When the Flash ends up in the world of Equestria due to his speed he will have to try to find his way back home with the help of all the other ponies, but can he make it back home or will he have to stay in this new strange foreign land?
Will Cisco and Caitlin be able to find a way to bring him home?
Can Oliver deal with the news of his missing/ lost friend and find him?
And what is Lightning Dust up to exactly?
Read and find out...
Featuring/ Starring:
Rainbow Dash as 'The Dash' (Equestrian Flash)
Barry Allen as 'The Flash'
Oliver Queen as 'The Green Arrow'
Lightning Dust as 'The Reverse Dash'
Soarin as Cisco Ramon
Spitfire as Caitlin Snow
And an Original Character based upon another work of mine (soon to be published)
Thunder Bolt
Edit 7/4/2017:
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1st acquired. Story added to Tracking List.
Run Barry Run!
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Yes! Exactly! Thank You!
I skimmed through it, and honestly, I already love it. I'm a fan of Flash, Arrow, Supergirl, Legends of Tomorrow, and MLP, and to see a crossover. At first, I was worried that it would just be your random interpretation of the Flash, (which probably still would have been fine), but while skimming, I decided I needed to put this in my library. Anyway, back in a flash.
P.S. Please write more, maybe crossing over with Arrow, or LoT, or Supergirl.
Well, I just finished the whole story, and I liked it. The only problem was that certain paragraphs were repeated, and Cisco's line: "strange, mysterious, and unusual" was used a bit to much for my taste, but other than that, great. Solid B.
7783974
Noted, I will consider it.
7785366 Thank you! I'm glad to know that at least one artist approves of constructive criticism. Most artists I know or know of either ignore all criticism or complain about it, or just focus on destructive criticism. As I always say, "Critics are your most loyal fans."
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I can handle/ take critism (creative or destructive) .
(In fact I was actually inspired to write one story based on it, change another and eeven gave an idea to another person).
What I can't or won't handle is someone being a jerk about it.
P. S. Haha for the joke.
It's good, but you changed The PoV in the middle.
Otherwise love the intro
I can't stop laughing
The conversations between him and the ponies are so awkward
Is a cute idea
7796774
Why? What for/ at?
7796765
In which chapter(s)?
Also the Cisco/ Earth POV is Purposeful.
The story is called Flash meets Dash. We are 3 chapters in and this still hasn't happened.
Too much of your story is the characters back home trying to help Barry out. Maybe you have a plan but it feels like you just want to include the whole cast of a show you (rightfully) really enjoy. The characters back home trying to help are boring to read about. In chapter 8 when Barry makes contact with them you could write one line with one of them saying:"Barry, we've been working nonstop to find a way home for you!" And that would more than use up everything they've done so far. The interesting thing here is Barry's interaction with Equestria, focus on that IMHO.
Please find an editor ;-; this story is so janky that i wanna puke. Too many redundancies, mis-spellings and vomit inducing mis-uses of words and phrases. No offense.
Cisco's metahuman powers should solve this quickly enough; just Vibe him, and manipulate the dimensional energies to open a rift to the world he's in... Seriously, it's that simple, and they know it...
You need to be more with the flow of this story instead of rushing it.
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It will happen, wait for it.
Arrow of the Sun
Who are Cisco and Caitlin?
7810604
Watch the show.
Themselves.
The list is just Equestrian (Girls/ Ponies) versions of Earth people.
This is good, hell it involves Oliver. Oliver + Team Flash = Fun
For me at least.
Also you keep repeating 'anyhow', try using other words. Like 'anyway' and such.
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Noted.
Also I do know my only fatal flaw in first drafts (yes, this and every other story is still a FIRST Draft) is repeating myself over and over and over and over and over... again.
SO AWESOME!!!!
7815621 I love how you repeated yourself when recognising your flaw of repeating yourself.
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It was intentional (because I am also a comedian).
yeah... as fast as Dash is (according to Death Battle able to go at over 3800 mph) Flas is, to put it lightly, much, Much MUCH faster! Like 9.4 MILLION times the speed of light fast!
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Yes, which is why he had to slow down.
(And yeah, I saw that video)
Flash is so fast that he broke the very definition of speed itself.
(Basically trans velocity)
But it's not 9.4 million times faster, it's 23 Tredecillion, 759 Duodecillion, 449 Undecillion times faster than the speed of light.
(Unfortunately my computer calculator won't let me enter a number larger than Quad decillion, so no comparison for now.)
(That's 23759449 plus 36 zeroes in front of it.)
But here is a comparison.
It would take the combined speed of (X,Y,Z,) to match Flash.
8.679250776 E31 Supermans
5.832686633 E29 Green Lanterns (but not Hal Jordan necessarily.)
1.578306255 E47 Humans at top speed (28 Miles Per Hour)
7838633 Either way, fast enough to TRANSCEND TIME.
Why are there always haters?
Meh good so far
Lightning dust is the reverse dash, s1 of the flash makes it so
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I know.
I've noticed a lot of redundancy, if you want I can edit it for you to remove any of your spelling or grammatical errors that I can find.
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Sure!
Dude Barry does not talk enough. Sorry but dislike.
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Well I'm sorry for that then.
But him being there has no effect on the timeline at all since he's never been to their earth before
8586004
Huh?
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Oliver + Team Flash x Team Arrow & Diggle's face at Barry's speed and\or talking ponies = fun and LOLs
7796774
Same here
I kinda got confused with who was talking in the band room. It would be best to label who is talking to who.
I wonder if Barry'll know Dash's secret right away.
After all,takes one to know one.
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Exactly
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Technicly, Flash has never been there 'fore, so the timeline should be intact.
And is LD in a wheelchair, for some reason, there is no wheelchair in Flash\Dash fics.
Enter the woman in yellow, the enemy in plane sight: The Reverse-Dash!!!!!
DUN!DUN!!DUN,DUN!!
BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOMBOOM BOOM BOOM
The plot is nice and straight forward. But the way the characters speak and the writing are atad chaotic. The way they speak is muddled, like this was translated from another language and then hastily edited to sound abit more like regular English. And the writing seems redundant as the actions, settings, and/or dialogue repeat each other.
This is the Grant Gustin's Flash and not the retarded Justice Leauge Flash with armor platings.