Removed the 'Tragedy' tag, because after reading the FAQ, I feel like I might be misrepresenting it with this story.
There are two sides to everything. Two sides of a coin, two sides to a pony's image, even two sides to meaning itself. But you never know which side is which, and you never know if there's more than just two sides.
Rainbow Dash does not wish to see this side anymore, but at the same time, she is always seeing this side. Which side is she fighting now? Is it all really happening, or is it all just a dream? Maybe it's her dream becoming reality. She doesn't know, but now, here she is, questioning a pegasus she doesn't trust in the slightest. The problem is, this pegasus has a very unstable mind that isn't just affecting her memory.
Regardless of what may happen, there is one thing Rainbow Dash refuses to deny. She will do anything to protect Fluttershy. She will make sure they get back home, no matter what.
Cover image, "You Should Feel Bad" Comic by "labba94" from Deviantart. Used with permission.
Note: As this story has progressed, it's been receiving much less attention, with more dislikes and no feed back. Is there something I've been doing wrong with this story? I tried asking earlier, and all I got was an extra dislike.
So I take it that Rainbow Dash will be beating people up in this story?
4557382 Yeah, pretty much, but it may be a while before we get there... depending on how you look at it...
I am intrigued... Perhaps this will suit Rainbow when she has one of her, shall we say, episodes?
I find myself impressed. You and me have got to write together sometime!
Ooh, mysterious...
4565072 I gotta wonder how that'll work considering what'll be going on in this story later on.
Wow, I ask what I am doing wrong with this fanfic after posting a new chapter, and the only thing I get is another dislike and that's it. I'll never figure out what I'm doing wrong with this story at this rate...
DIE DISLIKES I HATE YOU UVKYGJRHGUEFSEGFRRGSDFGSBGS (I don't like dislikes unless its on a anti brony vid)
I'm interested in how things will play out by just readying the prologue, but I can see why a lot of people don't seem to enjoy the story.
Narrative wise, I think it's a little confusing. You see, as far as I can tell so far, Carousel is the main character of the story, or rather, the plot will center off her right? So starting things off with RD and Flutters was a little confusing because I began to empathize with Fluttershy since both she and I were confused and worried about what was happening to Rainbow, but after a brief moment, she seemed to be back in the loop, alienating me from the story.
After that we are treated to a flash back introducing Carousel where I thought that we would go the "Start at the middle of the story and work our way back through the flashback", but just as the memory started, it ended and brought us back to the beginning again (or middle, not sure). It is just a little strange to read, which might be what puts some people off from the story.
As the first chapter, it is always what new readers will be greeted with when looking at your story, so if they see a back and forth formula, they will expect the other chapters to be the same, just as confusing and strangely meta.
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People downvote for insanely random reasons, I'm discovering. I gave someone a negative review, so they downvoted all of my stories. If someone doesn't like a character/'shipping pair/what have you, even if the story is technically good, they'll downvote it.
Honestly? I wouldn't fret it. Focus on the important feedback: i.e. what people are SAYING to you.
4750862 Huh, the way I wrote the story makes it seem like Carousel is the main character? Well that is a mistake because that is not my intention.
The way I set the prologue was to make it show the back story that Carousel tells to both Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy, so the only reason the story tells it is because it is what Carousel is telling them.
I didn't want to have to do a backstory, but then there would be a problem with lack of information before the main plot of the story comes forth. Most of the first act of the story focus's on the events that took place before the main plot of the story begins.
Otherwise, thanks for the feed back and criticism. I really appreciate it.
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Feedback is definitely something that I pay attention to. The problem is, if there's no feedback, you don't know how your readers really feel on the story. And if people are only talking about positive things about the story, and not mentioning any of the negatives when they are clearly present, it'll lead the writer to believe the way they're going is correct. Which is why I ask about what I'm doing wrong, or what I could do to improve.
I'm not concerned about the dislikes that I'm getting, but I am concerned about the lack of feedback I get to go along with those dislikes as the story progresses. It makes it look like I'm increasingly doing something wrong with the story.
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Oh, believe me, I know that feeling all too well. I have very few comments on my stories and it does drive me up the wall at times. But as I said, don't focus on the dislikes because that tells you nothing (usually, it's hit before the reader even gets to the end of the story).
There are groups like I Just Want A Comment that you can submit to, though the whole group process can be a bit hit-and-miss.
What the fu- never mind, just keep reading...
~Wywint
I need to ask how is this vore
8126205 Not sure. I didn't add this story to that group. But if I remember correctly, it probably has to do with Chapter 14/15.
Oh ok thanks for telling me
Tell me, did the actions of what happened set Rainbow Dash off?
8138569 Not sure what you mean. It's been forever since I did this story and thought it would be left for dead. Not sure why it's suddenly been getting attention.
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Maybe we like to see you make another chapter
8140882 This story hasn't been updated in forever. The last comment it had before it suddenly got some attention again was 142 weeks ago apparently. Out of all the stories I have, this one seems to have the least demand overall.
Anyway, what exactly were you trying to ask?
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I'm asking if you can make a Chapter 16 of this Story
8144682 I meant when you were asking about this:
Anyway, I'm currently writing another story, and there's been more demand on that one than this one ever has.
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Right
I still don't understand exactly what's happening, but it seems that Twilight is keeping the exact nature of pinkie's illness a secret considering her violent reception, despite lack of apparent urgency.
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This story is quite old. But if I remember correctly, the original plan was that either the note or Twilight was supposed to describe that Pinkie's illness was something along the lines of a stomach virus, but she would explain it in a very, as Rainbow Dash would put it, 'Egghead way', that nopony would understand what she was describing, so it would just be a common 'Stomach Ache' condition to everypony else.
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ah, that explains it