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TFlash Sentry, Defender of the Peace S7
MLP: FiM
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Flash and his friends return, trying to live their lives as peacefully as they can. But life if rarely so peaceful, as our heroes are about to find out.
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Grand Hoof: The Legend Begins

This story is a sequel to Flash Sentry Chronicles: Dragon's Awakening

Let's journey back to a time before Flash Sentry, before the Elements of Harmony and before all the adventures that would go down in history as Equestria's most eventful age. To a time when Equestria was on a edge of crisis and needed a hero to save it. But who is that hero? What is the crisis facing Equestria? This is that story.

Edited by KingJoltik

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Prologue · 29th Jun 2021 · 7,738 words
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A New Threat Looms · 6th Jul 2021 · 5,909 words
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Cutie Markers · 13th Jul 2021 · 6,254 words
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A Booming Party · 20th Jul 2021 · 7,298 words
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Chaos in Canterlot · 3rd Aug 2021 · 6,657 words
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An Explosive Confrontation · 10th Aug 2021 · 5,562 words
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KennyBrony19971

KennyBrony19971 #1 · Jun 29th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

This was An Good first chapter this story. And. Still im feel very bad for grand like im feel really bad to grand. And. Yeah even we make those Mistakes like this but im hope grand cheer himself up for it and im can't wait for the next chapter of this story

Ragnarok17 #2 · Jun 29th, 2021 · 2 · · Prologue ·

Damn! I know Grand did something bad in the past but I didn't expect to be that gruesome! No wonder why Grand rarely tells this one to Flash and others.

Do I smell the bromance between Grand and Doom?Although, I had a feeling that Doom eventually would die considered we don't see him in the present day.

I am curious of how Grand eventually becomes a Royal Knight, despite Grand feels he doesn't deserve it after what happened to his friends.

She then turned to the envelope and opened it up, pulling out the letter, now seeing it was smudged beyond recognition. The baby's name was one of those things, the first part slightly smudged, but its last name was gone. "Grand..." she whispered after squinting. Grumbling at the sight, she glanced down at the foal, "Well little one, until we learn the rest of your name, you'll have to use Equestria's stand-in name." She held the foal up as it began to laugh at her. "Welcome, Grand Hoof."

Why I had a feeling this scene would lead to important plot point? I means Grand being abandoned in the orphanage is exactly the same way as Flash… what is up with parents abandoned their kids? Are they too lazy to take care of them? I understand Flash's parents but definitely not whoever is Grand's parent?

"You can come up," he laughed, "As long as you pledge undying loyalty to me." Some of the kids agreed to climb up, but others refused despite trying to climb up anyway. "I don't think so." He went over and pushed a colt down, the unicorn crying out as he hit the ground. "I'm the one in charge here, and I decide who gets to use it!"

Geez, I know Grand say he was different person when he was young but damn! His younger self is an ass!

"Grand, don't be rude." She gestured to the pony as the other children walked up. "Everypony, we have a new member of the family here today. This is Doom Chaser. He'll be staying here for the foreseeable future, so I want you all to do you best to make him feel welcome." She then turned to the colt, "I'll be in the office if you need me. Take some time to get to know everypony, and then we'll start setting up your room."

Doom Chaser? Why do I had a feeling this character is going to be the deuteragonist of this fic? And he have same name and same rhythm as Doom Raizer… oh my! No wonder why he named his son "Doom"… oh dear! It makes it even worse!

The manticore roared before bouncing at the nearest pony, who was completely frozen in fear as the giant claw came for the colt. All he could do was scream, only to be silenced instantly. As this happened, Grand groaned as he felt himself come around, his entire body hurting as he tried to move. His eyes were closed, but his ears were working...and all he could hear was the sounds of screams and cries. Then when he finally opened his eyes, he was met with a sight no young pony should ever been shown.
Blood was splattered on the grass and trees, the now still forms of his friends all scattered around the clearing. He noticed a body drop down in front of him, its face turning to stare up at him. It was the face of one colt he had known almost his entire life...and now he just laid there, his eyes open and lifeless.
"No..." he whispered before feeling something dampen his hoof. He glanced down and saw blood soaking his hoof and lower leg, which was pouring out of the wound in the colt's stomach. "No!" He screamed before jumping back, trying to wash the blood from his hoof, only to soak the other one. He then looked around at the rest of the clearing, now seeing all the ponies he had led into this massacre. His eyes grew wider, his brain shutting down at the sight. He now was Doom was right. He was no hero...just a colt that doomed a group of children.

Oh…. My…. God…. 😧😧😧😧

That really brutal, man!

"I don't deserve to be here," Grand continued to cry. "I was the one that lead them into the forest. I was the one that convinced them to go after the manticore. I was the one that threw the first rock. So why am I the only one still alive?" Careheart covered her mouth as Doom just glared at him, watching him continue to cry into his legs. "Why won't somepony punish me?! I don't deserve to be here. I should be thrown in prison. I don't deserve to have any kind of life."

Poor Grand…

"ANYTHING!" Doom screamed, "You're alive, and that means you need to keep living!" Grand looked away, but Doom grabbed his shoulders and yanked his head, making him stare at each other in the eyes, "You're gonna leave this room and go to the graveyard, and you're gonna count every single grave you filled. Each of those graves is a sin, and you're gonna spend every day making up for what you did. If you wanna punish yourself, then do it by doing something good! Become somepony that can stop what happened from happening again!"

Huh? That's how he got his catchphrase from.

As it flew upward, Grand took a deep breath before taking one final look at all the names. He now knew what he would have to do. He would spend the rest of his life making up for the mistake he made. He had counted up his sins, and now,his quest to make up for them began. He would protect as many ponies as he could, no matter what it cost him. As that thought entered his head, a flash of light caught the two's attention, making him look back at his flank. And as the light faded, it revealed the image of a black shield with a smaller white shield inside of it.

Despite what happened, Grand finally earned his Cutie Mark once he decides to atone his sins.

I can't wait to meet Royal Knights from the past since all of current Royal Knights (except Grand who is young and Skybreaker who is even younger) are not born yet.

nathanb

nathanb #3 · Jun 29th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

So much lore, so many questions solved but many more have been raised. Poor Grand didn't deserved this brutal punishment. Didn't imagine young Grand to be this rude. Hope to see the next chapter soon good work.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #4 · Jun 29th, 2021 · 1 · · Prologue ·

Holy cheese & crackers that was quite the brutal first entry on Grand's Tale! I mean longtime readers (like myself) have known he had some skeletons in his closet but I never expected it went like that!

Also we finally got where the *count up your sins* catchphrase came from.......just DAMN!!!!

The friendly rivalry between Grand & Doom was cool to see, course now I'm worried for him since we already had a defense system named after him (so to speak) so we'll see how that goes!

Here are some Highlights for this first showing :

But as they disappeared, the baby started fussing and rocked back and forth, the envelope on top of him slipping off and falling down the porch, sliding out of the protection of the porch.
And as the rain began to soak up the paper, the door opened and a middle-aged unicorn walked out and saw the foal. The pink mare gasped as she grabbed the foal in her magic along with the letter, then stared at the darkness. Sighing at the night, she glanced down at the foal, which pulled itself free of the bundle and began yanking her yellow mane. "Ow! Please don't do that."
She then turned to the envelope and opened it up, pulling out the letter, now seeing it was smudged beyond recognition. The baby's name was one of those things, the first part slightly smudged, but its last name was gone. "Grand..." she whispered after squinting. Grumbling at the sight, she glanced down at the foal, "Well little one, until we learn the rest of your name, you'll have to use Equestria's stand-in name." She held the foal up as it began to laugh at her. "Welcome, Grand Hoof."

Ugh seriously, way to tease us Banshee!

"You can come up," he laughed, "As long as you pledge undying loyalty to me." Some of the kids agreed to climb up, but others refused despite trying to climb up anyway. "I don't think so." He went over and pushed a colt down, the unicorn crying out as he hit the ground. "I'm the one in charge here, and I decide who gets to use it!"
"You bully!" a pegasus filly barked back.
"I'm not a bully," Grand replied before patting his chest, "I'm just trying to make sure there's order here. If anypony could do whatever they wanted, it would be ana...ana...that word I can't say."

I can see why Grand took a liking to young Flash right away, they were both meatheads! (haven't heard that in like forever )

"My parents always said respect should be earned," Doom replied, waving his hoof. Grand glared at him at this, the rest of the kids going wide as they heard the word 'parents'. That is, till Doom added, "And I don't think you've earned it." With that, Doom spread his wings and began to flap them, flying just barely up to the jungle gym.
"HEY!" Grand yelled before leaping after him, tackling the pegasi. Both hit the dirt, wrestling as they rolled across the ground. The rest just watched them tussle...only to see both barely move, both stuck in a tight brace. And after several minutes, the pair fell over, exhaustion already taking over as they tried to get up.
"Wow...somepony pushed Grand to a draw," a filly gasped.
"Nopony's done that before," a colt continued.

Kinda like this Doom fellow, well played!

"Morning everypony," he announced, "Now, before we get started, I have an announcement. Until further notice, the woods around town are out of bounds." This made everypony go wide-eyed before turning to Numb as the teacher continued, "A creature has been discovered in the woods, a manticore. The grownups are going to try and figure out how to deal with it, so absolutely nopony is allowed into the woods. Understood?"
The ponies all nodded back, some now knowing they would miss playing in the woods while others wondered how long the manticore would be there. But as the class started, Doom turned to Grand, thinking about what kind of idiot would go and try and find the monster.
And when that thought entered his head, he saw a smirk appear on Grand's lips, making him sigh. "Oh no..."

Oh no indeed, bad bad idea!

"I'll find a way." Grand pointed to himself, "After all, I'm a future Royal Knight."
"You're the furthest thing from a Royal Knight," Doom instantly responded, "Royal Knights are supposed to selflessly face danger so nopony else has too. Not lead an army of gullible kids into a monster. All you want is bragging rights. That's all you care about. Being a knight so ponies have to do as they're told. Well, it's not gonna happen." He pointed at Grand's empty flank. "If you were meant to be a Royal Knight, you would have gotten a cutie mark the moment you decided to become one."

Totally got you there Grand!

He stopped as Doom mumbled through the tape, Cruncher grabbing it and ripping it off his mouth.
"AUGH!" He cried as he felt some of his fur yank off with the tape, Cruncher then undoing the ropes with his magic. Once he was freed, he leapt at his friend. "Go wake up Ms. Careheart! Tell her that Grand and the others have gone into the wood. Wake up anypony you can and tell them!" Before Number could say anything else, Doom leapt toward the nearest window and threw it open.
"Wait! Where are you going?!"
"To try and stop them before it's too late!" And with that, he flew out of the place, zipping into the night, "Please don't let me be too late..."

Something tells me is far too late for that!

"Raaaaah!" He yelled, ready to grab onto the beast's mane and...not having an idea of what to do after that. But it didn't matter, for the manticore heard him and swung around to bash him with the back of its paw. "AUGH!" He cried as he was shot flying over the others, slamming into a tree, screaming in pain before falling over.
The other young ponies gasped at the sight of their leader, now slumped out on the ground before turning to the angry eyes of the beast. Only now did they see how foolish they were...but it was too late.
The manticore roared before bouncing at the nearest pony, who was completely frozen in fear as the giant claw came for the colt. All he could do was scream, only to be silenced instantly. As this happened, Grand groaned as he felt himself come around, his entire body hurting as he tried to move. His eyes were closed, but his ears were working...and all he could hear was the sounds of screams and cries. Then when he finally opened his eyes, he was met with a sight no young pony should ever been shown.
Blood was splattered on the grass and trees, the now still forms of his friends all scattered around the clearing. He noticed a body drop down in front of him, its face turning to stare up at him. It was the face of one colt he had known almost his entire life...and now he just laid there, his eyes open and lifeless.
"No..." he whispered before feeling something dampen his hoof. He glanced down and saw blood soaking his hoof and lower leg, which was pouring out of the wound in the colt's stomach. "No!" He screamed before jumping back, trying to wash the blood from his hoof, only to soak the other one. He then looked around at the rest of the clearing, now seeing all the ponies he had led into this massacre. His eyes grew wider, his brain shutting down at the sight. He now was Doom was right. He was no hero...just a colt that doomed a group of children.

Holey................................................, brutal doesn't even come close regarding this scene!

He slammed him into the floor as he continued, "You're right Grand, you don't deserve to be here. And if I could trade your life for any of the lives you cost, I would have."
"Doom!" Careheart screeched with wide eyes, "What are you-"
"But I can't, so we have to live with things as they are. And that means you're not gonna just waste away in here!"
"Then what do I do?" Grand barked back.
"ANYTHING!" Doom screamed, "You're alive, and that means you need to keep living!" Grand looked away, but Doom grabbed his shoulders and yanked his head, making him stare at each other in the eyes, "You're gonna leave this room and go to the graveyard, and you're gonna count every single grave you filled. Each of those graves is a sin, and you're gonna spend every day making up for what you did. If you wanna punish yourself, then do it by doing something good! Become somepony that can stop what happened from happening again!"

Quite the way for this catchphrase to be born, I'm speechless!

Grand took a deep breath before taking one final look at all the names. He now knew what he would have to do. He would spend the rest of his life making up for the mistake he made. He had counted up his sins, and now,his quest to make up for them began. He would protect as many ponies as he could, no matter what it cost him. As that thought entered his head, a flash of light caught the two's attention, making him look back at his flank. And as the light faded, it revealed the image of a black shield with a smaller white shield inside of it.
"My cutie mark," he whispered.

Now that was quite the trail by fire for Grand's cutie mark here, damn! (again)

That was quite the bloody first entry here Banshee, looking forward to see where it goes from here!

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #5 · Jun 29th, 2021 · 3 · · Prologue ·

Holy cow! This got intense right from the start!

Ever since Grand mentioned in The Knight of Friendship that he became a Royal Knight to atone for his past I have been curious what exactly he has been trying to atone for. My initial thoughts were that he was an ex-criminal who realized the error of his ways, or he murdered someone once and regrets it. But the true reason, that he led all those kids to their deaths in a misguided attempt at being a hero really is dark.

Plus I guess now we know where Grand got his "count up your sins" catchphrase from. It isn't just a warning to his enemies, but a constant reminder to himself for what he did. I understand why he blames himself, and it was his fault for being stupid and reckless, but there comes a time when he should be allowed to forgive himself after all the good he has done over the years afterwards.

I was also surprised that there was another "Doom" in Grand's past. I'm guessing Grand named him son "Doom Raizer" in honor of his friend "Doom Chaser".

HolyCross9 #6 · Jun 29th, 2021 · 1 · · Prologue ·

Now this is a story that the young Fire Heart will need to hear about if he ever wants to become a great Royal Knight like Grand or Flash. Heart can definitely take and use many moral lessons from Grand's life story.

Gta Player #7 · Jun 29th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

And as the light faded, it revealed the image of a black shield with a smaller white shield inside of it.

Can someone tell me if there's a meaning behind his cutie mark, cause I'm not sure.

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #8 · Jun 30th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

Yeah, I get that Doom Chaser's advice was what finally got Grand off his butt, but that advice is only going to hurt him and his mental health in the long run. I mean, if Grand doesn't give himself room for forgiveness, all those sins are going to pile up and destroy him.

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #9 · Jul 2nd, 2021 · · 3 · Prologue ·

Not a bad prologue, but why does everyone have to lose something to become a hero, whatever happened to do the right thing because it is the right thing? That's a serious question, why couldn't Grand's have 'doing right for right's own sake' be his motive? It would really hammer home the cost of being a Royal Knight he has had to pay, namely his terrible father-son and grandfather-grandson relationships. Know it sets up that Grand's life story and his time as a Royal Knight comes off as the the near futility of seeking atonement, given his relationships with his son and grandson, especially if Flash was not part of his life.
I know I am suppose to feel bad for Grand, and I should be interested in Grand's origins, but I can't. I can't because at the end of this Grand will 'atone' for the lives of the foals he lead to their deaths, but that will only lead into his relationships with Doom (his son) and Lightning Blitz and we know how those relationships caused far more harm, endangered more lives, etc, than leading an unspecified but doubtfully large number of foals to any early grave, a cost that undermines his quest for atonement that will be the focus of this story.
Now had Grand's motives been 'doing right because it is the right thing to do' we can better compare or contrast him to Flash and we can see the previously unseen costs of being a Royal Knight and see if Flash is capable of paying the same price as Grand and/or how Flash will respond if forced to face the same issue, much like the Machete Order of watching Star Wars, we see Flash's story to a point and then we see Flash's predecessor's (Grand) life and how Grand either falls short and we wonder if Flash will succeed where Grand failed or will fail like Grand or we see Grand succeeded and we wonder if Flash will succeed as well or will he fail.
However that story can't be told now, because we will have to see if Grand can say if his disastrous relationships with his son and grandson (without any interference from Flash) was worth trying to atone for his err? Does how he failed as a father and grandfather negate his acts of repentance? Either question really deserve an answer, because this over all series is about Flash, therefor the questions we should be asking at the end of this entry and seeing if we can uncover those answers in Season 7, the Movie, Season 8 and Season 9 are 'will Flash fail in the same places Grand failed?' and 'How can Flash avoid the same pitfalls or is he DOOMED to repeat his mentor's mistakes?'

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #10 · Jul 2nd, 2021 · · 3 · Prologue ·

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Well, Grand was for the longest time a terrible grandfather and is still a terrible father, so yeah fixation on past errors... not very conducive for raising a child or grandchild

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #11 · Jul 2nd, 2021 · · 3 · Prologue ·

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heck he named is own son 'one who awakens (raizer which is an alternate spelling of raiser) judgment, fate, ruin and/or death (doom)'... and in the land of rainbows and sunshine where everyone's name matches them to a 't'... to quote Tony Stark 'Not a good plan.'

Not that Doom Chaser has that much better of a name, which literally means 'one who follows, hunts or pursues (chaser) judgement, fate, ruin and/or death'

Zipp Storm #12 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

Once that was done, the criminals were transported off to prison to await trail,

Change trail to trial

Ragnarok17 #13 · Jul 6th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

It seems Cutie Markers are the one that causing a crisis for Equestria.

I know Grand doesn't want to get higher rank but eventually, he have to be Royal Knight to stop Technica and her Cutie Markers.

Here's highlights

"Big Score," the first unicorn walked over to the desk. "Nice to see business is booming." Score opened a draw and magicked the bits into it, "How's the family?"

Big Score? Damn! I didn't expect you to appear! Wait, is Big Score in his mid twenties cause Big Score must be in his either sixties or seventies when Flash confront him.

"Yes, I think so, but I want a second opinion before I can to be certain." As she said that, the throne room doors opened and they turned to see a pale blue unicorn mare with a red mane and tail that was about their age. Her cutie mark was that of a soldering iron with a spark of lightning shooting out of it. "Live Wire. Good to see that you could make it so quickly."

Look like we are going to learn how Live Wire fall in love with Grand Hoof and who she was before married him.

"Sounds like a slacker to me," Live replied, "Isn't it every guard's dream to rank up as fast as possible?"

The Slacker is the one you ends up married to, Live Wire.

"Greetings. The name's Technica."
"What are you doing here?" Bomber hissed, "This is my show!"
"Oh please. I'm just making sure my best customer gets to show off all our product's perks," the mare giggled while Bomber growled at her.
"Product?" Grand asked, "What are you talking about?" As he said that, the mare just ignored him and gestured to the other ponies all hiding from their attacker.
"Hear me ponies, as today is your lucky day." She pointed to Bomber, "This pony has incredible power. But that power is not one he was born with. Instead, he was able to achieve it using one amazing device."

Well, we finally know who is the main villain of the story and Grand Hoof's first big opponent as a Royal Knight

As for Bomber, here's potential suspects of how could be the real identity of Bomber

* Number Cruncher

* Center Stage

* A random mare

* Nobody

P.S.

WHERE THE FUCK IS ROYAL KNIGHT?!?!?! Should they been here when Technica and Bomber causing the mess or they are just being lazy…. No wonder why Grand Hoof becomes the leader of Royal Knights. Lol

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #14 · Jul 6th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

Oh snap, so this is where those Cutie Markers came about, well played at how you got them introduced on an earlier story Banshee! Loved the dynamic between Grand & Doom taking down Big Score (wow, creep's been around that long?!), also really hope that's not Cruncher under that villain's mask next time around!

As for Highlights go :

"Big Score," the first unicorn walked over to the desk. "Nice to see business is booming." Score opened a draw and magicked the bits into it, "How's the family?"
"Good," he nodded. "The wife and I just had a baby filly. She has my coat and her mother's mane."
"She must be adorable," the unicorn replied, "But raising a child is expensive."

Damn, this guy's been around!

"Oh, I can put up quite a fight alright." In that moment, his horn glowed as the guards got into a fighting stance. "I just need my medicine!"
Something then flew out of the desk and went up to Score's neck, Doom the first to react and leap forward. But before he could reach him, whatever he had grabbed let out a small hissing sound.
"Kung-Fu!"
"RAAAH!" He roared as he swung his leg around, kicking the object out of Score's grasp and shattering it.

Oh crap!!!

"HA! Don't make me laugh. She may call herself a princess, but she doesn't know half the stuff that's going on in this city." He then kicked Grand off, the earth pony skidding on the ground as Score pushed the spear off himself, "Knowledge is power and I make it my business to know everything, meaning the true ruler of this city is me, King Big Score!"
In that moment, Grand grabbed the spear and threw it. It sailed passed Score's shoulder and stuck itself into the top of a cement mixer slide. "Your majesty," Grand wrapped his hooves around the rope connected to the spear and pulled it. "Allow me to make a statue in your honor!" Score heard a sound, making him turn and gasp as he saw the cement inside fell free and hit him before he could escape.
"Aaaaaah!" He screamed as the cement fell on him, Grand quickly working to keep the liquid from covering his face. Once enough of the stuff covered his body, he used the spear and rope to pull the slide away from him while Doom moved over to switch it off. At this point, the slimy substance had hardened and Score's entire body was trapped. "LET ME GO!"
"We will," Doom laughed, "Once you're safely locked in a holding cell."

LOL that was a very short reign King Score!

"Your way?" Live turned to her with a raised eyebrow. "You're the princess. Isn't it always your way?"
"Not with Grand," Celestia sighed, "It took him three years to get from private to corporal, even though he was offered the rank six months into service. It took another two years to convince him to accept the lieutenant rank...and he basically deserved it in just a month there. It was only recently that he agreed to accept the rank of sergeant, but stated that's the last promotion he'll accept."
"Sounds like a slacker to me," Live replied, "Isn't it every guard's dream to rank up as fast as possible?"
"He's hardly a slacker. Like I said, his record is impeccable. It's more of the fact that he doesn't trust himself with a higher position...but I don't know why. He constantly looks down on himself, and Doom...well, Doom could also be higher rank, but insists on sticking with Grand everywhere, but refuses to tell anypony why Grand is like that."
"Huh. Still sounds slacking to me." Live Wire just chuckled at this, "Maybe he wants a lower rank so he has less responsibilities."

Oh girl, if you only knew!

They headed offstage, the trio hearing a female voice while coming from around the corner. And as they turned the corner, Cruncher showed a big grin...only for it to vanish, making a giant frown.
"Cruncher?" Grand asked as they reached him, "What's-" He didn't get to finish, Cruncher suddenly running past them both. They glanced back at him, blinking before looking around the corner.
"Remarie..." Doom whispered as Grand took in the sight of an olive green unicorn mare with a lime green mane and tail. She was pinned against the wall with Center Stage, pushing her while locking lips. They then saw her trying to push him off, her hooves beating into Center's chest.

OOOHHHHHhhhhhhhhh snap!!!!

"DO NOT INTERFERE!" They glanced up to where the spell had come from, now seeing somepony standing in the rafters, "I WILL HAVE MY REVENGE, SO JUST STEP ASIDE!"
"Not happening!" Doom yelled as he got up, then turned to a nearby knocked over stage lamp and pointed it to the rafters, illuminating the place and revealing the attacker. It was a unicorn pony who was dressed from head to hoof in a black leather body suit with red and green lines wrapped around it. The back hooves had boots with metal knee-pads and his front hooves had gauntlets that were in the shape of grenades. Around their neck was a metal U-shaped collar and the head was covered in a black gas-mask with red eyes and a hole in the top that a black material covered horn poked out of. On the back of their head was a long black chord with a design on the end of it that made it look like a lit fuse, and the suit's flank was a patch of red that had a black bomb symbol on it.

Really hope that's not who I think it is under that mask!

Sweet chapter Banshee, let's see where it goes from here!

Banshee531 #15 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

10889790 10890016 You guys realise it's not the same Big Score...right. If you go read season 1, boast busters, you'll see their designs aren't the same.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #16 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

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Oohhh my bad, I take it the present one took on that name instead?

Anyway thanks for clearing that up Banshee!

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #17 · Jul 6th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

This is getting more and more interesting.

We see more of Grand's past that was briefly mentioned in previous stories, like these Cutie Markers. Those made for a great chapter back in Season 5, and now we get to see Grand take care of (most of) them like he said he did. Interesting there is a different Big Shot back then too. Maybe the new one, that is to say the one we all know about, stole the name? Or maybe it was given to him by the original?

But we also get to see more of Live Wire. It will be fun getting to see her and Grand bond and slowly fall in love. Maybe she is the one who will convince him to become a Royal Knight? I agree with Doom though. Grand was a kid at the time, so he needs to stop holding it against himself long after he has taken responsibility.

I hope Center Stage gets hit with karma hard though. He sexually assaulted Remarie and ended up making Cruncher think she is cheating on him. Guys like that who only see woman as possessions deserve no mercy.

"HA! Don't make me laugh. She may call herself a princess, but she doesn't know half the stuff that's going on in this city." He then kicked Grand off, the earth pony skidding on the ground as Score pushed the spear off himself, "Knowledge is power and I make it my business to know everything, meaning the true ruler of this city is me, King Big Score!"
In that moment, Grand grabbed the spear and threw it. It sailed passed Score's shoulder and stuck itself into the top of a cement mixer slide. "Your majesty," Grand wrapped his hooves around the rope connected to the spear and pulled it. "Allow me to make a statue in your honor!" Score heard a sound, making him turn and gasp as he saw the cement inside fell free and hit him before he could escape.

Ha! No wonder Flash Sentry seems so much like Spider-Man, he must have gotten it from Grand Hoof when he was training him.

Ragnarok17 #18 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

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Oh! Thank you for clarify it!

I didn't know there was another Big Score in the past!

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #19 · Jul 9th, 2021 · · 2 · A New Threat Looms ·

It wasn't long till they got there, the guards at the entrance telling them to halt, "Sergeant Grand Hoof, lieutenant Doom Chaser. The Princess has asked for you to be sent to her when you arrive."

That's not how ranks in the military work. If Doom is calling Grand 'boss', Grand must there for out rank Doom, and Lieutenant out ranks Sergeant, and when someone calls for officers of different ranks, they call the superior officer first. in this case it would be 'Lieutenant Chase, Sergeant Hoof (because you don't use first names when using ranks unless in special events)
Banshee, body, you have an up hill battle as it to sell this story (to me), you really should be better about these kinds of details

Banshee531 #20 · Jul 9th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

10893755 Maybe that's just how my version of Equestria works. Maybe Celestia decided Sargent sounded more important then Lieutenant.

Comment posted by Foxhelm deleted Jul 9th, 2021

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #22 · Jul 9th, 2021 · · 2 · A New Threat Looms ·

10893757
But it doesn't, Sergeant comes from the Latin Servire: meaning to serve, as in a servant or slave
Lieutenant on the other hand comes from Old French meaning 'to hold a place' as in keep a fort or military position or compound occupied.
You have Sergeants serve the needs of the commissioned officers, while you trust Lieutenants to hold a the fort, while the general plans for the battle a head.

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #23 · Jul 9th, 2021 · · 2 · A New Threat Looms ·

10893757
This would go a lot easier for and on both of us if you just admitted that you make a mistake with the ranking.

Banshee531 #24 · Jul 9th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

10893781 Fine, I made a mistake. But I'm not changing it. I just think Sargent sounds better then Lieutenant. I was in the Air Cadets and that's not a rank they use

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #25 · Jul 9th, 2021 · 1 · 1 · A New Threat Looms ·

10893788
Just ignore him. It's not like the show itself was completely accurate with the titles and rankings in their armies anyway, like how Seaspray was a "General" in the Navy when he would be an "Admiral" in real life.

So if you say Sargent outranks Lieutenant in Equestria, then that's how it works.

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #26 · Jul 9th, 2021 · · 3 · A New Threat Looms ·

10893788
Um that's not true either, The Air Force has Sergeants and Lieutenants and Lieutenants out rank Sergeants

Banshee531 #27 · Jul 9th, 2021 · 1 · · A New Threat Looms ·

10893865 Maybe yours does, but not mine.

Foxhelm

Foxhelm #28 · Jul 9th, 2021 · · 5 · A New Threat Looms ·

10893814
That's just intellectual lazy arguing, 'The show was wrong, so it's okay that you're AU is wrong'.
No, it's not okay. We know it's wrong, and part of this whole fanfiction thing is to correct the errors found on the show.
I worked with the military, you fuck up and call a commissioned officer by a non-commission rank, you can bet that you liaisons officer was going to hear about it, then you supervisor and you're go to have spend hours re-learning every single rank and which was a commissioned officer and which was a non-commissioned.

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #29 · Jul 9th, 2021 · 3 · 2 · A New Threat Looms ·

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I'm ignoring you because you literally can't give any positive reviews if your life depended on it. All you ever do is rant and complain about stuff you didn't make yourself. It's boring. You're boring. Unlike Banshee's stories. So if you don't have anything nice to say (and we all know you don't) then don't read these stories.

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #30 · Jul 10th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

10890021
I figured as much. Did you run out of fitting names or something?

Banshee531 #31 · Jul 10th, 2021 · · · A New Threat Looms ·

10895179 No. Honestly, I figured this was gonna be an easy thing to figure out. This Big Score is meant to be modern day Big Score's grandfather.

Ragnarok17 #32 · Jul 13th, 2021 · 2 · · Cutie Markers ·

If bad guys go too far with Cutie Markers, Grand has no choice but he have to become a Royal Knight in order to save Equestria.

I still have a feeling that Bomber is Number Cruncher, considered the way he acts when Grand and Doom told them about Cutie Markers and he seems hurt when he thought Remarie but fortunately, they told him that Remarie still love him

Here's highlights

"Prototype?" Doom asked, "Why would they sell something they haven't fully figured out yet? Sounds like bad marketing."

*Cough* Cyberpunk 2077 *Cough*

"Alright Score," Doom growled as he pointed at him from the other side of the table, "We can do this the easy way, or the hard way."

Look like Doom will be playing bad cop.

"She's a very cute filly," Grand commented, "A shame she has to grow up without a father. I know what that's like. Heck, I don't even know who my father is. All I know about him is that he had a red coat and brown mane because it was written in a letter that was left at an orphanage with me."

Either we are going to meet his father in this fic or one of future Flash Sentry fics… but by that time, he probably be dead.

"You two can do that," Doom said before either could respond, "I'll stay outside with a squad of guards and be ready to pounce when you give the signal."
Live nodded back while Grand shook his head, "I don't think so. Technica's bound to have security. She probably gave our description to her guards. She'll see us coming a mile away."
But as he said that, Live put a hoof on his shoulder, "Oh, I wouldn't worry about that. Just leave everything to me."

I wouldn't be surprised if there's falling in love montage between Grand and Live since they are going to get married at some point in their life.

Also, is Doom trying to hook them up? Is he's GrandxLive shipper or what?

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #33 · Jul 13th, 2021 · 1 · · Cutie Markers ·

The fight scene was pretty cool. Even before he got a gear Grand shows he can still hold his own against magical opponents. These Cutie Markers are just as dangerous as they were made out to be back in Season 5. Especially since they are still untested here. Grand and Doom are going to need to be careful to stop them.

Grand's secret is finally out to Celestia and Live Wire. It certainly helped subdue Live Wire's anger towards Grand. It also looks like they are going undercover together to infiltrate the Cutie Marker's party. I bet we'll start to see some romance spark between the two of them. Maybe she is the one to convince him to accept the position as a Royal Knight? Like she said, how some Knights see it as a punishment instead of a promotion, that sounds like how Grand sees his role as a Knight in the series proper, being one to make up for his past sins.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #34 · Jul 13th, 2021 · 2 · · Cutie Markers ·

Sweet fight between Grand/Doom VS the masked nuts, although Bomber has some serious psych issues! Course now we know why since those Cutie Markers really are a double-edge sword!

Guess it was time for somepony else (Celestia/Live) to find out what happened all those years ago during Grand's foal days, at least that's out in the open. Also I can see the seeds of romance been planted here with the undercover mission for Grand/Live at that *demonstration* party, can't wait to see that been crashed!

Oh let's check out these Highlights behind the invitation card! :

Now, the ponies calling themselves Bomber and Technica were in the rafters, Technica holding a briefcase in her magic as she showed the Cutie Markers to the ponies inside the theatre. "Imagine it...no longer will you be restrained to the one talent you posses. Fancy a change? Simply use these Cutie Markers and enjoy whatever ability you wish to enjoy."
"Does that include terrorising ponies?" Doom asked as he spread his wings, "You suddenly have that power and what do yo do?! Attack an innocent mare!"
"Innocent?!" Bomber barked back before pointing at Remarie, "She's anything but innocent."

*scoffs* some marketing for this poison, also really hope Bomber's true identity is not who I think it is!

"So you're just a dealer?" Grand growled.
"I'm more than that. I'm the pony that's helping all Equestrians embrace the next stage of their evolution. If you think these abilities are impressive, just wait until he develops them further. Ponies with the ability to heal any injury or disease. Ponies that can travel through time or go beyond magical physics. Nothing will be beyond our limits!" She then leaned up with a smile hidden inside her mask, "Maybe if you're good, I'd be willing to sell one to you."
"No thanks. I prefer to gain my skills the proper way!"

Well said Grand, mare's buyer beware!

"Doom." She interrupted again before pointing at him, "I am sorry, but I believe he is more than worthy of being a Royal Knight. As such, I must know why Grand is like this. And I will order you to tell me if need be."
Doom felt himself shrink in front of her, his eyes darting away as his mind went back to that night so many years ago. He flinched at the thought, remembering the image of that nightmare. And as he glanced back up at Celestia, he saw a strong stare from her, "It's...a long story. Its because he made a mistake a long time ago..." The mares raised an eyebrow at this, only for their faces to slowly change as he began to tell the tale.

Yep, the cat's out of the bag!

"You two can do that," Doom said before either could respond, "I'll stay outside with a squad of guards and be ready to pounce when you give the signal."
Live nodded back while Grand shook his head, "I don't think so. Technica's bound to have security. She probably gave our description to her guards. She'll see us coming a mile away."
But as he said that, Live put a hoof on his shoulder, "Oh, I wouldn't worry about that. Just leave everything to me."

Oohhh looking forward to this *date* of sorts!

Seems things will get even more intense next chapter, awesome!

HolyCross9 #35 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Cutie Markers ·

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For Pete's sake, CDPR is doing to their best to redeeming themselves of the mistakes made in producing Cyperpunk 2077. Plus that dumb coughing gag is getting VERY VERY old.

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #36 · Jul 18th, 2021 · · · Cutie Markers ·

Is it bad that I'm more invested in the romance between Grand and Live than I am with the Cutie Markers?

Ragnarok17 #37 · Jul 20th, 2021 · · · A Booming Party ·

A sad but yet heroic way to die for Doom. :(

Center or Bomber is going to pay for what he did! He went too far!

Isn't it me or this scene remind me of when Kamen Rider Skull first Henshin in his movie? I getting that vibe with Grand using his hammer for the first time.

Here's highlights

Live chuckled back as she held up her necklace, "Rune magic. A few ancient symbols charged with magic can do just about anything. Including putting a glamour charge on us."
"Huh." Grand responded while clapping his hooves, "Talk about a useful type of magic. They shouldn't recognise either of us now."

Yeah… unfortunately, he would hate that magic and strained his relationship with a certain Unicorn over that.

Live giggled at that, "Celestia's in agreement with you there." He turned back to her with wide eyes, "The both of you have been selected to become knights. But Doom is gonna have to wait a little while."

Uh no….

Again, the crowd cheered as Live whispered, "Here we go. The big speech about the world being unfair and locking us into a single destiny."

"The world is unfair," the mare on stage announced, "It forces us on a single route in life at an age where we don't truly know who we are or what we want in life. It locks us into a single destiny before we have a chance to realize if that destiny is what we truly want." She turned to show off her cutie mark. "My mother always had me help make the pies she sold at a bakery. Every day I would help her bake them, putting the right amount of flower and sugar into the mixture. Eventually, I got so good at it that I could magically do it on my own without even looking."

Huh, I guess Live is right… definitely a cliches speech! Lol

"Come on," he grumbled while tapping his hoof, "Give Grand a reason to say the signal." Despite the gripping danger his friends might be in, he was also shaking with excitement as he remembered what he had heard about his future knighting. "To think I'm also ready for knighting...I wonder what weapon I'll get." He then smacked his forehead, "Augh! Stop it! Focus!"

Uh no…..

"Kung-Fu!"
"Shift!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Gemini!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Kinetic!"
"Kung-Fu!"

What is up with everyponies' obsession with Kung Fu? Are they big fan of Bruce Lee?!

"What's with all the kung-fu users?" Grand asked, remembering Big Score didn't have such a get-up when he used his.

Yeah! Exactly!

"The weapon knows Grand doesn't want it. It won't be able to unleash its full power until he accept its and what it stands for."

You got to be kidding me!

As she said this, the pulsing increased, making the three grimace at the rock. But as it did this, Doom stared at the rock...only to show a huge frown on his lips. He glanced back at the city, only to gulp before turning back to his friends with a determined glare. "I know how we can save the city."

UH NO……

"Sorry Grand." Doom replied before suddenly punching Grand straight in the face. The earth pony fell back, letting out a yelp of pain.

Don't do it, Doom! Don't pull Future Gohan on him!

"Come on," Doom whispered as he beat his wings as hard as he could. "Faster....higher....all the way! I...I can do this!" The light from the slab practically became a constant shine as the speed of the pulse grew more rapid. "Just a little bit further! Just a little more!" He strained at the force of the wind pushed against him, the Gs slamming into him as gravity tried to push him back to the ground. "Almost!" And in that moment, the pulsing completely stopped before the slab unleashed a radiant burst of light. "Grand..." he whispered, "It's up to you now. Good luck...Royal Knight." With that, the energy stored within the slab hit critical mass and-
KABOOOOOM

Doom…..

Rest In Peace, Doom Chaser… you would have been a Royal Knight if you didn’t sacrifice yourself.

To honor you, here's a song by Aerosmith

Fly away, Doom Chaser.

And as this realization happened to Grand, he fell to his knees, tears filling his eyes. "No...Doom..." he whispered as his entire body shook. He glanced back down at his hooves at this, his mind shaking as he slammed his hooves into the ground and let out a scream, "RAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!"

Poor Grand.

I hope he will finally take on Royal Knight to avenge his best friend's death and kick Technica and especially Bomber's ass!

Great work!

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #38 · Jul 20th, 2021 · 1 · · A Booming Party ·

I had a feeling Doom wasn’t going to survive this story, I was just curious how he was going to die. His sacrifice here reminds me a lot of how Lightning Blitz tried to sacrifice himself to save Canterlot, which was against the last few Cutie Markers. Of course the sad difference here is unlike Lightning, Doom didn’t have someone to save him just in time.

So his sacrifice will probably be what finally convinces Grand to become a Knight, to honor his friend and prevent anyone else from getting hurt again.

Again, the crowd cheered as Live whispered, "Here we go. The big speech about the world being unfair and locking us into a single destiny."
"The world is unfair," the mare on stage announced,

That is a funny moment, but also shows Live has been around the block long enough to get how villains work. Kinda reminds me of a scene from Into the Spider-Verse where Peter B. Parker correctly predicts how Kingpin will threaten one of his scientists with the line “You’ve got 24 hours.”

The ponies walked up and took out a Cutie Marker, pushing them against their necks before pressing down the plungers.
"Kung-Fu!"
"Shift!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Gemini!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Kinetic!"
"Kung-Fu!"

I admit, the amount of ponies that chose Kung-Fu was hilarious. But the talents between them, Shift, Gemini, and Kinetic, along with Bomber, those were the talents used by the last few Cutie Markers that Lightning and his friends faced. That is an interesting detail.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #39 · Jul 20th, 2021 · · · A Booming Party ·

Damn, we all knew Doom wasn't gonna make it to the end to this tale but.......DAMN!!!

Those Cutie Markers are very dangerous indeed with the way Bomber's went nuts with that last stunt, sure feel awful for Grand at losing his best friend like that. Course if the one behind the mask is who I think it is (pretty sure primadonna actor's not it at this point) then it will be a double whammy for poor Grand!

Gonna love Grand tapping into the celestial gear's true power on the next confrontation with these marker nuts, bring it!!!

Highlights for this chapter are :

"Grand!" The earth pony turned to him, "I just saw something you're not gonna believe."
"What?" He gave Grand a photo, the earth pony blinking at it before going wide-eyed, "That's...Center Stage?"
The pony on the photo was the obnoxious unicorn, dressed up like all the other guests and waving an invite in front of the bouncers. "You don't think..." Doom didn't finish the sentence as Grand gave him back the photo.
"Center...is Bomber," Grand finished for him. "It makes sense.

Does it??? Something tells me you're not gonna like that reveal when it happens Grand!

Live nodded. "I still have the Celestic Gear on me. You know, in case you suddenly find yourself needing a helping hoof."
But as those words entered Grand's ears, he let out a huff, "I don't need that. I don't-"
"Deserve it?" Live interrupted, making Grand glare at her, "You know, Princess Celestia told me she wanted to give you the title a long time before this."
"I still don't need it." Grand grumbled as he looked away, "You should give that thing to Doom. He's more worthy of being a knight than I am."
Live giggled at that, "Celestia's in agreement with you there." He turned back to her with wide eyes, "The both of you have been selected to become knights. But Doom is gonna have to wait a little while."

*sigh* And with that Doom became a dead pony walking!

The ponies walked up and took out a Cutie Marker, pushing them against their necks before pressing down the plungers.
"Kung-Fu!"
"Shift!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Gemini!"
"Kung-Fu!"
"Kinetic!"
"Kung-Fu!"
The crowd watched as those on stage began to change. The ones that used the Kung-Fu Markers were enveloped by light and suddenly transformed into black ninja style gi while the others turned to show off their newly transformed cutie marks.
"What's with all the kung-fu users?" Grand asked, remembering Big Score didn't have such a get-up when he used his.
"I'm guessing that's a commonly sold Marker...or just really easy to make compared to the others." Live commented, "Though I don't think I've met a single stallion who didn't want to be a ninja when they were young. My brothers certainly used to play it a lot."

Oh great, now everypony's kung-fu fighting!

The duo grimaced at this, only to see the pulsing on the rock began to beat faster. "It's getting closer to blowing!" Doom cried before looking straight up, "What if we moved it into the air? Once it's high enough, the explosion shouldn't cause to much damage."
"That...would work," Live responded, "But like I said, I can only teleport half a mile away. It wouldn't be high enough and probably fall back down before blowing."
As she said this, the pulsing increased, making the three grimace at the rock. But as it did this, Doom stared at the rock...only to show a huge frown on his lips. He glanced back at the city, only to gulp before turning back to his friends with a determined glare. "I know how we can save the city."

Oh hell no!!!!

With that, Doom shot into the air.
"DOOOOOOOOOOM!" Grand yelled as the pegasus flew straight up, soon flying above the city.
"Come on," Doom whispered as he beat his wings as hard as he could. "Faster....higher....all the way! I...I can do this!" The light from the slab practically became a constant shine as the speed of the pulse grew more rapid. "Just a little bit further! Just a little more!" He strained at the force of the wind pushed against him, the Gs slamming into him as gravity tried to push him back to the ground. "Almost!" And in that moment, the pulsing completely stopped before the slab unleashed a radiant burst of light. "Grand..." he whispered, "It's up to you now. Good luck...Royal Knight." With that, the energy stored within the slab hit critical mass and-
KABOOOOOM!

*a silent moment for an awesome pony*

Like the first chapter, this one was a hard read in terms of emotion!

No matter what direction it takes after this I'm looking forward to how it wraps up next chapter (expecting another punch to the gut probably), till next time Banshee!

Kayceejr91 #40 · Jul 27th, 2021 · · · Bombastic Reveal ·

Another good chapter Banshee. Out of curiosity how many chapters is in this fic?

Ragnarok17 #41 · Jul 27th, 2021 · 1 · · Bombastic Reveal ·

Oh no! I knew Number Cruncher was Bomber! I didn't want to believe but I knew he was him the entire time! But why, why would he betrayed his own best friends over Cutie Markers?!

At least, Grand finally accept the Celestic Gear so he can save Equestria from Technica and Bomber!

A great scene between him and Live as well that flashback sequence too! :)

So what is Number Cruncher's reason of becoming the villainous Bomber? Let's find out on next chapter!

Here's highlights

And as Grand chased after him, Live blinked at the sight, "This doesn't make any sense. Why would he come back here?"

Uh no….

"TAKE IT OFF! NOW!" Live screamed, Center flinching at her before trying to unbutton his jacket, only to start pulling at it, trying to rip the jacket off. But the suit refused to come off as the light completely enveloped it. Seeing this, Grand tackled Live just as the light reached its peak, Center letting out a horrified scream as-
KABOOM!
The street shook as the ponies were blasted away by the shockwave, both rolling along the streets. Their ears rang out as they got up, Live dusting herself off as Grand asked, "You okay?"
"I'll be fine." Live muttered before they turned back to the spot Center was. However, all that was there was cinders and flames, and a burn mark from where he had been.

Well, that asshole is dead… and he deserves it for what he did to Remarie.

But he didn't respond, instead just starting at the wall. "No...it couldn't be..." He turned back to the blast zone that had killed Center, "It has to be." Tears filled his eyes as he looked down at the hammer, then back at the wall.

Please don't tell me it's him….

It was snowing heavily on the mountain as Grand, Doom and four other guards worked to scale up the mountain. "Just a little further!" Their commander yelled from up front as he pulled himself upward before hammering a nail into place so the guards below him could latch onto it. The six guards had been dispatched to collect a special flower that was needed to create a potion that could cure a sickness that was spreading through a small town that had been magically quarantined. Unfortunately, the flower only grew atop certain mountains and were very rare.

A callback to The Day Flash Sentry Died one.

Although, I hope this is not like pandemic we went through…. The idea of a town being infected by a sickness…. I hope not!

The memory sank back into Grand's mind, along with the image of Doom flying to his death also there. Grand stared back down at the hammer, gripping it in his hooves before Live's words rang out in his head.
"I...I won't let your sacrifice be in vain," Grand whispered, his eyes drilling themselves into the hammer...only to loosen his grip. That night so long ago came back into his head, telling him he wasn't worthy of anything. But as this happened, he tightened his grip again, "No...I'll stop him. I'll...do it. I'm the only one who can."
With that, he began to stand up, feeling an immense weight as he tried to lift the weapon onto his back, and he knew what it was. It was all his sins, the feeling pouring down on him as he placed the hammer on his back. And as he did this, a light caught his attention and made him look to the horizon. Celestia had raised the sun, its light illuminating the kingdom and washing away the darkness...and Grand felt his own start to fade away. "I know what I need to do."

Yeah, Boys!

THE BIRTH OF THE LEGENDARY ROYAL KNIGHT AND THE MENTOR OF A FUTURE ROYAL KNIGHT, GRAND FUCKING HOOF!!!!!!!!

"Good." Live chuckled, "Now, let's get to work. With Center dead, we don't have any clue who Bomber really is."
"I wouldn't say that," Grand responded, "Follow me."

Uh no…..

"Thank you," he replied before taking the container, "But you shouldn't be here. Not with that Bomber pony out to get you."

UH NO!!!!

It was here that Grand's face twisted, his eyes narrowing as the frown morphed into a look of seething rage. "You already know what happened." Before anypony could say anything, Grand's hoof slammed itself into Cruncher's face, knocking him over his desk with a mighty thud.
Everypony gasped at the sight, Live exclaiming, "Grand! What are you-"
But her words suddenly came to a stop. The sound of a metal ting rang out, only for her eyes to glance down and saw a tiny device roll across the floor. A Cutie Marker, which had the name and fake cutie mark as the pony that they had fought last night.
She then glanced back up and saw Grand grab Cruncher's shirt's neck, pulling him up till they were face to face, "You have a lot of explaining to do."

MAN!!!!! Look like the friendship between Grand and Number has been broken.

P.S.

The more I think about it, there's one hint about Number being Bomber.

Because Number is rhymed with Bomber. If you took out N and U part and replaced it with B and O… you got this.

Number= Bomber

In other words, Center couldn't being Bomber for 3 reasons.

One, his name doesn't rhymes with Bomber and two, you can't kill off him if he was the main threat along with Technica and three, Number is more personal to Grand than some random asshole stage actor like Center.

I see what you did, Banshee… clever.

Banshee531 #42 · Jul 27th, 2021 · 2 · · Bombastic Reveal ·

10916203 Er...yeah. That was totally intentional. I'm smart

SuperSonicHeroes

SuperSonicHeroes #43 · Jul 27th, 2021 · 1 · · Bombastic Reveal ·

I knew that Center Stage was a Red Herring the whole time. Ever since the second chapter, Number Cruncher just reminded me too much of the Cutie Markers from the present, what with him being unsatisfied with his talent and profession. That being said, I hoped I was wrong and that it wasn't him, but it looks like this explains why neither him nor Doom Chaser appeared at all in the present. Grand lost both of his friends. I'm not sure who Technica could be though.

Also, even if Center wasn't Bomber like Grand thought, I honestly don't feel bad over his death too much. The guy was a huge jerk to everyone, so he honestly had it coming. He might not have been a criminal, but he wasn't innocent either.

I was afraid Doom's death was going to affect Grand negatively like it did here. He is blaming himself for it, even though he didn't get Doom killed; Bomber did. Thankfully though, Grand is slowly coming around, thanks to Live helping him. Maybe once this is taken care of, he'll accept the position of Royal Knight.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #44 · Jul 27th, 2021 · 1 · · Bombastic Reveal ·

Welp Damnit! Think we all called it about Bomber's true identity (even though we hoped it wasn't ) Grand lost 2 friends here by the extremes, looking forward to see what bullcrap Cruncher tells Grand next chapter & seeing him finally accepting the Royal Knight role! Also....yeah not shedding many tears for Center, he was a jackass!

Highlights include :

The other two flinched as he suddenly fell over, both going wide-eyed as they saw something now glowing on his back. His clothes were now glowing purple, the light pulsing as it spread around the rest of the suit. Center picked himself up and looked down at his jacket, seeing the light appearing on the front. "What's happening?" He asked, turning to the others. "What is this?!"
"I don't-"
"TAKE IT OFF! NOW!" Live screamed, Center flinching at her before trying to unbutton his jacket, only to start pulling at it, trying to rip the jacket off. But the suit refused to come off as the light completely enveloped it. Seeing this, Grand tackled Live just as the light reached its peak, Center letting out a horrified scream as-
KABOOM!

Well........pop goes the weasel!

Grand Hoof, I have no real qualm with you. Stop your investigation into me and you'll never have to see me again. But if you persist in finding me, then I can't be held responsible for my actions.

Little late for that after what happened to Doom!

She was about to say it, but Grand raised a hoof. The mare nodded back as Grand marched up to Cruncher, the stallion blinking at him, "Grand, tell me. What happened to Doom?"
It was here that Grand's face twisted, his eyes narrowing as the frown morphed into a look of seething rage. "You already know what happened." Before anypony could say anything, Grand's hoof slammed itself into Cruncher's face, knocking him over his desk with a mighty thud.
Everypony gasped at the sight, Live exclaiming, "Grand! What are you-"
But her words suddenly came to a stop. The sound of a metal ting rang out, only for her eyes to glance down and saw a tiny device roll across the floor. A Cutie Marker, which had the name and fake cutie mark as the pony that they had fought last night.

Sorry pal, get wrecked!!!

Looking forward to the conclusion of this story, keep them coming Banshee!!!

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #45 · Aug 1st, 2021 · · · A Booming Party ·

"Huh." Grand responded while clapping his hooves, "Talk about a useful type of magic. They shouldn't recognise either of us now."

Irony.

WHY?????!!!!!!

Godslittleprincess

Godslittleprincess #46 · Aug 1st, 2021 · · · Bombastic Reveal ·

Gosh! This story is drowning in big sad. . I'm not trying to be discouraging or anything, but I'm just having a hard time enjoying this.

nathanb

nathanb #47 · Aug 3rd, 2021 · · · Chaos in Canterlot ·

I love this story so far. It's so beautiful, an origin's story well done. Hope to see the rest soon.

Ragnarok17 #48 · Aug 3rd, 2021 · 1 · · Chaos in Canterlot ·

Awesome fight between Grand and Technica! So happy that he accepted who he is and finally beat the crap out of that bitch for what she did to Doom and Cruncher!

At least, it explains how he got his scar from…. his friend!

Now, the final battle between 2 former friends! Oh dear…

Here's highlights

But as he said this, he let out a low chuckle, "And then it happened."

I don't like it!

"And she was right!" Cruncher laughed, staring down at his hooves, "I...I used the Cutie Marker and I got power that I had never felt before! It was amazing!"

Cruncher, calm down… you acting like a crazy stallion!

But her words didn't reach Cruncher, the stallion instead turning to Remarie. "I'm so sorry. I didn't want to hurt you. I was just in so much pain and...I hated myself when I realized what had happened." He then gave her a big grin, "But I made things right. I made Center pay."

Yup… he has gone crazy. :(

"Cruncher..." Remarie whispered, "What are you saying?" He turned back to her, a look of deranged excitement on his face.

DEFINITELY CRAZY!!!!!!!

"No," Cruncher whispered, his tone slowly getting louder. "No...no..." Grand and Live got closer, his voice shaking as he began to pant, "No...I won't let you take me." His horn began to spark, "STAY AWAY!" With that, his horn exploded and unleashed a bright light that blinded everypony. Cruncher used this distraction to grab the Cutie Marker in Live's magic and pull it free, making her gasp as the light faded to show him placing it up to his neck. "I win." He pressed the plunger down.

Oh, crap.

With that, he fired the spell straight up, flying high above the city. Grand glanced up to see the spell continue to fly, only to explode into hundreds of smaller purple lights, which began to rain down on the city. Grand's eyes went wide at this, "NOOOOOOOOOO!"

Oh, crap!

She spread her wings as her horn began to glow. "Prepare yourself. Because you're facing a pony that is the next stage of Equestrian evolution."
"No...you prepare yourself." Grand replied, "Because I might not be part of the next stage of Equestrian evolution, but I am something special."
"What's that?" She asked, only for a light to catch her attention, making her now see the hammer beginning to glow.
The light exploded off of it and filled the street, blinding her as the hammer began to morph and change. No longer was it a hoof-held hammer, now becoming a giant war-hammer that was almost as large as Grand was long. It was mostly made of silver metal, with a large rectangular head that had Grand's cutie mark on the longer sides of it while near the bottom was a bronze ring followed by a handle wrapped in a brown leather and a bronze orb at the very bottom.
Grand spun the hammer, barely feeling any weight coming from it. He then stood up, his form now showing a full standing solider as he answered her question, "A Royal Knight."

Technica, count up your sins!

And as he saw him move, Technica's eyes glanced between him and the fire, her body trying to move...but her destroyed legs wouldn't work. It was here she realize he wasn't bluffing. "NO!" She screamed, "PLEASE SAVE ME! I...I DON'T WANNA DIE!"
But as she said these words, Grand stopped for a moment and spoke without turning to her. "How many of your victims said that to you?"
And with that moment, the flames reached the tanker.
KABOOOOOOOOOOM!
The city shook as the building site was filled with another explosion, Grand just walking away as a massive ball of fire turned into a giant pillar of smoke. The was no remorse or doubts on his face right now, as he knew he had to do one thing, and one thing alone. He had to save Live and stop Cruncher, once and for all.

Damn, Grand!

That's what she gets for messing with Grand… Now, she will be counting her sins….. IN HELL!!!!!!!

Iacon Scholar #49 · Aug 3rd, 2021 · 1 · · Chaos in Canterlot ·

"Who's the mastermind?!" Grand roared, spit flying into Technica's face, "TELL ME!"
"Save. Me." She repeated, a sickening smile slowly appearing on her face.
But as she said that, Grand leaned back and sighed, "So be it." With that, he spun around, his hooves moving as he began to walk away.
And as he saw him move, Technica's eyes glanced between him and the fire, her body trying to move...but her destroyed legs wouldn't work. It was here she realize he wasn't bluffing. "NO!" She screamed, "PLEASE SAVE ME! I...I DON'T WANNA DIE!"
But as she said these words, Grand stopped for a moment and spoke without turning to her. "How many of your victims said that to you?"
And with that moment, the flames reached the tanker.
KABOOOOOOOOOOM!

She got burned...literally.

SpikeSmolder fan

SpikeSmolder fan #50 · Aug 3rd, 2021 · 1 · · Chaos in Canterlot ·

Quite the fight between Grand & Technica, not to mention that ending! She sure mess with the wrong Stallion, plus it was sad we got to know how Grand got that scar on his face!

Highlights for today's chapter :

"Did you really think I wouldn't notice?!" Grand roared, spit flying out of his mouth and hitting Cruncher's face, "I spent over ten years staring at your horn-writing! Working with you and Doom on projects where you insisted on doing all the writing...if numbers weren't your special talent, calligraphy would be it!"
Live blinked at Grand, only to remember back to the wall that Bomber had blasted a warning into last night. The way it was written, joined up with impressive skill and perfect equal distance between the words. "So that's how that he figured it out..."

Good eye there Grand!

"It does!" Cruncher screamed, "After all, you're a monster too, and yet your cutie mark and special talent makes it easy for you to be a hero anyways!" He glanced back at his flank, at the numbers and math symbols emblazoned on it. "But what do I have that makes me special?! My talent is math, the same special talent a thousand other ponies have! How the heck am I supposed to stand out with a talent like that?!"
"That's your excuse?!" Grand countered, "You did all that because of you didn't like your talent?!"

Sorry Cruncher, not a good excuse for all the hurt/dead ponies caught in it, especially one of your own friends!

"Do yourself a favor," Technica suddenly chimed in, "Go home. Run away. Leave the city if you have to. If you do that, I won't be forced to removed you. Because one way or another, your little adventure is finished. This is what happens to Celestia's pawns." She then pulled out a second Cutie Marker, "Unless this event has changed your view. Maybe you would like a taste of the future."

Wow, arrogant mare's sure drunk with power here!

"Who's the one behind the Cutie Markers?" Grand hissed as he leaned down.
"What?! You're asking me this now?" As she said this, the fuel began to inch their ways into the tools, "Aren't you supposed to do that after you save me?!"
"If I wait until then, you won't have an incentive to tell me." As he said that, one of the tools short-circuited, a small flame beginning to ignite. And as it began to grow, Grand smacked his hammer into the dirt, making the ground around the flame to flip over and extinguish before saying, "Last chance. Tell me, or I'll let the next flame reach you."
"You...you're bluffing!"
"Am I?" Grand hissed, the mare now seeing the coldness in his eyes turn into a raging fire, "You tried to cause chaos in this city! You show nothing but delight in hurting others! And most importantly, you helped kill my best friend and turned my other friend into a monster!"
"So?! Why does that matter?!" Technica spat as a new flame appeared from another tool touching the fuel. "Save me already, you stupid pawn of Celestia!"
"Who's the mastermind?!" Grand roared, spit flying into Technica's face, "TELL ME!"
"Save. Me." She repeated, a sickening smile slowly appearing on her face.

Still arrogant I see, that's gonna bite you in the flank!

But as she said that, Grand leaned back and sighed, "So be it." With that, he spun around, his hooves moving as he began to walk away.
And as he saw him move, Technica's eyes glanced between him and the fire, her body trying to move...but her destroyed legs wouldn't work. It was here she realize he wasn't bluffing. "NO!" She screamed, "PLEASE SAVE ME! I...I DON'T WANNA DIE!"
But as she said these words, Grand stopped for a moment and spoke without turning to her. "How many of your victims said that to you?"
And with that moment, the flames reached the tanker.
KABOOOOOOOOOOM!

Whoa!!!...........................well he did warn you!

Looking forward to the final confrontation between Grand & Cruncher, till the next one Banshee!

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