When the weather hasn't been to her animal critters' likings lately, Fluttershy ends up getting many requests from them to change it around their area so that they could play more often. But Fluttershy knows next to nothing about how to control weather clouds. Thankfully, her best friend Rainbow Dash is an expert on weather clouds. So who better to teach her about how to use weather clouds than her?
Unfortunately, they soon learn that this was the worst possible day to ask.
This story is the prequel to this. Since it's a prequel, you probably don't have to read that to enjoy this. But if you've read it, you'll most likely know the direction this takes. The sequel was written before this.
Chapters (5)
This is really interesting so far. All I have to say is I'll be waiting for future chapters.
The *sniff, bang, haaa* things are a little out of place and aren't needed. Just describe the noise! Don't tell us.
4870816 Well, I'm not sure how to do that when the same noises will be occurring in a lot of key places of the story. It would sound like the same set of words would describe the sound every time they occur or something.
4871304 Using the same set of word is better than writing *le gasp*, doing that is a bit...demeaning for the reader. It makes mefeel like a child.
4871478 Well, I'm not sure what I can do about that right now, but I'll look more into that in the future to see what I can do.
4871571 Its such an attrocity to think somepony would deliberately sabotage those storm clouds and its even worse to make someone as innocent as Fluttershy think that she was the cause of that and she has never done anything wrong. My heart goes out for her
.Other than that its a really interesting story and I look forward to the next update.
Will Fluttershy's trauma subside in time?
Giggity
4876500 HOW DID THAT GET IN THERE!? WHAT IN THE NAME OF CELESTIA!?!? AAAAAARRRRRRGGGHHHHH!!!!!!!!
Thank you so much for catching that. I fixed it.
I really love your FlutterDash stories, and this one was no exception. You have a really beautiful style, and you have such a gorgeous way with the characters and their emotions that I can only envy. Plus, I thought the idea behind how pegasi manipulate clouds was genius.
My only criticism would be that you tend to use Rainbow Dash's full name a lot in quick succession. You can try breaking it up by calling her Dash, or Rainbow.
Did notice this error in chapter two:
Should be bolts.
And from chapter four:
Exit.
Relied upon.
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I find it funny how her name can get criticized, yet Fluttershy's cannot. In the show, the only pony they don't call by full name very constantly is Twilight's. When it comes to the others, they rarely use only the first part of their name. But for the sake of these stories, I'll try using just 'Rainbow' from time to time more often. I try to stick as close to the cannon's physics and way of talking as I can.
I thought I could use 'volts' to describe them, but I guess not. Fixed.
That's a mistake I missed. Fixed.
And this one was just me not knowing how to say that properly. Fixed.
Thank you for pointing out those errors. I really appreciate it.
And one last thing.
I don't see this area get explored around at all, which is a huge part of Rainbow Dash's intelligent character side. Which is a real shame, because most of the time she is played off as an idiot. So I really wanted to express my thoughts on how they work and how hard it can really be. And not just through plain head cannon's either. Some of the ideas did come from certain moments from other episodes.
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I think, when written down, Rainbow Dash's whole name just looks ... awkward. In the show, you tend not to notice it so much. That's just a personal thing, and I realise it is kinda subjective to point it out as a "mistake".
Volts is a measure of electrical current, not a means of describing lightning.
You're quite right about that. Apart from a couple of mentions of earth pony magic making them excellent farmers and pegasi getting the power of flight/weather manipulation, you never actually see a whole lot about them, since unicorn/alicorn magic tends to be the main focus of the show.
Are you talking about fanfiction or canon, by the way (regarding Rainbow Dash)? I don't think she's ever portrayed as an idiot, just ... slow-to-learn and a bit self-centred (until push comes to shove).
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Actually, both my mentions of the cloud manipulation and Rainbow Dash's intelligence were pointed towards fanfics. Some people have written that Fluttershy was smarter with cloud manipulations and weather conditions than Rainbow Dash was in their stories, which to me makes no sense at all.
The ideas I got about cloud manipulations however were from the show's canon.
P.S. Regarding Earth Pony magic, Celestia states that they need their Strength to tend to the lands in the Season Four Finale. This pretty much means that their extra strength is part of their magic.
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Yeah, I agree with that. Given that Fluttershy can barely fly (unless pushed by circumstances), it wouldn't make much sense to me to have her as the "stronger" of the two when it comes to controlling the weather.
I understood that, even prior to the season four finale. I just meant, compared with unicorn's being able to perform spells and pegasi being able to fly/control weather, the earth ponies get a bit of a short thrift with their "magic".
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Well, if you want my head canon on what other influences Earth Pony magic has, it's their ability to manipulate gravity with their hooves. You want some examples? Diamond Tiara kicks the wall to send that slider both up and down during Ponyville Confidential.
Another example would be where Pinkie and that tomato pony were bouncing a Bit back and forth by just slamming their hooves on the desk during Putting Your Hoof Down. The craziest thing is that there are two Bits on the counter, and only one gets moved, and it's not just Pinkie doing this flawlessly either.
Maybe you can call that something else, but I just found it easier to say, manipulate gravity. Although this theory could be dis proven if I ever find somepony else being able to do something like that that isn't an Earth Pony.
4880622 You should consider making a sequel or something thats set after the events of Rainbowdash's pet fluttershy that shows fluttershy wanting to put her life back together even if it is months after that traumatic event where the sole cause was revenge and where fluttershy has finally found her voice again It would be an interesting read and like palaikai said your work on the fandom is something that really entertains people who read your stories. I think you really know how to write out what happens in a traumatic event so all I can say is keep up the good work.
4882123 That really doesn't sound plausible considering, well there's already a sequel to this. I didn't mention it in the story, but considering what the sequel says, in its story, it's an event that happens years in the future, after this story's events.
So an event happening months after that in the way you described isn't possible, it would only explain some more events leading to that sequel, which means exploring more of their trauma.
(Although I might be reading your comment wrong. It's kinda hard to understand.)
4882281 ok then its just that I thought it was only a couple years since the incident and I didnt think it was a little bit more than that. And what is it that you're having trouble understanding maybe I could shed some more light.
4882561 The amount of years hasn't been said. The only thing confirmed is that the amount of time that passed would require Scootaloo to age enough to not only fly, but also have a part time job at the Weather Factory, which obviously was restored at some point or another.
As for your comment, it's cluttered and just difficult to read. I'm not really sure how to properly explain it, but what I get from it is, you're looking for a sequel that takes place a few months after this story's events, that focus's on a way where Fluttershy would be able to restore her mentality so that she could have the mind of a regular pony again.
4882772 oh ok I see it now and I guess I can now understand fluttershy has been affected so much because of an act that was intended for revenge against ditzy doo
Hmm...
I like.
You have garnered my attention. Now let's see if you can keep it!
4871571 Oh bucking hell! Shit just got really!
Heh! And somepony is gonna get dead!
4876769 Da feels.... Da FEEEEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLLLLSSSS!!!!!!!
I'm seriously crying right now! And it's all your fault you sick bastard/bitch!!! I hate you! 
Ah Gawd! That was beautiful!!!
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Please let there be more...
5000263 There is more. According to your comment, you're only on chapter 3. This is a 4 chapter story.
But if that's not enough for you, there is a one chapter sequel to this already. However, the sequel was made before this one. But you can still find its link in the description.
5000882 Bless you child!
4880622 I think I'm going to have to like all of your stories now even though this the only one I've read so far...
I give this story 100/100!
That really helps explain how Dash is able to clarify how things happened to the rest of the mane 6.
very well played love it a lot
Oh my Celestia…
Kick that receptionist's ass Rainbow. Kick it all the way to the moon.
Poor Flutters...
Stupid ponies be in charge: Ruins our Fluttershy's home.
Dashie, get the gun, we're coming back.
That was soooo emotional.
6007121 I don't think that's a typo.
Edit: Nevermind. You didn't show the original text so I thought that was the original. Fixed.
So, Now Flutters is Dash's pet? nice, but I expect more development on that point, maybe furute chapters with sex tag?
This was interesting, cool and sad at the same time
6060228 There's already a sequel. The sequel was written before this one. This prequel was meant to explain the events that happened that led up to that.
I was like, fetish material incoming... But what I received was a well written heart felt story that repeatedly kicked me in my feels....
I've never been so wrong!
6581903 Don't worry. You weren't as wrong as you thought. Because the sequel to this, (which was written first) is the one that contains it.
Although if you're not into that, you probably still wish that.
I'm not so sure this is a good thing. Fluttershy is losing almost all her independence as a mare and Rainbow Dash clearly is extremely stressed.
I think they are seriously underestimating Fluttershy. She can be quite resilient.
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Not when she's completely traumatized from the tragic actions she caused herself.
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She'll get over that. The rest should confront Fluttershy with it head on. To the point that he defenses break and she finally is able to burst into tears and scream to unleash herself.
8050939 She'll get over causing mass genocide to hundreds of animals she raised whole heartedly like a family when she couldn't even stand seeing them under a magic performance by Twilight? I think you're overestimating her mental capacity.
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She can raise new ones. With her friends she can get over anything but they have to help her by forcing her to confront it. Maybe having a very tough discussion with her about it and physically block off any escape routes. Just say that they are not going to leave her alone until she opens up and then bombard her with questions and even accusations.
8051040 First off, she can't replace the ones she lost. 2 of those were Angel and Tank. To her, it would be like having to deal with murdering your own children.
Second off, this is why Rainbow doesn't want her to deal with this. What you just described is a pretty nasty confrontation that would really make her suffer if she's ever gonna cope with that loss. Even if it was possible, Rainbow didn't want Fluttershy suffering with that, wanting the blame to be on herself instead of Fluttershy.
It may not be the best solution to handle the situation, but to them, it's all their mentality can handle. You gotta realize, it's their way of thinking, not ours.
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Of course the old ones can't be brought back but giving her new animals to care for will take her mind off of what happened and allow her to move forwards.
It's ripping of a bandaid basically. The longer things foster inside Fluttershy, the harder it will be for her to heal. They have to actually force her to confront what happened before the pain fully fades. That confrontation is pretty head but it will get them a lot of information as to what exactly is bothering Fluttershy and how. That will give them an idea of how to get rid of it and help Fluttershy start over again.
In moments like these you rely on your friends to give you the tough love that you need to put the past behind you and move forward.
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Yeah... I think that would cause her to have flash backs of what she caused with her other animals instead, making her super traumatized. It's not that simple. But if you think it is, you're free to write a story about it. I won't discourage that.
Show your side of how Fluttershy can overcome her trauma of causing mass genocide to her animals she thinks as family, cope with killing Rainbow Dash's pet as well, and how she can continue to raise animals with all that on her mind.
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How else could she resume her life? Raising animals is her cutie mark so it's her destiny. They need to get her new animals. Yes it will be very painful but she has her friends with her who can keep reminding her to take care of the new animals. Maybe even pile on more work to keep distracting her and make sure she builds up new bonds with these new animals. Also keep ensuring her that she's not disrespecting their memories or anything by getting new animals to replace the ones she lost.
Doing that might really hurt her but it is something she'll have to endure if she wants to pick up her life.
8051123 That's something that can only be answered in a well told story. Like I said, if you can think of one, by all means. But just because it may be possible for Fluttershy to cope with that, doesn't mean it would actually happen. That's why this story ended the way it did. This is my take. But if you want, you're free to show your take.
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The thing is that it's not really helping Fluttershy cope. Fluttershy seems to be dead now.
8051139 I never said it was. This is why this story is tagged, 'tragedy'.