"NO! Please don't go!" the little 5-year-old cried, sitting between the beds. Tears were streaming down his face. "We gotta see that movie! You- you promised!"
"Sorry, sport *cough* something's come up." His father coughed.
"No sir, don't try to talk." A nurse in the room said. She was stopped by another nurse, putting her hand in the first one's shoulder.
"No don't." The second nurse whispered. "They don't have much time, let them make their peace." The little boy was still crying.
"Jason... could you tell us a poem from class?" The little boy's mother asked.
"Uh huh." Jason said, fighting back the tears. "Do not- *sniffle* do not go gentle, into that goodnight. Old age should burn, and rage at close of day. Rage, rage against the dieing of the light. Do not go gentle, into that goodnight." The little boy finished through his sobs.
"Thank... you..." The mother said as her grip on her son loosened.
"No! NO MOM NO!" The little boy jumped off his knees and began to shake his mother. "Don't go gentle into that goodnight! Don't go!" He sobbed even louder. Beep, beep, beeeeeee. Jason spun around quickly. "Dad no! Please stay!" Jason tried to say, but couldn't over his incredibly loud cries of lament. A nurse grabbed him by the arm and began to pull him out. Lot's of doctors rushed in and started to move frantically around his parents. He could have heard what they were saying, if the only thing he could hear wasn't the beep of the heart monitor telling Jason that his life, as well as his parents, was over. All he could think about was how his parents wouldn't try to stay with him.
"But... It's Christmas."
Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn, and rage at the close of day;
Rage, rage against the dieing of the light.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
That's harsh.
Oh shit.
Wow. Talk about a dark start.
waw I didn't expect that this soon in to the story.
Hilarious
The day of family and love of family is the day his parents die...Well...
I've always heard the poem go, 'Do not go gentle into that dark night'
Wow. You need to slow down tiger. You just blew about 4 loads in two minutes, tossed me some cab fare and told me to call you later.
Wow......starting it of dark as hell, don't ya think?
so short but so sad
I can safely say that this is worse on the feels than the first episode of The Galaxy Railways.
5538978 YOU HEARTLESS BASTARED!!!
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Kid, Just because it's chrismas doesn't mean that good things always happen. Sorry if I offended anyone
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What kind of school would teach that poem to a five-year-old kid?
Also, slow down, work on showing instead of telling, and proofread more thoroughly.
That should be "peace" not "piece".
Other than that little slip in grammar, GREAT START!
It hurts
the feels
why
now I have to read the next chapter
Starting a story with a sad scene isn't all that effective because you haven't let the reader get to know the character yet. We can't feel sympathy for someone who we don't yet care about. It may have been more effective to begin this fic with a more descriptive narrative about what the plot will entail by introducing the main focus of the story rather than trying to focus on a sad scene; one which isn't sad because of a lack of connection to the protagonist. I'll give you points for a unique introduction, though, as well as a well written one.
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Actually, I would think it is sad, if I wasn't laughing over the title pic. Cause that is just cute and hilarious!
Though wise men at their end know dark is right...
Pretty sure it's dying, not dieing.
and im reading this on christmas eve o.o