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Follow King Douny O'Whelan through his last days on Earth and his new Journey in Equestria, as he tries to reconcile with his past, make new friends and try to help and gain acceptance from the ponies of Equestria.
The Earth of Douny's world may also not be the one we know following an Elfpunk style.
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you misspelled 'throne' on your short description
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Thank you for letting me know, I wouldn't have spotted that.
interesting story so far
What's "Elfpunk"?
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It's a Punk genre that is under the umbrella term Steampunk.
Basically take Elves Faeries and Orcs and put them into a modern urban setting and you have Elfpunk
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Glad your enjoying it, I've been putting a lot of effort into this and I'm glad that your liking it so far.
nice chapter
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Glad you enjoyed it. This is some what my passion project.
this is getting good don't know why i didn't know about this great chapter
You made a lot of mistakes in word usage and grammar. You need to proof read it slowly. I read chapter 7 out loud and had a bit of trouble with the flow. This is by far the most mistake ridden of your chapters so far. Still a very interesting story but not a joy to read like your previous chapter.
great chapter
great chapter worth the wait
Keep it up brother!
bro needs to chill on strongheart lol shes like 7 and shes right.
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She do be making some good point fr fr
welcome back and great chapter
Is he going to manufacture more rounds for his gun?
I understood that reference
Plus it is better trained than the solar guard.
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Oh I hope so. And introduce the arm of modern firearms to the world
What images/game are the armor from?
And is he possible going to teach them new tactics?
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I do plan on it the third image is just one IRL the other two are from Mordhau I do plan on him helping the Equestrian military but I don't want to say how it would be a bit spoilery
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Yeah was asking for the game name. But god I hope he teaches them some modern tactics or at least to use guns.
I’m surprised he hasn’t run into any canterlot nobles especially a certain blue balls pony and the rest like him.
Not gonna lie this first chapter is very unappealing.
i wonder who is hiding under Luna night
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Who knows, I can't wait to get to show the end of this arc I think that everyone is going to like where it's going.
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He got PTDS from what happen didn’t he?
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Sort of, his PTSD has always been there, it's just now it's starting to take hold and manifest in more obvious ways
great chapter
I disagree. Taking on a force double your size head on is suicidal. Flanking and attempting to shift the flow into a rout with a smaller and more maneuverable unit is sound tactics when long range guerilla whittling is unavailable.
I think the first three chapters would have been better scattered throughout the story, and this chapter would be a little better as the opener.
Our guy didn’t really ask to make this decision for either party but did so anyway… Seems a tad of an overstep, but I guess he’s used to being the king. Might take a while to unwind that habit.
What happened to Spike? He stay in the Buffalo camp?
Twilight had a spare bed that fit a 6’2” human?
Wouldn’t it be better to heal first?
What caused this sudden change in the character? He was a king -the guy whose job it was to make a decision and stay the course- who decided he didn’t want friends ever again, and now he just changes because Twilight makes some teary eyes?
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I'll try to answer what I can.
Firstly The unit sizes, I don't think back then I understood small unit tactics so I thought getting out of cover and not holding up would be a bad idea.
Second, I agree looking back it was probably a better idea to spread it out more evenly, it would have probably made it more digestible in some ways.
Third, When it comes to him taking a leadership role or a follower role is a bit more fluid than you might expect I don't want to go any farther with that though because it will be shown way later on.
Forth, When it comes to Spike, I guess I just forgot to add him into some of the scenes his still with Twilight after the meeting between Douny, Thunderhooves and the ponies.
Fifth, Honestly the bed thing was an over site, I wasn't really thinking to hard about the logistics of that scene.
Sixth, During the mental help scene with Twilight he didn't consider her a friend more of an associate in a way, I guess I really didn't make that clear.
Seventh, Arguing with Douny when he has his mind set on something is basically like talking to a brick wall.
Finally, I'm also still a very very very novice writer and I'm still trying to learn, so I appreciate the feedback, and thank you for voicing some of the issues with my work.
Rainbow Dash lives in a cloud house. How did Applejack just stop by for a quick chat?
MC blew up quickly. I don’t think his fuse has been shown to be quite that short yet.
She knows he’s had a falling out with her sister’s pupil, yet she invites him into her home and even shows him her bedchambers in exchange for a few words of understanding? Something seems a little off. Either MC is playing a long game with the ponies’ nativity or Luna’s really trusting. And she’s right to sense a red flag about his request to enlist. He’s spoken enough about his past despite the vaguenesses to make them wary about him and a military position.
With opponents generally half his size, I’d think a kite shield would be shaped poorly to be effective as it would leave his feet noticeably vulnerable to attack.
Poor mare. Got shot down and then cut down.
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You’re doing really quite well!! I’m definitely marking the story to notify me for updates.
Yes it’s back
great chapter
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We back it only took me 5 months, I hope it was worth the wait.
I love this! Great chapter!
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It was