Fine Crime has been chosen by Celestia personally to undertake a job he has never wanted. Yet obvious curses can be hidden blessings, for Fine realizes his job is more than just to serve Celestia. He must find a way... to end her.
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*Comes back from dinner, sees Order of Shadows has updated*
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Yes! The buildup is amazing! Like the chapter a lot. I have a feeling it is rather important, putting Trixie and Amethyst in here. Of course, I haven't read TvE or the other side stories, so I have no idea just how important. Onward!
So 2 options huh? I wonder if you will correct this contradiction before going to the next book of the order of shadows.
Do you know what I find a bit odd? In TvE we have a Trixie that seems driven. Her only fears seem to be Twilight considering what she did to her. But Trixie doesn't come over as somepony whom had it really hard in the past. What I'm saying she doesn't carry any emotional scars. Which a person around her age should have had with that kind of experience. The Trixie of TvE isn't a jaded pony. At least not in the start.
For me this is a minor contradiction in personality. Being homeless, having experienced certain terrible trauma at Orphanages of such a scale that it causes a pony to fear those places. No such experiences should have had great impact on Trixie. And you can't say it was for a short time because you already stated she couldn't read. Which means she had to become homeless when she was about 6-7 years old. So roughly 4 years alone without a home and yet in the future no trauma in the future? Combine that with a serious negative experience with Orphanages and I would say that it is highly implausible for not to have left some sort of scar on her.
I know your a great writer so I wonder how you will solve this new contradiction.
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