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  • E Petriculture

    Twilight tries to figure out how rock farming works.
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  • T Inscape

    When Twilight is taken by the Nightmare, it's up to Pinkie Pie to rescue her.
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  • E Avocation

    Penumbra seeks gainful employment.
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  • T Wild, Sweet & Cool

    Rainbow Dash wants to add strength training to her regimen by having Twilight Sparkle ride her.
    34,747 words · 14,838 views  ·  1,631  ·  26
  • E π

    Trixie returns to Ponyville to challenge Twilight Sparkle. ("Magic Duel" as it occurs in the Petriculture AU.)
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  • T Pandelirium

    Celestia decides to attempt to reform Discord, so she taps a pony with a similar background for the job. ("Keep Calm and Flutter On" as it occurs in the Petriculture AU.)
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  • E So, Just What Went Wrong, Anyway?

    Before Applejack's pep rally, Derpy was acting really weird... even for her. This is why.
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  • E The Final Accusation: A Legal Comedy

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Blog Posts400

  • Tuesday

    Tomorrow, Persona Q is released, and I can honestly say that I've never been more excited about a video game in my entire life (though given that I didn't really start playing them in earnest until I was in graduate school, that statement isn't quite as hyperbolic as it sounds). But in all honesty, I think this game just may be the first time I've ever made a "Day One" purchase of a video game.* I'm absolutely certain that it will be the first time I've ever taken a day off from work because of a new game, though in my case, that day off will be Wednesday, because a) I'm not going to have a chance to play the game until it arrives in the mail on Tuesday afternoon, and b) Thursday and Friday are the Thanksgiving holiday, so I figured, "Why not make it a 5-day weekend?"

    Whatever. In any case, this game is the reason I bothered to purchase a 3DS in the first place. I'm excited.

    *The closest I'd ever gotten before was an impulse "Day Three" purchase of South Park: The Stick of Truth earlier this year, which turned out to be a "Day One" edition because my local independent video game store had slightly overestimated the demand for the game.

    4 comments · 73 views
  • 6d, 1h
    Prereader Conversation: Silly


    Thanks for the bunny picture.‏


    friend just linked it and i couldnt resist‏


    I get panicked when silly music doesn't help [with a bad mood].‏


    i know that feeling‏


    Usually, silly music makes me happy really quickly.‏


    for me it's friends telling jokes or cute animal pics‏


    Of course, maybe I didn't pick the best silly music.‏ You see, the songs I've been listening to are silly because the lyrics don't match the actual tune.‏ The lyrics are all goofy and happy-go-lucky and squeaky-clean-sunshine, but the actual music is over-the-top aggressive.‏‏

    Ordinarily, hearing someone rhyme‏ "Paul Bunyan" with onomatopoeia for a chainsaw motor ("run-yun-yun-yun") makes me smile every time.

    P.S. - If you're one of my other prereaders, don't worry -- you didn't miss a message where I said I was working on something. This conversation was in Skype, not GDocs.

    3 comments · 115 views
  • 1w, 4h
    Flash Fog: Revision 2

    I've posted the second of the two revisions that I've planned for Flash Fog. This one is a bit wordier than the last one, so I'd just recommend reading it in the epilogue. It's the section about Lyra and Bon-Bon. I know a few people might prefer to have a more detailed description of the actual meeting that Fluttershy mentions, but there was one very huge obstacle to doing it that way: I'm out of material. Given that Lyra and Bon-Bon, being delusional weirdos,* don't change their opinions on humans at all, the actual conversation itself would just be a retread of all their previous conversations, and I simply could not think of any more approaches to the subject that were amusing enough to warrant a full scene.

    * Though, as I've noted before, the final sequence of the first EQG movie demonstrates that there is far more truth in their delusions than anypony (or their author, or that matter) could ever have anticipated.

    5 comments · 149 views
  • 2w, 2h
    Flash Fog: Revision 1

    I've posted the first of my planned revisions to the ending of Flash Fog. Since it's not particularly long, I'll also post it in the quotebox below for those who have already read the original version.

    As Celestia’s sun beat down upon her face, Apple Bloom smiled broadly. She’d completely forgotten that it had been a warm day before the fog rolled in. Nearby, she could see Rainbow Dash transporting Scootaloo in a similar fashion. The fog slid beneath them, though it was a brilliant white now that they were above it. To the east, a great column of white rose over the Everfree forest, expanding outwards like a great vertical fan as the sun’s heat warmed and evaporated the newly reborn clouds, the whiteness gradually blending into the bold, bright blue of the cloudless sky. And to the northwest, the peaks of the Unicorn Range jutted out of the last vestiges of the fog, free to once again bask in the late-summer sunlight.

    If you're wondering why it took so long for me to finish this paragraph, there's two reasons. First, I decided to take a little break from writing after finishing Flash Fog, and second, one of my prereaders wasn't certain whether the description of the dissipating fog was meteorologically feasible. To be honest, I'm not certain myself, so I let it sit for a day or two while I decided whether the allusion to Dante's Paradiso was worth the potential use of artistic license.* As you can tell, I decided that it was.

    * This was a particularly vexing decision since I'm fairly certain that Dante himself didn't bother to point out that he has arranged Heaven in the shape of a fan, since all of his original readers already shared his geocentric worldview. Still, this aspect of the Paradiso was one of the most memorable details in the lecture one of my professors gave on the Divine Comedy, and it still holds a lot of meaning for me.

    2 comments · 136 views
  • 3w, 3h
    The End?

    This blog post deals with the end of the story Flash Fog, which means that if I used spoiler tags over every potential spoiler it would just be an ugly wall of black text. I'm going to do my best to avoid excessive detail, but to be on the safe side, you may want to give this blog post a pass if you haven't finished the story and you actually care about spoilers.

    Alright, folks, I've been reading over the responses to the ending, and I figured that I might as well make a blog post instead of responding to a few repeated points in the comments section. I noticed that some of you had a few qualms with my approach. I'd like to respond to three points in particular (quotations are paraphrased):

    1. "You never actually showed the fog dissipating."

    I literally smacked my forehead when I read this, because I had planned on having Apple Bloom look at the fog dissipating over the Everfree Forest before she turned her head and saw that the mountaintops were now mostly clear (meaning that the wind had blown all of it over the mountain range). Boneheaded forgetfulness on my part; this part will almost certainly be rewritten to include the imagery I already had in mind for the dissipating fog. I'll be sure to inform you in a later blog post if/when this change is made.

    2. "What about Lyra and Bon-Bon?"

    Honestly, it hadn't occurred to me that their subplot, being primarily a form of comic relief, needed any sort of resolution, though upon reconsideration, I can see why that might be desired. At the moment, I have a few vague ideas of how to modify the epilogue to include the fate of SPHERE without it feeling like a blob of exposition that was shoehorned into the conversation between Pencil Pusher and Fluttershy for its own sake, so there's a good chance that this will revisited as well. Again, if changes are made, I'll make another blog post.

    3. "Abrupt."

    This one's a bit trickier. I suppose I can understand why the some of my readers thought that the rescue of the CMC would be more drawn-out and complicated. At this point, all I'm willing to say is that I had planned for their rescue to go off without a hitch since the earliest stages of this story---soon after I realized just how complicated the rest of the story would be, in fact. I don't want to go into a lot of details, mostly because I don't want to shove my personal interpretation of the story down my readers' throats, but I made this decision for thematic reasons, as opposed to any intuition that I needed to "wrap up" the story as quickly as possible. (I was going to write a sentence explaining things further here, but everything I came up with sounded way too pretentious and/or rather blatantly contradicted my stated desire to not shove my interpretation down your throats.) This aspect of the ending will almost certainly not be rewritten, but I hope that those of you who disagree with my decision will at least be able to take some enjoyment from the story as a whole.

    22 comments · 384 views
  • ...

When Fluttershy received her certification as a fog specialist, she only wanted a plausible excuse to write off the expenses associated with her ground-based house on her taxes. However, when an accident in Cloudsdale sends a blanket of industrial-grade clouds rolling towards Ponyville, Fluttershy suddenly finds herself in charge of coordinating the response, mostly because she's the only fog specialist in the area. Can our heroine step up to the challenge at hoof, or will she risk facing the wrath of the Equestrian Revenue Service?

Artwork by Page Turner. Now with a TVTropes page!

First Published
18th Sep 2012
Last Modified
3rd Nov 2014

More Kwakerjak story!  :pinkiehappy:  :yay:  :twilightsmile:

This is quite possibly the most insanely brilliant exploration of equestrian heavy industry I have seen. And it's only just started...

Working in a factory that makes what is essentially pegasus bricks can be quite dangerous if those bricks are stored in tanks that can overfill and explode. Those poor ponies.:fluttershysad:

Ohh, no emergency venting system huh? It'd be a mess either way, but so much for that factory's equipment...

Naughty Fluttershy, prepare to be audited.  

You know, I think you should have held off with posting the story until you had enough of it the description doesn't count as spoilers. On its own, right now this story contains a not really the most exciting description of an industrial accident and there isn't even a shadow of a hint what impact does it have on anything.

I like it. Moar soon plz.

I like posting my prologues alongside the first chapter, but wtfever, right?

This is great, and I can't wait to see where it's going.

"was under a best-case scenario"

This line threw me, though.  Maybe it's just me, but I feel like "was less than" would read better.

I'll add you to my ever growing stack of "read laters"

I have a question, because I seem to be missing something:

“Crap! I completely forgot! The denser formula means that the holding tanks fill up faster, which means the ceiling on the intake rate is lower than normal!”

If the clouds are denser, thus have less volume if we assume the same mass or at least the same production rate mass/time, how can they fill the tanks faster?

Looking forward to more! (As per usual for your stories.) Well-written, interesting dialogue, intriguing premise, need I go on?

I kind of agree with Ottermatt in that the phrase in question struck me as odd. I'm guessing it was meant to portray a sense that "boring is wonderful when compared to catastrophe", but it just stood out to me. *shrug*

In any case, please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Quite an interesting concept. I look forwards to its development.


Nice work.  The behavior of the OCs seems very natural, and you are clearly taking your time to flesh things out as you go which is always nice so I am looking forwards to seeing where this goes.

>>1298092 - The idea I had is because they're denser, they're less compressible, causing pressure inside the tanks to build up faster. Thus, if the clouds are allowed to enter the holding tanks at the same rate as normal clouds (thinking in terms of volume over time, rather than mass over time), there's much less time for the technician to correct problems. This might not line up with real-world physics/meteorology, but on the other hand, these clouds have been imbued with seriously powerful pegasus magic, so one can't expect them to behave normally.

Wouldn't the expanding clouds cause the factory turn in to a massive frag grenade

by way of pegasi shooting out in every direction like shrapnel and the clouds being the explosive

>>1298193 - Actually, it was meant to imply that Flywheel's job wasn't just boring; it was also stressful, thanks to the mandatory overtime and the shift change.


>>1298048 I know how that feels, I think mine is up to two hundred :twilightoops:

I like the back story so far, can't wait to see Flutters being in charge of something.:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:



Oopsie, there I go and forget all about the pegasus magic again:twilightblush:.

I guess I can live with this explain, as long as this story proceeds as well as all your others.

Wow, this is really interesting. The description alone makes it sound like an actual episode, but this goes into far more detail and complexity. Exxxxcellent.

Damn, that would suck to be those two...shit, I'm enjoying this story, I like it, I'll be watching for more and I'm hoping to see how this affects Fluttershy.

I've long thought that if fog rolled in, pegasi would all be trapped in their houses and unable to help clear it away, since clouds are solid to them. Or at best they could slowly bash their way through it. I was even thinking of making a comic a while back with that as the joke, but never got around to it, so I'm curious to see if that's anything like what you're going to do.

>>1298726 Starcat... 10515 on the read later?

I think this calls for an intervention.

You have a problem, good sir or madam.

Either get rid of the majority of those stories,

Or master your time management so that you can actually read more than you add at a time.

Like I said to another story: I'd reccomend finishing at least the first chapter before posting your story, so readers have both the prolouge and the first chapter. Prolouges are like teasers, I believe. I may be unfair, and I apologise if I am doing so. Either way, I have put this story into my"read later".


Wow. :rainbowderp: I've only just reached 300 myself.

Teach me all your secrets.:pinkiecrazy:

Okay, this actually sounds really interesting. I can't wait to see how this plays out.

I would assume that seeing as it would likely involve a rigorous test to become a specialist for fog control, Flutters would have the skill necessary to deal with it. Leading a group of ponies to do so on the other hand...

What Flutters needs is for FlutterCruel to come out and take the reigns, and smash that fog to bits!


Technically, they're under favorites, but since I've been here for a year and a half or more (That answer your question, >>1299970 ?), my original tracking list had been unceremoniously dumped into my Favorites list. At this point, it just seems easier to just keep using the Star for tracking, and just Un-Staring anything that sucks.

As for the fog... burn it. Burn it all.

Hmm, is it just me or have there been quite a few "Pony has to do something do to government/ legal loophole" stories lately... then again it is an election year.

Oh well, still a fun read.

Aaaaaand tracked.

Gonna put this on my watch list atm till another chapter or two comes out, all I know so far is the synopsis makes this sound kinda hilarious. : )


Flywheel stifled a yawn as she stared at the myriad gauges in front of her. Hers was not the most glamorous job around, but that didn’t mean it wasn’t important (according to her supervisor, anyway). "

You have me. Right. Here.

I am HOOKED. I am now obligated to read the rest of this prologue. Kudos to you, brony. :derpyderp1:


Well, they're kind of selectively solid.

I'm as (or more) guilty of this as the next Ponyficcer, but I see a lot of emphasis in this community on the airshippy steampunky aspects of the universe, quasi-old-timey science and magic used to mimic modern or near-future technology.  This is both fine and understandable, but it's nice from time to time to see a story that does some expansion on the admittedly bizarre and surreal "drivers of natural processes" role that this species plays in the canon, which is to say, quasi-old-timey science and magic used to mimic stuff that nature usually takes care of by itself.  Thanks for sharing, looking forward to seeing how this goes.

Liking it so far, and quite interested to see where it goes!

The weather industry is one of my favourite things in My Little Pony, so I'm definitely following this! It'll be fun to see Fluttershy doing pegasus stuff for once.:fluttershysad:

ERS! o crap....and i thought the IRS was bad enough!


The tanks are compressed I assume. Denser clouds wouldn't be able to be compressed as much. (Ignoring the whole compressing water thing)

im really looking forward to seeing this.

really great intro

you have a very capturing writing style

I'm not much of a literary person so I can't really offer you any constructive critisism on your writing because to me it looks pristine and totally flawless.

However I have worked as a industrial operator and to me these scenes feel both plausable and familiar. Well done! I'm hooked, again!

I'd like to ad 1 tidbit as to why this feels so familiar to me aswell:

The relation between the Operator and the janitor in the factory reminds me of the relationship common between maintenance crew and production crew in many factories. While the production is halted due to problems the maintenance crew is kneedeep in shit working to fix whats disrupting production. In such cases production workers (who at this point will be rolling their thumbs (if they have any)) will sometimes be reassigned to help out maintenance to fix shit faster. But when production is going flawlessly maintenance finally gets a break, but then the production workers will be sweating cuz production is going 100%. It's like when 1 unit gets a breather the other is sweatin'. so while your grateful to get a break you also feel guilty for enyoying your slack because the other units bustin balls. And that guilttrip can make the 2 units reach out and help each other in ways that is alien to most other workplaces.

I've been there and I've been offered a cup o joe by a friendly maintenance guy just like that. It just feels so frigging real it's scary.

PS That paranthesis about if the workers have thumbs isn't only a pony linguo reference, I worked at a sawmill so I heard a tale or two about missing digits. Seen one too. not that I'd wanna get into details. t'was nasty shit.

Interesting.  But Los Pegasus, I think, was supposed to parody Los Angeles.  Hence the name, Angels, Pegasi.  Anyway.

>>1302825 No shit sherlock? :P That has been used in countless fics be4.

Well, I'm being an ass here.

Change of tune: Welcome to the the glory of fimfiction. Hope you enyoy your stay. I have.

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