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Awwww, Chrysalis...
I suspect Equestria is going to need addiction counseling for pod fans before too long...
sure why but he - sure why, but he
ran-through - run-through
I don't think I want to around rich ponies on - I don't think I want to be/wait/sit around rich ponies only (I'm not confident what to suggest here. This was a little difficult to parse.)
Gel could get a sense - Gel could
get asenseBut we am the night - But we are the night
try and possess - try to possess
deeply for the pegasi - deeply for the pegasus
*****
It's interesting watching Gel develop as a character, whether he wishes to or not. Being out from under Chrysalis is working well for everyone. He has his work cut out for him, but the changelings could not hope for a better representative.
The reunion between Cherry and Sleek balances things out nicely with a dose of warmth and happiness at the end.
Don't worry too much about the lack of mature content, I'm here for the story first and foremost. Steamy scenes between lovers is just a bonus.
7067761 Thanks as always. In the past, I have set myself grueling requirements for porn within stories, one I had even written where two of every five pages was porn, without fail and without breaking the plot. But yeah, this story is a little more rigid than that one... and not so at the same time
7068565 Yes, calling this particular story 'rigid' does carry a certain amount of irony.
Queen Chrysalis the cry baby. my sides hurt. ~extra gentle hug
7160309 Well, to be fair, she was very immature in the show, so I carried that on with a dash of ruthlessness and the kind of megalomania only gained by being born a leader, brings.
Lets go with sitting room
Gel knew full well what would be within
1. Let's.
2. Just forgot your fullstop at the end.
Damn, the feels are still riding strong. I'm definitely enjoying the story and I correct nowadays out of habit.
I feel that there's a missing word in here.
hate?
Oh Chryssy *hugs* hopefully things will be better soon
7336079 She will return, when the pod opens.
Hope you are enjoying the story so far!
Interesting chapter! I did not have much feelings for Chrysalis one way or the other, but you made me actually care about her and care about the bad things she did too. Good job, I was not expecting this. looking forward to reading the rest.
7067761 Same sentiment regarding story, 'More story please sir, extra filling optional, not prerequisite.'
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7336201 When she's released later, need to set her up with Dan's Fluffle Puff to regulate her emotions. (providing you get his permission, he's a bit cranky some days, like his 'Dan vs' character) I think Dan (MixerMike622) would be OK with it, he's had a lot of his time taken up with big animation projects, more than he can devote to his askflufflepuff tumblr art work of late so there's an opening for some guest writing for his OC. Just a suggestion, could work well as a background character maybe?
Supongo que la vaina le dio una etifania