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Story teller at heart. I like to examine the unusual. I spend too much time being 'reasonable'. I write to play, and hope others enjoy the results.
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If you have no chance of defeating them in a "fair" fight, then the fight isn't really fair.
I will do the needful:
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Because it's you writing it, I was expecting him to consider another option: Five ascended and Twilight remaining a unicorn.
>nuremberg judges deem Poochie's grand punishment to be: magic kindergarten
Yeah she got off too easy. Again. I'd rather have given her a horn that doesn't cast spells, just takes the intended spell and redistributes the mana to nearby recipients. So she could never again cast a spell for herself, only bolster others. Like an anti-Tirek switched to blow instead of suck.
Or one that can do nothing but spray out the text, "Not real communism."
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I might do that to him, but he's still expecting canon.
As for Mao-Tse pony, she got off extremely lightly in the show too.
Who?
I realize she was referenced at the end of the last chapter, but I thought it might have been a new clone, to prove to Celestia what the Pond does, AND that they have some sentience to them. Maybe even as an in-your-face example of his PoW discussion.
But I don't remember Clear Brook or Balustrade mentioning rock farming like they actually were raised doing it, so now I'm lost. I REALLY don't see a Pinkie staying, or being allowed to, around Grey Rock to guard him.
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Shake Shale is the duplicate and the guard assigned to the Apple farm.
Grey being in a relationship with Nightmare and Celestia really feels unwholesome and forced, Applejack/Grey OTP.
That's the end? It feels still so unhappy to me. There's still this stupid game of constant social chess, and the constant feeling like he is still at the bottim of rhe social totem pole and still condemned for being Nightmare's host and potentially evil. Plus others feeling like their forcing rhemselves into intimacy with him and he just accepts it. I was hoping that at some point e eryo w woukd leace him alone and stop trying to get everything thay want from his hide.
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He admits he is unhealthy, and the relationship between him and Nightmare is unhealthy. So he has started healing and transitioning to a healthier expression of care and love, now he has to bring Nightmare to a more healthy mindset.
Celestia doesn't trust Nightmare and vice versa, so the social games let them fight without harming Gray Rock.
He wants and needs the attention, changing it to a more appropriate form is what he's working on. Applejack is the one doing that. Untangling the mess is going to take time.
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That's good, I assume there will be a third story then. Though one thing that concerns me is that part of that makes me feel like its will end how the "Drawn With" series did. Good story, ended with protagonist apparently giving up and letting someone he didn't want inti his life become his new wife because she needs/wants it so badly he has ti say yes qnd love her, despute her not actually being responsible and fixing things. Maybe its just me, but I feel a strange parallel with that story here.
This story deserves more attention
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In Drawn, there's an important factor. Celestia did not come in from a position of strength, she came in from a position of helplessness and need. She also required Discord to act as a gateway. She needed what Klein's family knew, and ONLY if Discord was acting as safeguard was she permitted to attend `classes`. So initially she was simply a tutor to the kids and a student of Klein's family dynamics, and slowly proved that unlike Luna and Twilight, she could be trusted and her word was good. She also enjoyed being treated as subordinate and had to earn her place, rather than having the crown entitling her to the pedestal Luna and Twilight place her on.
In Gray Rock, the important factor is the character is a young man, and Celestia, Nightmare and Applejack are gorgeous. The closest women in his experience come to looking like them are in comic books, superheroes for Applejack and Celestia, and hentai comics for Nightmare. So he wants the relationships. Beyond the sexual, none of them have abused him, he and Applejack might rough house but it's reciprocal and friendly. Nightmare and Celestia tease, but they once they realize there are places he's sensitive Celestia leaves them alone, and Nightmare uses them specifically so he gets physically violent but this desensitizes him to them.
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That's kinda what I'm getting at. The verbal/social chess is entertaining between the characters, but when it outmaneuvers the reader it undermines everything. You say X, but when I read it the text appears to say Y. Drawn was good, but when I look again at the ending by all appearances instead of Klien getting his happy ending he gives up and lets Celestia have whatever she wants from him and his life, because she wants and needs it so much he can't not let her.
I know it seem convoluted and confusing, that's why I'm hoping you avoid that. Not specifically the outcome, but how it comes about qnd hiw they react being apparently different from what you the author say is happening, because it puts an unhappy unsatisfying end to a good story.
I binged on both Grey Rock stories, they were quite ... fascinating for me. The insight into a poor man who knows that he's screwed up and is slowly trying to help himself alongside the ponies he trusts was a good read.
Thanks for writing these works. :)
ANYONE going into a fight of any kind thinking it should be a fair fight, has already lost. Only someone woefully nieve would ever go into a fight without using any and all dirty tricks and tactics to come out the victor.
Ah, dazzle paint.
https://www.smithsonianmag.com/history/when-british-wanted-camouflage-their-warships-they-made-them-dazzle-180958657/
Twilight will get it right someday... right?