Wazzup mah ponehz? Okay, that was lame. I've been here for a while, but I've been away longer. I enjoy writing, and I love to see people enjoy it to. Hope you'll stick around!
When a rift tears Princess Twilight Sparkle's relationship with her first Lt. Rainbow Dash,
a war breaks out between Commander Rainbow's rebels and Equestrian forces.
Will Twilight come to the realization of her faults, or will her tyranny continue unto her downfall?
Find out in this brand new fic, "Twilight Gives Way to Dawn".
-not based off of, inspired by, or in any other way affected by the movie, "Red Dawn"-
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Sad. We could use some "Red Dawn" crossovers.
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Well, the thing is, I totally forgot about that movie...until i found out that's what it was called and decided to make it clear it wasn't a crossover...so i didn't get like a hundred dislikes because my short description said "Red Dawn" and they wanted to see a crossover
2451823 Fair point.
The characters seems to be a bit... OOC?
I don't think Twilight and Rarity would be less serious and making jokes if there was a war going on.
I also forgot to tell the viewers of this...I don't exactly have an editor.
So...it wouldn't surprise me if there were all sorts of mistakes.
Mistakes that EVERYPONY will be telling me about!
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hmmm.....I should have seen this happening before publication......thanks for pointing that out!
well, now i need to find a way to fix it without rewriting the whole thing....
Challenge accepted!
Just made a few changes.....hope it's more realistic than before....no more cutting up....this is WAR!
Hm, nice Idea!
But i've one question on my mind.. Who are the "goods" and who the "bads"?
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It is simple; Commander Dash and her Resistance are the good guys.
"Queen RedDawn" and "The Empire" are the bad guys......hence Twilight being all evil sounding and saying...
Granted it would have been clearer if it had been like"...that i killed a princess for", but whatever...now you know
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Okay, thanks
!
Nice Chapter. I love the concept of this story
!
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Thanks!
Was the action(what little there was) good?
I haven't written much action before and i am deathly afraid of part 2
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Sure
! Just a little bit to few Rainbow 
...
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There will be more rainbow in later chapters
She's just staying behind to continue with their plan making they left off.....don't worry...she'll have a crucial part to play in upcoming chapters. And if I do it just right....she'll be a bad-flank!
I have just created a blog about this story...It goes over pretty much anything of interest in this story.....including what may come about in the future, what times would work for new chapters, and currently, and most importantly.....where spike should be in this story...go check it out if you want!
I have gotten more and more dislikes on my story.
If there is a specific reason why you don't like it, please let me know, so i can either fix it or be stubborn and tell you it's perfect
Nice Chapter. Well written, and nice concept!
@LawPony
If the "dislikers" does not posts any comments, just ignore them ;).
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Thanx
What do you think about the spike situation? Bad guy or good guy?
Can't really decide if he should follow the Empire because of Twilight=older sister figure, and Rarity=crush, or the Resistance because he's smart enough to know what's right and what's wrong....
Should I add a sad tag to this? Until this chapter I didn't see a need...
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I think he know whats right and wrong, but doesn't want to join the war, because of "Twilight: Family" and "Rarity: Crush" :3
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This.....makes sense...but I haven't come up with a variant of the story where he's neutral.....i don't know....I might be able to make it work
And also...have a stache! you are the only reader currently getting involved!
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Hm, maybe just letting him out of the story ( Sorry for my bad english
)? So that the reader know "okay, he's not here" but no more 
?
Have a Moustache too
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Hmm...well without spoilers...I had an idea about either way he was in the story. And it would make the story longer and better either way....so I'm not sure if he shouldn't be there...If you want to know specifics, regardless of spoiler content, PM me, but I just didn't want to put it in the comments for everyone to see.
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Only reader? Challenge accepted.
I accept the slightly challenging quest to give you feedback! And....GO!
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more readers commenting on my story!
Did you like this chapter? I think I did well but I was deathly afraid of stupid mistakes on a very significant and important chapter
Ok, my feedback;
He quickly jabbing it
Use one tense only.
The story has potential, but you need to get Spike involved in coming chapter.
And make sure AJ and RD aren't brutally murdered. That would put most people (including me) off it.
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Oh...use one tense? did I use two different tenses? I didn't see that.
And do not worry...I have plans for these things....as far as I have gone with planning...it will be awesome! And with every chapter, I think through the ending...maybe it's my way of making sure I don't screw up a chapter to make my planned ending impossible
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Disregard my stupidity...I read it in your comment as "jabbed" like it should be....however! I have fixed it, thanx!
Noooo
!
Nice Chapter. I love the loyalty of the rebels. Just too sad that they lost
. And way too few rainbow 
!
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She will come in eventually, like...hopefully soon.
And I have decided to drop the spike tag, add a sad tag.....and add another tag
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Wait... Chrysalis
?
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yeah...she came up in my planning and I just got around to put her in officially...she'll appear for a scene of two as a "more important" character...is that reason enough to tag her?
Red Vs Blue, a pair of unnamed guards who get killed mid-sentence.
Good story mate. Half-expecting Pinkie to turn up sooner or later with how much she seems to hate Twilight.
Sweetie Belle's on the side of the resistance? Curious as to why she and her sister are on different sides. Also curious why Twilight's such an evil bitch.
Damn nice Chapter
! MOAR 
!
Ps:
Uh, I just did not understood the last dialogue.. Could you please explain it =S?
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Sure thing! Which part? The the one where they are outside the door?
The one outside the door, they were hearing the conversation we heard a few horizontal lines ago...and it shows us what they heard and saw leading up the door bursting open.
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Congratulations!
Also...I don't know if I'm going to put Pinkie back into the story or not.
Sweetie is a rebel because.....well....I'm the author? yeah..because I said so
And also Twilight has reason for this...you will see.....you'll all see! AAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!
But seriously...I don't really know what drove me to include the CMC in this...maybe because it would be weird to have them just not be here at all...and not explain why they aren't here.....maybe I'll have Rarity in all of her current evilness, be a complete jerk to Sweetie belle. Scootaloo stayed because Rainbow Dash is her sister-figure. And Applebloom stayed because her actual sister did. So...yeah
Yes. Continue.
Damn, great twist! First i thought it really was a dream.. But those last words... MOOOORRRREEEE!! (And don't DARE you to kill Rainbow
! She will win this!)
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Thanks! I was hoping my peeps would like it
We shall see...
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I was hoping that she doesn't win. I know it would be kind of [Grimdark], but there's so many "rebellion" stories and they always end with the rebellion winning. It would be nice to see a subversion.
I may have to postpone this story until May 30th because I am going to have to haul flank to get done with school.
Past May 30th I should have time to write chapters every day or so...but the school system I am in loves to give me portfolios to do, and they've gotten me behind.
So, I will try to keep it going, maybe a chapter a week, but I would just hate to stop completely.
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Oh, thats sad
.. But good luck with the shool!
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Thanx! In fact, at the moment of typing this message...I'm actually working on school
But come the thirtieth of this month...the story will go into un-hiatus!
Really friggin' good. Mustache for you.
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Why thank you! I used all mine up on the last person who named a reference....
psst....but I still have a bunch of these...don't ask where I got them
Another totally nice Chapter
! Keep up this great work, can't wait for more 
!
Oh, and...That cliffhanger
...
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No problem, glad I could help!
Red Dawn?
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Interesting....I should call their overall goal operation Red Dawn or Dawn of the.....red......dawn.........that sounded better in mah head