The "mother" and her "son" were sitting at the table, having an important talk.
"... I would also like to tell my friends what happened." Harmony stated. Celaria had explained to him that she had placed a potion in his drink, one that would change him into a pony for 24 hours, at which point he would go back to human. This was yet to happen.
"How many items does one human need?" Celaria asked. "You want an 'iPhone' ... What is it? Magic?"
"No, It's not magic... It's a communication device." Harmony replied. Celaria nodded in understanding.
"Ok, to get this straight: You want to get some of your items, explain the nature of the situation to your friends, and invite the female I saw earlier to live with us?" Celaria clarified.
"Her name is Amy," Harmony muttered. Celaria grinned.
"Ok then, we know what we're doing!" Celaria said as her horn began to glow. Harmony's eyes widened.
"Wait! I didn't mean right-"
Amy was pacing up and down the hall, worried about Jason. She had been able to maintain herself, but she was still scared. The police said that they had been drugged, and Jason had been kidnaped. They didn't know the motives or had any suspects. But suddenly, she heard a big "POOF!" from the unaltered party room.
"-Now!" She heard Jason say. She stopped, and bolted to the party room door, and flung it open. Inside the room had.. a small green horse with a strange main style... and color. It was blonde, and the main color of the horse was green. There was something else in the room.
"YOU!" Amy said when she realized it was the giant winged horned horse that took Jason. "What have you done with Jason? WHERE IS HE!?!" The big horse looked over at the little horse.
"Are all humans so angry?" She asked the little horse. The little horse made a mad face.
"You kidnaped me with no explanation left behind for her, of corse she's angry." The little horse responded. It was a he.
"What are you talking about?" Amy asked.
"Timey wimey, Amy." The little one said, not looking away from the big horse and holding up a hoof as though he was saying: "Wait a minute," to her. Amy's eyes bulged.
"How do you know my-"
"I said timey wimey Amy." He said again. He then realized something. "AMY!" He said. He then realized something else and blushed. "Amy! It's me! Jason!" The small horse called out. It did sound an awful lot like Jason, Amy thought to herself. The large one looked confused.
"What kind of name is 'Jason'?" She asked out loud. The small one looked annoyed.
"It was my name before you changed it! Thanks for asking, by the way." "Jason" finished quietly.
"So, let me get this straight," Amy began.
'That's been said quite a lot today." Harmony realized.
"This thing, abducted you, changed your name, and turned you into a horse-"
"Pony."
"Whatever." Celaria and Amy interrupted each other quickly. "And now she's gonna abduct somebody else?" Celaria put two and two together about who Amy was.
"Oooooh so you're Amy!" Celaria exclaimed. Harmony blushed. He knew what was coming next. "Harmony here was wanting me to see if you could-"
"Please stop." Harmony said, face hoofing. "I can't take it. Please, take me back until your 'pony-drug' wears off." Celaria sighed.
"If that's what you want." She groaned. "I'll only take you back here one last time, you got that." She didn't wait for an answer. Her horn began to glow, just like before.
"Oh no, you don't!" Amy said. All she could think of as she lunged at the two was that, they looked so much like a dematerializing TARDIS. She felt like Captain Jack for a moment, clinging to the side of the TARDIS as it flew through the time vortex. She struggled to stifle a squee.
POOF! The three appeared in the children's room Harmony had been in before the game, where Tia and Luna were playing dolls. When they did, Harmony was flung backward and Amy landed on top of him.
"I'm not letting you out of my sight!" Amy said to the stunned Harmony. To be quite frank, every pony in the room was shocked by Amy's sudden appearance.
"New sistow!" Luna exclaimed happily, popping up from where she sat and running over to. Amy double took, and stood up. Harmony was too embarrassed.
'Why does she have to see me like this?' Harmony thought to himself. Amy started talking.
"What do you mean?" Amy asked. Tia spoke up.
"The last time she brought one of you... things home," Tia nodded toward harmony. "He was our brother." Amy realized something.
"You... are Jason's new sisters?" Amy asked, and confused Tia and Luna.
"Who's Jason?" Luna asked, Tia nodded in agreement. Now it was Amy's turn to be confused.
"He's your brother... I think." Amy responded. She then remembered something Harmony had said back in the party room. "You said something about a... changed name?" Amy asked Harmony. Harmony blushed.
"Yeah... they changed my name..." Harmony said, slowly. "... To... Harmony..." He finished the sentence as though it was hot. Amy knew her friend well. He was embarrassed.
"Ohh. That's sweet." Amy said in a mock baby-talk. Harmony blushed. A couple of small zaps emanated from Harmony, and one smoke bomb, and when the smoke cleared he had turned back to Jason, the human she knew (and sorta' loved). Harmony took a moment to look at himself, and sighed with relief.
"Oh thank god!" He said. "Being a pony's exsausting!"
Cute! Very cute!
So... new sister?
Also; Celaria is very spur of the moment.
Adorable.
Ok, so this chapter was better. A few things i want to point out.
Celaria: for an OP Dues Ex Machina I rather like her charecter. my personal head cannon for her is that she was given the powers of a god to rule the world of Equestria but not the wisdom to use it properly. and she continues to use her power like a toy until one day as a result she creates Discord. world is thrown into chaos, Yada Yada yada, lesson learned with great power comes great responsibility.
Amy: okay I kind of saw this coming but I wasn't expecting it to be the very next chapter, this is both good and bad. By adding another female character it potential conflict to the story, but by being an alien along with Jason she becomes his ally against the strange and otherworldly conflicts thus weakening it's impact on the story.
story over all: good, just needs more conflict. While forced pony cuddles is fun and all it offers very little substance, what this story could use is a decent villian. Maybe a political rival that establishes world building and offers direct conflict for Jason. Or a bully that adds conflict that isn't tied to the females charecters. Or a Devil to Celaria's godhood. If done correctly, hints, teases, in the shadows type stuff that affects the charecter, leading up to an epic reveal... that could be awsome.
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Yeah, thanks for that. I'm stumbling into a bit of writers block. I'll DIFFINATLY take the tips into consideration.
PS thanks for constructive criticism BTW.
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oh your welcome, your story has alot of potential and I know what it is like to suffering in writers purgatory. it's always nice to get and give help and advice.
5586109 It just hit me. Maybe "Harmony" should've really be named "Discord."
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I can't really agree, while he may one day become Discord he can't assume the identity before he gains the power. Also without great loss such a transformation would not be realistic. A dark turn like him becomeing Discord is not suited for a lighthearted fic like this. More likely Discord would be born from Harmony maybe a shedding of his human spirit, or unknowningly brought from the human world and using him as a source of chaos to gain power. Would be kinda cute a minor imp or will o the wisp going all Hexxus.
three square meals a day and semi-ruler of the entire land. You literally get whatever you want, whenever you want. I'd put up with a name change and a different species for that. Hell, would he complain if they were african or something instead of ponies? Sure seems that way. Plus, they're fucking adorable (the little ones, not the big ugly one).
*Eye Twitch* I just realized That they've Named Him a GIRLS name What the Fuck and he is not even Objecting it?!?!?! in a normal situation like this I would Be mad until Hell Freezes over
Why isn't he insisting on being called Jason? I thought he would, and the lack of that has been confusing me. Did they mess up his brain or something?
If it were me to be adopted by Celaria ( Princess Celestia and Princess Luna ( woona 's Mother I would like to be reverse birthed then birthed after awhile then I would be blood related to them ( It's a idea I'm hoping to write here . ) I would still be human but changed in some ways phsyhically from being a male to a female to a filly ( Hay ! I know i'm weird i n my mind ) I still want to be related to Celestia and Luna as their younger baby brother /sister ( I just don't knopw how to write in here or post a story ?
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O-oh.....
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... and now I know that that comment exists...
Lemmo go find some bleach real quick
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Do you mind if I have some?