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Scootafail


People say that I'm great at writing, but I not really keen on writing. So I'm basically here to follow stories and stuff. I love reading.

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Rainbow Dash is an extraordinary pony, not only the bearer of the element of loyalty, but she is also the best friends with the newest princess, can do Sonic Rainbooms and a possible future Wonderbolt.
She really is a brave pony, kicking drangons in the face, standing up to Nightmare Moon, Discord, and all the other villains. But there is some things she can't take, when she finds herself developing feelings for a certain Wonderbolt things begins to go down hill. And the feelings isn't so easy to cope with when she now sees the Wonderbolts more and more often.

(I have had this story in my head for some weeks now, so why not write it down? I think this is going to be a long ride guys, in my head the story is really long. Ouch, it is going to take a long time to write it all down. XD Uh, I hope you enjoy it, if you find any mistakes, tell me. I check the text several times when I correct the grammar, but I have a tendency to miss a lot of typos.)

Update: Sorry, but I think I'm going to cancel this story. I simply don't have the time and devotion to finish a story like this. I'm way more focused on my art and writing is just something I do once in a while. I'll maybe write some one-shots in the future, but not long stories like this. I'm no writer and I've never been. Sorry for never updating you guys who have been reading this. I hate doing this as it feels like I'm breaking a promise, but I gotta do what I gotta do. Can't just leave you all waiting for a new chapter that is never going to come. I apologize for not being able to produce said story and giving you guys false expectations. I believed I would be able to write a long story like this, but as seen, that is not the case.
For all of you who followed me for this story, feel free to unfollow. What's the point in following me when the purpose is gone? Heh... Yeah. That is all. Sorry guys. :ajsleepy:

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 40 )

It's awesome! Keep up with the writing! :pinkiehappy: Can't wait for the next chapter! :pinkiecrazy:

Write. Next. Chapter... NOOOOOWWWW! :flutterrage:

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Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:
I'm working on the next chapter right now, it will be good. :twilightsmile:

4023063 u better...or I kill u :pinkiecrazy:
No literally...I can hack computers and I find ur address :trollestia:

Comment posted by PoisonedIvy deleted Mar 15th, 2014

Very nice. Some quick suggestions though:

1-use apostrophes for thoughts. Example-'I honestly don't know why I'm feeling this way,' Rainbow Dash thought to herself. (Quote unrelated to story). It clears things up a little

2-I wouldn't say "x sounds came from that mare". What would be smoother would say "'Or mares,' Rarity winked at Rainbow, giggling slightly." Just a suggestion

3-No need to strike through swear words. It's rated teen for that reason.


Other than that, great story. Have my like.

Stay Awesome

RDD

pretty good so far keep up the good work:pinkiehappy:

This was a very cute chapter...I usually like action, very dramatic chapters :rainbowlaugh:
But I also LOVE bonding chapters...sooo cute °_° :twilightsmile:

So, ya...good job mate :ajsmug:

4105947 and THAT PIC! DEM FEELS.... ;_;

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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :D

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who COULDNT! :0 xD

Are you still posting

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Yes, but I have been busy. I'll try to get the next chapter up as soon as I possibly can. :twilightsheepish:

Yay thanks I really like this story

cool chapter!:pinkiehappy: few spelling mistakes but over all really good!:pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! :twilightsmile:
Yeah, I knew it was going to be some mistakes here and there, it ain't easy being my own editor, especially since english isn't my native language. :rainbowwild:
When the story is done, I shall remember to go over the whole thing and fix my mistakes. :twilightblush:

4579103 its cool that you are your own editor!:pinkiehappy: i am as well!:pinkiehappy:

t really cool that your writing in English and it isn't your first language!:pinkiehappy:
if you don't mind me asking what is your first language?:derpyderp2:

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I don't mind at all. :twilightsmile: My first language is Norwegian.

It's impressive that your writing so well, not even in your first language I wouldn't have guessed that was what you were doing if you hadn't said anything. Anyways good chapter.

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Thank you! :pinkiehappy:
I guess it's because I spend so much time on the internet, english is my only means of communication here, so I write tons of english when talking to people. Not to mention I'm studying the language too. I almost know more english words than norwegian. :derpytongue2:

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Thank you! :rainbowkiss:
Well, I guess writing isn't for everyone, I think it doesn't matter what your first language is, either you are good at it or you are not. Everyone has different skills and talents after all. :twilightsmile:

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It's amazing that English isn't you native language since your writing an English story! I'm my own editor as well :raritywink:. Update soon though!

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Thank you!
Oh, sorry, I have been so focused on my art lately, I haven't had time to write so much. :twilightsheepish: I'll try to update soon.

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No rush though, take all the time you need!:pinkiehappy:

Cant wait for the next chepter!
But, i dont rush u, take all the time u need!!

I used to think about pie when I woke up every day of boot camp.

Rainbow Dash sat up and removed sweat from her forehead. “Why am I thinking about pie?”

Why do we think about pie? That is the question of the universe. What makes the ultimate question pie? What is pie? Why do our brains function as pie? Is pie the answer to everything? Do we seek pie only for its significant values of knowledge? Pie, that is the question. Why pie?

You may want to research how to properly use the word "whom".
But great story nonetheless! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you!
Yeah, when I go back reading these chapters I see so many grammatical errors and sentences that could have been written better. :twilightsheepish: Ah well, it ain't easy being a non native english speaker and your own editor. Now though, I have a friend who's a great editor and he's more than willing to edit for me, so in the future chapters I'll avoid most mistakes. :twilightsmile:

NUUUU. It's been cancelled! I'm late to find things out, lol. :derpytongue2:

*Cries*

Cancelled?

But you're so good at writing!

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