from the pony I used to be, but here in Ponyville we have a different one. Pinkie really goes all out, but then there’s quite a few of us who consider it our ‘official’ birthday.

    Twi: The first few years I was pretty down on it, but as time goes by I find I’m glad that it didn’t just end up being the anniversary of the changeling invasion. Better to have happy memories associated with it than bad ones.

    WHAT MAKES YOUR LOVER SO SPECIAL?

    Az: Geez, what doesn’t? I hit the jackpot when I landed her. To think I nearly sabotaged the whole thing for myself by psyching myself into believing she’d never look twice at a pony as bland and ordinary as me.

    Twi: There’s nothing bland about you. If anything you’re even more special than I am. There are four Princesses, but there’s only one pony who can calm me down when I get a little manic the way you can.

    HAVE YOU EVER DOUBTED YOUR LOVER?

    Az: I had a really hard time believing she was actually interested in me. And there have been times when she pushed me out of my comfort zone that I thought she was just completely crazy. Which she is.

    Twi: Hey!

    Az: In good ways, dear.

    Twi: Hmph. Well I guess that’s alright then.

    Az: Mostly good.

    Twi: Anyway, after we got off to that rocky start there were definitely things I hesitated about confiding in her.

    Az: That was partly my own doing, considering how I reacted the first time you dumped something big on me. And it’s not like I wasn’t hiding stuff from you at the time myself.

    Twi: That was probably for the best, all things considered. If you’d mentioned your past on the first date there wouldn’t have been a second one. I was still an eensy bit of a bigot toward changelings at the time. You should have seen my right after I broke out of the loop.

    Az: Yes, Butterscotch told me about the dinner with your parents where you nearly tore his head off.

    Twi: Not my finest moment.

    Az: Should we change the subject? Because it sounds like the moral of this story is ‘if you’re a racist and lie to your special somepony, you’ll end up ascending to be a Princess and fall in love.’

    Twi: I’m not saying that! Bite your tongue or Press Release will have my head. He already lectured me for an hour about what would and wouldn’t be appropriate to say for this interview.

    Az: I can see the headline now: ‘An interview with Princess Sparkle and the six-year-old who impregnated her.’

    Twi: Don’t use that headline. In fact, don’t even write that... you’ve already written it down haven’t you?

    Az: On the plus side, if there’s a coup and you get overthrown I’ll finally have you all to myself.

    DID YOU EVER USE PICKUP LINES ON YOUR LOVER? IF SO, WHICH ONES?

    Twi: We actually met on a blind date, so it wasn’t really necessary.

    Az: Oh really? I seem to recall somepony trying to get me to come into her library with ‘Want to see if we can extrapolate this trend line?’

    Twi: I can’t believe you remember that.

    Az: I remember every second of that night like it was yesterday. Every one.

    Twi: Well, I seem to recall being told that I ‘really knew how to make a mare all wet.’

    Az: We were in a lake at the time, for context. Oh, and of course we do have pet names for one another. Isn’t that right, water walker?

    Twi: Absolutely, grounding wire.

    WHAT’S THE MOST EMBARRASSING MOMENT YOU’VE EVER HAD WITH YOUR LOVER?

    Az: Remember the time Cloud Kicker almost walked in on us ‘assembling a bookshelf?’

    Twi: I try very hard not to. What about the marriage proposal that ended up with both of us in the lake? Again.

    Az: I’m not letting you change the subject that easily. Of course, it’s a good thing Cloudy wasn’t a few minutes later or she’d have stumbled on me calling you ‘Darkness Nightsha—’

    Twi: Next question, please.

    DO YOU BELIEVE IN WAITING UNTIL AFTER AFTER MARRIAGE TO HAVE SEX?

    Az: Nope.

    Twi: Very nope.

    DO YOU HAVE ANY DESIRES YOU’D LIKE TO TRY WITH YOUR LOVER? IF SO, WHAT?

    Twi: Most ponies have heard that in the months after the Regalia melted I started eating a ton of food to fuel the ascension process. What’s not as well known is that wasn’t the only... uh... enhanced appetite I experienced. Most of the fantasies got checked off the list pretty quickly.

    Az: That’s not a figure of speech. There’s an actual checklist she keeps in her nightstand. Me, I’m just looking forward to her not being fat anymore.

    Twi: I didn’t complain when you were the pregnant one, you know.

    Az: If you’re ever looking for new ideas, I’m sure Cloudy could suggest a few.

    Twi: I don’t know, she’s mellowed quite a bit since she got promoted into Rainbow Dash’s old job.

    Az: Maybe not as much as you’d think. My cousin has stories that are definitely not appropriate to print in the paper. They get up to things you wouldn’t believe.

    DO YOU KNOW YOUR LOVER’S WEAK SPOT? DO THEY KNOW YOURS?

    Az: Twilight here has a history of freaking out a little bit when she thinks somepony she cares about might be in trouble. She tends to make some rash decisions, and she can get a little controlling. Like the time she tried to have me thrown in the dungeon.

    Twi: What did you expect? I’m hundreds of miles away negotiating trade arrangements with a pack of Diamond Dogs when I get a letter telling me you, Rarity, Cloudy, Morning Glow, and Shooting Star are heading out to the edge of the freaking Badlands to look for a changeling nest.

    Az: They needed a guide who knew what to look for. You weren’t there; Rarity would have gone out there all by herself, the state she was in at the time. I can promise you Princess Celestia wasn’t thrilled about the idea either.

    WHAT HAPPENS IF YOU FIND YOUR LOVER WITH ANOTHER MARE? HOW WOULD YOU INTERPRET THAT? FAMILIAR? FRIEND? CHEATING?

    Twi: There were definitely some jealous pangs for a couple of months whenever you hung out with Cloud Kicker, especially since you two used to date.

    Az: That was a whole other life, and I wouldn’t exactly call it dating. More of a very sensual interrogation.

    Twi: To be fair, though, you’ve never been the biggest fan of Star Gazer.

    Az: That’s different. First of all, she hurt you pretty badly back then. Second, you two were married.

    Twi: If it’s in an alternate timeline, it doesn’t count.

    Az: I guess I should just be happy you came back with less baggage than some of your friends after all that. For all I know they could have gone and turned you straight or something.

    ANY FANTASIES WITH YOUR LOVER? PERVY ANSWERS ALLOWED.

    Twi: Like I said, we’ve experimented pretty liberally already.

    Az: Actually, after what you’ve told me I’ve always been a little curious about Princess Luna. Maybe she’d be up for some excitement once Star Swirl finally kicks the bucket.

    Twi: Azalea! That’s a terrible thing to say. I know you aren’t his biggest fan, but he really is a genius.

    Az: He’s a jerk.

    Twi: Those aren’t mutually exclusive.

    Az: We’ve never really seen eye to eye, and he made a heck of a first impression that morning in the marketplace.

    EVER HAVE FIGHTS?

    Twi: Now and then. Lately over what I’m allowed and not allowed to do while I’m pregnant. And she says I’m the controlling one.

    Az: You are the controlling one. And it’s not unreasonable to forbid somepony in your state from jumping into a freaking volcano looking for a magic eggbeater.

    Twi: Spatula.

    Az: Whatever. But there have been others. The first conversation we had after I ran out on her because of the changeling venom thing was probably the biggest one.

    Twi: Yeah, any fight that ends with accepting a date from another mare out of spite is a bad one. Although if I’d known what Algae Bloom was like I wouldn’t have.

    Az: Turned out just fine in the end, though.

    Twi: I guess. In hindsight, I wish I’d handled that whole debacle myself instead of dumping it on Cloud Kicker. Maybe things would have turned out differently and I wouldn’t have had to throw Rainbow Dash in jail a few months later.

    Az: It was only for a few weeks. And she did kind of bring it on herself. The whole Applejack thing had her pretty out of control for a while there.

    Twi: Or what about the time you nearly took my head off because I leased your shop?

    Az: Oh, I was furious. That whole Badlands trip had just put me through the ringer physically and emotionally, and then I get back and you basically dictate to me that I have to move in with you and start putting money towards rent payments I had never agreed to make?

    Twi: I didn’t tell you that you had to move in with me. I just calculated the financial implications of a number of different possible scenarios is all. But I’ll admit that you running off like that did make me want to sort of tie you down in Ponyville. I was really scared.

    Az: Welcome to my life! You think I never worry about you when you do exactly the same thing? But I really did almost break up with you right then and there. Thank goodness for Bon Bon.

    Twi: Yeah, I’m glad she was there to defuse it like that. Although I do feel bad that it spoiled the surprise she’d been working so hard on.

    Az: Lyra said yes anyway, which is all that really matters in the end. I’m sure she was annoyed at the time, but someday it’ll just be a funny story that they can tell their daughter.

    HOW DO YOU FEEL ABOUT YOUR LOVER’S FAMILY? DO YOU KNOW THEM?

    Twi: They’re great! It’s quite the extended clan, and they were all really warm and welcoming the first time we met. Although I wasn’t exactly the center of attention on that trip.

    Az: Yeah, my parents pretty much fell in love with her the minute they found out about us. Then again, bringing their child back from the dead goes a long way towards winning their approval.

    Twi: You hit it off with my parents pretty quickly too.

    Az: The one pony that I was most nervous about winning over was Celestia, actually. Being invited for a three-hour private tea with a mare who you clobbered in the back of the head with a baseball bat before she casually flung you out a window on your last encounter made my heart skip a few beats.

    Twi: I was most nervous for when she found out you had been a changeling once. Then of course it turns out she knew that since before I’d even met you.

    Az: The rest of them were a cakewalk by comparison, and we get along great. Cadance was one of our bridesmaids, and even talked me down from a minor panic attack on the wedding day. Best sister-in-law ever.

    SPEAKING OF FAMILIES, DO YOU WANT TO START ONE TOGETHER?

    Twi: Way ahead of you. In fact, we’re about to expand it from three to four.

    Az: We decided to keep the sex and race a surprise this time, although I know my parents would be thrilled to have an earth pony for a grandchild. Not that they don’t love Leafy horn and all, but my extended family definitely leans in that direction.

    Twi: Based on the how hard he kicks, I think there’s a good chance they’ll get there wish. Oof.

    Az: You’ll get no sympathy from me. Try having something with a pointy, stubby horn on its forehead squeezed through your birth canal, then we’ll talk.

    WE’RE FINISHED, WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO NOW?

    Twi: I have some paperwork I should really finish.

    Az: Before you do, feel like grabbing something to eat?

    Twi: Do you even have to ask? I ate three hours ago and I’m already starving again. Deli?

    Az: You read my mind. Dibs on your pickle.

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  • 8w, 5d
    First World Author Problems

    Cataloging the suffering of all us poor writers with thousands of followers.

    "My story was only in the feature box for three days? Didn't anyone like it?"

    "God, I hate that one tiny pixel of red in the likes-dislikes ratio."

    "It's so awful to reply to all your comments, refresh the page, and find that fifteen more have been added in the last five minutes."

    "I'm so well-established that the top ten entries in my story box never change. It's getting so repetitive."

    "Would the EQD pre-readers please stop spamming me with e-mails telling me my story's been accepted?"

    Any I forgot? Add them to the comments or do a blog entry of your own! If two or three of us do I'm sure we'll reach at least half the readers on the site.

    43 comments · 816 views
  • 9w, 12h
    Character Roleplay Meme: Main Course and Ebony Glimmer

    Well, since Wade tagged me in his blog post, I thought I’d give this a shot. Might be fun. You can read the rules over there, and I’m sure you can guess who the characters are. I’m going to shake it up a bit, though. I’m going to skip the ‘Tag other authors’ step since I generally find the whole chain-letter style ‘challenge’ to be annoying. If you want to get in on it, just jump in with a post of your own! Second, I may decide to do a second round of these ‘In-character answers’ with fan-submitted questions. If you have a particular Q you’d like Main and Ebby to A, stick it in the comments. I’ll use whatever questions are most upvoted.

    I may also do one of these for Twi and Azalea. And before you ask, no you won’t get a straight answer about the weathervanes.

    So without further ado...

    WHO ARE YOU? AGE/RACE.

    MC: My name’s Main Course. Earth pony, turn 36 next week. I run the Grassy Knoll here in Ponyville, it’s not technically affiliated with the one in Manehatten, at least legally. Not any more, at least. Although I am a silent partner so you could say—

    Ebby: I think they’ve gotten the point, dear.

    MC: Right, sorry. Next question?

    NOW WHO’S YOUR LOVER? WHAT’S HER AGE/RACE?

    Ebby: Your lover! Ooh, doesn’t that make it sound exciting? Like we’re sneaking out for secret trysts. Like, ‘Well, hey there tall, dark, and sexy. Why don’t you ditch that nag of a wife and come be with a real mare?’

    MC: Hmm... tempting offer. You know she even tried to kidnap my daughter once?

    Ebby: That witch!

    MC: But seriously, though, this unicorn is technically Lady Ebony Glimmer, but everypony in town knows her as Ebby. As for age...

    Ebby: Think very carefully before you answer that question.

    MC: ...she’s in her late—

    Ebby: Ahem!

    MC: Like I was saying, she’s in her mid-thirties. Next question. Quickly, please.

    WHAT MAKES YOUR LOVER SO SPECIAL?

    MC: Strongest, toughest mare in Equestria, right here. Fighting the toughest fight in the world for... what’s the count?

    Ebby: 2,397 days. But you’re exaggerating about how tough it is. It’s there, but it’s a lot easier than it used to be. My turn: I married a stallion who sees the best in everypony. The number of little ways he’s saved me... well, I can’t even begin to count that particular number. Everything I have today, my friends, my home, two wonderful foals, I wouldn’t have any of it without Main. I probably wouldn’t even be breathing.

    MC: You’ve paid me back ten times over. All that was you. I just cheered you on when you needed it.

    HAVE YOU EVER DOUBTED YOUR LOVER?

    MC: ...

    Ebby: We should be honest, Main. It’s okay.

    MC: I certainly don’t anymore. But yes, right after she reconciled with Scootaloo and we started dating, there was a part of me that didn’t trust her. I would find excuses not to leave her alone with Scootaloo, even though I knew I was being ridiculous. I thought... sorry, would you give me a second?

    Ebby: No, Main, don’t... if you start crying them I’m going to start and then where will we be?

    MC: I thought it might be another act. I thought one day I’d come back and you and my daughter... I’d never see her again.

    Ebby: The important thing was that we worked through it together. We’d recently been seeing the same therapist, and he did couples counselling too. Dating three weeks and already in couples therapy doesn’t exactly sound like a promising start, does it? But I think we both already knew by that point we were in this thing for the long haul.

    MC: Like I said, when my wife sees something worth fighting for, she fights for it. Tooth and nail.

    DID YOU EVER USE PICKUP LINES ON YOUR LOVER? IF SO, WHICH ONES?

    Ebby: Can’t say I have. Kissing him and then punching him in the stomach worked better anyway.

    MC: There’s some relationship advice you won’t read in Cosmare.

    Ebby: You might be surprised, actually.

    WHAT’S THE MOST EMBARRASSING MOMENT YOU’VE HAD WITH YOUR LOVER?

    MC: There were definitely a couple of very dark, very low moments early on, but not really the kind of funny-embarrassing you’re asking about.

    Ebby: Yes, Main Course humiliated me quite a bit right after we met. And I know that the connotations of that word are pretty negative, but that’s not really what I mean by it. I mean he got me to humble myself, and to realize that I didn’t necessarily deserve to have something just because I wanted it. That was... pretty different from the way I was raised.

    MC: Geeze, this is getting depressing. I’m gonna say that my official answer is when we had to tell my sister that we needed to rush the wedding because I had... uh... Ebby was slightly pregnant at the time. Didn’t hear the end of that one for months.

    DO YOU BELIEVE IN WAITING UNTIL AFTER MARRIAGE TO HAVE SEX?

    MC: I think my last answer pretty much covers this one too.

    Ebby: We didn’t even wait until we were dating.

    DO YOU HAVE ANY DESIRES YOU’D LIKE TO TRY WITH YOUR LOVER? IF SO, WHAT?

    MC: We’re actually pretty vanilla in the, er, intimacy department. But whatever we lack in quality we make up for in quantity!

    Ebby: Main! Goodness, now everypony reading this is going to think I’m some kind of nymphomaniac who’s lousy in bed. What my husband means is that we make it a point to be physically intimate with one another whenever possible, and I don’t mean just sex. Hugging, cuddling, nuzzling, that sort of physical contact with another pony is something I denied myself for a very long time. I... being touched by a stallion was an issue, let’s leave it at that.

    MC: Right. And especially given what Scootaloo grew up around... I want to set an example for her, you know? I want her to get that ponies who are in loving and healthy relationships do that for one another, and I hope that she’ll be able to open herself up in the same way. We’re not answering the question, are we?

    Ebby: Actually, for me the answer is I’d like to travel more as a family. Ginger’s getting old enough that we can start taking him on longer trips, and I do miss travelling from my pre-Ponyville days. The problem is that somepony will never take a vacation.

    MC: The Knoll is a lot of work!

    Ebby: The only way I got him to take his last vacation was to have Pinkie fire him for a week.

    MC: She can’t actually fire me. I just decided to humor her and didn’t come in for a few day.

    Ebby: Mmhmm. Of course, dear. I’m sure that’s exactly what happened.

    DO YOU KNOW YOUR LOVER’S WEAK SPOT? DO THEY KNOW YOURS?

    MC: I think probably Scootaloo and Ginger for both of us. I don’t know what I’d do if I lost either of them.

    Ebby: I agree. Except I know from experience what I’d do, and it isn’t a pretty picture.

    WHAT HAPPENS IF YOU FIND YOUR LOVER WITH ANOTHER MARE/STALLION? HOW WOULD YOU INTERPRET THAT? FAMILIAR? FRIEND? CHEATING?

    MC: I would never assume cheating. Both of us have worked too hard for what we have together to risk even making the accusation, much less committing the act himself.

    Ebby: I don’t know... some of your waitresses are awfully attractive... and you and Pinkie do spend some late nights at the Knoll together...

    MC: Come on, Ebby, don’t even kid about that.

    Ebby: Oh, all right. Yes, I’d trust that it was something perfectly reasonable and innocent. Even if it were Rarity.

    MC: What do you mean ‘even if it were Rarity?’

    Ebby: You don’t have to play dumb. The two of us talked it over mare to mare and we’re still friends.

    MC: I legitimately have no idea what you’re talking about.

    Ebby: Really?

    MC: Really.

    Ebby: I thought for certain that you knew. Let me put it this way; if I hadn’t entered the picture when I did there’s a better than even chance that you’d be married to her now instead of me.

    MC: What?

    Ebby: You’re both good friends, you both own small businesses you’re passionate about, and you’re both physically attracted to one another. Don’t think I haven’t noticed.

    MC: You’re the only mare for me, honey.

    Ebby: I appreciate that. Oh, and one other thing. If, Princesses forbid, I were to keel over dead tomorrow, she has dibs.

    MC: Excuse me?

    Ebby: Well, I would want you to remarry and not just wallow in grief. Ginger and Scootaloo need a mother figure, and Rarity’s the mare that I would pick if it were up to me. I think you’d be happy together.

    MC: I cannot believe we’re having this conversation.

    Ebby: If you want to pick a potential future replacement husband for me, you’re welcome to. Fair’s fair.

    ANY FANTASIES WITH YOUR LOVER? PERVY ANSWERS ALLOWED.

    Ebby: Just to break my husband’s brain a little further after that last answer, I’ll say a chance for him to see what being married to Rarity would mean physically. Except of course I wouldn’t want to be left out...

    MC: I had an answer, but that one’s better.

    EVER HAD FIGHTS?

    MC: Absolutely. Sometimes even screaming matches. But never in front of Scootaloo and Ginger, and never without being able to say ‘I love you’ and go to sleep together that night. So I think that means we’re doing pretty okay.

    Ebby: For me, I think one of the hardest things to accept was that, well, I’m not Scootaloo’s favorite parent. I know she loves me but... if I’m being absolutely honest, she’s more your daughter than she is mine at this point.

    MC: That was never my intention.

    Ebby: It’s fine. For goodness sake, Main, she works her hooves to the bone in the kitchen just to impress you. You have more in common with her these days than I do, and she just glows with happiness when you even so much as smile at her. My daughter loves me and she’s happy. What sort of mother would be dissatisfied with that?

    MC: I guess this is as good a time as any to mention that while we might not always agree with one another, parenting-wise, we always back one another up. If there’s a disagreement we hash it out in private. Even if, say, somepony tries to ground our daughter for the rest of her natural life.

    Ebby: I know that was an overreaction, but you understand why it struck a chord, right? Plus it led to a good conversation between us.

    MC: She experimented. There was nopony at that sleepover who wasn’t trustworthy. Would you have rather she tried it for the first time around ponies she didn’t know?

    Ebby: I would prefer if she’d never tried it at all.

    MC: Two mugs of hard cider is pretty tame, Ebby.

    Ebby: I know, I know. Let’s just... can we get the next question?

    HOW DO YOU FEEL ABOUT YOUR LOVER’S FAMILY? DO YOU KNOW THEM?

    Ebby: Oh my goodness, yes! Of course Silver Scroll is here in Ponyville, and even if she was a little wary of me at first she came around. Now she practically begs us to let her foalsit Ginger, and she and Scootaloo go up flying at least twice a month just to catch up. And I was so nervous when I met his parents, but they’re the sweetest couple! I hope Main and I are still so very in love at that age. And his Mom even knitted me a Hearth’s Warming sweater! I couldn’t ask for a better set of in-laws. Sorry, I’m babbling. Main, did you want to talk about meeting my parents?

    MC: ....

    Ebby: Main?

    MC: Speaking of my parents. one of the things they taught me growing up was that if you don’t have anything nice to say, you shouldn’t say anything at all.

    SPEAKING OF FAMILIES, DO YOU WANT TO START ONE TOGETHER?

    MC: We’re married with two foals. I think we’re slightly past that point.

    WE’RE FINISHED. WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO NOW?

    Ebby: I guess... I guess we should finish helping Scootaloo pack.

    MC: Probably. Can you believe that she’s leaving for culinary school in just three more days?

    Ebby: ....

    MC: Whoops.

    Ebby: I CAN’T BELIEVE SHE’S LEAVING AGAIN! What if the others are mean to her? What if she gets homesick? What if... what if...

    MC: We should probably cut this short. She’s been like this for weeks whenever this comes up.


    And done! That was fun! If you have questions you’d like to see Ebby/Main answer, or suggestions for Twilight/Azalea questions, stick them in the comments below.

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    Why I Took Down 'Magnum Opus Dissonance.'

    So, if you were on late last night/early this morning, you might have seen the latest story I wrote in a sleep-deprived, ninety minute haze: Magnum Opus Dissonance, about a suicidally depressed Octavia lamenting that one of her works had overshadowed all her others, and chronicling the depression and intrusive thoughts of violence that lead up to an ambiguous choice to OD on painkillers and commit suicide. You know, just a little light and fun reading at four in the morning.

    It no longer appears on my story list.

    Blame my mother (Hi, Mom!) who called me up a little while ago worried about what I'd written and what the consequences, both for me and my possible readers, could be. Now my mother has known about my presence here for a while now, and while she's not exactly thrilled about it she's been willing to put up with it as long as it doesn't negatively affect other aspects of my life. For her, the story crossed a line. If never been one to shy away from writing about dark and uncomfortable subjects, but not really this viscerally and not in a way that might affect somebody or read as an encouragement to take negative action. I'm not really afraid that someone is going to read No Good Answers and go out to rape someone. Or read Reign and... uh... trap themselves in an unresolvable time loop? I guess? But, and I'm not saying any of you would do this kind of thing, I can see how MOD might read as advocating or glorifying suicide. Obviously it resonated as something that felt true, based on the comments asking if it might have been partly autobiographical. It isn't, thank goodness. At least it might seem like I'm advocating it to the twisted sort of mind who might be susceptible to considering it in the first place, or on a more practical note it might look that way to future employers or anyone who manages to link this profile to my real-life identity, which probably wouldn't be hard to do.

    If, as a brief aside, you or someone you know EVER has those kind of persistent, intrusive thoughts then GO GET HELP! The National Suicide Prevention Hotline is just a phone call away.

    Anyway, the story's gone now, or at least is no longer visible on the site. Those of you who didn't get to read it, don't worry too much. It's hardly some forbidden masterpiece. And don't worry about this becoming a recurring thing, either. It's not like Hard Reset 3: Thinly Veiled Excuse to Write Pornography That Incorporates Time Loops is languishing in my Google Docs list because of some sort of maternal censorship conspiracy.

    I mean, not more than twenty, maybe twenty-five thousand words of it at least.

    Still, wouldn't hurt to put something a little more light-hearted out there instead of some of the darker/sadder one shots I've been putting out lately. We'll have to see if my muse can pull herself out of the funk she's been in lately and try to come up with a little rom-com for good measure.

    Anyway, TL;DR the story's gone and you shouldn't kill yourself

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This story is a sequel to A Stitch in Time

Having discovered the message left for her by Star Swirl the Bearded in the distant past, Twilight once again finds herself caught up in the middle of a struggle against forces far greater than herself. In order to even stand a chance she'll need to travel further and wider than she ever has, and forge some unlikely alliances with old enemies. All to bring down the powers that have manipulated and shaped her entire life, and retake control of her own future.

The conclusion of the Time Loop Trilogy, which began with Hard Reset

Available in Spanish thanks to dgs1993

Series TV Tropes page

First Published
26th Jun 2013
Last Modified
30th Aug 2013
#1 · 74w, 1d ago · 53 · 2 · Oh, Come On! ·

:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile: Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! :twilightblush:

#2 · 74w, 1d ago · 7 · · Oh, Come On! ·

The beginning of the end.

#3 · 74w, 1d ago · 30 · · Oh, Come On! ·

Commencing read, will edit in my most likely favorable opinion in 15 or so minutes

Edit: Did anyone else notice (or even realize) that Twilight and Pinkie just had a sane conversation before Rarity interrupted them?

#4 · 74w, 1d ago · 4 · 2 · Oh, Come On! ·

YES!

~Skeeter The Lurker

#6 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · 1 · Oh, Come On! ·

Today has been the best day ever. Period.

#7 · 74w, 1d ago · 37 · · Oh, Come On! ·

Holy shit. When I hit the upvote, it jumped from 1 to 41. That's the highest it's ever gone for me.

Also, that prophecy...

The ephemeral made physical,

Elements made into regalia

perfection confined, touched by an imperfect world.

Same as above

Destruction born not out of wrath,

but rather disappointment.

Elements are trying to destroy the world because it isn't good enough for them.

That's my guess anyway.

#8 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · · Oh, Come On! ·

I'm /very/ excited to see where this ends up. My only problem with this chapter is that, well, there's only this chapter. Keep it up!

#9 · 74w, 1d ago · 3 · · Oh, Come On! ·

this can only end badly, or with lots of explosions. or both. preferably both.

#10 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

Yeah, Twilight, I agree. You would make a terrible spy.

Oh crud, a certain someone has a secret. Changeling, I'm thinking? Wait, scratch that, unless she's permanently transformed like Kicky was.

"Well, I'm not going to try to stop you if you've made up your mind, just don't do anything crazier than I would do," says Rainbow Dash.

"As if that rules anything out," says Applejack.

Hah!

#11 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

I liked the original the most so far.  I'm counting on you to change that.:twilightsmile:

#12 · 74w, 1d ago · 16 · · Oh, Come On! ·

My reaction to this being posted cannot be expressed through text, as it was a bizarre squeaking coughy excitement noise.

Wait, did Twi forget to bring Home Run? Welp, we're doomed, then.

#13 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

“No!” I say, loud enough to disturb the other conversations going on around the table. “I mean, so what if we did study the Elements? It’s not like I found out anything new. I certainly didn’t come into possession of any kind of forbidden information about them!”  I don’t think I’d be a very good spy

No. No you wouldn't.

“How about, just for the sake of argument, we call them the Roh?”

“Roh?” repeats Celestia, raising a skeptical eyebrow.

“Fight the pow-ah!” shouts Pinkie.

This isn’t... this isn’t what continuous exposure to the Elements does to a bearer, is it?

Well, I sure hope not, seeing as Princess Twilight wears hers for a tiara...

I shall have to read this later but after the ending of you last story I am very excited. Any chance you might go into the possibility that Starswirl is Discord?:rainbowdetermined2:

#15 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

“Maybe we should call them something distinct to avoid confusion,” I suggest. I ponder the quandary for a moment. What about an acronym? Everything’s better with acronyms. “How about, just for the sake of argument, we call them the Roh?”

“Roh?” repeats Celestia, raising a skeptical eyebrow.

“Fight the pow-ah!” shouts Pinkie. We all turn to her, Celestia’s story momentarily forgotten. “What?” she asks.

...Eakin makes Gurren Lagann references?  No, it can't be...

Not bad for an introductory chapter, kinda slow, but does hint at things that are going to happen in the future, like the prophecy.  My theory that is that it was stating that time is literally short, and the elements are going to create a "perfect order" or a "perfect harmony", and the only way something like that could exist is if there was no chaos or change, and that can only happen if time stops, literally, just freezes.  

As for my predictions for where the story is going, I have a feeling Discord is going to play a big roll in the story, because, I mean how can you have a story about fighting order, without having the embodiment of it's polar opposite, change or chaos.  I also wonder if there is going to be a yin yang motif, with Twilight being the median between the two, Discord being the force that binds the two sides, Celestia being order, and Luna being disorder.

Now all I have to do is sit back, and see if I was right.

Great!!:pinkiehappy::derpytongue2::moustache:

I think this was the fastest I've even seen a story featured. Must be a good series then. I may have to take a look.

#18 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · · Oh, Come On! ·

I finished A Stitch in Time (one of my favorite fanfics ever) yesterday and lamented over how I'd have to wait for You Can Fight Fate, and then the next day I see this.

Words cannot express the joy I feel right now :twilightsmile:

>>2782420 Boi, when I did it, it jumped from 47 to 108. Also, I largely agree with that assessment of the prophecy. I am truly interested in this :rainbowkiss:

Favorited and thumbs-upped before reading.  If what came before is any indication, I don't need to think about it.

#21 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

“Well, I should certainly think so!” says Rarity.

Why a lady could take days to properly brood over something so wonderfully tragic!” says Rarity as she lets herself be swept up in the romance

You said "says Rarity" twice in the same paragraph.

Wow, was that earlier today? It feels like it was months ago now.

I see what you did there.

In any case, WOOT! Was waiting for this story!

I look forward to how this is all gonna go down. And I also look forward to Twilight's reaction when she meets the old Starswirl.

IT'S HAPPENING.

BRACE YOURSELVES.

Aha. And it is All Going To Go Pear-Shaped, I can see...

Continue...

#24 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · · Oh, Come On! ·

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!

YES!

YES!

OH MY FUCKING CELESTIAAAAAAA, TAKE ALL MY YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  :fluttercry: *tears of joy*

#26 · 74w, 1d ago · 3 · · Oh, Come On! ·

>>2782342

All good things, unfortunately. I'll try to make the end of the ride memorable as the rest. Based on what I've got planned it'll either be the most epic thing I've ever written or an overly ambitious clusterbuck. Time will tell!

>>2782420

>>2782658

Yeah, the prophecy is pretty straight forward. It's not as important a plot point as it was in Stitch. If I hadn't put it in the letter I probably could have skipped it.

>>2782440

Having plotted the whole thing out in advance, I'm anticipating relatively few stumbling blocks.

>>2782444

Maaaaaaaaaybe....:pinkiehappy:

>>2782467

Tall order. I personally prefer Stitch, but to each their own. The romance/slice of life stuff should be minimal compared to Stitch though, so it's probably closer to Hard Reset.

>>2782556

>>2782580

One of my pre-readers suggested a Fus-Roh-Dah joke, but GL is a whole lot more thematically appropriate.

>>2782574

Anything's possible! :trollestia:

>>2782649

Good timing!

>>2782709

Good catch, thanks. Tweaked.

>>2782720

What? Twilight's adventure not going exactly according to her plan? Inconceivable!

>>2782701  Ha ha, pretty much the same situation here. Same result too.  I love how Twilight's trying to convince herself that she's not going out there, when we all know she'll go anyway.

Hooray I get more awesome to read.

#29 · 74w, 1d ago · 1 · · Oh, Come On! ·

>>2782766 By the way, the "re-cur" joke was adorable. I forgot to mention in it in my first comment.

Boom, straight to the top of the featured box! Excellent.

If. If I see him again. Because I still haven’t decided whether I’m even going back to help him yet. Yep, that’s totally up in the air. No final decision made yet. Could go either way.

I’m not fooling anypony, am I?

Eenope.

#32 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · · Oh, Come On! ·

Been waiting for this. Thanks for making the S4 wait a little more bearable!

>>2782766

I really liked the original because of the awesome fights, cool last stands, and your plot, almost anything seemed possible.

Also I have a question.  Since in part 2, Alternate Continuum Twi/Changeling still has the magic time loop effect on her, could she turn up again?

Inquisitive pony is inquisitive.

>>2782420  Not so much destroy it, but make the perfect world; any scientist routinely destroys failed experiments.  My problem is probably Star Swirl's, and soon to be Twilight's:  Perfect to someone else might be the ultimate hell for you.  Twilight Swarm, anyone?  Discord Ascendant?  Buck ... no. :twilightangry2:

>>2782782

Yeah, there was basically no dramatic tension to that decision. Of course she's going!

>>2782794

That running gag turned out to have some real staying power.

>>2782836

Maybe even as soon as the next chapter...

#36 · 74w, 1d ago · 5 · · Oh, Come On! ·

>>2782766  

"What? Twilight's adventure not going exactly according to her plan? Inconceivable!"

You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means.

>>2782858  Oh, so Twilight Swarm could be pulling a Jack Halloran:  "Heeeeeeerre's Johnny!"

Buckle up everyone; we're in for one hell of a ride.

“Oh, gag me,” says Spike from the far side of the room.

Not sure if you did this on purpose... but you had "Oh, gag me," in the Queen Twilight story... kinda... spooky??

If. If I see him again. Because I still haven’t decided whether I’m even going back to help him yet. Yep, that’s totally up in the air. No final decision made yet. Could go either way.

I’m not fooling anypony, am I?

...not even close Twilight. Not even close xD

Comment posted by Treilaclanbarin deleted at 1:12am on the 27th of June, 2013

>>2782888

You're assuming she's still a crazy changeling queen...

>>2782956

I'd love to claim that's some clever artistic statement, but the truth is that writing multiple stories at once just gets my wires crossed sometimes. I used the "was that really only yesterday? It felt like months ago!" joke in Artemis, Stella and Beat last week.

#41 · 74w, 1d ago · 12 · · Oh, Come On! ·

...and then Twilight reappeared with two legs, two arms, two hands, and two feet outside a high school... :trollestia:

>>2782978 So you're totally clever and meant to do that? Sweet. :trollestia:

:derpytongue2:

>>2782985

Had I been able to complete the first four chapters before EQG launched, I actually thought about using that as a gag later on. You'll probably be able to figure out where when you read it, but it would be a fairly massive spoiler to tell you now.

Comment posted by Music-and-magic deleted at 2:42am on the 27th of June, 2013

>>2783010

I'll try to remember so I can try to call it out when it comes.

>>2782858

She's gonna be pissed, especially since Twilight Prime lied to her face.

I'm already thrilled.:pinkiehappy:

“I am hiding Star Swirl’s work on the Elements of Harmony,” she goes on to say.

Hmm. Two possibilities spring to mind.

1: Of course she's hiding it. After your adventure in the past with Star Swirl, obviously you or he instructed her to keep it a secret until now, to avoid time paradox.

2: Of course she's hiding it. After <things went horribly wrong> in the past with Star Swirl, the Elements ordered her to keep it secret, and either outright overpowered her, messed with her mind, or threatened her little ponies to the point where she had to comply.

#48 · 74w, 1d ago · 3 · · Oh, Come On! ·

“How about, just for the sake of argument, we call them the Roh?”

“Roh?” repeats Celestia, raising a skeptical eyebrow.

“Fight the pow-ah!” shouts Pinkie.

:flutterrage: PUNCH THROUGH CAUSALITY AND KICK HARMONY IN THE FACE! THAT'S THE GURREN-DAN WAY!

So I have some metaphysical time travel thoughts i would like to share.

This may contain spoilers and because I don't feel like reading through every single comment of this series this may contain what someone else said, however I assure you that these are all my personal ponderings and musings

This new story will most likely focus on the regalia of magic because it should not exist. The regalia of magic came initially from an alternate timeline. And was then brought to another timeline and then sent backwards in time, in order to come to the present and meet itself again if only for a bit. The problem with this is that there is no beginning to the sequence of events. The only reason the regalia exists is because it existed in an alternate timeline that was not meant to exist. So I can only suppose that a consciousness outside of the boundaries of time I.e the elements some how caused this to happen.

#50 · 74w, 1d ago · 2 · · Oh, Come On! ·

I hope I don't have to drag them into this, especially if it turns out to be dangerous.

Twilight... you're doing that thing again... :unsuresweetie: Stuff is generally less dangerous when you bring friends, remember?

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