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Sounds rather...
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Kinky
It's well written and all, but really not my cup of tea for content. So...thumbs up for being well done, but not in my favorites
You should try to get someone to edit this, I'm not sure if the downthumbs are from it being a rapefic or because there are several grammatical errors within the writing.
Very well written. Just a few minor errors, but the writing is top-notch acemeat.
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Lawdy, not that video again...
As for the story, there were a few grammar errors here and there, to be expected.
But a second chapter to give a little ending would give this a few more stars.
As far as down votes go, I'd bet those people just don't like rapefics.
Honestly, with him being a vet, I'd expected this to go much darker places. Which it still could, of course.
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Feel free to tell me where they are and I'll fix them. It is, unfortunately, not easy to get an editor :). (At least not for fics with this kind of content!)
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Glad you liked it!
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Really? I think the ambiguous ending works rather well here :). Not to mention that a conclusive ending would make it harder to continue in case it got popular. Not that that looks very likely!
Still, feel free to point out the errors in the story. English isn't my native language, so I have a somewhat hard time spotting them myself.
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Hah! Nope. No gore from me xD.
2134705 an ambiguous ending does work, and it does leave this open to a follow up chapter if people want it, but personally, i would like to see an ending to this. or at least a second chapter. This was actually really good (despite the fact that its rape, which isnt necessarily always that bad), but that hanging ending is what killed it for me! I wanna know what happens. Aside from the few grammer errors, it really was good.
also, yeah, all those down votes are probably because its a rape-fic. people dont even bother giving stories like this a chance most of the time. They just go "or, rape fic. DOWNVOTE! Let's see what else is up."
I would really like to see an ending to this, or at least a second chapter though. but its really entirely up to you. Any way it goes, i still liked the story.
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If you want to know what would happen in a potential second chapter, feel free to give me a PM. I only have a vague outline of it, but if you don't mind potential spoilers, I don't mind sharing :).
2135156 ACK! NON! NO SPOILERS! keep it a surprise! i hate spoilers! XD
I would much like to see an ending to this as well. Good story, but you might wanna fix your spelling
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Any errors you point out will be fixed!
If they're still there, it's because I didn't notice them the previous three times I've read through the story, and I likely won't notice them on a fourth run! :)
Oh god. Jack?
As in Jack Reacts, Jack?
If so, you are a horrible person, and I hope Jack never sees this. If not, never mind.
Good story by the way.
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I have no idea who that is xD. But sure, if he wants it dedicated to him, I guess I can do that!
Glad you liked it :).
Bravo sir!! I must admit that while rape isn't my thing to read this was rather well done. The conflicted emotions coming from both sides leads on very well. I can't how ever bring myself to hate the human. It was a deed done in desire, want, lust, an act of passion, though while dastardly, bastardly, and over all wrong. I feel sorry, pity for the lost human.
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Oh, he wouldn't want that. He's a youtube commentater who reacts to pony stuff and is a Applejack enthusiast. He's asexual and gets physically disgusted by sexual stuff, so people keep getting him to react to certain stuff (Princess Molestia, some of Tiarawhy's youtube animations, he even tried to play through Banned From Equestria) and thats gotten him some popularity on youtube and 4chan.
I thought this might have been another attempt to poke fun at him. Glad to know I was wrong.
I like this story a lot. It is not senseless rape and has conflict on both ends. I can't help but notice that its marked complete? I hope there's another chapter I need closure... This could go several different ways and it kills me a little bit inside to not know. Thumbs up + tracking.
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Happy to hear that you enjoyed it! It seems you perceived it just the way it was intended as well :).
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I usually don't watch those " x reacts to y " videos, hehe. The name was chosen on random. I just thought "Jack is a good enough name for him."
Ain't coincidences funny?
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I have plenty of other projects in the line, all my stories are based on requests. This one already got about twice as long as I had intended :). I do have ideas for a second chapter though, but I have no idea when I'd get around to writing it, or if this story gets popular enough to warrant it.
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This feature worthy, hopefully it gets in there, a chapter two would be nice. A continuation of where you left off, how applejack would intitialy react, would she tell Big Mac, go to Granny Smith, or probably the most surprising, to both jack and herself, say nothing. Oh man I want an update!!
I really do hope to see another chapter come out of this, espically since aj is confused on how she feels about it.
Never know, it might even get romantic?
How about another chapter where another human comes around, and does the romancing the right and non-rapey way. When he hears what Jacks done he goes apeshit and proceeds to kick his ass.
Alternate story jack doesn't rape her he still binds her but stops apologizes and leaves.
2138842 http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=M9hKFuRi97U#t=12s
WELL THAT WAS DIFFERENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THEIR MUST BE MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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The window for that have already come and gone :). Unless you know a way to lure about a thousand potential readers here all at once, haha.
Still, glad you enjoyed it!
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You never know ;).
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Haha, yeah, that's not going to happen. Sorry!
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That would make the story end at the halfway point and he'd get fired instantly. Not sure that makes for a better story ;).
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Well! You're certainly enthusiastic.
Glad you enjoyed it :).
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But really this needs another chapter! It left on too much of a vague note. I could understand of this was written for the sake of clop, then it would be fine, was this written for the sake of clop?
Nope, unfortunately I don't.
I would love to see another chapter of this
I read over some of the other comments and though I am not a professional editor. If you want me too, I can reread your story and point out any grammar mistakes I see, while reading I only noticed a few though.
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More or less, yes, it was written for the sake of clop. My stories on this account are pretty much pure requests. Someone requested a "Rape AJ, anal" story, and I delivered one.
Mind you, that doesn't mean I can't take the request seriously and I do try to put actual effort into it. This one I managed to get plenty of ideas for that I could work with, enough to easily add another equally long chapter just dealing with what came after. But for now, I think I'd rather try out something else.
On that note, feel free to make a request and I might add it to my list :).
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I'd love it if you did!
I always encourage criticism, either on my grammar or on the story itself :).
you defidently should write more of this or at least another like it. this catagory is so hot to read about. peace.
2143031 Ok
I'll reread it soon and get back to you.
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Awesome! :)
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You don't want to know where that thing have been :P.
I guess if you want a sequel that bad, you'll have to spread the word that the story is awesome so that it'd be worthwhile for me to continue it ;).
Well I would REALLY love to read the second chapter, "if" you do decide to write one more that is.
My 11 minutes of reading this I was
The guy's name is Jack...
...I watch Jack Reacts...
...well FUCK!
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Pure coincidence :).
2165840 WELL THANK CELESTIA
Another chapter.... NOW!!! I will come to your house and make/eat a sandwich if you don't!
Moar please.
2147181 I seriously think that you made an amazing story here. Even though it was a clop. The idea is not used that much because it is hard to get a large following of. I could make a great second chapter and have so many options on what to do. If you just won't make a second chapter though I am requesting if you could send me the plot and details of whatever you have so far for chapter 2. So I know how this story ends. If you will continue this soon then tell me. I am going to read and want others to read it. Rape plus love is what sets this story apart from many and that makes it special.
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I do have a significant outline for chapter two written, so I know exactly what it will contain. It'll probably not be done any time soon however, since I have another story to finish writing first.
As for love... Hmm. Well, I'm not going to spoil anything! If you do want spoilers, I can send you the outline, but I'm glad you liked the story! I tried to make something that had at least slightly more "real" emotions than your average rape story. (And let me tell you, the research for this story was Not fun!)
2537656 I appreciate all the work you did to make this more real of a story. No rush I'll come back later and ask again like I did this time to let you know I still want a chapter 2 released. Hope your other story is going well and you get plenty of views and likes. Can't wait for updates. I will get emailed as soon as you publish chapter 2 and be the first reader hopefully. Peace dude.
Glad to see you still plan on expanding on the plot. Can't wait for chapter 2.
Good
Hey
A while back I asked you if you wanted me to check your story for grammar errors. I got a bit distracted though and lost track of time. ( Due to a lot of emotional stress at the time)
But I'm ok now and was wondering if you still wanted me to look over you story for you and if so where would you want me to post any grammar mistakes I may find?
I'd love to see another chapter of this.
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*coughs* This was posted three months ago? My, time does fly past!
Sure, be my guest. I'd love it if you want to look over it for errors. Who knows, it might even inspire me to write some more!
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In due time my friend, in due time!
I do have an outline for chapter two somewhere. Just got to find it again. And find the time to actually sit down and write it. That might be harder! xD
Have you gotten anymore done with a second chapter of this?