this is not actually a grammar mistake more a logic mistake but how is it possible for the candy mare to have hair when her body id made of sugar sweets? and yes now i start skimming and see where you made the mistakes we talked about under the reddit post
explains why your here
um i think that's an "you're"
feasting on the fat of babes
i hope you wanted to say babies in here
They would know you for the compassionate devil that I know you for
i don't think compassionate is the right word there, incompassionate maybe..., but not compassionate
“Unfortunately the powers that be seem to agree with you on that score,”
i feel like something is missing here, don't know what but i feel this sentence is incomplete in the middle of it, or you forgot a comma
well that did give her just a little bit of cold comfort.
here you either need this: "..." or a comma after well, to obtain the effect you wanted
This is an example of a word changing definition overtime.
You are thinking of the slang word babe, as in a sexually attractive individual. However, the original definition of a babe is an infant or young child. Hence the movie 'Babes in Toyland' is a movie based off an operetta about children journeying to a land where toys are alive rather than a porno.
So babe 100% means babies here, more or less.
i don't think compassionate is the right word there, maybe..., but not compassionate
Apparently my spellcheck doesn't think that incompassionate is a word and auto-corrected it. It absolutely was incompassionate when I first wrote it.
here you either need this: "..." or a comma after well, to obtain the effect you wanted
Only if I want there to be a pause there, which I don't.
Is it wrong to actually look forward to how Candy and Lemon go about there suffering in the fiery depths of Hell? Cuz honestly, both deserve the torment they are gonna be sharing for multiple varying reasons.
“On the contrary my dear, your memory is confused. I never ‘tormented’ you. You were merely the by-product of my own brilliant experiments and the inevitable expiration of one of my many disposable test subjects. I never bore you any malice.” he paused, before grinning coldly and opening his vest to reveal a gaping hole in his chest. The exposed hollow in his shattered rib-cage extended into a deep cavity that was alive with maggots. “At least not before you ripped my still beating heart from my chest. That was rather rude of you.”
Screw you Lemon Drop. I know what Pumpkin did was absolutely terrible, but I still have sympathy for her because of how it happened. Does she deserve punishment, oh yes. But I still pity her. Lemon can rot.
this is not actually a grammar mistake more a logic mistake but how is it possible for the candy mare to have hair when her body id made of sugar sweets? and yes now i start skimming and see where you made the mistakes we talked about under the reddit post
um i think that's an "you're"
i hope you wanted to say babies in here
i don't think compassionate is the right word there, incompassionate maybe..., but not compassionate
i feel like something is missing here, don't know what but i feel this sentence is incomplete in the middle of it, or you forgot a comma
here you either need this: "..." or a comma after well, to obtain the effect you wanted
missed a comma after banter
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Good catch.
This is an example of a word changing definition overtime.
You are thinking of the slang word babe, as in a sexually attractive individual. However, the original definition of a babe is an infant or young child. Hence the movie 'Babes in Toyland' is a movie based off an operetta about children journeying to a land where toys are alive rather than a porno.
So babe 100% means babies here, more or less.
Apparently my spellcheck doesn't think that incompassionate is a word and auto-corrected it. It absolutely was incompassionate when I first wrote it.
Only if I want there to be a pause there, which I don't.
Fair enough.
Thanks
oh geez lemon drop is back
Is it wrong to actually look forward to how Candy and Lemon go about there suffering in the fiery depths of Hell? Cuz honestly, both deserve the torment they are gonna be sharing for multiple varying reasons.
I'm gonna vomit whenever I see a maggot.
Welcome to your End Pumpkin. Hope those worlds you snuffed out in madness were worth it...
Screw you Lemon Drop. I know what Pumpkin did was absolutely terrible, but I still have sympathy for her because of how it happened. Does she deserve punishment, oh yes. But I still pity her. Lemon can rot.