As Earth and Equestria are drawn closer together, Gatekeepers connecting to their other-world counterpart start to appear. This is the story of Rex, bound to Chrysalis as a Gatekeeper, and his quest for survival as a changeling on Earth.
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Maybe over did it, but I mean, it's new, its different, it's not of this world. So bad reactions to suprises are bound to happen.
I think Nick's reaction is warranted enough. Will is now something so alien his friend deserves the right to panic. How he reacts when he calms down (if you let him) is up to you.
That being said, this chapter really could have been done better, even if it gets the job done. Good plot points, but Catherine in particular needs some real characterization. I mean, just look at her in this chapter. Is this really how she is? Unless you plan on offing her soon to show how Will has lost himself, though that would have more impact if she where a bit more fleshed out.
Other than that you just need to be a bit more careful with the final product. I noticed a few double words/phrases in here. Like this one...
While amusing, you should fix this.
Also, yes this story strangely doesn't always appear at the top of the unread favorites, but it still shows up in the feed just fine.
I hate it when i fail to realize that i failed to realize.
I think after he explained his childhood secrets Nick should have calmed down/believed him or at least lied to him saying he believed.
when you say it doesn't display for me its the opposite because i have about four stories with no new updates that are in my updated favorites section
Ah, yes. The Noodle Incident. I had a similar experience with mashed potatoes. Those were the good days...
2647478 I think they deserve more. But do whatever floats your boat.
Yea... sure... go antagonize the one who wields magic... fool.
2652276 Obviously this will not end well. Do you agree?
Well, Will just crossed the moral event horizon.
I could maybe understand attacking people he doesn't know, maybe. But this?...Too far.
Get an account people!!!
Woah will no that's wrong