This is probably gonna be like that game, "I Wanna Be The Guy" cool!

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Def going on my read later list. No time right now.

A badass, Twilight-centric, combat-oriented version of Best Night Ever?

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Yesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyes!

This will be even better than Duel Nature! I can feel it!

TAKE THE MUSTACHES! TAKE THEM!

Twilight Sparkle stars in: Groundhog Day 2: Hog Harder.

Subscribed.

Look at the description. You have my attention.

This is really fucking good.

Oh, wow. I love this.

And I read it. And now I go to read your other works. This is nice...

If at first you don't succeed. Try, try, try.... try, try again.

Seriously, how long can Twilight keep looping before she goes nuts?

Check out this SG-1 Episode to see what I mean:

On a more serious note, great opening chapter. Looking forward to more!

Hey, another loopfic! Hopefully it'll be better than Chunin Exam Day. Do you have a plan for where you're going with this, or are you going to make it up as you go?

>>19675761967576

LOVE that episode, but there's another word, rhymes with try... well I guess you'll figure it out when I put up the next chapter.

>>19675891967589

Oh, I think I can figure it out!

Definitely going to be watching for this one to update!

>>19675791967579

Why yes, every time I post a fic, I think I know where I'm going with it. Sometimes, though, it turns out I'm wrong. So you'll just have to follow this story and see which one it turns out to be

This premise was great when Skywriter used it in Skin Horse (as your Author's Note mentions).  It was great when The Best Night Ever did its unapologetic Groundhog Day parody.  It is shaping up to be equally great here.  Looking forward to more!

> There’s just so much new magic to try out here, and I want to test every single bit of it

> In my defense, it was a really good account about the finer points of fungal reproduction

> Fine. It was an experimental spell. Hardly more than a working theory than anything even with all of the notes Starswirl left pertaining to it. You have to expect this sort of setback when you’re dealing with theoretical spellcraft, right? I just need to redouble my efforts, study even harder, forsake all material desires and comforts until I master-”

Might want to give it one more proofing pass, though.  There's a number of scattered typos.  In this case, I think a few of your periods ran away, grew tails, got married, and ended up cohabiting as a stray close-quote in an unrelated part of the story.  

(That doesn't take away from the quality of the writing, but it's a little distracting.)

This is really good!  

Very good premise, and the story itself is great so far.  You do a good job of describing everything from Twilight's perspective.  Though, not sure if that's such a good thing when it comes to the death scenes.  Ouch, poor Twilight.  Man, my neck hurts now...  

This looks very promising. Man, you make those changelings scary. Groundhog Twilight is best Twilight. I'll be watching!

Just don't forget to save your progress when you do something right, Twilight. You can only imagine the sheer rage of a few day's progress lost.

On another note, does she have a way out of the loop? It would suck if she figured out how to stop cheese-legs, died of old age and had to do this all over again forever.

>>19677091967709

You're two chapters ahead of me, but to answer your question: yes

After reading an EoP chapter, this is perfect. Will definitely follow. Keep it up!

>>19677181967718

It's a Pinkie sense for fan-fiction, it comes and goes as it pleases.

I keep hoping for a Hard Reset fic. The game that is. Oh well.

I'm going to add this to my read later and I'll read it when I get to it. I still have Background Pony to read (I don't like starting something and not finishing it before moving on), and that thing is about 14 hours long according to my Kindle.

I think there was an episode of The Twilight Zone like this once.

Fantastic idea, premise, execution, the works.

I read the description, and it makes me think of "Groundhog Day" starring Bill Murray. Why? I mean, sure she gets multiple chances to get things right and.....oh, wait that's exactly why.

>>19678051967805

I've described this story at least once as "Ponies meets Groundhogs Day meets Die Hard."  So you're most likely onto something

I've seen this premise several times in several fandoms.

And it's almost always one hell of a ride.

Honestly, I never understood what using the Elements of Harmony on a race of insects commonly interpreted as a hivemind, that also feed off of love, was supposed to do besides make them worse. I mean I can understand why they worked on Nightmare Moon, because she was either crazy or possessed(considering stopping the day/night cycle would render 96-98 percent of the planet uninhabitable) and therefore had a disordered mind, while Discord was the living manifestation of chaos, but how would those things work on stuff that wasn't chaotic?(And before someone says the elements are intrinsically good, the qualities are just normally perceived in our society as good. For instance, the element of laughter isn't the element of joyful-and-not-homicidal-laughter)

An experimental spell blew up in her face, an army of changelings is attacking Canterlot, and she just died.

Now I have to read this no matter what happens.

So, she got vaporized? Is that it? I do hope that there's more on the way.

>>19678561967856

Here's the thing though, two identical tones can't produce a harmony. A harmony is two (or more) tones that complement one another to create something greater than themselves.

A species that exist on a single wavelength can't create a harmony, Only a people devoted to cooperation and coordination could ever hope to achieve it.

...............Well shit

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>>19678211967821  It's like the sci-fi movie "12:01".  Which had a temporal device that went off due to sabotage and stuff and the protagonists had to find out how and why and then stop it, after repeating events many many times.

Question:  Why are these changelings killing ponies?  That would seem to rather rapidly deplete their food supply.  They can't get any love out of ponies they've killed.  Are they vampires in this story or something?  And why the overt invasion when they could have just waltzed right in disguised (since clearly the ponies have completely forgotten about defense once again), replaced many of the Canterlot ponies, and then SURPRISE ATTACK!!

>>19679241967924

That was actually one of the scariest interpretations I had(as opposed to it just being another term for order like discord appeared to be for chaos), considering they messed with Luna's mind and there's only supposed be one being in there, they might have given her MPD. Also, that would mean they might give the changelings individuality while making them keep working together, and considering how much better two heads are than one, hundreds to thousands of heads sharing a mental link and all working together would be a lot better at tactics than Chrysalis, considering she could have just switched out with a brainwashed Cadence whenever she had to meet someone and switched back whenever she needed to absorb Shining Armor's love. Not to mention the fact that she acted so mean when she was supposed to be the Alicorn of Twu Wuv, especially to the student of her disguises' aunt. Honestly, if most/all ponies weren't naive, she would have been caught pretty fast.

And that's just one of the three fridge horror's I've found.(The other two are that ponies are speciesist and that, unless they use their true names or change them frequently, their names double as prophecies[for instance, Twilight Sparkle knows the princesses of day and night, and has sparkles for a cutie mark])

Oh yeah, that was exactly what I was hoping for when I read the blog post.

Finally! An action based, pony Peggy Sue fic! It's what I've been waiting for from this fandom! I was prepared to do one myself if I had to. I still might, but this looks good too.

In Soviet Equestria insectoid monster nukes you!

I was in the process of writing something with this premiss. Looks like you got there first.

Good luck. It'll definitely be on my read-later list.

This is now on my read it later list if for nothing else other than that brilliant last line of the description.

This is... Wow. I enjoyed this. Granted, there were a scattering of typos throughout, but nothing that detracted from the story. Well done. I look forward to more.

Chrysalis is casting the Spell of Destruction! The world will be destroyed in 30 seconds 300 minutes!

Well now I have to favorite it.

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>>19684471968447

Don't you dare half-minute hero me. The Time Goddess is on my side

Well, I'll be honest: between the film Groundhog Day and the fanfic Best Night Ever, you've got a hell of a legacy to live up to.  That being said, though, between this promising first chapter and the fact that I just saw Dark Knight of Canterlot in your list of published stories:

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I look forward to seeing more updates from you.  With any luck, I'll continue to not be disappointed.

Twilight saves the day. Flash forwards four years, she dies again. Right back to square one. Goes through it all again, getting pissy, gaining even more knowledge, dies again. Repeat. Finally Dies of old age.

Right back there again. Lives through every damn life she can making out with all her friends just because. Keeps making minor adjustments.

Stops caring.

>>19685271968527

I'll tell you right now, I'm not going to live up to Groundhog Day levels. That's just an unfair bar to set. Nonetheless I plan to kick as much ass as is possible and impress anypony I can

>>19678051967805

So at what point does she run out of f*cks and die a few ties in a row just to see how funny she can die?

...tries skydiving, without a parachute.

...goes under the kitchen sink to try out all the tasty liquids down there.

And since history won't remember what she does...

...tracks down Blueblood and kills him (several times). Yeah, it was worth it.

...starts painting a naughty image of Celestia on a wall behind the throne.

...makes horribly inappropriate sexual advances on Princess Celestia.

...then Luna, just to try it out.

...then Shining Armor.

>>19685611968561

Oh no... eternal life.. how will we ever cope with this development? We'll have to explore an infinite series of possibilities, how awful...

>>19685741968574 When you put it that way, Upon making that connection, Twilight would have a field day.

I've seen two things that this reminds me of. The first is Window of Opportunity, an episode of Stargate SG1. The other is a Harry Potter fanfic titled "Harry Potter and the Wastelands of Time". The fanfic has a few serious differences from this one, however. Harry was thousands of years old by the point the story started, he was an absolute badass, and he was bat-shit insane (in a good and interesting way).

That said, this smacks of an absolutely epic story. I look forward to seeing more of this. And some badass Twilight. Cause badass Twilight is awesome.

The funny thing about dying over and over again to your enemies? Soon enough you learn exactly what they're capable of.

The funny thing about dying over and over again to your enemies? Soon enough you learn how to not die.

The funny thing about dying over and over again to your enemies? Soon enough you kill them instead.

The funny thing... Huh, weird. Deja vu.

Looking good so far, I am intrigued. I've always liked the time loop story concept.

>>19685711968571 With enough loops I see her breaking enough to make out with Chrysalis out of sheer boredom.

Okay, now this sort of thing is actually a grand opportunity. You get to take as long as you want to get everything in order, then, once you have perfected the spell for godhood, simply defeat the invasion in the hour before it starts. It probably won't work out like that, but I just can't wait to see how Twilight takes advantage of basically having all the time in the world.

Just please, please, please, please, PLEASE don't use Doctor Whooves as a deus ex machina in this. Comparing notes with him afterwards? Fine. Just let Twilight solve this by herself!

Finally something involving time travel... lol

Well you got me hooked, this seems pretty damn extreme.

I know it doesn't apply really, but... the part about frequent dying is giving me Dark Souls flashbacks.

The horror...

Either way, looks promising.

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~Babe,

I got you babe.

I got you babe~...

Minor nitpick. I think this fic would be better rated as Teen for violence

>>19687021968702 I think I've invoked enough time travel just trapping Twilight in this particular loop...I don't plan on invoking Whooves or interference

Its like Groundhog Day, but with death at the end of every cycle. I see Twilight going berserk in a few tries and then becoming a bad ass.

>>19686791968679

Oh, I'm certain she'll get to that point eventually. Hell, she might decide to try being the bad mare for once (or twice) and help the changelings take over. That is, until that huge explosion happens which I strongly suspect is the time spell doing a "hard reset" as the title implies.

The idea behind this story is a double edge. It allows the author to do the absolutely craziest, out of character things with Twilight and get away with it. On the flip side, because there's so much repetition it will eventually lead to everyone and the author getting bored of it all.

Well you certainly have gained my interest I wish to see how this develops.

>>19687121968712

Your journey it began because you died!

Escaped your cell and ran and then you died.

you pause to catch your breath and die another gruesome death

so now you creep around each corner terrified!

Loving this story. Also kinda reminds me of The any deaths of Rainbow Dash. Why do I seem to find the mane 6 getting killed in gory ways only to shrug it off and wake up absolutely hilarious?

>>19675891967589

If you do "Twi, Twi again.", there will be bloodshed.

When Celestia and Guards are doing something useful like defeating army of changeling to buy Twilight more time, you know it is all a trick, because Guards and Celestia never get a chance to do anything useful in the show, the moment I noticed how in this fanfic Unicorn Guards were stopping attacking changeling's and when Celestia offered that she will fight them as well, I knew it had to be Chrysalis and changeling's in disguise, because no one else then mane 6 is useful when it come to defending Canterlot, it is a sad true.

Also I  wonder do Twilight is looping in the same day because of the spell effect, repeat the day until it is perfect, if only Chrysalis had this kind of spell, she would repeat her invasion on Canterlot again and again until she stopped doing all her mistakes and take over for real.

Why do I have a feeling that your a Spilight fan? And holy shit, Death must really have something against Twilight eh? Wow, I just know this is going to make me laugh my ass off, I'm down.

Remembers me of "Dark Souls". Normally you spent more than halt of the time dying in this game. Only to learn that you should try something different next time, or that it is not good for your healt it you go through this door or if you open this chest.

This feels like if Twilight entered a "Choose your story", but with only a good ending. xD

EDIT: Also, it needs a Comedy tag. No matter how adventurous it is, it's pretty funny, without the need of punchlines everywhere, but with clever writing.

Chunin Exam Day: MLP Edition?...

Totally following this...

Remind me of Star Gate episode.

THE LOOP CAN NEVER CLOSE!!!

MUAHAHAHAHAHA

This shall be interesting...

This is going on my Read Later list

I think this might just become one of my favourite fics.

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You, sir, have earned this mustache

>>19692341969234 I love that one. When I saw that I just went "Oh Daniel, what have you done?" I miss SG1. I'm writing a SG1 MLP cross fic.

>>19675761967576 yes, she'll go "WACKO!"

First I want to clarify that I love this story so far. Keep up the good work.

That said, maybe you should consider a teen rating. I almost didn't read because it was rated everyone. Now, I have no problem with 'everyone' stories, it'a just that a story that's so clearly centered around violence having such a low rating put me off a little. I'm not a big fan of 'cartoon violence' in fics. I am glad to see that you went the more realistic 'violence with actual consequences' route. As I said though, that might fit better with a teen rating.

Just something to consider.

*applauds*

Bravo.  Bravo!  BRAVO!!!

Ponies, alternate realities, and a time loop?

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>>19692341969234 Stargate FTW!

So uh, why doesn't Twilight see if Luna is still OK next?  

>>19689421968942

Maybe it'll be "die, die again."

Pretty good, though, I do have to say, you might want to add a dark tag. Dark doesn't always mean gore, and this story has some dark stuff even without the slight descriptions of gore.

Hmmm... you have my attention.

Moar! MOOAR!

Due to content, this fic is now legally required to include a reference to either Maretallica's "Die, Die My Darling" or DIE FOR DARKSEID!

Well, now I'm fairly happy that I can just rip apart the fabric of the multiverse and hop to any dimension I wish.

The question now is, where exactly is this one located in the dimensional void. . .

Reliving the same event over and over?

Eventually she going to become genre savvy to everything going on around her… Dangerously so…

>>19679941967994 I'm glad I'm not the only one who remembers 12:01 :)

I also remember Daybreak, a TV series with the same time loop idea, though not quiet like this.

Very interesting chapter there. I wonder what will happen next.

Travelling back in time and space and Equestira in danger? But where is Doctor Whooves when he's needed?

soooo.... this is like "groundhog day" taken to the next level.

>>19699941969994  On come on, as if we couldn't do that already!  There have been so many fics with the Pony multiverse and time falling to pieces that I'm having to work overtime keeping the entire local parallel brane structure from dissociating!

>>19685711968571 No. I meant the concept of the plot. I didn't mean it was exactly the same down to every last detail. you can take the concept of the Groundhog's Day movie and change it up to go from a comedy with Bill Murray, to this story. I believe this concept is called "The Butterfly Effect." Doesn't have to involve time-travel, but it likely can involve God wanting to screw with you out of boredom...unless he's really screwing with you so you can do things right when it needs to be.

(Joke) Alt. Title: ...We Came In? Isn't This Where...

And it goes 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and 'round and then it gets featured. Funny how these things work, eh?

I wanted to do something kinda like this. Another human in equestria story, but it ventures through several of the possible ways the mary sue could die and THEN it actually goes the normal route. Oh well. This proves to be much more interesting than my idea, anyways.

...There's got to be some scenario where if Twilight isn't genuinely shocked (or something) then it'll go a different path. She'd only get to go that path once.

...If there isn't one and there's still room for it, please do. Not that I have any sway over what you do, but it would be interesting to see what Twilight thinks about it.

>>19679961967996 Have you ever read the webcomic Goblins? The village witch names baby goblins with a prophecy about what will happen in thier life. So you get goblins named 'Dies Horribly', 'Saves a Fox' and of course 'Complains About Names'.

>>19687161968716

>>19695861969586

Yeah, agreed about the rating. Should have been teen from the get go especially considering some of the stuff I'm planning for chapter two

>>19686791968679

Sooner than you'd think, but not for the reasons you suspect.

>>19685711968571

One of these will happen, not saying which one though

>>19697081969708

In story? Celestia turned out to be evil and she can't trust anyone.

Meta explanation? Because I'm using that in chapter two.

>>19697321969732

Good guess

>>19689421968942

Fun Fact: A rejected title for this story was "Live and Let Twi"

>>19706141970614

Not to sound crazy, but the bumped up rating only makes me more excited.

In any case, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. I have a feeling things are just warming up.

     This shit is downright CRAZY!! (In the good way)

     Dude, I would never have thought of a plot as epic as this for my favorite pony, Twilight Sparkle. You sir have my attention.

     If I had a computer to read this, I would throw in a picture there, but nope. Stupid PS3.