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I've always been a lover and writer of fanfiction, but it wasn't until I got into MLP that I really found something I loved writing about. Hope you all enjoy.

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This story is a sequel to Grand Hoof: The Legend Begins

With Malafear and Chrysalis hopefully dealt with for good, Flash and his friends now return to their peaceful lives. But life is rarely so peaceful, as our heroes are about to find out. With an unknown danger in a far off land, crazy circumstances at their doorstep and other insanities just waiting to occur, the ponies better relax while they can.

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Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #1 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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Well, that was intense way to kick off this season.

Man, Flash can never take a break, especially if there's a mad scientist who have a grudge against him and Royal Knights, he better be prepared for more Trial robots!

I like how this one focus on the relationship between Flash and Scootaloo too.

Here's highlights

"Can I see your Celestic Gear?"

"Sorry, left it in Ponyville."

I have a bad feeling about this. :twilightoops:

"Flash gets a Celestic Gear, he gets the Sacred Light and gets a statue in a museum! And what do I have?" Her eyes turned to her tiny wings.

Spits drink

HE GOT HIS OWN STATUE IN A MUSEUM?!?! WHO THE HELL HE THINK HE IS?!?! HERCULES?!?!

"The two of you are on completely different paths. Flash might be a Royal Knight-"


"And it's pretty obvious he's gonna become a prince one day," Scootaloo interrupted.

Season 9 Foreshadowing :moustache:

The creature remained silent for a moment, then the cord flew out again. But it wasn't alone. Five other cords ripped out from the back of the cloak, all almost extending to ten feet in length. They curled back at this, ripping the cloak apart to reveal the pony hidden within, only for Flash to go wide-eyed.


"Heather?!"

Oh…. Crap…. :pinkiegasp:

"They can't stop it," Scootaloo whispered as Trail put Misty down before grabbing another a piece of metal, charging at the pony with it, only for it break upon contact. "The only thing strong enough to penetrate it is..." Her eyes went wide as she looked over at the claw Flash had decapitated, remembering how he cut it off, "Itself."

Scootaloo, you are one crazy filly. :rainbowderp:

"HEY!" Mecha-Heather turned to the voice and saw Scootaloo had somehow gotten up close, its decapitated claw in her grasp. "SURPRISE!" She thrust the claw into the creature's chest, piercing it around the doors of its metal front. The cyborg screamed as its metal body was penetrated, causing it to let go of Flash and Misty.

Scootaloo:

Trial-T...74%

Trial-R...52%

Trial-G...36%

Trial-C...19%

Why I have a feeling that Cold Steel one is the strongest one? :twilightoops:

"Void," a female voice called out, "The latest batch of weapons is due soon. They better be ready for when I pick them up."

Well, at least he have a name…. Although who could this female be? Tempest Shadow?

With that, the device beeped and the pony known as Void let out a growl before he started coughing heavily again. "Just wait until I have the Sacred Light," he told the voice that couldn't hear him. "Then you'll be sorry." With that, he began to walk away, his heavy hoof-steps continuing to fill the room as he moved over to a certain machine, "You'll all be sorry."

Damn…. He must really hates Royal Knight, especially Flash so much…

It was a wonderful little scene, though Scootaloo did decide to ruin it. "By the way, you better stay on my good side unless you want Twilight to hear about those two mares you let be flirty with you."

Ha! Good one, Scootaloo! :rainbowlaugh:

Awesome work!

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #2 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · 2 · Carnival Chaos ·
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Nice brother-sister chapter for Flash and Scootaloo. Especially with Scoots solving the problem. But she does ask a legitimate question, why does Flash get all the cool stuff when there's a greater than 50% chance that she won't even fly?
Void? I don't recall ever coming across him before.

Trial-T...74%
Trial-R...52%
Trial-G...36%
Trial-C...19%

, so we got Mecha-Tidal, Mecha-Ruby, Mecha-Grand and Mecha-Cold... So no Mecha-Iron, Mecha-Skybreaker, or Mecha-First Aid? Okay I see why no Mecha-First Aid, he's a medic. Well here's to more about these foes.
My only grip is that we didn't get to see Starlight try to teach Soul... that would have been much more interesting way to kick this season proper off with. Why do I expect that Heart is going to break the promise to keep it secret... as Ben Franklin once said, "Three can keep a secret, if two of them are dead"... just saying.
Beyond that, great chapter... but I do have one critique Banshee that you really should consider taking to heart and not disregarding, if the conflict can only work because Flash doesn't have his Celestic Gear... then maybe you should try changing the conflict because if Flash has to be metaphorically caught with his pants down in order to have the struggle needed for the conflict, him not having his Celestic Gear is going to transition from being a plot contrivance into a plot hole, said plot hole being 'How can Flash be this stupid? And if he's this stupid, why was made a Royal Knight?'

Final words: Smart Scootaloo is Best Scootaloo:scootangel:

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #3 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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To say this was an explosive S7 premiere would be an understatement, you really went intense right out of the gate Banshee! :twilightoops:The sibling rivalry between Flash & Scootaloo was pretty good, not to mention we got to see this creep DNA thief taking a whack again against Flash, hoping he gets what's coming to him soon! :flutterrage: Also it is me or does Heather can't seem to catch a break lately? First been turned into a dragon last epic tale, now this bucket of bolts with her likeness strikes our heroes......just Damn!!! :ajbemused:

For Highlights this time around :

The pony slowly made its way to five metal doors on the far side of the room, going to the one on the far right. It stared at the sign on the door below the hatch, the words 'Trial-H' written upon it. The pony turned back to a nearby table, where the chunk of black rock had been split into five pieces.

Taking one of the rocks along with an extender claw, combining the two before opening the hatch and pushed one end through it. With a single thrust, the claw extended into the darkness of the cell and reached its destination. He opened the claw and retracted it, then twisted it before closing something and then retracting all the way out of the cell. He shut the glass hatch and watched the chamber, a pair of red lights illuminating the room to reveal an earth pony-shaped figure.

Oh great, is this DNA thief jackass again! :flutterrage:

Three weeks had passed since the defeat of Malafear. In that time, things had gotten back to normal in Equestria, the only difference being Spike trying to learn to harness his newly discovered magic. But alas, he had no luck in finding a way to use it.

Hoping this will change soon, would be a shame if his development came to a screeching halt after his epic tale! :moustache:

"It's too bad Twilight and the others couldn't come as well."

Flash sighed at this, "Yeah...she and Starlight are working on something at the castle. Soul had already made plans with her friends this weekend, and Heart...is still grounded." His eyes darted away at this, "I'm just glad Grand was okay watching over him."

Wow Flash went the whole grounding month with Heart, at least I hope it's a month! :pinkiegasp:

His family moved over to the crowd, Scootaloo hearing a unicorn speak up, "There's no way that guy's gonna be able to hit the bell."

"Of course he'll hit the bell," Scootaloo replied, "That's my brother after all. He's not just any pony. He's Flash Sentry!"

Oh boy Scoots........you just opened the floodgates!:facehoof:

"Are you really Flash Sentry?!" Flash almost backpedaled at the sudden pony, only to nod back, "Dude, you're awesome! Can I get an autograph?!"

"Err...sure." The pony gave him a piece of paper and pen, which he took and asked who he was writing it to. But no sooner had he written it, another pony came up and asked for one. Then another and another.

"Can I get a photo with you?"

"Sure."

"Can I see your Celestic Gear?"

"Sorry, left it in Ponyville."

"What was it like being turned into a dragon?"

"Uh...scaly."

*sigh* told you! :rainbowkiss:

The creature remained silent for a moment, then the cord flew out again. But it wasn't alone. Five other cords ripped out from the back of the cloak, all almost extending to ten feet in length. They curled back at this, ripping the cloak apart to reveal the pony hidden within, only for Flash to go wide-eyed.

"Heather?!"

It wasn't Heather. It might have looked like Heather, but just like the last time, Flash was staring at a fusion of pony and technology. Her fur and mane were more pale, while her mouth and nose had the same triangular vent covering it. The front of her neck and chest were just like Mecha-Flash, with the chest having two doors that looked like they had swung open. However, this cyborg didn't have wings, instead having a back with a metal covering with six holes that the cords were coming out of while its lower-legs and hooves were made entirely of metal, with a seam where the leg and hoof met.

Creep DNA thief's still playing god, hopefully one of these will show him why that's a bad idea. *looks at some remains in the corner* Isn't that right Dr. Gero!:rainbowwild:

"You survived this time, but your luck will run out eventually." He hissed, only for another device to start beeping. It was an intercom device, with a speaker that he reached out and touched a button, "Yes?"

"Void," a female voice called out, "The latest batch of weapons is due soon. They better be ready for when I pick them up."

"They're *cough* ready," he grumbled, "Just be patient."

"I think we've been more than patient given the state you were in when we found you."

Funny, I could say the same thing about you! :ajbemused: Also that last bit there, since Shadow's dead there's only one I can think off regarding this creep! :rainbowhuh:

It was a wonderful little scene, though Scootaloo did decide to ruin it. "By the way, you better stay on my good side unless you want Twilight to hear about those two mares you let be flirty with you."

Twilight *What's this I hear about flirty mares Flash?!*:twilightangry2::scootangel:

Good season opener Banshee, looking forward to see what the rest of S7 will bring! :twilightsmile:

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #4 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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Oh man, it is great to be back to the main series! This was an epic season opener. We see more of the mastermind and his cyborg clones, and we get a bit of a hint about him. At least now we have a name for him, "Void". I'm a bit surprised the clone of Heather was sent after Flash instead of going after the real Heather. I guess that just means whatever grudge Void has, it is against specifically Flash. I'm looking forward to seeing how this storyline plays out.

It was also great to see Scootaloo get in on the action and get a day in the limelight. I can understand how she feels overshadowed compared to Flash, but she really came through with figuring out how to defeat Mecha-Heather. That was also a great reference to The Incredibles. The talk she had with Flash at the end was sweet, and the way she ruined it by threatening to tell Twilight about the mares that flirted with him was hilarious and totally what a younger sibling would do.

Great job once again. I know am going to love this story!

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #5 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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so Void made clones of different Knights?
I get why his sister would feel the way she dose having siblings can make you feel that way but at least he showed her she was important.

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #6 · Aug 17th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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so his mom and sister admit Flash and Twilight will marry one day.

Iacon Scholar
Iacon Scholar #7 · Aug 20th, 2021 · · · Carnival Chaos ·
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"They can't stop it," Scootaloo whispered as Trail put Misty down before grabbing another a piece of metal, charging at the pony with it, only for it break upon contact. "The only thing strong enough to penetrate it is..." Her eyes went wide as she looked over at the claw Flash had decapitated, remembering how he cut it off, "Itself."

Love The Incredibles reference!:raritystarry:

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #8 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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Good for Soul

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #9 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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Well, it's nice that Soul got her own chapter considering Heart have more focused chapter than her but hey, it's good one.

I am shocked that you turn this chapter into Pandemic episode considered we are still in Pandemic… :twilightoops: you have balls, Banshee for doing that!

At least, Soul manages to save the day with her healing power! Princess of Life is a fitting title for her.

Here's highlights

This was followed by him saying this, "The only way I was able to stop those two was because somepony else helped me. Whatever this thing is that's after me, the Sacred Light isn't gonna be enough."

Yeah, not even Sacred Light can protect him from Void's bots.

And as she disappeared into the distance, her friends all frowned at the sight. As for the filly, she let another sigh as her eyes drifted up to the horn that had been forced upon her, "Why couldn't Faust have turned me back to a pegasus after she was done with me? It couldn't have been that hard." As she said this, memories of when her magic went out of control came to mind, making her shake her head, "Why do I have this?"

Poor Soul… :fluttershysad:

And after a few seconds, she smiled. "Hey, I feel much-ah...ah...ah!"

"Duck and cover!" Ace yelped before everypony jumped down, Twilight now unleashing a supercharged sneeze that even caused her horn to fire a blast of magic. The beam flew around and struck some of the room's potted plants, turning them into a trumpet, jack in the box and a lamp.

Once she was done, she sniffed before rubbing her nose, "Sorry."

FAILURE!!!!!

Flash was about to reply, only to hear another voice cry out, "Achoo!" They turned to see a sniffing pony, Starlight. "Oh, excuse me." She then saw the two raise an eyebrow, "What?" Flash pointed at the ceiling again, Starlight grimacing at this before teleporting away.

Wait a minute….

The group's eyes went down to the name on the dish's lid, with one particular pony's heart stopping at the sight of t. "No..." Soul whispered, falling over as she saw her own name staring back at her. "I'm the one that started this?!"

I KNEW IT!!!!! No wonder why Soul is not sick like the rest of them! Oh man!

"But it didn't die out," Soul began to cry. "It's been living inside me and now I've brought it to Equestria!" Her mind went back to what Faust had told Flash about the plague and how it had no cure, causing her tears to increase. "I...I killed us all! Everypony's gonna die and it's all my fault!"

Yeah… about that, you guys are getting a movie, another season and the fact we are 2 chapter in this season, so yeah… very unlikely.

"That would likely poison her more than anything," First replied as he walked away from Twilight. "I am sorry. I...I don't know what else to do." As he said that, he suddenly stumbled, staggering over to the wall as he began to lose his balance.

So ironically for a doctor who can cure anything ends up falling into illness.

She reached Twilight and Flash's room, throwing the door open and running to their bedside, "Twilight!" She screamed, "Please help me! I don't know what to do!" Twilight didn't reply, the mare staring at the ceiling as Soul slumped down, "Please...I'm scared. I don't want to be left alone again." Tears now hit the floor, "Please....don't let anypony die because of me."

Damn! Gives her a break, Banshee!

With that, a single tear escaped her eye. One containing all her hopes and deep desire to help now flowing down her face and over the edge of her cheek. It flew down and landed on her flank, atop her cutie mark. And as it absorbed into her fur, something happened.

Look like her power has finally awakening!

She took a deep breath, letting a stream of magic to flow through her. And as she did this, all the fear and doubt she had ever felt about her magic suddenly vanished. "I might not have wanted it," she told herself as the magic flowed, "But this is my power. It's my ally...and it'll help me however I choose. And I choose, to save you!" With that, she unleashed a bright light, the pink and gold magic flowing throughout the room.

Now, go save them! :rainbowdetermined2:

That spark exploded into a blast of power that covered her entire body, her eyes opening up, now glowing pure white. All over the town, anypony still able to stand was drawn to a light that flowed in through their windows. Looking outside, they saw the source, the little filly flying near the top of the quarantine dome. That light shot up and struck the magical dome, causing it to charge from blue to a gold and pink mixture.

As soon as the dome was completely transformed, it started radiating the energy throughout the entire town. Every building and inhabitant were bathed in the energy, flowing through them as it began to destroy the virus.

Definitely an awesome moment for Soul!

Twilight nodded at this, "And it seems your natural magical talent has finally awakened: Healing."

Princess of Healing?

"Yes. I don't know about you, but the title of...Princess of Life, has a nice ring to it. Wouldn't you agree?"


Twilight smiled as she let the name run through her head. "Shining Soul, the Princess of Life. I like the sound of that." Celestia nodded again before they headed out, both looking forward to seeing how far Soul would be able to go now that she knew what path her life was going to take.

Yeah, Princess of Life is a better title than Princess of Healing.

Awesome work.

nathanb
nathanb #10 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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An excellent chapter, really good work with Soul. I know it the plague will return but not this way. Waiting for the next chapter.

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #11 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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So i guess she now the princess of healing.

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #12 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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Quite the progress for Soul as the Healing Princess, course this chapter hit quite close to home with the whole pandemic still going on around the world! :twilightoops: Love this route you're taking with her Banshee, looking forward to her progress from here on out, not to mention some progress from a certain scaly magic user as well! :raritywink::moustache:

Checking some of these Highlights amid these medical supplies! :

This was followed by him saying this, "The only way I was able to stop those two was because somepony else helped me. Whatever this thing is that's after me, the Sacred Light isn't gonna be enough."

The statement was followed with an order that Flash was to keep his Celestic Gear on him at all times. He agreed to this easily, knowing it wouldn't change much as Celestia ordered the knights to start creating a file over these incidents. And as this happened, Flash went back to Ponyville, doing the usual patrols and working to train Fire Heart over his abilities.

Yep, not leaving your piece on your room while going out Flash! :ajsmug:

"We're adding a magical doorbell." Soul raised an eyebrow at this, only to notice a bit of rune magic the pair were writing into the wood.

"Why do you need a magical doorbell?" She asked, Twilight replying by holding up a book. "A book?"

"I special ordered it, but then I had to go all the way to the post office to pick it up because I missed the delivery. Turns out, Derpy waited at the front door for five minutes while I was in the kitchen. She knocked, but I couldn't hear her, so that's why I've decided to add a magic doorbell."

Hope you also invested on an alarm system as well Twilight, especially after unwanted visitors breaking in (Shade/Crimson Masquerade gang/Changelings) multiple times! :ajbemused:

"We need as much as we can to get them back to normal," Spike replied, "Now who wants to help me-ah," he stopped as he started taking large breaths. "Ah...ah...ACHOO!" He sneezed, causing him to unleashed a blast of fire that everyone backpedaled from, "Oh no..."

"BED!" The three yelled, Spike turning to head for his room.

Damn, sorry little purple buddy! :fluttercry:

The group's eyes went down to the name on the dish's lid, with one particular pony's heart stopping at the sight of t. "No..." Soul whispered, falling over as she saw her own name staring back at her. "I'm the one that started this?!

Geez quite the kick to poor Soul's backside! :pinkiegasp:

"Faust, I don't know if you can hear me or not, but I need your help. I can save everypony, but I can't do it on my own. You gave me unlimited power once before. Please, give me the strength I need to stop this plague." She waited, but didn't feel any different. In fact, she could feel her power starting to weaken. "Please...I don't want to lose my new home like how I lost my old one! Please!" Silence filled the air as the magic inside her dropped to zero, the glow now gone. And as tears began to appear in her eyes again, a single spark appeared from the tip of her horn.

That spark exploded into a blast of power that covered her entire body, her eyes opening up, now glowing pure white. All over the town, anypony still able to stand was drawn to a light that flowed in through their windows. Looking outside, they saw the source, the little filly flying near the top of the quarantine dome. That light shot up and struck the magical dome, causing it to charge from blue to a gold and pink mixture.

As soon as the dome was completely transformed, it started radiating the energy throughout the entire town. Every building and inhabitant were bathed in the energy, flowing through them as it began to destroy the virus.

Sweet epic moment for the young alicorn! :raritystarry::heart:

Awesome chapter here Banshee, great work as always & till next week! :twilightsmile:

Kayceejr91
Kayceejr91 #13 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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"Play video games," Button instantly responded.

"How is that a career?" Heart asked, Button shrugging as he said he'd find a way. "You might wanna try and find another way of making a living with that cutie mark."

Well Button Mash you can be a video games creator or be like this guy and review them.

https://youtu.be/qorFHyOVSsc

Reximus-Prime
Reximus-Prime #14 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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Nice chapter. Now if the same thing would happen to get rid of this Covid 19 scrap so things can go back to normal.

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #15 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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This was a great chapter!

It's nice for Shining Soul to finally get a Day in the Limelight. Fire Heart got most of the focus between them in Season 6 and Dragon's Awakening, and all we really got to see from Soul was her friendship with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. I certainly wasn't expecting the return of the plague that wiped out the Lost City of Faust, nor for Soul to be an unknowing carrier of it. I thought it was just lore for Soul and Heart's origins, but it certainly made a comeback.

Soul has plenty of time to figure out how to best use her talent to better Equestria, but I like the sound of Princess of Life.

Surprisedpikachu
Surprisedpikachu #16 · Aug 24th, 2021 · · · Ones Soul Calling ·
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'princess of life' is definitely a more fitting title

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #17 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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I means that's fair point considering you did a lot of original content lately… I am surprised you pick this one over A Flurry of Emotions but hey, you did say you wanting to do boring.. no pun intended.

Good one.

Here's highlights

"Why do Flash and Twilight have these so close to their castle? That's just asking for trouble." He pulled the last one off her as Pinkie then pointed to something else.

The world may never know.

"I wouldn't say that." Springer shrugged, "Everypony has a unique way of being friends. I mean, look at me. When Flash and I hang out, we like to listen to music and read comics. And when I wanna play video games, I'd hang out with a pony that really likes video games. Everypony's different."

Good point.

"Hey," she asked before holding up the box, "Don't you want a slice?" She opened it up, only to cringe, "Eww, pineapple."

I'm agree with Derpy on this one… sorry pineapple lovers but I don't like pineapple on my pizza… stick to pepperoni pizza.. man!

No pineapple on my pizza for me… :pinkiesick:

This just made the two pegasi share a glance, only for Flash to freeze up. "Hang on," he told them before holding his head. "I'm here. Whoa Springer, calm down. What's attacking?" He nodded and hummed, "No, I got this." He spread his wings. "Sorry to dash, but I got places to be." He then turned to Heart, glaring at him before pointing his hoof at the colt's chest. "Stay." Heart snarled at this, "Stay." With that, he took to the air.

To be fair, Heart already cause too much trouble for Flash and others during Dragon's Awakening and I don't think Flash want to go through Heart's stupidness again.

She pulled him away, the colt crying out, "Hey! I wanted to take a ride on that waterfall." Pinkie stopped his complaints by glaring at him, the pegasus colt gulping, "Um...nevermind. I can come back."

Look like Heart know to not mess with Pinkie Pie, especially her Pinkamena Diane Pie persona…. :pinkiecrazy:

She hit the bells before pushing the two, Heart then asking, "Don't you think you're being a little too extreme?"

Heart got a good point of the way Pinkie act toward them.

"Pinkie's worrying about Maud not having any friends," Springer added, "And you know Pinkie. She can worry about something worst than Twilight sometimes."

Burn! 🔥

"Huh?!" Springer asked before Pinkie ran past him, "What do you MEAN?!" He let out a yelp as he was pulled along, the pair disappearing down the hallway.

Springer, what did we said? Don't question Pinkie Pie!

Starlight sighed and shook her head, "I'm going back to bed. You three, out." She then pushed the boys out with her magic before slamming the door shut.

I can relate to that… I am more of night owl than early bird… like to sleep in.

Getting to Ghastly Gorge wasn't difficult, as it turned out the train Pinkie had chased after earlier hadn't been the one Maud was on, meaning the real train to the place arrived sooner then they had hoped. During the trek, Pinkie had explained to Springer that she needed him to track Maud's aura, the jakhowl agreeing as he explained, "Now...I never really memorized it cuz she's so rarely in Ponyville and well..." Pinkie raised an eyebrow, "No offense, but your sister has a very boring aura."

Once again! Springer is the master of roasting people! :rainbowlaugh:

"No!" He yelped as he turned back and saw Pinkie had landed on a smaller ledge and Maud was hanging that one's edge. "GIRLS!" He then saw an eel staring at them, licking its lips. "Oh no you don't!" He roared, leaping onto the beast. "Yippee ki yay!" He yelled before the eel dove into another hole, Springer hanging onto it as it ran through the tunnels like a runaway train.

Die Hard reference.

As they did, Springer couldn't help but shed a tear. When the pair turned to him, he quickly wiped it. "Oh...bit of dust got in my eye from riding that eel."

You lie. :ajsmug:

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #19 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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was not bad tho was hoping to see them take car of Flurry and see Flash as a Uncle and help Twilight

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #20 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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This was fun. Wasn't my first choice for a canon episode to get adapted, that would be A Flurry of Emotions, but still a fun little chapter. Even though it was mostly the same I like a few of the little changes made like Wild, Heart, and Springer being added in certain scenes.

HolyCross9
HolyCross9 #21 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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To be fair, Heart already cause too much trouble for Flash and others during Dragon's Awakening and I don't think Flash want to go through Heart's stupidness again.

Heart still has a chance to redeem himself from that incident AND gain significant character development in the near future. You shouldn't obsession over what happened in the previous story may end up denyint Heart of that chance and I personally want to see him become a great and noble Royal Knight of Fire someday.

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #22 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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A fun classic episode, though I was expecting Flurry of Emotions but hey, I'm not complaining with the fun outcome, even having Springer getting into the crazy Pinkie fun! :pinkiehappy:

As for Highlights :

"I already have some ideas," Maud replied, "One such idea is moving to Ponyville." This statement caused Pinkie to freeze in place. "I also might start writing a book on the best places in Equestria to find the best quality rocks of each genus."

"Hold it!" Pinkie teleported over to her, "What did you just say?!"

"I might start writing a book on the best places in Equestria to find the best quality rocks of each genus," she repeated.

"No!" Pinkie shook her head. "Before that."

"I already have some ideas."

"After that."

"I might start writing-"

"BETWEEN THOSE TWO THINGS!" Pinkie screamed, Wild seeing Maud's lips move slightly up, making him chuckle as he realized she was trolling her sister.

lol only Maud can wind up Pinkie like that, I love you!!!:rainbowlaugh:

"I found one." They turned back to Maud and saw she was holding up a greenish yellow gem.

"Oh, you're an absolute darling! This will surely make my gown stand out at Countess Coloratura's album release party." She placed it in the basket of gems that Spike was holding, "Do you know how rare this is?"

Pinkie then shot up beside Maud, "Just another day in Ponyville!" She winked before trotting over to look at the gem, only for her sister's reply to make her stop.

"That's actually a really common gem."

"Huh?" The remaining ponies and dragon glanced over at her, Maud taking the moment to kick a wall with her back hoof. The wall broke apart and a large pile of chartreuse gems came flooding out.

The ponies all went wide-eyed as Maud looked up, "These are all really common gems."

One word........OUCH! :raritycry:

"I travelled Equestria for my rocktorate dissertation..." The mare then went into a vivid explanation about how she had met Starlight back before she had met Twilight and before her village was even finished being built, and asked if she knew about any rocks with the power that could hold cutie marks. It turns out, it had been Maud that had told her all about the wall that had once held the cutie marks of Twilight and the others.

Once the story was over, Starlight seemed to have fully remember the incident while Pinkie did a small gulp. She unleashed a high pitched fake laugh after this as she said, "Hey, I got an idea. Let's not tell anypony that part where you maybe, for sure, accidentally helped Starlight enslave a town!" She started laughing again, then turned back to Maud, "Tell nopony!"

Maud remained quiet for a moment before replying, "It's not like she's enslaved anypony lately."

Well, that was awkward! :twilightoops:

He turned back to the barrel, "See Pinkie? They might not seem to be having a good time, but maybe just calmly talking to one another is there way of enjoying one another's company." But as he said that, silence was her reply, "Pinkie?" He closed his eyes to scan for her aura...only to find nothing. "What the?" He reached into the barrel, only to just pull up some plants, "Where'd she go?" The pair began to scan for her aura trail, only to find nothing to indicate how she escaped the barrel without them noticing.

"How'd she do that?" Ace looked under the barrel, expecting a secret hatch, only to find nothing.

"It's Pinkie Pie, don't question it."

A mantra to live by, especially when it comes to Pinkie! :ajbemused:

"I'm not," Derpy replied, "Pinkie threw it at me. When did Pinkie start working for Mr. Domino?"

"I...don't know," Flash replied, "But if she's acting this strange, that's usually a bad sign. Come on Heart." The two walked away, Derpy now watching them leave.

"Hey," she asked before holding up the box, "Don't you want a slice?" She opened it up, only to cringe, "Eww, pineapple."

Ewww sorry pineapple lovers, it's pepperoni for me! :pinkiesick:

This just made the two pegasi share a glance, only for Flash to freeze up. "Hang on," he told them before holding his head. "I'm here. Whoa Springer, calm down. What's attacking?" He nodded and hummed, "No, I got this." He spread his wings. "Sorry to dash, but I got places to be." He then turned to Heart, glaring at him before pointing his hoof at the colt's chest. "Stay." Heart snarled at this, "Stay." With that, he took to the air.

Heart crossed his hooves at this, "I'm not a dog."

"Well, telling you to stay where you were like a pony didn't seem to work out," Starlight joked as Heart rolled his eyes. "Can you really blame him?"

Hey Heart, gimmie your paw err hoof! :rainbowlaugh:
Also Flash, do I really wanna know??!:twilightoops:

She pulled him away, the colt crying out, "Hey! I wanted to take a ride on that waterfall." Pinkie stopped his complaints by glaring at him, the pegasus colt gulping, "Um...nevermind. I can come back."

lol someone's having fun! :rainbowkiss:

"Pinkie's worrying about Maud not having any friends," Springer added, "And you know Pinkie. She can worry about something worse than Twilight sometimes."

Seems Springer's been taking burn lessons from our resident Ponyville dragon! :moustache:

During the trek, Pinkie had explained to Springer that she needed him to track Maud's aura, the jakhowl agreeing as he explained, "Now...I never really memorized it cuz she's so rarely in Ponyville and well..." Pinkie raised an eyebrow, "No offense, but your sister has a very boring aura."

lol hope you have some cream inside that poofy mane to treat those incoming burns Pinkie! :twilightblush:

Pinkie grabbed the jakhowl before straightening him out and pointing his face to the ground. "Get searching!" She started waving him around like a metal detector, Springer rolling his eyes.

"Let me go. Now" Pinkie dropped him, Springer grumbling as he dusted himself off before noticing Pinkie was now wearing a pair of headphones and holding the end of a lead that he really didn't want to guess where she was gonna stick it.

Whoa, whoa, whoa, let's NOT go there Pinkie............at all!!!:pinkiecrazy::twilightoops:

But the peace and quiet only lasted about five seconds.

"YAHOO!" They turned to the waterfall and saw Heart sliding down it with Ace, Rumble and Button following him. The colts all cheered as they slid over the edge and splashed into the water before surfacing and laughing. That is, till they noticed the mares staring at them. "What?"

Huh, guess he did come back to try it later! :rainbowlaugh:

Fun chapter all around Banshee, good work! :twilightsmile:

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #23 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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was sad they did not do that one and since they skipped it we may not get to see Flash be uncle like to Flurry

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #24 · Aug 31st, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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nice change in pace.

MechaTomX
MechaTomX #25 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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How funny, Flurry always kept Flash alert, when I see that episode I really wonder if I really want to have children (I have many dreams and goals to fulfill in the future but I don't think I can fulfill being a father of a family), that battle was great, hope spike can control his magic soon

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #26 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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glad you did this, was worried when one of those trials showed up I had thought Flurry's blast would destroy it but guess she still got a ways to go still she helped Flash a lot and he won. Like how close the two of them were shown also how he was able to help Twilight out was good to had he been around in the episode it would have gone better for her.
the fight was fun and epic.
despite the attack things went smoothly was afraid would end more bad but all in all a great ending

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #27 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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So glad that you got to adapt A Flurry of Emotions even though the chapter is more intense compare to the canon one but I like it.

I love Flash and Springer get to spend the whole days of taking care of Flurry Heart.

I wonder why Void is obsessed with Sacred Light so much? Sound like if he knew about it before. 🤔

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It began within a dark, dreary laboratory, the pony known as Void wheezing as he walked up to a pod. A long hiss came next, the pony now implanting a piece of Corrupted Shadow into his latest creation and shutting the hatch.

"This is your target!" He held a hoof up to the glass, showing a familiar photo of a certain pegasus. The being inside stared at the image and growled, Void letting out a cough as the machine began to open. "Bring him...bring him to me, and destroy anything or anyone that gets in your way."

You got to be kidding me! :twilightangry2:

"Oh, this is not gonna end well." Flash commented as Twilight picked the baby up in her magic and started kissing her before giving Flurry a raspberry on her bellybutton.

Yup!

"Err..." Springer poked him on the shoulder, "Flash." He turned to him, Springer gesturing to where Heart, Soul, Ace and Mira had been...as in, they had all vanished.

They are like

"COWARDS!" He yelled, "Come on Heart! What kind of Royal Knight runs away from looking after a baby?!" He then pointed a hoof at Springer without looking at him, "Wipe that smirk off your face." Springer had been smirking as Flash turned to Shining. "Don't worry. We can still look after her for a couple of hours."

Ha ha ha ha! Poor Flash :rainbowlaugh:

Although to be fair, Heart and Soul went through Hell with Flurry Heart and they don't want to go through that again!

Springer glanced himself over, "Well technically, I'm a jakhowl." He then looked Flash over, "You at least dress like a stallion." Flash nodded, "Apart from Saturday nights."

I wonder what Flash wear in Saturday Nights? Don't tell me he dress up like John Travolta's character from Saturday Nights Fever?! That would be hilarious! :rainbowlaugh:

"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!" They screamed at the top of their lungs, both jumping up. "Grab the baby bag!" Flash yelled before shooting out the window, quickly seeing Flurry just a ways off. "Oh, no you don't little lady!"

Make it even better if you play clock scene from DBZ Abridged over this scene! :rainbowlaugh:

He raised up his sword to block an attack...only for nothing to happen. Blinking at this and a few seconds passing, Flash lowered his blade, "Uh...okay. Are you sure your creator was finished with you? You seem to be a little-" He didn't get to finish as Trial-T raised its hoof and fired another blast of water, hitting Flash straight in the chest. "GYAH!" He was thrown back into a tree, moaning as he slumped over, "What the heck?!" He forced his eyes open and saw the water containers now both half full and continuing to fill. "How did-" He stopped when he saw the clone's horn now shining, "Are you...getting the water from the air?"

Make sense where he get his water from or refill water so easily.

"Flash!" Heart gasped before glaring at Trial-T, his body exploding with fire. "Stay away from him!" He charged at the cyborg, but before he could get close, the cyborg pointed its hose-tail at him and unleashed a stream of water. "WHOA!"

Good idea, Heart! Let's attack an enemy with a water hose with your fire powers! That will ensure of destroying that thing! :ajbemused:

"Fla...fla...fla..." Her tears continued to well up as the cyborg charged up as much water as possible, only for Flurry to screech, "FLAAAAA!" Her horn glowed as a beam of light shot out, hitting the clone in the chest instantly. The blow made it cry out before getting blasted back, the sounds of metal clanging as it began to grind on the dirt road below.

I knew Flurry Heart would be the one to save the day but goddamn! She hit Trial so hard with her magic that she broke his chest and Corrupted Shadow! :pinkiegasp:

Twilight nodded and did that with her wing, Flash turning back to the clone as his wings opened up before expelling the Sacred Light. This shot him forward as he held his sword back, his weapon now shining, "SHINING SWORD OF THE HEAVENS!" He screeched, the sword slashing through the area, the knight sliding to a stop behind Trial-T with his sword pointed ahead.

Gurren Lagann reference?

He began to cough again, only to turn away from the machine and stared at the three remaining doors. "Why do they keep losing?! They're made specifically to counter his abilities..." He slumped over in his chair, "Maybe...maybe I'm sending them out too early?" He let out another cough, "Urgh...maybe that's right. Maybe I just need to...make more adjustments...more than enough to actually defeat their opponent." A long wheeze flowed through the room next as he hopped off his chair, "Very well. Enjoy the time why you have it, Flash Sentry. My next creation won't be so easily beaten."

And his next creation will be…. Ruby Scarlet! Oh dear! :pinkiegasp:

"That would be great." She turned to Flash, "We're just lucky Flash and Springer were here to look after Flurry while I was busy. If they weren't, I might have ended up trying to take care of Flurry and do the hospital visit." She picked Flurry up and smiled at her, "That probably wouldn't have been very fun for you, huh?"

Yeah, so glad Flash was there to prevent the whole mess!

Flash just closed his eyes and opened his ears, the others listening as cries of disgust and moans soon filled the castle. Flash couldn't help but laugh, "I love my life sometimes." He grabbed Flurry and lead everyone to the living room, wanting a rest of the chance to play some more. Despite everything, this day was definitely one worth remembering.

They are going to have a long shower for sure and that's what they get for abandoned Flash and Springer! :rainbowlaugh:

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #28 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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I loved this episode in canon, and am glad it got an adaptation here. You managed to keep the fuzzy heartwarming stuff, and also include some action with Mecha-Tidal, or I guess I should say Trial-T in this case.

I have been looking forward to some Flash and Flurry bonding ever since Flurry was finally introduced, and this did not disappoint. She clearly loves "Uncle" Flash just as much as Auntie Twily. I also liked how Flurry was trying to say Flash and Springer's names throughout the chapter. Her first official word is still up in the air, but you do a better job building up to it than in canon, where she suddenly said "Mama!" in the Season 9 premiere (even if that was a cute moment). Also, Flurry already shows she has the heart of a princess and hero when she constantly tries to go back to help Flash and Springer, and deals massive damage to Trial-T all on her own when she was upset over it hurting Flash.

"Flurry, I've got a surprise for you!" She giggled as she put her on her back, walking to a nearby closet before putting her down, the foal running on the spot, her tongue out like an excited dog.

I always loved that cute moment. Seeing Flurry act like a puppy.

The boys stepped back with big grins, "We've changed a diaper," Flash cheered before he and Springer high-fived, only for Flurry's face to scrunch up, a familiar sound filling the air as Flash let out a moan, "Oh, come on!"

"Ready diaper three," Springer added.

Twelve diapers later...

I see unlike the canon episode you actually used the diapers.

"Fla...fla...fla..." Her tears continued to well up as the cyborg charged up as much water as possible, only for Flurry to screech, "FLAAAAA!" Her horn glowed as a beam of light shot out, hitting the clone in the chest instantly. The blow made it cry out before getting blasted back, the sounds of metal clanging as it began to grind on the dirt road below.

The golden light from the horn was so bright that it could be seen by anypony over a mile away from the town. Flash's eyes opening up to see what Flurry was doing, "Flurry..." This statement caused the baby to cut her magic, glancing back at him.

"Fla!" She instantly hugged him, the defender embracing her back, only to then hear a new cry of pain.

She's kinda like Kid Gohan from Dragon Ball Z. She has massive power and doesn't have full control over it, but will unleash it if she gets angry when her loved ones are hurt.

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #29 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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This is still one of my fave S7 episodes but you brought it up 120% cooler, with not only cute baby antics but also heart-stopping action with the latest spawn of Void against our heroes! :rainbowdetermined2:

The interactions between Flash/Springer with Flurry were adorable, especially uncle Flash! As for this Void creep I really hope he gets what's coming to him later on! :ajbemused:

And now here are your usual Highlights! :

"Flurry's fine," Shining replied, "And she's wondering if her favorite aunt wouldn't mind watching her for a few hours."

"Hope you're not too busy," Cadance added, Spike walking up with the list in response.

"Actually, we kind of are-" the drake tried to say before being muffled by Twilight's hoof.

"Busy?" She scoffed, "Would the best aunt ever be too busy to spend time with this adorable little one?" She pointed at Flurry while her parents smiled, Spike then jumping next to the baby carriage and holding up the schedule. "No!"

"Oh, this is not gonna end well." Flash commented as Twilight picked the baby up in her magic and started kissing her before giving Flurry a raspberry on her bellybutton.

*brings up dooming music* :twilightoops:

"And diapers," Cadance floated a bag over to them, "Uh..." she then floated more over, "Extra diapers. Oh," followed by even more, "And backup extra diapers. Heh."

"I thought you were only leaving her here for the afternoon?" Ace asked.

"Oh? Do you think you'll need more?"

Wait, what??? :applejackconfused:

"Either way, are you sure you can watch her?" Twilight smiled, especially when Flurry climbed onto her head and started nibbling at her ear. But then Spike made a noise that made her turn to him and see the drake pointing at the list.

Twilight grimaced at this, especially as Flurry gave her a hug, but then Flash spoke up. "Don't worry about it." They all turned to him, "We can handle this. Together, the eight of us will have no problem looking after her."

"Err..." Springer poked him on the shoulder, "Flash." He turned to him, Springer gesturing to where Heart, Soul, Ace and Mira had been...as in, they had all vanished.

"Where'd they go?"

"They booked it," Springer replied while Flash stared at the doorway.

"COWARDS!" He yelled, "Come on Heart! What kind of Royal Knight runs away from looking after a baby?!" He then pointed a hoof at Springer without looking at him, "Wipe that smirk off your face." Springer had been smirking as Flash turned to Shining. "Don't worry. We can still look after her for a couple of hours."

I see some creatures having common sense! :rainbowlaugh:

"We can handle it," Flash replied as they arrived at the toy store. "Just as long as nothing else tries to cause any issues, we'll be fine."

*sigh* you just love poking Karma on her backside, don't you Flash?:facehoof:

"Yup," Flash nodded. "I'd show you what we got...but you might wanna take a shower first." The pair glanced each other over as Flash and Springer pushed the cart of toys and treats out of the room before they could get struck. Once that was done, they returned to the dinning room and Twilight handed him the baby.

"Here you go," she said before she and Spike teleported to the bathrooms.

Flash and Flurry smiled at one another, the pegasus holding the baby up as she giggled. As this happened, Springer asked, "Do you think maybe we should clean the place up?"

"We could," Flash nodded before turning to the jakhowl with a curled devious grin, "Or we could get Heart and the others to do it when they finally show their faces." Springer mimicked the look, Flurry seeing this and giggling before trying to make the same face.

Awww Flurry's learning from her uncle already! :rainbowlaugh:

Springer smiled at this, "You're right. After everything we've been through, we've got this. Whatever Flurry throws at us, we can handle it."

But as soon as he said that, the room was filled with a particular popping sound coming from Flurry. This made the pair's eyes go wide before they slowly turned to Flurry, seeing an uncomfortable look on her face.

"Oh no," they said in unison before sniffing the air. When they did this, they were both assaulted by a powerful stench more potent than that one time Springer asked Zecora for a super anti-flea potion. They both grimaced as Springer moaned, "Ahhh! Anything but...that."

"How the heck did she turn mashed peas into that?" Flash asked, Springer quickly disappearing before returning with a peg on his nose. He gave one to Flash and he placed it on his nose, the pair then turning to Flurry and seeing she was still uncomfortable. "What do we do?"

"Well, we can't just leave it," Springer replied, "Which means one of us is gonna have to go and grab the bull by the horns...so to speak."

"You're right," Flash gulped, "Are we not stallions?"

Springer glanced himself over, "Well technically, I'm a jakhowl." He then looked Flash over, "You at least dress like a stallion." Flash nodded, "Apart from Saturday nights."

Errmmm do I really wanna know??! :rainbowhuh:

The boys stepped back with big grins, "We've changed a diaper," Flash cheered before he and Springer high-fived, only for Flurry's face to scrunch up, a familiar sound filling the air as Flash let out a moan, "Oh, come on!"

"Ready diaper three," Springer added.

Twelve diapers later...

Flash and Springer slumped over, Flurry giggling at the sight. The waste bin beside them were currently overflowing with bin bags full of used diapers, the smell making Flash groan, "I'm gonna need therapy."

Welp, glad Cadence brought extra extra diapers! :pinkiesick:

"A Trial showed up." Twilight's eyes went wide at this as he continued, "Flash lead it away, but I needed to get Flurry out of there. Can you look after her while I go help him?"

Twilight nodded back, "Just be careful. The last two times those things appeared, they were barely beaten. I'll try and get the others to come help you." Springer nodded before running back into the park, Flurry turning and squirming at the sight.

"Spree!" She cried as Springer disappeared. "Fla!"

Awww she has really bonded with those 2! :heart:

Flurry shook Flash at this, but the defender didn't respond. The sight made the foal tear up, only to her metal hoof-steps, making her turn to the cyborg as it pointed its tail at them.

"Fla...fla...fla..." Her tears continued to well up as the cyborg charged up as much water as possible, only for Flurry to screech, "FLAAAAA!" Her horn glowed as a beam of light shot out, hitting the clone in the chest instantly. The blow made it cry out before getting blasted back, the sounds of metal clanging as it began to grind on the dirt road below.

The golden light from the horn was so bright that it could be seen by anypony over a mile away from the town. Flash's eyes opening up to see what Flurry was doing, "Flurry..." This statement caused the baby to cut her magic, glancing back at him.

"Fla!" She instantly hugged him, the defender embracing her back, only to then hear a new cry of pain. He glanced up to see the Trial clutching its chest, smoke clearing as he now saw the beast's metal chest had been dented and damaged beyond recognition. A large opening could be seen, revealing a bunch of blast dust...and one destroyed Corrupted Shadow rock.

This little bundle of joy shattered a known powerful relic, walking junkpile never stood a chance! :rainbowkiss:

This made Twilight chuckle, "I'll have to check with Spike, but I think we're free."

Flash nodded while Cadance glanced around. "Where is Spike, anyway?" Twilight opened her mouth to respond, only to facehoof.

"Oh no..."

"You left him at the hospital, didn't I?" Flash deadpanned, making Twilight slowly nod back.

"The dashing dragon warrior breathed a scorching flame from his snout," Spike read to the ponies in the hospital. "Then chuckled to himself as he flew into the sunset." He got up and leapt onto a nearby trolley cart, "If you can't stand the heat, don't fight a dragon!"

"Hey," one of the ponies pointed at him, "You kinda look like him!"

"Thank you!" Spike laughed as he closed the book. "Now, who wants more cake?" The foals all cheered as Spike grabbed a knife, the little dragon now wondering how much longer Twilight was gonna be. Not that he wasn't enjoying himself.

Don't worry Twilight, little purple drake has things well covered, also that little foal wasn't completely wrong at the end there! (*see The Last Problem ep*:moustache:)

The four all sighed in relief before running off, Cadance turning to Flash with a small smile, "That was very mature of you, Flash. I was kinda expecting some kind of petty revenge." She then saw Flash and Springer's smiles begin to curl, making her shake her head, "You have a petty revenge planned, don't you?"

Flash just closed his eyes and opened his ears, the others listening as cries of disgust and moans soon filled the castle. Flash couldn't help but laugh, "I love my life sometimes."

Huh guess the boys did get the last laugh! :rainbowlaugh:

Another amusing & enjoyable chapter Banshee, great work! :twilightsmile:

nathanb
nathanb #30 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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Good four chapters, I really liked one soul calling and a flurry of emotion for this moment. Great job Banshee.

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #31 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · 3 · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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7/10... while objectively better than the episode and address most of the source material's plot holes, the point the episode was attempting to make (about how to handle your emotions when dealing with infants/toddlers when you are not the child's authority figure) was lost.
Nice use of the draw the short straw comment, nice to see more of the MechaKnights.
However these battles are starting to run the risk of establishing a pattern that Flash can only win against these MechaKnights because of an effective dues ex machina, granted the bonding between Flash and Flurry was a clear attempt to be Chekov's Gun... the execution of establishing that it was in fact Checkov's Gun was a 2 out 5.
Also given that it had been established that there are teleportartion rings between the castle of The Crystal Empire and The Castle of Friendship (and the Canterlot Castle) in this AU... the lack of familiarity with Flurry on Flash's and Twilight's part that is the basis of this chapter is a bit of plot contrivance that is bordering on being a plot hole. The core lack of familiarity on Twilight's part worked for the show because it can take at least the better part of a day to take the train from The Crystal Empire to Ponyville and vice versa, a teleportaion ring takes less than a second...
And before your down vote, the author was the one that elected to incorportate teleportation rings linking Twilight's to Cadance's which have been shown to be used at the whims of the those teleporting, a reader thus can rightfully infer that if Twilight wants to B.A.E. she would visit Flurry for about an hour a day every other day or something around those lines.

TLDR, while having it's own issues and misses the point of the original, as a story this is a massive improvement. 7/10

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #32 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · 3 · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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I wonder what Flash wear in Saturday Nights? Don't tell me he dress up like John Travolta's character from Saturday Nights Fever?! That would be hilarious!

Nope, that's when he puts on the Celestia wig and either 'disciplines' or 'gives special lessons' to Twilight... what they are canonically sexually active in this AU.

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #33 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · 3 · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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Gurren Lagann reference?

Nope, a Gurren Lagann reference would be 'The Drill That Pierces The Heavens', this is more generic, like it references the genre as a whole

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #34 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · 3 · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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I just feel like every joke hit the mark.

Comedy is subjective and generally the decision of something actually being funny or not is the hands of audience not the comedian. I'd give it a 7/10 base solely on the effort you put it... if it was based on execution, 5/10, literally mediocre.

Kayceejr91
Kayceejr91 #35 · Sep 8th, 2021 · · · A Flurry of Emotions ·
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"Eeyup," Flash nodded, only to think back at the images of Cadance and Shining's exhausted looks. He then wondered if he could do this whole parenting thing, the image of Twilight and him with their very own bundle of joy appearing in his brain...and the two ponies now exhausted and broken. He felt a shiver down his spine, making him shuffle the thought into the back of his brain.

A big Fourshadoween there! I'm really looking forward to that.

TopGun1986
TopGun1986 #36 · Sep 9th, 2021 · · · Rock Solid Friendship ·
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I'm agree with Derpy on this one… sorry pineapple lovers but I don't like pineapple on my pizza… stick to pepperoni pizza.. man!

No pineapple on my pizza for me… :pinkiesick:

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Ewww sorry pineapple lovers, it's pepperoni for me! :pinkiesick:

I’ve never tried pineapple pizza before, but I can think of something worse…… broccoli pizza!!!!!!:pinkiesick: :pinkiesick: :pinkiesick: :pinkiesick: :pinkiesick: :pinkiesick: :pinkiesick:

nathanb
nathanb #37 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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Woah, great follow up and good advancement in character. Really like your idea of a book to help Spike learn to use is magic and the new role Flicker have, it show that dragon will be more selfaware that in the mlp friendship is magic. Continue the good work Banshee. ;)

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #38 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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Great chapter! Glad it address the aftermath of Dragon's Awakening.

I'm happy that Spike finally found a book that can help him of learning every Mystic Dragon magic! I hope he will be badass Mystic Dragon by the time you do Season 9.

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"Really?" Flash added as he walked up, "How much you written?" He looked onto the typewriter and chuckled, "One letter?"

He and Heart let out a slight laugh as Springer glared at him, "It's a start." He then turned back to the single letter before leaning over and whispering to Flash, "You got any tippex?"

Poor Springer! :rainbowlaugh:

"TWILIGHT!" Starlight's voice echoed through the air, making Springer groan.


"Oh, I give up." He slammed his head down on the typewriter.

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

"Heart and I'll go," Flash told them. "You all stay here and be ready in case this thing flies out of the cave and decides to go desolation of Sluarg on Ponyville."


They flew in as Iron turned to Twilight, "Desolation of Sluarg?"

"It's from a book," she replied as the pair went inside.

The Hobbit reference

"I didn't attack them," he responded before rubbing his nose. "I've just been..." He stopped and started letting out a bunch of growls, the expression on his face making them see he was preparing to sneeze. He let out a roar at this, Twilight creating a shield to block the flames. "Ugh..." he wiped his nose, "Sorry. Ever since I got here, I've been sneezing non-stop."


Twilight raised an eyebrow before taking one of the plants currently sprinkled around the place. She held it up to Flicker, the dragon taking a quick whiff, only to sneeze and unleash another fire blast. "I think you might be allergic to these things," she dropped the burnt flower. "Why don't we return to the castle and you can explain why you're here." Flicker sighed and nodded.

Lesson Learned: Don't give that flower to Flicker or else he will blast your with fire.

"Got it," Flicker responded before moving over to a cupboard, taking out a bag of flour that he put on the counter. He then turned to grab the baking powder, only for his tail to flick around and hit the flour, knocking it off the counter. "Oops." He put the baking powder down and turned to clean the flour up, only for his tail to hit the baking powder, knocking it over, "Augh!" He picked the flour bag up, putting the sack back on the counter, only to knock it off again when he turned to pick the baking powder up. "OH, COME ON!"

Poor Flicker! I guess Dragons (except Spike) wasn't made for baking! :rainbowlaugh:

"Err...I think so." Pinkie ran over to the oven, only for her eyes to literally extend out of her sockets when she saw that Flicker had turned to nob all the way to maximum. She opened the door at this, only for smoke to fly out. They both started coughing as Pinkie removed the now charcoal cupcakes, Flicker using his wings to blow the smoke away. And as the smoke cleared out, Flicker now saw the burnt treats in the tray.


"Uh...maybe baking isn't for me."

Flicker stared at the cloud before snapping a claw, "Hang on. I got an idea." He took a deep breath before unleashing a burst of fire, evaporating the cloud...only for the vapor to spread over the whole town. And as soon as the evaporated water cooled, it began to rain down on the ponies below.


Not being warned of a shower, many ponies caught outside were now soaked, running a day of picnics in the park below. Rainbow then glared at Flicker, the dragon shrugging with a big frown.

"Here chicky chicky chicky," he said as he flew over the fence and poured some seed onto the ground. The chickens looked out and saw him, Flicker smiling as he waved at the chickens. But when he did this, the animals all saw his big teeth and giant claws, making them all hide back into the coop.


"Maybe we should try something else," Rogue whispered, Applejack shaking her head.

"Ah like the guy, but ah'm not exactly comfortable letting a fire breather that's proven to have hay-fever near the trees and crops." They then saw him walk up to the chicken coop, only for the birds inside to huddle themselves even further in as he tried to make them come out. The sight made Applejack sigh, "Time for a meeting with the girls..."

And once they were gone, Springer turned back to the typewriter. "Well now that that's out of the way, I can get back to writing my chronicle in peace." With that, he hit one of the buttons...only for his eyes to twitch as he saw the letter he had made. "More tippex please!"

When will Springer ever finish his chronicles?! Find out next time on Flash Sentry Chronicles!

"Oh, he'll get wings." Twilight's eyes went wide again, "I was born without wings before I molted."

Season 8 foreshadowing

"I think I can help with that." They all turned to a new voice, all going wide-eyed as they saw Dragon Lord Ember standing at the store's doors, "It's about time I found you," she said as she walked up to Flicker and poked him in the chest. "Do you have any idea how long I've been searching for you?! Any longer and I was just gonna call you to come to me!"

Despite what happened in Dragon's Awakening, it's heartwarming that Ember do worried about Flicker and was searching for him… that's why she deserves to be a Dragon Lord.

"Flicker. I want you...to be the first Dragon Lands Chronicler." This statement caused all eyes to go wide, the group statement of 'wha' filling the air.

I…. Didn't…. See…. That…. Coming. :rainbowderp:

The three walked in, only for it suddenly light up. Crystals that lined the walls illuminated, allowing to see a giant library, filled with bookshelf after bookshelf that was packed to the brim with leather bound books. The three stared at the sight, walking around the room as their eyes darted from one shelf to another.

I knew there's a secret room! His father must be rich to build himself a secret room in his cave.

"That's ancient draconic," Flicker chimed in as Spike placed his claw on the cover, which caused something to happen. Before he knew what was happening, his claw began to glow green before the light was sucked into the book and it glowed. He pulled his claw back as the three stared at the book, the words on the cover beginning to change to ones that Spike actually understood. It read:

Draconic Magic

"Magic?!" Spike gasped as he opened the cover and found it was an instruction book...on Mystic Dragon magic, "No way." He flipped to the first spell and found it was one on levitating something. It showed the depiction of a dragon unleashing a stream of magic that formed a hand at the end. "Wow."

Yup, his father did leave him with something after all… :twilightsmile:

Off to the side, Ember smiled at the pair. It was true that the Dragon Lands were entering a new stage of existence. And hopefully, it would be a prosperous one for them all.

Gen 5: I going to end this dragon's career.

The flames extended and morphed into a hand, which reached down and grabbed the gemstone before balling up around it. The Mystic Flame Dragon smiled as he tried the next step, recalling the flame and pulling the gem toward him. And as he did this, the gemstone came into his reach, the little dragon cutting the flames, allowing the gem to fall into his claw.

My man, Spike has succeeded!

Unfortunately, Springer is unable to finish his chronicles on Jakhowls!

Awesome work.

TopGun1986
TopGun1986 #39 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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10976676

Gen 5: I going to end this dragon's career.

Unless he appears in the new series.

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #40 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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This was a fun chapter. I understand Flicker feeling bad about the Malafear incident, since he accidentally released him. But it was nice of Ember to give him an assignment that suits him. Plus, it was nice being able to see her again a bit sooner than "Triple Threat".

I see Spike is working on his Mystic Dragon magic. Once he masters every spell he can he is going to be so badass! Not to mention he hasn't even gotten his wings yet, which Flicker alluded to by mentioning The Molt to Twilight.

There were also a few funny moments here, like When Flicker was trying to find a potential job in Ponyville only to fail at them all, and Springer struggling to write his chronicles for the Jakhowls.

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #41 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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A pretty awesome chapter to not only starting Spike on his magic training but also Flicker's redemption after been under Malajerk's control! It also showed us how good Spike can be as both teacher & student with helping Flicker though this tale! I do pity Springer's attempts at writing his chronicles regarding his race, hope he's able to do it.......provided he gets plenty of tippex that is! :rainbowlaugh:

Also it was great seeing Ember again & giving Flicker that title, it fits him to a tee, looking forward to seeing more of them in upcoming S7 chapters & onwards! :pinkiehappy::moustache:

Oh but what's this written here in ancient draconic???...............Oh the next Highlights!

"Alright..." Rogue pointed at the entrance to the canyon, "The cave into the tunnels is through here."

"That looks like a tight squeeze," Starlight pointed out.

"Iron was able to squeeze through it," Rogue countered, "Just suck in your gut." Starlight rolled her eyes at this while Maud stared at the flowers surrounding the rocky canyon.

Wow Rouge's braver than I thought saying that to Starlight! :ajsmug:

"If you must know, I've decided to write a chronicle detailing the history of the jakhowl race." He turned to the others, "You remember how hard it was to find anything on us when I first showed up. I don't want that to happen again, so I'm compiling everything. Even if our race disappears, we'll never be forgotten again."

"Really?" Flash added as he walked up, "How much you written?" He looked onto the typewriter and chuckled, "One letter?"

He and Heart let out a slight laugh as Springer glared at him, "It's a start." He then turned back to the single letter before leaning over and whispering to Flash, "You got any tippex?"

Guess Springer's typewritting skills got a bit rusty since the time loop incident! :raritywink:

"Oh...my...GOODNESS!" She flew over and picked it up, hugging him tightly and rubbing her face into its. "Isn't he sweet?"

"Very," Ace licked his lips, "Especially slowly cooked, with dipping sauce on the side." Fluttershy turned to shoot him the stare, making the joking jakhowl recoil, "Sorry. That was tasty...I mean tasteless."

Discretion's the better part of valor Ace, especially when it comes to Fluttershy & cute animals! :twilightoops:

"Now for clean up." Flicker nodded and the pair started washing up...only to smell a burning scent several minutes later. "You did put it at three-fifty...right?"

"Err...I think so." Pinkie ran over to the oven, only for her eyes to literally extend out of her sockets when she saw that Flicker had turned to nob all the way to maximum. She opened the door at this, only for smoke to fly out. They both started coughing as Pinkie removed the now charcoal cupcakes, Flicker using his wings to blow the smoke away. And as the smoke cleared out, Flicker now saw the burnt treats in the tray.

*shot of Pinkie giving those cupcakes an eulogy* :pinkiesad2:

"I'm writing a chronicle of my people," Springer responded, "My wards and I are the last jakhowls known in Equestria, but there might still be more that need to learn about us. And even if there aren't, I wanna leave something behind to make sure Equestria never forgets us."

"I can understand that," Flicker nodded as he sat down opposite of him. "If the dragon race ever went extinct, I'm sure we'd want some way for others to remember us." He sighed, "That's why I started researching our people's history in the first place. For all the good it did me." Springer looked up at him as he added, "Let me guess, you're gonna say I shouldn't blame myself for what happened."

"No, it is your fault that Malafear returned." Flicker sighed again, "But not just yours." He raised an eyebrow at this as Springer continued, "I mean, you only found that book because you were interested in that mural. One I'm guessing Starswirl or the other dragons made as a warning." Flicker nodded. "So it's also their fault. I mean, would it have killed them to write a warning instead of a pretty picture? Magic book holding an evil dragon spirit behind this wall. Do not break. That probably would have kept you away, right?" Flicker laughed at this, "See? So it wasn't just your fault."

Ouch, you can always count on Springer for that brutal honesty! :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

At the back of the room, the older occupants of the castle chuckled, "I gotta admit Spike," Starlight turned to the little dragon. "You did a great job teaching him."

"Yeah," Flash nodded, "It took you just a few hours to get him to read as well as I can. And I can barely read."

"Flash....I taught you to read, remember?" Twilight chimed in, "Are you saying I didn't teach you well?!"

Flash shined a grin while turning to Twilight, "Well, Spike didn't make Flicker read giant tomes in the first week."

"I did not make you read giant tomes! They were small!"

So you say Twilight, so you say! :rainbowkiss::twilightangry2:

Honestly, we ponies don't know much about dragons. Heck, Spike's the first dragon I've seen without wings."

"Oh, he'll get wings." Twilight's eyes went wide again, "I was born without wings before I molted."

"Molted?" Twilight asked, but Flicker didn't get the chance to reply as they reached the throne room

Ah ah ah Twilight, no peeking on S8 just yet! :raritywink::moustache:

"What's this?" Ember asked as Spike looked over the book.

"I'm not sure," he told her before using his claw to wipe away the dust that had collected on the cover. When he did, it revealed a bunch of words in a writing that he didn't recognize.

"That's ancient draconic," Flicker chimed in as Spike placed his claw on the cover, which caused something to happen. Before he knew what was happening, his claw began to glow green before the light was sucked into the book and it glowed. He pulled his claw back as the three stared at the book, the words on the cover beginning to change to ones that Spike actually understood. It read:

Draconic Magic

"Magic?!" Spike gasped as he opened the cover and found it was an instruction book...on Mystic Dragon magic, "No way." He flipped to the first spell and found it was one on levitating something. It showed the depiction of a dragon unleashing a stream of magic that formed a hand at the end. "Wow."

Good to see Silverbolt's looking after his son even after long gone! :fluttercry::heart:

The flames extended and morphed into a hand, which reached down and grabbed the gemstone before balling up around it. The Mystic Flame Dragon smiled as he tried the next step, recalling the flame and pulling the gem toward him. And as he did this, the gemstone came into his reach, the little dragon cutting the flames, allowing the gem to fall into his claw.

"Yes!" he cheered before biting into the gemstone. And as he did this, he went wide-eyed as he noticed that despite being surrounded by fire, the gem wasn't even warm.

Please to meet you Dr. Spike Pyro! :moustache:

Sweet entry into the next step of Spike's journey Banshee, looking forward to the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

MechaTomX
MechaTomX #42 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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Wow, A really great episode, finally Spike could begin his magic training, it was also cool see Flicker again, he is an honorable it was nice to see him as the new chronicler.

Myzor king of war
Myzor king of war #43 · Sep 14th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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a nice fallow up also Spike is doing well can not wait to see what is next

KennyBrony19971
KennyBrony19971 #44 · Sep 16th, 2021 · · · A Dragon's Place ·
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Are there going to be more of Spike. With that book that can learn more of that magic and. Master all those spells

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #45 · Sep 21st, 2021 · · · Fluttershy Leans In ·
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That's okay… I understand.

At least the second part deals with Iron feeling guilty for not trusting Fluttershy and he have a bad dream about it… he may be a stoic guy but sometimes he have his moments…. Thankfully, Fluttershy forgive him.

Here's highlights

"You can't do that!" Hard Hat yelled, "You're not the boss here!" Iron then hit the ground, making the dirt under them shake as Iron glared at him. Hard Hat and his workers all went wide-eyed, a long gulp going down his throat, "Alright," he and his workers spun around, "We're going. But don't expect us to come back when you start begging for us to come and build your animal hospital."

Sure, Hard Hat… it's good idea to tell off a Royal Knight who can arrest you and your goons if you kept disrespecting him… yeah, good idea… Hard Hat :ajbemused:

He then ran over back into Ponyville and went to Rarity's boutique, spotting Lightning sitting outside while listening to his music. "Is Fluttershy in there?" He asked, but Lightning didn't respond. That is, till Iron hooked his headsphones with his spear, "BLITZ!" The unicorn yelped as he almost fell over, "Is Fluttershy in there?"

You better listen to him or else he could have cut your headphone off with his spear, Lightning.

"Well, we gotta do something!" Iron cried as he slammed his hoof down, causing the tower to wobble again. He then managed to get it to stay still before carefully climbing down, sighing when he saw the multiple towers standing tall side by side. "See? It...worked."

You just jinx it, Iron. :ajbemused:

Iron's jaw was on the ground, Lightning letting out a whistle, "Damn."

Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! :rainbowlaugh:

"My vision isn't the problem here!" Fluttershy screamed, "I told you all exactly what I wanted, and none of you listened to me! So while I appreciate your efforts, I no longer require your services!" She pointed at the exit, "GET OUT!" The three shared a glance before walking away, Iron watching with a smile before it vanished when Fluttershy turned to him, "And you!" He felt his body stiffen at this, "Why didn't you tell me Hard Hat was doing that?! I had a right to know!"

Busted! :ajsmug:

And so, Iron returned to Fluttershy's cottage and waited for her there, Lightning heading home as well. Once there, he spotted Angel in his basket still recovering from his injured foot. Deciding to let Fluttershy off from having to care for him after the disastrous day she had had, he prepared Angel's dinner and placed it down next to him. Angel gave his rabbity thanks as Iron flopped down on the couch. "I really messed up today," he told the bunny, letting out a long sigh, "I should have just trusted her. I'm always telling other ponies not to underestimate her, but there I was underestimating her....its just like when she was reforming Discord." His eyes slowly closed at this, "I'm so horrible..."

Poor Iron. :pinkiesad2:

"Do you have to ask?" Flash added, "She's gonna try again. But this time, she's gonna do it her way."

Her way, you say, Flash?

Good work.

SuperSonicHeroes
SuperSonicHeroes #46 · Sep 21st, 2021 · · · Fluttershy Leans In ·
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This was one of Fluttershy's best moments from the series. Nice job giving it an adaption here. Even if it is mostly the same I liked seeing Iron's role here, where he tries to fix things himself, only to not actually know how to build the Sanctuary.

SpikeSmolder fan
SpikeSmolder fan #47 · Sep 21st, 2021 · · · Fluttershy Leans In ·
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Good adaption to this crucial episode in Flutters character growth! It was good to see Iron putting a stop to Hard Hat's construction plans before it started, course him trying to do it himself didn't quite worked out! :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

Also cool addition of the Sanctuary's finished pic was a very nice touch Banshee! :yay:

As for Highlights!

"I don't think I can take in even one more critter right now!" As she said that, the pair heard the sound of tall hoofsteps and turned to see a giraffe.

"How did we miss that until now?" Soul asked as the creature let out a sneeze.

Seems ninja giraffes are a thing around Ponyville! :rainbowlaugh:

"I know she thinks she knows what's best," he told them. "But once she sees how much better it works with these plans, she'll thank us."

"Uh-huh, yup," the ponies nodded while Iron walked over.

"Hey! I hope you're not planning anything underhoofed that'll ruin Fluttershy's dream."

"Ruin it?" Hard Hat asked, "I'm gonna save it. When we're done, this animal hospital will be the best building in all of Equestria."

"It's not supposed to be a building," Iron growled, "It's supposed to be an outside enclosure." He pointed at the pony with a snarl, "How hard is it to understand something like this?!"

"Well, I'm sorry," the earth pony barked back, "But I don't see how something like this could work. I mean, what if it rains? How are the animals supposed to enjoy themselves when they're suddenly soaking wet?"

"The same way every other animal enjoys themselves in the rain."

Iron got you there Hard Hat! :ajsmug:

Fluttershy blinked at him, only to nod back, "Alright," she gave him the drawing, "Have fun." Iron nodded and ran out, only for Lightning to follow him at a brisk pace.

"Alright, what's going on?"

"Nothing," he responded, only for Lightning to teleport in front of him. Iron came to a stop, now seeing Lightning glare at him, making Iron sigh, "Fine. I might have...kinda...fired...Hard Hat."

Lightning's eyes went wide at this, "Wha...why?!"

"He was planning to go against Fluttershy's wishes. He would have likely built a giant hospital if I hadn't stopped him."

"And why didn't you tell Fluttershy any of this?!"

"She's finally gotten her confidence up enough to chase her dream! I don't wanna ruin that by telling her!" He then glanced down at the drawing before looking back up at Lightning, "It's fine. All I need to do is build this thing myself. How hard can that be?"

"Famous last words."

Couldn't have said it better myself Lightning! :facehoof:

Iron turned to Fluttershy and saw the upset look on her face, fearing she might start breaking out in tears and shrink down to her mouse size. That is, till her eyes narrowed, her face starting to turn red, "NO!" She stomped her hooves, growing to twice her normal size. "This is not going to work at all!" The three went wide-eyed at her sudden growth, Fluttershy then shrinking back down to normal as she turned to Hard Hat before pointing at the doorway on the blueprints. "A giraffe can't fit through this door!" She turned to Dandy and pointed at his materials. "With these curtains blocking the light, how are the birds gonna sing in the sunshine?" She then stomped over to the cage, "And this is the opposite of a nice hug!" She marched over to the three. "I know you all worked hard, but none of you did anything I asked for!"

Iron's jaw was on the ground, Lightning letting out a whistle, "Damn."

Heck yeah, don't mess with this pegasus! :raritystarry:

"It's okay," Fluttershy assured them, "You were all just trying to help. But I know that letting all the experts go was the right call."

"So what are you gonna do now?" Twilight asked before taking a sip of her tea.

"Do you have to ask?" Flash added, "She's gonna try again. But this time, she's gonna do it her way."

Heck yeah she is! :yay:

Pretty light fun chapter Banshee, till the next one! :twilightsmile:

Foxhelm
Foxhelm #48 · Sep 24th, 2021 · · 2 · Fluttershy Leans In ·
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Concerning A Dragon's Place: Nice bonding of Flicker and Spike, and Flicker coming to terms and moving on from what happened.
Concerning Fluttershy Leans In: While it was great to have Hard Hat proven right on some things, the idea of the chapter, like the episode, comes out of left field. Also wouldn't it show Fluttershy own development to realize that Hard Hat, Wrangler and the interior design were not going to work and say 'On second thought, this is not going to work. Thank you so much for your time,' Pinkie's understanding that Hard Hat wasn't going to work because Hard Hat is a construction work, he builds things for a living, Rarity's by realizing the interior designed wasn't going to work because he's an interior design and there weren't going to be any interior to design, and Applejack's by knowing that someone with the name Wrangler and occupation is wrangling was not the expert in field of animal housing that Fluttershy is looking for, sure she works for AJ, but that's because they both deal with fencing and cages, not Fluttershy's dream of a... well out of context and poorly understood take of Isaiah 11 6 to 8.
It's not bad adaption, but it still falls for many of the same traps as the original episode, it's saving grace, Iron also not trusting Fluttershy's dream and him being called out for it.

Ragnarok17
Ragnarok17 #49 · Sep 28th, 2021 · · · The Princess's Apprentice ·
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Yup, definitely a big nod to the Sorcerer's Apprentice!

It was nice to see Flash and Twilight telling the kids about their younger days and how they almost made same mistakes as they did.

Good work.

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"It's a hard-light cloning spell," Soul replied, "They know everything the original knows and are completely obedient to the caster." She cast the spell again and created clones of Heart, Scootaloo, Ace and Mira. "Now they can do the work while we enjoy ourselves." The others cheered as they ran out the room, leaving the five clones to pick up the cleaning supplies and get to work.

I have a bad feeling about this. :twilightoops:

But as the continued and the five returned home, they were met by four glaring adults at the castle's entrance. "Uh...hi." was all Heart could muster as they continued to glare at them. "Is something wrong?"

Busted! :rainbowlaugh:

"Its fine." Celestia's frown morphed to a smile, "Though I wish we had some kind of instant messaging service."

Spike: I'm right here, Princess Celestia! :ajbemused:

Flash let out a moan, "Can't you just magic all this stuff away? It sounds like it'd be so much easier."

I could see where Heart got his attitude from! :rainbowlaugh:

"Now Flash," Grand shook his head, "Magic isn't the answer to everything. If you take the easy way out every time, you'll never learn to do anything that doesn't require magic."

Be careful what you wish for Grand cause G5 grant you a wish! 😬😬😬

"You sure? It might be something cool." Twilight glared at her, only for Flash to nudge her, "Come on. Just one little peak?"

When did Flash becomes a girl? :applejackconfused:

"It just floated up!" Flash replied, "I think it was in one of the piles." With that, he grabbed a broom and yanked it out of the water and threw it upward. Twilight looked away, but Flash's shadow was on the opposite wall, showing him swing the axe right through a broom, cutting it half before cutting it into quarters.

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

I see what you did, Banshee! :rainbowlaugh:

"HELP!" Flash exclaimed as he thrashed around, "I CAN'T SWIM! Those five year olds were right! Cruel, but right!"

Flash's Kryptonite: Water

She strode over to the door and gasped at the sight of the water being held back by the force-field. "What in the name of-" She stopped before her horn flared, firing a blast of magic that struck the force-field and dispelled it. Forcefield gone, the water came flowing out, but Celestia fired another spell, causing it to completely vanish.

Everything that had been floating suddenly hit the floor, including a pair of young ponies that were now taking deep breaths of air. They began to cough and spit out water, Flash hitting the side of his head to get some water out of his ears. "What...happened?" He moaned before glancing up, only to see a frowning Princess Celestia, "Uh-oh."

Yeah, Celestia saved them!!!

…

…

…

OH CRAP!!!!! They are in big trouble!

"Now then," she got back up and picked up one of the brooms. "Shall we do this the correct way?"

At least she wasn't mad at them like Yen Sid did with Mickey.

"Oh? And who decided to still try and 'forget' swimming lessons for another month after that?"

"Hey! Grand taught me...eventually."

Twilight rolled her eyes at this, "You mean he forced you too."

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! That's even better!!!!! :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

Iacon Scholar
Iacon Scholar #50 · Sep 28th, 2021 · · · The Princess's Apprentice ·
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Love the reference to the Sorcerer's Apprentice, the orignal from Fantasia not the new one with Nicholas Cage. Keep up the good work.

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