Gateway of the Eyes (First Draft)

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Senpai Slothy

Senpai Slothy #1 · Nov 20th, 2013 · 2 · 1 ·

This story, i like it

D_Ghost

D_Ghost #2 · Nov 22nd, 2013 · · 2 ·

Hurt human, BRING THE PINKY! A did odd that Trixe isn't speaking in the 3rd person.

Bryan Luna

Bryan Luna #3 · Jan 16th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Ok this the second time that I've seen someone refer to Fluttershy's cottage as "homely" which means
ugly,Fluttershy's cottage is homey which means comfortable.

APS

APS #4 · Jan 24th, 2014 · 3 · ·

3794809 www.thefreedictionary.com/homely

home•ly (ˈhoʊm li)
adj. -li•er, -li•est.
1. lacking in physical attractiveness; plain.
2. simple; unpretentious: homely food.
3. commonly seen or known; familiar.

MidnightFMare

MidnightFMare #5 · Feb 15th, 2014 · 2 · 1 ·

Parties, never saying "hey! It's a human! Gotta tell lyra!"

Truthseeker

Truthseeker #6 · May 25th, 2015 · 5 · 3 ·

And now we have bi-polar emotions from Fluttershy and our unnamed character.
'Hey I'm awake!'
'What's your name?'
'And now I'm crying!'

Seriously!? This is beyond bad. Downvote.

CyberneticBlackjack

CyberneticBlackjack #7 · Jun 17th, 2015 · 3 · ·

6014939 Again, I have to agree, much like in the first chapter. Also something I noticed, ponies don't swear..well they do, but not with human based swearing like Damn! It just doesn't make sense

Magical plane