An alcoholic gives up on his 25th birthday and turns into a pony. Now she's just trying to get home.
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Well, this sounds like the ideal place for a bunch of ponies to hide from the world as long as necessary! And that distillery could prove both a challenge and an opportunity for Berry to find the thin line between her addiction and whatever her cutie mark's about...
As for the revelation, maybe it was processed a little quickly here, but clearly it's not received the same way by everypony, and I'm curious to see how this new knowledge will impact the characters down the line.
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Hmm. Perhaps it was a bit fast? I appreciate that, I really do. I think her crying foal caused a bit of a reaction out of her. There also seems to be plenty of time now to reflect on things that have happened in this new light...
Edit: Yeah I reread this. I definitely rushed that a bit. Damn.
Also it just now occurred to me that you're Alsey! I haven't gotten to reading A Prench Tale yet but I was meaning too! I see now you're still working on it. That's good. I was really excited to see a new one come out this year. I gave me hope there was still interest in mine! The length of the chapters and the uncertainty of its completion status made me hesitate to start on it. But I see now you're quite active still. Definitely going on the To Read list then!
Huzzah! A new chapter! Carrots certainly seems interesting, though it’s always a wonder how long their sanctuary will last. Also! Earth ponies really do seem to get the short end of the stick in the show. Some of us just have “alternative” headcanon about it to keep it even. Regular writing can be a challenge. Glad to see you’re keeping at it!
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I wouldn't say it's rushed per se. After all it's logical that being faced with all the facts, especially the poem itself, would make it all click. And it's understandable that Ruby's reaction would impact her so strongly, and quickly processing the reality of the situation is definitely coherent with this! It may be fast, but it's both logical and in character.
You've done a really great job so far, so I'm quite confident you'll explore the meaningful consequences of that revelation for Berry's bunch!
I didn't like the original five score story so I was a little skeptical, but damn... I'm glad I gave this a read, because this was really good. The writing is high-quality, the dialogue feels very natural, and the characters are pretty believable and interesting. I think the chapters with Nathan was particularly good, the entire thing was uncomfortable and awkward in a really good way and you did a good job in setting up what was going to happen. This really deserves more attention
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Thank you! This means a lot for me to hear!
I'm so glad to hear people are liking Berry Punch's story so far!
I feared writing this my dialogue was too slow and awkward, because dialogue in stories always seem snappier and more to the point. But people don't talk like that, do they?
I'm really surprised just how well people took to Nathan despite everything. Or even because of everything.
Thank you for giving it a chance despite what it had going against it. I promise there's more coming! I have outlines and plot points and resolutions and all that fun stuff. And a few great surprises left, I think!
I'd suggest giving her a piece of candied ginger before any trip.
I hate that I laughed at this. but I'm totally stealing this joke.
I know that feeling well. I grew up in a "town" of under 1k, and there wasn't a single traffic light in the entire place, let alone any buildings taller than the occasional barn silo. You know you are from a podunk place when the high school had a dedicated "ride your John Deer to school" special day in the fall, and then the winter equivalent that was "ride your snowmobile to school" day.
Not a whole lot to do out in the sticks, but it is a great spot for doomsday preppers, I'll give you that.
Great little detail! It's one of those things that would be obvious to a sentient pony trying to maintain their dignity and cleanliness indoors, but also something that most humans would never think of. Humans taking off their shoes is so second nature that the thought of having to wash your hooves everytime you come indoors is something most people would never consider. Especially because it's never even mentioned or ever brought up in the show at all. Hooves are always just clean with no explanation! But they wouldn't be in reality, so nice addition!
Who's a silly pony?
You're a silly pony!
Who is?
You is!
Carrot Top!
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"Do you ever include a reference in a scene that would ruin the scene if the reader got it?"
It's worth it everytime, no question.
I feel bad for laughing, but that's just so awkward that poor guy. I kinda hope he stays around for the entire fic just to keep being that third wheel.
"We saved Equestria! And it was all thanks to everypony who helped! ....and also Chad was there"
Huh, I never actually made that connection before. It does make sense though! I had assumed she was intentionally trying to help Twilight by sending back all the lessons (and/or Celestia just found it hilarious to torture Spike by sending an endless stream of messages to vomit out).
But Celestia being Discorded and reversing the pattern of receiving letters makes a lot of sense. That would also give that episode of the show some clever subtext about how Discord actually brought upon his own destruction by discording Celestia which lead to Twilight recovering, etc.
...and also Chad was there
Everything's better with The Doctor. There was a lot of important plot advancement this chapter, but I'm mainly thinking about how Derpy and the Doctor's first thought after being turned back into a pony was "time for an epic adventure across London!"
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Ah, a fellow small town person... my hometown has 1200 people; we still technically have a law against "modern farm equipment" that includes the word "newfangled." Everyone is old and our post office closes at 2 PM. I love it.
I'm glad Derpy and the Doctor are doing well <3
That aside, I always love the reveal! It's with family this time, so that's good at least. It's so heartwarming to see Berry use her care for Ruby as an anchor through the chaos.
As a side note, it will never not bother me that the stupid Five Score poem doesn't have a continuous rhythm and is full of slant rhymes. Fortunately, Discord made it, so it seems in-character.