"Wait...what? Is this some kind of joke? Am I being punked?" The Candy Mare looked around the room as if she expected to find a hidden camera crew. "You're seriously supposed to be the 'master' these two have been going on and on about?"
NGL everyone who hasn't seen any of Cozzy Glow episodes would have the same reaction
"Believe it or not bitch," Cozy Glow replied with a flash of her teeth. "You're looking at the ruler of Hell!"
and that is a perfect Cozzy for you also starting from this point on you should go and change all the commas at the end of sentences/phrases with periods, this chapter is filled with them and i won't point all of them, but I'll say this: the next one is in the next paragraph
it seemed hat cleaning his glasses didn't improve what he was seeing in the least. "How exactly did a foal come to rule the underworld?"
that hat is either a what or a that also perfect reaction for those who haven't seen any of Cozzy's episodes
That kind of idiotic posturing is what keeps this place mired in the past."
I don't think CVozzy would use old English
"Is he always like this?" asked Cozy Glow, with a tilt of her head.
"Constantly." deadpanned the Candy Mare.
"Yeah, I can see why you murdered him,"
you couldn't help to roast lemon drop there, could you?
"You mean to tell me... hahahaha! That her very existence... mwahahaha! Is dependent on me!?"
just for the effect of the next revealing to be more ironical you could have added the turning tables saying here
evaporate. Poof
a comma is sufficient here
I tracked him down after I got sent back downtown and sorry to say he didn't live up to my expectations.
this sentence is way to long, better put a comma somewhere in there, i may suggest after say, for a better effect,either that or sorry to say between commas for the same effect
greenish-black ichor.
ichor or lichor? since it's the candy mare and i don't think she has blood
"You little shit,"
you sure this is not an exclamation?
almost admiringly as she wiped the goo from her throat,
I just realized that that coma typo might have been made even in the narrator's explanations
Until then,
I think the three dots work better here
"Yup! What's the mattered?"
i think it's matter here
"Oh, I very much doubt it was anything like this,"
again, you sure it's not an exclamation point here?
and that is a perfect Cozzy for you also starting from this point on you should go and change all the commas at the end of sentences/phrases with periods, this chapter is filled with them and i won't point all of them, but I'll say this: the next one is in the next paragraph
K.
that hat is either a what or a that also perfect reaction for those who haven't seen any of Cozzy's episodes
That.
I don't think CVozzy would use old English
Ah, but the Cozy we are familiar with from the show also wouldn't swear. She's a very slightly different Cozy who is far older than the one we are used to, likely from an alternate universe, though still similar enough to be recognizable.
you couldn't help to roast lemon drop there, could you?
In an entire realm full of sinners and demons, yeah he still deserves it.
just for the effect of the next revealing to be more ironical you could have added the turning tables saying here
Seems a little cliche, although 'my how the tables have turned' would be appropriate in this situation.
this sentence is way to long, better put a comma somewhere in there, i may suggest after say, for a better effect,either that or sorry to say between commas for the same effect
Fair enough.
ichor or lichor? since it's the candy mare and i don't think she has blood
Ichor. The implication is rather than wounding her candy body, the slash to lemon drops throat wounded what passed for her soul. Since she is a magical entity, it is ichor rather than blood that flows through her veins.
i·chor /ˈīkôr/ noun
1. GREEK MYTHOLOGY the fluid that flows like blood in the veins of the gods.
you sure this is not an exclamation?
again, you sure it's not an exclamation point here?
No, that definitely should be an exclamation.
I just realized that that coma typo might have been made even in the narrator's explanations
Ugh. I was going to have to go back through anyways, might as well look for both at the same time.
NGL everyone who hasn't seen any of Cozzy Glow episodes would have the same reaction
and that is a perfect Cozzy for you also starting from this point on you should go and change all the commas at the end of sentences/phrases with periods, this chapter is filled with them and i won't point all of them, but I'll say this: the next one is in the next paragraph
that hat is either a what or a that also perfect reaction for those who haven't seen any of Cozzy's episodes
I don't think CVozzy would use old English
you couldn't help to roast lemon drop there, could you?
just for the effect of the next revealing to be more ironical you could have added the turning tables saying here
a comma is sufficient here
this sentence is way to long, better put a comma somewhere in there, i may suggest after say, for a better effect,either that or sorry to say between commas for the same effect
ichor or lichor? since it's the candy mare and i don't think she has blood
you sure this is not an exclamation?
I just realized that that coma typo might have been made even in the narrator's explanations
I think the three dots work better here
i think it's matter here
again, you sure it's not an exclamation point here?
K.
That.
Ah, but the Cozy we are familiar with from the show also wouldn't swear. She's a very slightly different Cozy who is far older than the one we are used to, likely from an alternate universe, though still similar enough to be recognizable.
In an entire realm full of sinners and demons, yeah he still deserves it.
Seems a little cliche, although 'my how the tables have turned' would be appropriate in this situation.
Fair enough.
Ichor. The implication is rather than wounding her candy body, the slash to lemon drops throat wounded what passed for her soul. Since she is a magical entity, it is ichor rather than blood that flows through her veins.
i·chor
/ˈīkôr/
noun
GREEK MYTHOLOGY
the fluid that flows like blood in the veins of the gods.
No, that definitely should be an exclamation.
Ugh. I was going to have to go back through anyways, might as well look for both at the same time.
Yup.
Thanks
haha the small bit where candy and cozy were chummy together was great
that dramatic exit tho
Birds of a feather, those two.
Shame they’re like the great Potoo.
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I freaking hate Cozy Glow so much. Eeeeeerg...her being the devil makes sense. I hope Candy finds a way tokick her ass.
even in hell itself, friendship is apparently magic
Lemony Snicket omg