*Side story to Trials of a Fillyfooler*
Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy have a fetish that they share. It is a fetish for hooves. Fluttershy learns of this experience after Rainbow Dash accidentally had one of her hooves make contact with Fluttershy's during dinner time. Fluttershy was afraid of this new feeling, but Rainbow Dash will help lead her through it, as they explore their hoof fetishes.
*This story's purpose is to show the intimate moments with hooves that play in the actual story, "Trials of a Fillyfooler". This story won't make sense unless you read that in conjunction with this.*
Chapters (4)
I started reading this without really looking, and a couple of paragraphs in, I thought ... "Is this Skylight?"
Cute story, with an interesting idea, as always.
This was interestingly weird.
I guess this could be a good premise for a porn story. I hope you don't try to turn it into a serious romance, though. Not with a story name like "Hoof Fetish".
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Dunno if you've read Skylight's other works, but "serious" is not on the agenda. They're more like examinations of weird ideas.
I find them enjoyable, though.
The title though..
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Romance is pretty much exactly what this will end up being...
4928025 What about the title?
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I don't know, you could change it to something else.. let's say, a more attractive title. The Hoof fetish part may be put on the description too, so not that much change.
Accepted to MLF.
4928045 Well, I don't know what else to really call it. I had trouble writing a good description without giving too much away.
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Fetish stories never make good romances except to some people who share that fetish. Putting an odd fetish in the story is usually fine, but the ones where they both coincidentally share the same kink as the basis of their explicitly shown relationship are generally considered nothing more than porn. Which is fine too, but it makes for really bad romance.
MORE!
4961842 -dislikes received.
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Ignore 'em. People will slay you for having a fetish they don't like, or for writing about a certain pairing, or just to troll. Focus on the written feedback.
4963390 Which there are none of since the last update, or the last week.
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Well, I'm here ...
4963619 I would still love to know the things that I'm doing wrong though, if there are any. Without any sort of feed back, all I can assume is that people like it and believe there isn't anything wrong. But according to the first set of comments I received, there's bound to be problems somewhere in there.
But right now, when I compare the attention that I had on the first chapter with the second, so far the second seemed to kill people's interest.
Not to mention I've never received any answers back for any of the questions I've had in the author's notes for any of my stories. Only questions I've asked through comments have been received.
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It happens on a lot of stories; once people've commented/favourited/liked the first chapter, they don't always comment on the second chapter (you can't like something twice, after all, so barring a sudden change from a like to a dislike, you can assume that people who enjoyed the first chapter also enjoyed the second). I get that it can be a little frustrating, especially when you get dislikes and you don't know why, but there's sadly not a whole lot that can be done about it. People will either comment or they won't, and as schools are starting again, quite a large proportion of this site's user-base simply don't have the time.
Not everyone reads them.
I think you did a good job.
I don't share this particular kink, but it was interesting to see RD explaining it, and helping FS explore it.
A little feedback:
I have trouble believing RD would talk like that, especially when she's incredibly worked up. (so worked up, that she even yells at FS to shutup.)
Compassion, I think?
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Well, according to Testing 1, 2, 3, along with a few other moments in the show, it looks like a cloud's behavior is influenced by a pegasus's emotions, so this was Rainbow Dash overreacting because of how shot her nerves suddenly were. I explore that cloud use in more detail in another story though.
I had this mistake for that long? Wow...
Fixed.
Thanks for the feedback!
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Ah, sorry, that is not what I meant.
In fact, I really like the scenes where you show bits of RD's affinity for clouds.
The problem is not WHAT she says, but HOW she says it.
Just to illustrate what I mean:
"I need to calm my emotions before I cause this cloud to explode!”
"I gotta chill before this cloud explodes!"
Do you see what I'm trying to say?
Darned homophones are tricky to catch.
Your welcome.
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Thank you! I don't see this getting explored very often at all. So I really want to get in as much detail of this as I can in my story. We've seen quite a few small scenes in the show for what Rainbow Dash can do with them after all.
Ah, I see now. Unfortunately, that's most likely gonna be a problem with a lot of my stories because I can't identify that way of talking very well. (Using words in ways no one would use them.)
But even so, the example you provided just sounds so awkward to me. It could be just me though. But thanks anyway for telling me about this.
Wow, I think I may have overreacted before. Suddenly this fanfic is getting so many views and likes...
What an adorable story of Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash!
Good job!
5041574 well with amazing sequels like test story 2 by knighty how could not expect success http://www.fimfiction.net/story/149970/test-story-
5655077 I was never aware of this, and the words in the story appear to be deleted...
What was it even about?
5655152 that's because its just a test story and there never was any. words :p I can't remember but it may actually be older than your story yet t claim's to be a sequel, he provs jnpputted a random number to test it
5655152 yeah the I'd in his story is from 2013 lol, 144xxx. No idea how it ever got marked as a sequel to yours will be sheer coincidence but perhaps he likes your story or something lol
5655162 Nah, this story started about 2 months before that one did. There was also a bit of a Hiatus that happened with this story too.
Still, if it never had words, why was it made? What is it testing?
5655175 nope, look at the story I'd, he must have linked his to yours as a sequel over a year later than when her actually created the fic. Your story I'd is over 200000 his is under 150000
5655175 kniighty is the creator of fimfic he was probs using it to test story sequels with the site updates in nov
Wow. You know, this... this actually hits pretty close to home, for me. I don't exactly have a foot fetish or anything, but I've had the chance to... try some things. For anyone who hasn't done this yet, you know that raised spot on your foot that slopes up from where your big toe connects? Try prodding -- very gently -- at the base of that mound opposite your big toe. There is a very, very sensitive cluster of nerves running through there, and it can feel really good if touched juuuuust right. There are other spots on your foot where this works, too. You don't really feel it when you're just walking around 'cause you need a fine point of pressure to make the nerves activate like that, like your toenail or a small pebble that happens to be on your floor.
....... ....... Hawwwwwwwwwt.
But adorable.
... Hawtable.
No. But JEEZ, can it be both?? Poor Fluttershy getting exactly what she needs... ^^ I'm confused whether I should "D'awww" or make catcalls. But I'm leaning towards the former. I'm seriously, seriously enjoying seeing Fluttershy exploring this new facet of herself with her best friend. It's good that she's actually got someone to help her out so she doesn't wind up suppressing those feelings.
hay do continue it
Dang...I had no clue what this was going in...I love it.