When a college brony on a camping trip makes a wish on a shooting star, it turns out far differently than expected. Now this man turned dragon will find the there is much more to the world than the land of Equestria.
YEP YES GOOD CONTINUE NOW YEP
WEEEEELEP of very few gramatical errors i love its
stop doing other things and keep writing this one -FIRST-
This is getting interesting but you should probably put the alternate reality tag on this to keep things clear.
I got the account for 5 minutes just to tell you [/ b] ": yay: and s amazing [/ i] [/ b]: yay:"
and the text are a bit short, but the story is well under way, although I did not like that change history
bone that could be found in the woods after he learned his lesson spike and found them: pinkiehappy: as
with death rather modify network history: derpyderp1:. sangiento detail just for that I really like [/ i] ( and he speaks with spike, girls and are based
bolando (drake knows too, that's for history fome NO MYSTERY: fluttercry: [/ b])) but everything else is "amazing"
"awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "awesome" "amazing"
Postscript: use google translator to read your text and make the post
Awesome story so far! whens a new chapter coming out?
Chapter Four is typed, now it needs to be proof read and checked over hopefully will be out either tomorrow night or Sunday evening.
this story i love its ..... seems slightly rushed i think could be a wee bit better with a little more description besides from minor errors it was Perfect!!! now ..... MAKE MOAR
I like the story
Where did you get the art, did you make it?? It's very good anyway
Awesome so far! i do i agree with omega-ze-wargod it is a bit rushed. and any way MOAR!
YESSSS THE DOMINATION SHALL COMENCE!!!!!
Do you have a proofreader? im just wonedring. you missed quite a lot of ?'s and replaced them with , and . (im lazy) otherwise pretty awesome.
So. Does need work like, say, you try to breath underwater and then you'll get gills? Or maybe if they try to do unicorn magic really hard they will grow a dragon horn/horns that will let them do it?
Woo Hoo! New chapter
>>12813551281355 Based on how I see it trying to breath underwater would send the message that the dragon needed a larger lung capacity rather than gills, They still follow stereotypical dragon physiology for the most part, its just something from the past has really messed up their growth and development. Same goes for the magic, although trying to do different things with magic may lead to different kinds of fires and breath abilities, hadn't consider for it much until your comment.
>>12787161278716 I have some one who proofread the other chapters, but they were busy with RL stuff and couldn't proof the most recent one. Gave it a go at trying to catch everything myself.
>>13053501305350 Ah i see. I was thinking that if a dragon could grow wings by way of need then they could grow gills in the same reasoning.then again i'm not 100% sure if need is what makes the wings grow. Then again, when it comes to something as amazingly complex as individual evolution you could take it as far as you could ever imagine. Either way I find the story very entertaining so far and I am eager to see how the 'need and greed' system works in greater detail.
Just a fix to the chapter name, and some edits, next chapter is on proofreading stage though, will hopefully be out soon.
i simply LOVE THIS STORY OMGSHWTFBBQ
*ahem* well anyways, this story is actually quite amazing and I like it quite a bit.
On an unrelated note, FIRST
and I claim the place as first for the pyro. You never know if its okay to find it attractive..... or not... *maniacal laughing with creepy music and stuff*
UPDATE TIME WHOO HOOO .... I love this soo much keep it up
'till he gives up,’ Spike though ...' * thought
The only mistake i spotted :D
anyways a really good chapter!
>>13995141399514 Thank you Vorago Everto, has been fixed.
>>14000331400033 youre welcome :D
Also expect to see a pair of inventive ponies with a sweet ride appear in the next chapter. Free cookie and hugs from pinkie for however can guess how it is.
10 bits say its those two guys who looked like barbers whos name i cannot recall at all but they tried to take applehacks barn
Dont forget tye changelings underground hive in the wastelands
>>15362661536266flim and flam
Do i get a cookie?
I like what I see so far, Your work is quite good
Thank you for the the compliment. This is my first fanfic, and I have plenty planned. I just hope I can keep improving as I get further along so that everyone continues to enjoy it.
flim 'n flam bro's on their super squeezy 6000 :D :D :D
Hmmm, I'm interested in the whole 'build an empire' theme, but I am afraid that this story will not update at a steady rate, which causes focusing problems for me. Thumbs for you regardless.
>>15362251536225 Flam Flimflam and Flim Flimflam
>>15430291543029 I agree with you about the update pace and wish I could maintain a steady one, but sometimes life throws everything it can at you. I am working on it though.
I like this story but please try to not make Drake into some kind of gary Stu when he increases in power and experience as a dragon.
Oh and before i forget it Season 3 premiere was GAKtacular even if Sombra was a bit flat as a villan.
LOVE IT KEEP IT UP
aawwww yeeaahhhh, I like
FUCK YEAH KILL KILL KIIIIIIILLLLLL
AWSOME!! make more soon
Jekyll and Hyde
You keep writing "and" instead of "an", which should be easy to fix :)
You seem stuck using human tactics as your reference, diamond dogs are tunnelers and griffins can fly yet they fight like regular humans? I would have expected the griffins to fight more like Mongolian horse archers or something similar, using false retreats and ranged weapons while the diamond dogs would probably use pitfalls and hit and run tactics like using half their force to pull the griffins from their camp while the rest attacked the camp from underground, taking hostages that could then be used to force the griffins to surrender. I could go on but I think you get my point.
>>18257211825721 The Griffins would normally use tactics like that but they couldn't because that would have left their camp exposed. As far as the dogs being above ground I am going with the mountain nearby made to ground to hard to tunnel through with that many dogs effectively. I will keep what you said in mind for future stuff that will happen though, Thanks for the feedback.
>>18334071833407 I second this motion.
Love this story!
Elsewhere at a meeting of the Convention of Entities Beyond the Comprehension of Corporeal Beings...
MEANWHILE AT THE LEGION OF DOOM!