Poor Pinkie. It's okay to say no...
I'm sorry, I almost lost it there...

oh my, my poor imagination is swimming with images of what happens after that ending. well done.

Very nice.

Rarity the rapist.....I'll see myself out.

That... well, I... I mean...

...Damn.

Good job. You certainly have produced some feels, here. Now I think I'm going to go curl up in a corner and feel sorry for Pinkie Pie.

Ill just be the next person to cry a bit for pinkie. Well written? yes, painful to read? Oh so much. Well done. I like your take on fluttershy with the departure from crazy sex deviant to somewhere more reasonable. Twilight just scared me... Not cupcakes level scary but I related to rarity several times and the epilouge reaffirmed my discomfort with her (also well written just not my cup of tea). Rainbow was also unexpected but i liked her cuddle aspect, I haven't seen that much and you made it work beautifully. Applejack was the least innovative of their personalities, but I wouldent have it any otherway, after all she is a constant in character and it would seem dishonest (see what I did there? Lol) to show her any other way. However as much as I approve of rarity's buffing up and strengthening herself I dont think she would ever apple buck as well as even applebloom.
All in all I appreciate the beleiveability of the characters because even though I cant see it really happening, youve done a lot to mae it plausable and true to the characters while still being original (as far as I know, I havent read everything just yet). I hoe you can get the message of my review beyond my poor typing and lazy revisions in this comment, I usually dont do this but you left a lot to talk about.

This was a great chapter, my friend. So good I only have one nitpick:
--And then, she can go to withdrawn filly to passionately shoving me down to the ground in ten seconds flat.
Shouldn't that be "She can go FROM withdrawn filly" instead of to?

Otherwise, loved the chapter, it was quite revealing, and...I feel bad for Pinkie Pie, and more so for Rarity because...well...yeah.

Hats off to you, my friend. Very well done.

I must say that I find your depiction of Pinkie Pie absolutely excellent. That part was really touching.

I'm not sure that I agree with giving this piece a "rape" label, even if it might be fitting. It doesn't concern the bulk of the story, and it could potentially turn away readers who might otherwise enjoy it.

maybe you tried something different for this story or maybe that's ust how first person works but reading this felt way different and scenes were described in drastically different ways which made it difficult for me to follow what was being described....

also total anti climax 3/10.....

I... don't really have words for how good this is. Your take on Pinkie was especially interesting.

Also, Princess Twilight is bent. I like her.

I would very much like it if you ever decide to write a sequel to this detailing the further relationship between Twilight and Rarity. This story was sublime.

I... I don't know? Probably, most pin-point way to say how I felt about this, will be, strangely, that after the second chapter, I was reading with a smile on my face and laughs in my throat. No more, no less... Well, and some compassion for Pinkie and a bit of a cringe... on some personal things. Honestly, the "clop" chapters didn't strike me nearly as well as the first two did.

Nevertheless, well done, I did enjoy this quite a lot

I think you overstepped a bit with that last chapter - it didn't seem to mesh well with the rest of the story, but the rest of the story was excellent.

It would be really nice to see a story with the the topic of that "dumbing down to a mere Sex slave" from you