Wandering Sunrise remembers Equestria as it once was: a land of harmony, broken by strife. She was sealed in a Stable-Tec stasis pod the day the Megaspells hit... and she wakes up in a pool of water, surrounded by strangers.
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Nice work as always! Sunrise carse for Nyota, just as he does for her. Harm only one haor on him and you get to know her.
No to drag but shouldn't that "my hoof"? Or has Sunrise a secret human agenda? But I love how you ponyfied the HK5!
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remember she has tail trick and it has been holding the detonators.
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Ah, right. I thought she did that with her hoof, not the tail.
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Pink was holding the detonators for her.
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Ah, right.
Congrats on finishing Act 3!
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Was it good? Better or worse than the live stream version? TO get to this point?
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To be honest with you, it’s been a little while since I’ve watched the stream version, but I know roughly where it is, so I can go back later to compare them.
Talk about having a blast...
I'm impressed, Fiaura. That was something!
Sergeant Dunken's special blend? Yes, I like it too, but I think Corporal K's hazelnut is better...
Ok.....done! Wow! That battle sequence was very well done! Again..nothing to report. This chapter was clean and the reading was effortless! I will say it again......Well done!
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Corporal K's Hazelnut; I'll have to use that later.
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Fair.
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I'm glad the battle was well done; I wanted the feeling of something that was pitched on a knife edge that could go either way while still capturing the brutality of WW1 style trench warfare with ponies and magic involved.
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It turns out it is! But that is for later ;)
Man Breakfast Blend really put up a fight. That last move Sunrise made was epic. I couldn’t help but think of the scene from Mad Max: Fury Road when Furiosa said right to Immortan Joe, “Remember me,” just before landing the killing move. Very nicely done.
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Yays! *hugs* Glad I nailed it for you guys.
Epic chapter, btw when i read about the size and equipment of that army i honestly expected tpk instead both Sunrise And the rest of the party survived. My Respect to the players for somehow pulling it off (insert salute emoji)
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It was extremely touch and go.
Sunrise's armor was degrading quickly and there was a point where we thought everyone would die.
Then well, the Goddess Appeared to lead personally and we took advantage.
Considering how many times it happened over the elapsed 2 minutes prior, I'd say it would be fair game
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You know, gotta insert some comedy relief during epic battles just once or twice.
9778211 The fights are too one-sided for me to get the vibe.
11874784 What tone are you aiming for, WW1 or lighthearted? You know using both makes neither of them work. The tone of the story shifting suddenly like that is something that should be actively avoided. This fight was very one-sided and my accusing finger points at the DnD basis for the story, but I cannot avoid mentioning that it can be worked around, which you didn't - the tone suffers for that. I am making an attempt at being objective, but it's hard to say what the author wants when he sends opposing signals.
9774797 The Death of the Author. I got the same impression Bronycommander did that you meant the hoof. And instead of evaluating the comment and maybe clarifying it in the text, you go and reply to the comment instead in a way that I find condescending; I get that impression very often from you.
9784051 I didn't get the reference at the end the, but yes, the last move was cool and the snappy ending shot - satisfying.