correct me if I'm wrong but isn't this expression usually written with a coma or exclamation sign after bot of the terms? it's fine as it is but I'm just asking, even if it would work better with the exclamation signs after bot yes and of course, again with keeping the following word non capitalized since it doesn't affect the phrase and it is grammatically correct
As she came to the door the young mare didn't hesitate in knocking, though after her tiny hoof thundered at the door a moment she began to wonder what it was that she would say to the pony who lived here.
these are two separate phrases and the best way to write them is period after knocking and comma after tough
might go a-guising
you sure that dash is necessary there?
Please excuse me, I'm sorry to disturb you,
again with the coma at the end of a sentence
Off in the distance it was replace by the tinkling of broken glass
that was meant to be replaced right? if you used:
the cloths the manikins displayed.
then why have you used
hid behind one of the wooden mannequins
, the ponified version, the second time?
also 10483508 considering your profile pic that is a great statement to be said
I could replace 'though' with 'as' and it would be the same sentence, but just adding 'as' in doesn't make sense, and the difference isn't a significant enough one to bother with.
correct me if I'm wrong but isn't this expression usually written with a coma or exclamation sign after bot of the terms? it's fine as it is but I'm just asking, even if it would work better with the exclamation signs after bot yes and of course, again with keeping the following word non capitalized since it doesn't affect the phrase and it is grammatically correct
If it were an exclamation I would have used an exclamation mark, but this is more of an introspective thought, not really an 'aha!' moment. There is usually a comma when it is an exclamation though, you are right about that, but you are also right that it doesn't really need one here.
As she came to the door the young mare didn't hesitate in knocking, though after her tiny hoof thundered at the door a moment she began to wonder what it was that she would say to the pony who lived here.
If I did that there would also need to be a comma after moment. I think I'll change the 'though' to 'although'.
you sure that dash is necessary there?
Probably not but I'm wanting to invoke an old timey feel to the word choice there and I think just using a space or an apostrophe would just confuse people.
again with the coma at the end of a sentence
If my spell checker could also detect punctuation typos we wouldn't be here to begin with.
that was meant to be replaced right?
Yup.
manikins & mannequins
Actually mannequin is not a 'ponified' version of the word, A mannequin is the type of doll that is typically used to display fashion, while a manikin is a type of doll typically used as a medical or scientific display of anatomy.
I'd like to say I was being clever here and was hinting at something grotesque about the displays, but in truth I just used the wrong version of the word there and spell checker did not catch it. 'Mannequin' is the correct term in this context.
I am going to assume the interludes are Pumpkin Patches side of Hell or something. And she is reliving the horror The Candy Mare had wrought basically even if its far more subdued in many ways.
Reliving the pain she caused.
i think is try tough as she might
correct me if I'm wrong but isn't this expression usually written with a coma or exclamation sign after bot of the terms? it's fine as it is but I'm just asking, even if it would work better with the exclamation signs after bot yes and of course, again with keeping the following word non capitalized since it doesn't affect the phrase and it is grammatically correct
these are two separate phrases and the best way to write them is period after knocking and comma after tough
you sure that dash is necessary there?
again with the coma at the end of a sentence
that was meant to be replaced right?
if you used:
then why have you used
, the ponified version, the second time?
also
10483508
considering your profile pic that is a great statement to be said
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I could replace 'though' with 'as' and it would be the same sentence, but just adding 'as' in doesn't make sense, and the difference isn't a significant enough one to bother with.
If it were an exclamation I would have used an exclamation mark, but this is more of an introspective thought, not really an 'aha!' moment. There is usually a comma when it is an exclamation though, you are right about that, but you are also right that it doesn't really need one here.
If I did that there would also need to be a comma after moment. I think I'll change the 'though' to 'although'.
Probably not but I'm wanting to invoke an old timey feel to the word choice there and I think just using a space or an apostrophe would just confuse people.
If my spell checker could also detect punctuation typos we wouldn't be here to begin with.
Yup.
Actually mannequin is not a 'ponified' version of the word, A mannequin is the type of doll that is typically used to display fashion, while a manikin is a type of doll typically used as a medical or scientific display of anatomy.
I'd like to say I was being clever here and was hinting at something grotesque about the displays, but in truth I just used the wrong version of the word there and spell checker did not catch it. 'Mannequin' is the correct term in this context.
Thanks
good chapter
big disconnect tho having to see :
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harp on about grammer like a grouchy teachers pet every chapter tho
I am going to assume the interludes are Pumpkin Patches side of Hell or something. And she is reliving the horror The Candy Mare had wrought basically even if its far more subdued in many ways.
The Pumpkin Patch side of CM experiencing the pain she brought onto others in Hell.