Wazzup mah ponehz? Okay, that was lame. I've been here for a while, but I've been away longer. I enjoy writing, and I love to see people enjoy it to. Hope you'll stick around!
Story one in a six part plot line.
Havoc, the bringer of chaos, has flung Twilight and the other elements into alternate dimensions. With the instruction to use their elements to complete the task he has handed them, they must get back home. How will Twilight service in a mirror world where she is now the antagonist? Will she play her role, or die refusing to hurt anyone?
Story line takes place in place of season 4 episodes 1 and 2.
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Interesting, let's see if they will win their test
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I kinda don't want her to win her test...but we shall see...
Also, congratz! First comment WOO HOO!
3728387 Well, it all depends of what happens if she lose her test, sure she must become a villain, but if it means that losing her test will result in apocalyptic storm of chaos on Equestria, winning her test mean a more happy ending. But maybe Havoc just meant that she had to use her magic to stole the candy of a little filly
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That is a good point. What Havoc was implying was that she had to become homicidal, raging, and fearsome. She literally has to be come an evil warlord to save her home...but will she be saving it after all? No one knows...well, I do...but no one else...
3728496 And that's why I want to see what will happens.Her test is something that I don't think a lot of people could do. But the worse of the test for me is the one that Rainbow Dash got. Mainly because she have to be loyal to a race that can have a totally different point of view.
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Exactly! They all have challenges that seem too difficult to accomplish. I mean, how can a single pony make a whole world happy using laughter? How can a pony show generosity to a race she's never known? How can Twilight kill ponies? Havoc pretty much set them up to fail. But the question is, "Did he make it hard enough?"
3732792 And if they win their test, how much will they change? Because I doubt that they will stay the same after the end their test. But what I really want to see is if Rarity and Rainbow Dash will appear in the aliens that are in war against each other.
I doubt it but it could make it harder for them to end the war, or easier.
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Stop putting ideas in mah head!
I'm back, and I'm watching.
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Yes, yes you are my friend. You joined just in time. I had said I would update Saturday...yesterday(obviously didn't). I think I will stay up late(for me, don't ask me to even try and know what time your zone is xD) and update tonight. Oh, and thanks for the fave!
Oh wow! I just realized that I misspelled servive in the description. It says "how will Twilight service in a..."
How did I not catch that it said service, not survive? Oh well...I'll fix it when I'm less tired...and lazy...
...
I'm here again.
(Really need to log into fimfiction more regularly.)
But this time, I promise to watch and mercilessly criticise every minor fault in this story.
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Oh...thanks...
And you are a dumb potato...
HAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
...
Wow... I loved this chapter, particularly the fight, as for where is the Twilight of this dimension? They are one and the same now.
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Good question. Where is she? Perhaps not even she knows...
Anyway, thanks, and I'm working on updating soon.
...or am I? MMUUUAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
JK
Also, I thought I'd just comment here before anybody read it and left. Chapter 2 will be renamed to match the first person nameing this chapter follows...just a minor change but one that might be confusing if not explained.
This chapter seemed... Meh. Unnecessary.
It could have waited and be put in with the next one. Oh well, I'm still watching and enjoying (and judging).
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Well this one was going to be the next one, but in the middle of writing I decided to split them up. The next chapter is going to (hopefully)be very long and full of stuff, so it just felt like it would have been too long a chapter if I didn't split it up.
(This comes from me personally not liking to be reading a story and there suddenly being a five thousand word chapter. I hate having to read that much at one time.)
Even if this chapter was short and not really interesting, there is still two thing that got my attention. First the Twilight of this world wasn't herself for some time already, and two, she made a group just in case she changed... Maybe she knew that would happen
That or she is just paranoiac
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Perhaps. You have good theories, too close to right for comment.
But I like how you brought up how Twilight from that world hadn't been feeling herself for a while now. The following chapters should delve a little deeper. Also, I found myself questioning why she had her mental brake. It is the accumulation of the injuries she took to the head, and (small spoiler) the fact that she was already mentally injured from...things...I wanted the fire hitting her horn to have something to do with it also...thus the no magic. But anyway, thanks for showing an interest, and I hope you look forward to the next one.
3931284 Well you definitively caught my interest, I got the 269 chapters in my favorite that I need to read, but your story is the only one that I read as soon as I see an update, have a mustache
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Oh wow, thank you!
You just made my ego skyrocket...now to go do something embarrassing to bring it down a notch or two for my own good
I would say she is not evil, but not faking too. She is just confused and hurt, she need a big hug
.
But since I love evil-crazy Twilight, I'll just tell her BURN THEM ALL
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Hahaha! Yes! I mean-!
She does need a hug though. But the question is, will she ever get one?
Thanks for reading and being active!
BURN IT ALL TO THE GROUND.
3963590 YUS! BUUUUUUURRRNNN!!!!!!
But srsly tho. What is it with my readers and burning with this chapter?
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That's not your readers.
I'm just semi-psychotic.
3979680 Have you read Arackn's last comment? Both of you said nearly the same thing about the burning
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Maybe I am Arackn.
Maybe I've taken over their account.
Maybe I AM THEIR ACCOUNT.
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Dun dun DUUUUUUNNN!!!
PS. While trying to hit the reply button(hit because I am using a tablet), I accidentally hit the delete button and scared the crap out of myself. Thank goodness for those "are you sure" messages we usually get annoyed by
Greetings and Salutations. So far I have only read the first chapter, and I think the idea sounds cool. My only complaint is all of the spelling errors. It was only a few, and I know how those tablets are hell to type on, so I'll forgive you. Also I love evil Twi. So don't kill her!
you know... unless it's in a totally epic way or she comes back later. Then it's cool.
Anyway, onto the corrections.
discernible
escalate
I don't know if the misspelled awful was intentional or not, but I figured I'd mention it.
Lastly is the way you write thoughts.
is correct except that it doesn't need the quotation marks. It only needs to be italicized, as in:
Sorry if you have already had that particular one before, but I figured I would tell you just in case. And I am not trying to sound arrogant here, correcting your writing without even having written a story before, but well, I read a lot. A LOT. I just don't have an artistic bone in my body.
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Dangit! I typed up this loooooong reply, and it didn't send.
So long story short, a sincere thank you, and I will use those helps. Also, thanks for the fave as well! 
-Lawpony
Oops. Did I sign off as Law? But here I'm Lawpony...
Well...oh well.
Good God, I've been away a long time.
Glad to see this story continue though.
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Yeah, I've been busy with school for like forever, but I've just recently found time here and there to edit little by little. That'd be why there's like two new chapters and not twelve.
So what are your thoughts on the story so far? Yay, neigh? Maybe a yay and a neigh because you're a pony and can't help it?
"You are a pony! Neigh neigh filly dee dee!"
Sorry, I had to
The annoying part about editing my story, is that it counts every time I read through it before I edit it a read from another random person. So I have sixteen views and ten of those are me.
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The irony...
So, I guess Rainbow was the Captain of the Guard ?
And those spies... They are totally sneaky 
4535888 well yes and no. Rainbow was not "the captain", she was one of six(wait did I say six?) Royal knights that protected the crown upon some random political decision I have yet to fully understand myself. Can you guess who the current other *counts fingers* four are?
Also notice this
I'll just leave you with that.
(PS. Yes they were creepy. They're lucky Slip Stream didn't get them caught! Gosh dangit Slip Stream...
4544310 Six towers, each with one of the Royal Knight, protecting the crown until one of them took the crown for himself... If that's it, then it feels like an rpg where you have to beat each of the Royal Knight in their towers until you reach the final boss
4546804 kinda. But mostly not even close.
I have it planned to be completely explained later. But if you want spoilers, just message me.
great story bro.
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Tell it again?
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Just thought you would like to know, I am currently editing the next chapter as I type(tho not really cuz I can't be typing on both, so I'll just be editing it as this sends to you lol)
One thing I wanted to say, I've been having major trouble with being able to edit my stories recently. First I had writer's block, then the edit button wouldn't work, then the login screen would always get stuck in an eternal loading screen. Finally, on a chance, I tried to login, and it worked. Then...on another chance...I tried to edit...
AND I COULD!!!!!!!!
So here I am all excited to continue the story! Oh, and school was keeping me behind too, like usual. Anyway, hope you come around to continue after such a long time away.
Does anybody else here know what the sex tag is for? I honestly have been gone so long that I have no clue why I tagged it...
Man that is sad.
5368078 Yay you're back! I must admit, it's good to see one of the old stories being updated.
As for that 5368422 ... well I dunno. I didn't even notice this tag.
A good chapter, but it seems I will have to reread the others, because I forgot most of the stuff
5369270 Hahaha!
Same here. I found myself going back to reread plot points and ponies' names because I had forgotten 
5369735 Well... it might be bad or it might be good, since like that you might have new ideas on what you will write. Also just noticed that there was a Tragedy tag
Does that mean no happy ending, or some characters will have a tragic end? I never understood this tag
Oh and after reading the previous chapter I can say one thing : I love it, and I remembered what trials the others elements had. Damn you are an evil person
5370020 hehehe
Well, the tragedy tag is there for pretty much everything. I'm not going to spoil it so I am confined to saying what it covered so far. Twilight is up against her old friends, there's a civil war, there was much death in previous battles and will be to come. Emerald(is that what her name was?) was killed pretty much right in front of Twilight. Add in the part where she's halfway mad and you've got yourself a tragic story
