Spike had lost everyone. Twilight had finally passed away. Now in Canterlot, Spike couldn't take this pain. How could he live without his dear friends, without Twilight? He only wanted to see them, one last time.
Note: This story is set without season 3 canon. It is based on the idea of Twilight never becoming an alicorn and of all alicorns and dragons being immortal.
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First view! This is a historical moment. Nice job on the description by the way bro.
2535028Thank you.
THE SADNESS!!!!!
I almost cried. (I don't cry too often.)
2535092 That's what I was aiming for.
2535093 It's just so well written. If you'd played that last part out any longer, and gave him some more dialogue about his sadness, I would'a cried. A lot.
2535100 I may get a bit more into Spike's feelings in the second part, but I need to make sure I do it right. I'll give yiu hint and say I'm trying to figure out how to work in a song.
2535107 A good song would be roads untraveled. by linkin park. It's not really as hardcore as their other songs, and it always makes me think sadly. Can you give me some feedback on my story's description? Vast Imaginations has a recently updated one, and I don't know about it yet.
2535119 One thing I would recommend is try to keep it short and straight to the point. Your descriptions seem a little too lengthy.
2535132 Exactly, but that really explains the story best. Any suggestions? I'm listening to the song now.
2535140 When I say I'm putting in a song, I mean and writing an original one, not that it will be a fully produced piece, but simply lyrics alongside writing to tell what's happening as it is being sung.
2535149 I'm still listening to the song. I thought you might mean that. Have fun being creative, because me and song writing don't go together. I tried writing some on my blog. Not too popular. This fic really seems like it'll take off. You should really start posting at about noon though. The afternoon is when we're all on.
My heart is weeping strongly for Spike. To be there and watch his friends pass away one by one, and to lose the one pony who took care of him for all his life, Twilight, to watch her pass away is such a tragic experience, especially for like you put it perfecty a young innocent soul as Spike. I love the moments with Celestia, Luna, and Cadence trying to comfort him as best as they can. I am looking forward to chapter 2, but I feel so bad for Spike.
2535976 I'm honestly surprised with myself for writing this. I've never really done anything like this. I just felt inspired to do it out of nowhere.
2536359 Well, you have done a wonderful job so far this this fanfic like you have with "New Loves, Old Wounds". Please continue with this one, I want to see what happens next after Luna sings Spike to sleep. I hope maybe somehow he is re-united with his friends maybe in his dreams since Luna can do that.
2536519 The second part may take some time to do right, because I know what I want to happen, but I'm not certain how to put it just right into words.
my feels oh god :(
Shedding liquid pride like a baby here, but this was a simply wonderful, sad, beautiful, and truly touching story. Love and friendship are two elements in life that shall never be extinguished, it is the flames of the heart's candle that cannot be snuffed out. Truly wonderful fanfic.
2537859 Thank you so much. Part of me wonders if I could ever inspire someone to make a music video the way something Rainbow Factory does.
2537813 Honestly, for me I think this was a rare stroke of brilliance.
2537876 Oh, that would be really beautiful and touching for a music video to be made for this story. Don't worry, I bet it will inspire someone to do that when they read this.
WY DIDN'T I FUCKING CRY!? COMEON THIS STORY WAS GOOD ENOUGH FOR IT RIGHT!!!? I guess this would just have to do :
2621767 Long as you enjoyed it.
Are you...enjoying the taste of my tears?
2780267 Honestly, I'm amazed I was able to write this. The idea just came to me out of nowhere and I felt like I had to write it. For me this feels like a rare stroke of brilliance.
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Your best work, in my opinion.
2780293 Thank you. Though I think others enjoy "Spike at your service (alt. version)" a bit more considering it has received no dislikes at all.
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I haven't read it yet but I plan to.
I think that might be because that's humor and this is a direct sucker punch into the feels organ.
2780320 Well, it's not purely comedy. I had written cause I didn't like what the actual episode did to Spike and wanted something that was more respectful. There are some heavy emotional moments in it, but based on some comments I think I went a bit overboard there.
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Well, it's definitely an improvement over the original but I'm sorry to say I'm not too impressed. It might just be because I read it just after reading this one. This one...feels more mature, both in the story content and in your writing ability. There were very emotional points in both stories but this one sold them better; it was easier to read, easier to feel Spike's pain.
I still prefer this piece.
2780359
Well, it's definitely an improvement over the original but I'm sorry to say I'm not too impressed. It might just be because I read it just after reading this one. This one...feels more mature, both in the story content and in your writing ability. There were very emotional points in both stories but this one sold them better; it was easier to read, easier to feel Spike's pain.
I still prefer this piece.
2780444 To each their own.
I think this is my 3rd or maybe 5th time reading this.
What a cute and sad story i like how you made spike didn't grow up like other dragons we see on the show i like think if spike never outlives his friends he will stay in a body of a baby dragon.
3127614 After the episode "Secret of my excess" I figured Spike isn't able to become a full grown dragon.
3128014 Yeah i think spike is different then most dragon we see so far he just stand out to me.
So what changed about Spike in this story? I mean I know he's still the same size as he was since you said 'Little Spike' in your story, but does he have wings in your story now or not? :-)
3224451 In this, because he spent his life with ponies, he's not able to grow properly.
3224565 So, let me get this straight. Spike, Celestia, Luna and Cadence all look the same as they did in the show? They haven't aged, they haven't grown, they all look the same? :-)
3276115 I did put in the description that this story is based on the idea that all alicorns and dragons are immortal, and therefore aren't effected by age.
Never thought a MLP story would almost make me cry.... damn. Nicely done story.