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It was Friday night and Twilight Sparkle was at home enjoying the night with a good book and comfortable lounging chair. That was of course until her friends dragged her away for a night of fun. Now its Saturday morning and she has a powerful hangover...And a wife?
Join Twilight as she goes on a quest to discover. What Did She Do Last Night?
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Off to a good start so far.
....okay you are the 3rd story...maybe 4th... that I've read...to pull off getting added to fave's as of the first chapter!
Your premise is fabulously fantastic, and I look forward to laughing loudly while rolling around on yonder floor.
...We really need a Luna emote.
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Oh you. And we do need a Luna emote
5051943 Does this pleases Trixie?
Oh this is going to be fun. I love how Trixie is completely okay with this. And she cooks, which I support because you can't live the traveling life for long without picking up basic skills.
A few missing words here and there and some tense inconsistencies, but otherwise good. Will follow.
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Mooncalf commented on my story?! I-I'm not worthy. Now I must make sure that your fav was not in vain. I will work hard to get this story to your divine standers. 
I'm SO not worthy
Another fab story by James Burton! As much as I hate same gender ships (just doesn't seem right in the cannon), I will fav and see what happens.
5052803 I'm just branching out and trying new things. A lot of people like this story. I WILL NOT let you all down!
Lets do this! Oh and thanks ButtonMash glad to see your still around.
5052829 likewise. So, what brought this story idea upon your head?
5052862 Well to tell you the truth. I have no idea. It just came into my head one day and here we are. Then again I have been reading some Twixie fics and tried to see if I could do something new.
5052862 If I had to take a guess, it would be the quest in Skyrim where the Dragonborn gets drunk, goes on an crazed adventure, get's a wife, and wakes up the next morning with no memory of what happened the previous night.
5052912 oh yeah, the quest to get the Sanguine Rose? Love that one!
Man this awesome, followed. BTW wouldn't trixie become twilight trixie
5052978 Well in the Hasbro toy line Trixie's last part of her name was Lulamoon. or something.
I have a feeling this is going to be fun
and I am looking forward to it.
. . . Well last Friday night in a nutshell.
I definitely want to see more. BUT. It is in dire need of editing. Verb tenses are all over the place, lots of missing commas, and a sentence doesn't necessarily end when the characters stop speaking:
"Moring Spike." Greeted Twilight.
should be
"Morning, Spike," greeted Twilight.
I would say to get some proofreaders and run stuff past them. Like I said, I want to know how we got here, what happened on what must have been a very wild night for Twi and the girls. As it stands, though, the errors in pretty much every paragraph are distracting, making for a very clunky read.
5053251 It shall be done.
Wow, those verb tenses. That's a little painful to read. HOWEVER, the premise and characterization so far are very good and I'm excited to read more.
5052728 ...
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...huh? Are you... taunting me?
Also, A Night To Remember was a hilarious quest, at least the first time. And until you realize that Sanguine's scheme to get you to live things up a little resulted in lots of people getting killed.
And then you realize 'getting lots of people killed' is standard procedure for the Daedra.
On another note, I believe that Twilight Sparkle's family are originally neighponese, and have reverse naming order. Her mother is called Twilight Velvet, after all. Thus they are members of the Twilight Clan. Who may or may not be ninjas.
So I guess Trixie might have changed her name to Twilight Trixie, or something. On the other hand, maybe Twilight agreed to take her name. She must have done something very right last night to make Trixie that happy.
You forgot--------GO to the market.
What happens in Las pegasus stays in Las Pegasus?
I sense The Hangover levels of shenanigans happened. This is gonna be good.
Funny stuff dude
5055174 Thank ya kindly
I
Hate
TRIXY!
I don't know why. But it is.
5055183 Eeyup happy to help
The same thing happened to Michael Caine in his youth. He went on a weekend-long bender with Peter O'Toole, and woke up in the apartment of 2 girls he'd never met before to find that he and O'Toole had been permanently banned from a local restaurant. They agreed that it was best if they never tried to figure out what really happened.
I like where this is going, i know the movie this is based off of, if it is based off of one that is, love it. 8/10 Friends Forever (referring to Twilight and Trixie :3) ╔═╦═╦╦═╦═╦═╦═╗╔═╦═╦═╦═╦╦╦═╦═╗
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5058303 Try adding a newline after the "(referring to Twilight and Trixie :3)". Otherwise the line doesn't break, and your text-art gets messed up.
You can see what I mean in this screenshot
If you want some honest criticism, JamesBurton, then...
I hear a lot of verb tense errors. Either that, or you're writing in a style i'm just not familiar with.
I like the beginning though. It should be interesting to hear how this proceeds.
5058802 Hmm, lets try it again, i thought i put a line :/.
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This is not how Fluttershy acts. She is the most wimpy character in the universe. The most you would get out of her would be a low pitched whine as she tried to hide in a tree. There is no possible way she would ever say something normal.
very good story. Love the charaterisations.
I have a feeling this is somewhat related to The Hangover
5058852 Thank you for the input. And please just call me James. I do plan to fix that problem.
I think we've all had mornings like this. Minus a spouse and a bag of money. I can't wait to read more.
Okay, who did they leave on the roof?
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
Or maybe she decided Twilight had chosen her own punishment
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Loved it. I think it was wonderfully written and has a great plot to it
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! THIS IS HILARIOUS! Definitely favoriting! OMG! I CAN'T STOP LAUGHING!!!
You know, a few shots of brandy and scotch made this story a lot more amusing, you've got my favorite
I like it, good start. Few punctual errors, but hey, I'm no expert. I hope to read more in future, thumbs up!
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I'm gonna be honest here, at first I thought this was related to one of my stories, The Mane 6 Visit A Strip Club, so I read it, and I've gotta say... I love it!
The whole idea of Trixie and Twilight being married is fucking great(spousal fights, inbound?), something with Celestia, and then A random bag full of bits?! You've got something way better than I do.
You can't ever be sure of people on the internet, so sorry about labeling you as a potential story plagiarizer. Please, continue the good work!
You used my ideas? Sweet! I guess you weren't being sarcastic, then.
Looking good so far. Some grammar mistakes, but nothing that distracts from the story.
I've Never can be a pretty fun game if played correctly. My favorite house rule is that, if only one person drinks, they have to tell the story about it. Obviously Rarity saw how to get the most out of the game; bring up sex as much as possible.
Looking forward to even more drunken hijinks.
5070235 Well they would've told some stories but they we're too wasted at that point. And the Twilight idea was too good to pass up. And no I wasn't being sarcastic, I just really loved you story and didn't expect you on mine.
Good start. Will keep an eye on it.
Have a like.
Well... like like the night was filled with beer, fear, and queer? Is that the right word? Idk... who cares!
Well, that explains what happened to Twilight's shirt. Anyway, so it was all Rainbow Dash's fault, big surprise, I hope once they figure out what happened Twilight slaps her. I'm also looking forward to Twilight saying something like, "the next time you girls ask me to go out with you instead of having a lovely night in with my books, don't be surprised if I tell you to buck off."