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Looking back helps us remember how far we've come, and sometimes it even points our way forward.

A quick little love story to get us all ready for Valentines Day

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Eakin #1 · Feb 1st, 2013 · · ·

So I know I wrote in my blog post that I was taking a week off from writing. I guess I lied.

Well, no suggestions from me, I'm afraid (though we are somewhat out of my area of expertise). Other than to expect a deluge of ponies wanting to know who the mysterious pony is; and yes, I do notice you've deliberately left it almost completely open; in that it wouldn't be any of the major characters who Twilight would know, but it could be a pony of either gender (or even, if Twi was speaking more colloquially than specifically when she said "a pony like you", not necessarily even a pony at all, I guess.)

No obvious spelling/grammar errors I saw either, so there's that, i guess!

It does strike me as a very Twilight thing to be doing though...!

Ah, good ol' Valentines Day.
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The bane of my life.... Well not really!
But I prefer Tainted Love.

:ajsmug: Yes
:flutterrage: YES!!
:pinkiehappy: Yes
:rainbowkiss: Yes
:raritystarry: Yes
:twilightoops:
:trixieshiftright: Yes
:coolphoto: Yes
:eeyup: Eeyup
:derpytongue2: of course Twilight
:facehoof:

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Very open, very deliberate. I did notice that I got a little pushback when Twilight came out of the closet in Hard Reset so I've learned not to toy with people's head canon without having a very good reason. I did envision it being a pony rather than some other species.

2054819
You still have two weeks! Go get 'em!

First I thought you were talking about Spike and Twilight being together then I noticed it said pony.......damn:ajbemused: Oh well, very well written, as always and I very much enjoyed it....wonder who the pony was?:facehoof:

Part of me wants to (insert self as intended recipient) but the more rational side says to err on the side of whatever twiship is sailing the oceans of my mind at this moment. i like it, although I'm not one for romantic relations, (not much luck there anyways).
Rambling again, as I'm prone to do. good job and keep. it comin.:pinkiehappy::raritywink:

Wow. This is absolutely beautiful.
I'm at loss of words.

BR
BR #9 · Feb 1st, 2013 · · 2 ·

On a mechanical point of view, it was flawless. The sentences flowed smoothly, almost as if Twilight herself would be writing it. But I couldn't wrap my head around the open-ended point of it. It was a good story, it's just that it was an invitation for people to fit in their preferred ship, also known as pandering.

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I guess I can see where you're coming from. At the same time I don't think it works with any major Twilight ship. Both because Twilight pretty much doesn't consider them significant at the beginning and because having any major character suddenly be suicidal would be hugely depressing and out of character. And making it some new OC would just make it lame and people would be complaining about what a huge Mary Sue they were. So I decided that taking the focus off the other character and making it a story about Twilight falling/being in love was the stronger option. YMMV, I suppose

BR
BR #11 · Feb 1st, 2013 · · ·

2055392 Fair enough, I suppose that's one way to avoid angering others merely because of who Twilight falls in love with. Good story though, this deserves an upvote.

2054512
Dude or ma'amdude, you are some kind of MACHINE. Including Hard Reset, this makes, what, like 15,000 new written and edited words in three days?

As for the story itself:
Fie upon you and your misleading cover art. This is not a Twilight story. In my head, it will forever be Starswirl the Bearded's letter to Luna, in which he reminisces about that fateful night when he stopped her from becoming Nightmare Moon.

That bought Equestria another eight decades. She only fell into darkness after he finally died.

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12,000 in four days, actually, so I'm not quite that prolific. But this story took me less than two hours.

Your head will have to do some interesting contortions to justify him worrying about leaving him for "another mare"

2055973 Aha! Already anticipated that objection. :twilightsmile: Your actual line is "Then you’d leave me and find some beautiful mare" … clearly, it was common knowledge among court gossip at the time that the Lunar Princess was attracted to mares, which is why he was so surprised when she took him up on coffee and one of the reasons he got so neurotic about the possibility of her departure.

(I considered Clover x Luna, but the rest of the story fit too well with the Starswirl/Twilight parallels we see in your other works.)

2055987
Well played. Very well, your head canon is officially approved as "story compatible"

2055229
If allowing readers to draw their own conclusions was pandering, many of our greatest fictional works would be so. If anything, taking advantage of a specific pairing's fanbase would be more akin to pandering. This is merely leaving just enough to the reader's imagination.

I love it! You are on an excellent roll.

2055998
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Now to reinterpret Hard Reset as an allegory about Sixth Century diamond-dog diplomatic relations! :trollestia:

2055392
I'm going to sound stupid for asking this, but what is a Mary Sue? I've almost every story have a comment using the term.

2057034 It's a character that is perfect and has absolutely no character flaws. One-dementional and stupid.

2057034
People throw the phrase around pretty often, and they don't always mean the same thing but generally it's a character perceived to be getting undeserved treatment and be uninteresting dramatically speaking. It's often associated with authors who write wish fulfillment fics where a character who is a thinly veiled stand in for themselves come into the setting and immediately get everything the author wants. So an OC showing up and having Twilight immediately fall in love with him would be accused of that sort of thing, because the audience probably wouldn't find the character that compelling that quickly.

With this story I'm only asking people to stretch their belief far enough to cover the idea that there exists a pony such that Twilight would fall in love with them over a coffee date and enter a relationship. Since I'm not specifying anything about the pony in question it's not such a hard sell.

2057356
Ah, well then I'm glad to inform you that you did not create a Mary Sue. This was well written and it would be kind of hard to do that with a character you hardly introduce the reader to. Maybe if you hadn't shown that they had been talking to each other for a while. Maybe.

Eakin, have you told you what a glorious person you are recently?

2057630
Like four times in as many days

so... who was the recipient?

2058833
Who do YOU think it was?

2058836
oh so it's one of those things, eh? ... I love these kinds of stories :twilightsmile:

2055229 They're throwing pandas at us!
(http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S0ly60b42ig for those of you who do not get the reference) :twilightsmile:

I lovely letter. Well written, and captures Twilight very well.

Well done :twilightsmile:

BUT WHO WAS PONE? Ahhhhh....wonderful story :pinkiesmile:

2054851

How does anyone survive running around in this fandom, particularly here on FimFiction, without being comfortable with magical lesbian pony makeouts? I mean, really. :rainbowderp:

Did you know that you can actually date one of those to within a decade just by looking at the type of stitching?

NNNNNNEEEEERRRRRRD :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

I don’t believe in love at first sight. It took me nearly a whole two hours to fall for you, after all.

Don't blame it on the Ti-light, don't blame it on the Moon-dance, blame it on the boogie!

All the rest: KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! So much cuteness! So glorious! Sold, American!

Awww! Your Twilight is as perfect as ever, and this story is incredibly sweet. Thanks a ton for writing!

The recipient was...

YOU!

...nah, it was probably an OC.

I just admire the attention to avoid any give-away details to the identity of the recipient, to make sure to enclose their person in your own calculating mind. Though in all honesty it was certainly heart-warming, and also a bit adorkable, I loved the execution and overall writing of the letter. I always love the way writers execute their "letter" stories, it always warm me up inside, it's also a good thing since Winter is just around the corner.

[color=transparent]Also, Twilight, if I were to ever answer you question, no matter what happens... I couldn't

Was the recipiant that one royal guard guy

This was so sweet! Really lovely!:twilightsmile:

I've loved pretty much everything I've read of yours so far, and this is no exception. :twilightsmile: Looking forward to reading Hard Reset and its sequels in the near future!

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You read this BEFORE the Time Loop Trilogy? :twilightoops:

Wow. Oh, man. You, my friend are in for a hell of a ride :pinkiehappy:

My biggest regret about the TLT is that I never got to read it blind. Enjoy.:raritywink:

Your letterwriting-fu is indeed far greater than mine. Keeping this one close to my heart.

I turned my head around when I read the last few paragraphs. You got me, Eakin.

That was amazing.

So, who wrote this, twilight or her special somepony? Hmm... I must've missed something...

3794848
Twilight wrote it. The tapestry line should have been a dead giveaway.

3794944 welp I apologize for my lack of observation. Lol. Good read though. Jolly good show.

I was sent here on recommendation of Dr Wolf of the Brony Analysis community, and it was quite the pleasant surprise!

This short story hits just the right amount of sweetness, wit and nuance of character that it felt very much like something Twilight would have written! I take my hat of to you sir!! :twilightsmile:

2054512
You went back on your word! :flutterrage:
*reads fanfic*
All is forgiven. :twilightsmile:

Lovely fanfic. Interesting to have Twilight pop the question. But she's a progressive woman, isn't she?

3935326
I read along with him. His voice coupled with this letter was phenominal!

Kudos to the author on such a wonderful job!

3935326 Wow we're here for the same reason :pinkiehappy: Still I'm curious who is this "he"?

Very touching,
I had to skim through a second time, when I realized there was no identifying info of any kind.
It still tears me up thinking about it.

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