All seemed normal at a fair being held in honor of Twilight becoming an alicorn, but then one of the Mane Six went missing in a terrible fire. Everything that could have gone wrong, did. But, that's what you can expect when a group of ponies attempts to overthrow the throne.
Prequel: Birthday Dash (read at your own risk, I know it's terribly written)
If you don't want to read it, then I'll quickly get you up to speed . . .
The day before the first chapter was Rainbow Dash's birthday, and Queen Chrysalis attempted to drain the life out of her by having her Changelings pose as her ponynapped Parents (Spectrum Dash and Firefly) for the purpose of eliminating the Elements of Harmony's power and enabling her to take the throne. In the final fight, Rainbow Dash gets her wing broken. Enjoy!
Sequel: Broken Feathers: Frozen North
Edited now so it should be pretty good.
Just wondering is this a soardash fic ?
also advice: join a group, you'll get noticed way more!
Good so far; interested to see where you take this.
Minor typo: "apperently".
2921191 Maybe.... My main idea was to have some tension between the two. But like I said, I still don't know where this story is going to end up.
I like this.
I like very much.
Solid plot... a few cracks in the foundation to a sudden rush in the middle... and few grammatic errors. ME LIKE!
For this chapeter in its current state;
9/10 Photo Finish's Purrfection
-NekoThaCat out-
2924974 Daw! Thank you. But like I said, I'm still working on this chapter and I hops to get it done soon, but I'm a slow writer... So hopefully what happens after this point will still hold your interest!
I love it when authors get "carried away" if it means i get more to read
*cough*everypony*cough*
Finished chapeter....
Same rating
2945003 Fixed.
I like where this is going
9/10 for this chapter
So, is this SoarinDash or PhantomDash
? (Personally, I would like PhantomDash more 
)
I have completed the cover. Tell me what ya guys think! Personally, I'm satisfied with it, but improvement idea's would be excellent!
You better update
Or else i will get the 5th Panzer army
3036108 The Third Army shall be waiting for you, Rommel...
But I'm working on it as fast as I can. Since school starts this week though, it may slow down, but then again, I write better when I'm in school. I'm already about a fifth of the way into the next chapter, and it looks like it'll be a doozie.
But seriously, I'm glad you like the story. I've had people tell me how bad my writing is and it becomes very discouraging and I begin to panic and stress out about length, and descriptions, and plot, blah blah blah.
But again, thanks.
(When I write, my mind goes crazy with ideas and I just can't get them out. An example is I've already got an idea for another story I'll write after this, hehehe)
3036771 You are only the second one to understand the meaning when i say 'the 5th panzer army'....
Are you also a World War geek?
3041637 Well, Post-WWI military in general. In my class I'm the 'military guy' that everyone goes to with questions.
And as a quick update, I'm pretty close to finishing the next chapter, my parents took my laptop so my writing has slowed since I'm on my phone. It'll be late tonight when it's done hopefully.
Yeah...
She was in the bard...
Ehehhehe....
xD
But... My 5th army is waiting for orders...
I like this chapter
Why did You have to go and make Soarin' the Bad Pony
!WHY!!!!!
3127248 well... I never said that Soarin ' was behind the 2x4, now did I? You'll just have to wait and see if he is bad or not.
3128682 But you kinda implied it, But still it's such a good story but for some reason i'm expecting a plot twist like a Shutter Island plot twist. Don't seem to fancy that Phantom guy, But what do i know i didn't write the story,You did.
3130512 well, luckily for you and everyone else who enjoyed this story, now that my school unblocked fimfiction I should be expecting to complete the next chapter sometime Sunday, but probably around Monday since it's a holiday and I'll have more time. Thank you for taking such an interest in the story though! :D
And as a side question, what do you mean when you say you don't 'fancy' Phantom?
3131410 I think he's kind shady
Love it
3152672
Gah! Thanks! Seeing how quickly the plot is picking up, I'm going to try to start making the chapters a little longer and work on my descriptive capabilities more. So hopefully, things will only improve. Glad you like it :D
Did you really killd Aj or are yah just trying to confuse us
? My mighty foreshadowing-power says "option 2" :3
Nice Chapter, like always! Altough i got one request: Could you include a little bit more "rainbow"
?
I knew it ~ !
MOAR
! (Why did you do let rainbow search help? She could have done ot alone 
...)
3161131 My original plan was to have her try, but realize she was out matched and run away. But this way I can add more drama in the next few chapters
You mean "house" right?
Also, why is all the text italicized after the train platform scene?
3181156 Fixed, and I accidentally left a start italicized command at the end of a paragraph. Thanks for telling me!
Hate this Chapter so much. GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!! Soarin's not a bad guy he's the good guy he's a Wonderbolt aren't they the good guys
3197464 If it's any consolation... the story isn't over
3197464 And in your defense, the story wasn't supposed to turn out like this this quickly... I kinda FUBAR'd it...
Originally the conspiracy was supposed to come out slowly over the course of the 7 day fair with multiple attempts on the lives of RD and her friends but... as you can tell.. it's still day one and all this information is out... lol. 
It'll be difficult to formulate a different ending, but I'm working on it, slowly, and I'm running into many many many many many many MANY errors...........
But I'm trying lol
3216644 Ok, But i still think Soarin' is to Happy Go lucky to kill RD's Friend's but you know but what do i know i'm probably just mad because he's my favorite pony. But GRRRRRRRR i'm not going to be happy until you give me an explanation on why he's a bad guy. SELF ADVERTISEMENT: Check Out my story!!!!!
3221121 Hehe, don't worry about Soarin' too much. Spoiler alert (should you figure it out): The ponies who act are not the ponies who think.
3222855 I FUCKING GET ITTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
3224747
Not sure if you actually figured it out, think you figured it out, or are just frustrated at something...
You put My name in the authors note, I now think You're 20% Cooler!!!!!!!!!!
Me like extreamly much.
Me love extreamly much...
There is no way to explain how much i like this.
So...
ME GUSTA
Awesome chapter
! (But... I expected rainbow to drop in the fair and tell everyone =O (Needs 120% moar rainbow 
!))
What should I say - Awesome Chapter, like always! Even if I'm still mad at you for not letting rainbow return to that damned house and free her friends
!
(Again, sorry for my bad english ^^')
WE NEED MORE!
Edit: Just saw that you put the story on hiatus... Why
?!
MOOOOARRR!!!
Pweatty pwease?
3242902 3241992 Once I finish the rewrite of Birthday Dash I'll begin work on the next chapter. Just hang in there
3242902>>3241992>>3226529 Birthday Dash has been completed, much to the apparent hatred of most people, so Broken Feathers is no longer on Hiatus! I have a busy weekend coming up with school activities and other things so I'll try to write as much as I can. Hopefully the next chapter, 'Arrival,' will be completed before October.
Writing time!
Never fear my fellows! I have figured out a way to save this story from a crappy ending, and all ties will but taken care of! Let the mayhem begin...
Just because I can:
Update!!! "Fist pumps"
3312145 I take it you like?