A magical mishap sends Spike into the corrupted world of Mareth, trapping him there for one full year, separated from his friends in a body that isn't entirely his own. Will he last the year with his sanity intact?
5759893 Keep in mind he knows nothing about the ifrits and what happened to them, and there isn't even proof that they exist. So yeah. Probably not going to happen.
5759968 Well...if he can't get revenge for the Ifrits, maybe he can get revenge for the dragons instead. After all, the demons got rid of them too, and the first bat gremlin Spike met told him a bit about that as well. And who knows, maybe he will wander to the swamp, find and hatch Ember's egg, and start repopulating the dragon race? I just wonder if he will eventually get a weapon, or get any physical/magical skills (you know, besides "Fire Breath")?
5760184 Just slipping in this tidbit that I've said before, Ember will still be living with and be mated to the Champion from the main game, who is also here at the same time exploring in different areas.
Nothing better than a belly dance. I think Shantae agrees with me.
I'm really liking this story, and I'm glad Spike is taking this particular transformation route, but it's getting kind of hard to picture what he actually looks like. Mainly the bat ears on a scaly body. That's a tough one. Also, how muscular would you describe him as now? Each ruby kept adding more and more. I can't tell if he's bulging muscle or just well toned by this point.
I'm quietly hoping for some incest with his daughters to make an appearance (why yes, Sophie was my favorite), but I understand that the fetish isn't very appealing to most. Wouldn't be surprised if it's avoided entirely.
Anyway, you've got a good grasp of the written word. It's always a pleasure to find stories this well written in a genre like this. Hope you can keep on trucking and writing material for this story. I'm enjoying it immensely so far. Kudos to you author.
5760500 Why thank you! In regards to your questions, no he's not bulging or anything. His muscles are noticeable yes, but it's a slow development. He just looks like he has the body of a woman who works out way too much. So probably more muscle than normal, but not exactly abnormal, if that makes sense. Just think amazon body type or something like that. And I think he's hit the limit on height and muscle size that fire rubies will get him.
As for the other thing about the daughters... We'll see
And as for his current appearance with the bat ears and such... That is hard to say to be honest. I'd try my hand at illustrating it, but there's no way that it would get past the 'no NSFW images or links to images' rule.
I do hope Spike at least stays on top and keeps being male. I mean, when I played the game, I tried to stick to the original gender as much as possible and enhance their parts (better dick/balls if guy, better boob for girl, etc). Never really got into the whole gender bending thing. Since Spike is identifying as male, I just hope he doesn't try to get preggo any time soon. Yes, I know he has the parts, it's just the principle of it. Idk, i've always been more for futas instead of traps and pussyboys (or whatever the opposite of futa is)
Very glad someone's doing this concept and going original with it. Very interesting ideas so far. Could even be considered canon to CoC, since most of the action there happens aboveground and Spike's staying under.
Just hope this doesn't die like all the other CoC fics I've faved...
5831309 Nah. They're covered in fluff, have long whippy tails, don't have horns, most of them are short, and most of them don't really have that much curves. That'd probably be the Queen's figure. But keep in mind, they're not succubi, they're closer to being anthropomorphic bats with a few goblin-like traits.
5832685 Ah. Okay. If I had the cash, I'd probably commission someone to make a drawing of one of your bat gremlins. Or do you think that there are any pictures out there that match up pretty closely to what you describe the bat gremlins as?
I love how you're making Spike a feminine herm. I've always liked the idea of an anthro R63 Spike, and the way you describe his changes (both physical and mental) are just so GOOD!
Keep up the good work, and maybe we'll see Spike getting banged by the "Certain Someone" (Champion) in the future! I know that I'd love to see that, anyways!
*UPDATE! - 4:05 PM* I just realized: What if Spike and Kiha or Ember (from the game) actually met? It'd be SO freaking cool, and would probably add some more solid connections to the actual game world. But then again, the Champion would have already recruited the two by the time Spike (or the story, if enough time passed) got that far.
Still, it'd be HILARIOUS to see Ember freak out after seeing Spike, if the latter somehow joined the male Champion that Tomsketchit hinted at. Since she's supposedly the last surviving member of her race (though technically not anymore now that Spike is in Mareth), she'd probably babble semi-incoherently and then practically demand (beg, really) Spike to repopulate.
After that, constant and maybe daily antics involving Ember trying to convince/persuade/kidnap Spike to bang her and repopulate the Mareth dragon race.
Maybe that's something you can add later on, Tom? *Wink wink, nudge nudge*
5840556 When I feel inspired enough to write. At the moment, I'm having trouble thinking of anything new to add. I mean, I had ideas, but I'm finding that I don't really know how to put them down any more.
Yeah, there's a reason I don't write fanfics often.
Why not set up a possible meeting with the Champion and Spike? You've already mentioned him by leaving his old Comfy Clothes for Spike to find, so why not have the two dudes (well, a dude and a male-identifying herm) meet in about two or so chapters?
It'd add a LOT of possibilities to go on, including Spike accompanying the Champion on his little (mis)adventures or having Spike interact with the Champion's followers at the Camp.
You could also take a bit of inspiration from my comment:
Still, it'd be HILARIOUS to see Ember freak out after seeing Spike, if the latter somehow joined the male Champion that Tomsketchit hinted at. Since she's supposedly the last surviving member of her race (though technically not anymore now that Spike is in Mareth), she'd probably babble semi-incoherently and then practically demand (beg, really) Spike to repopulate. After that, constant and maybe daily antics involving Ember trying to convince/persuade/kidnap Spike to bang her and repopulate the Mareth dragon race.
Or, you could have Spike travel (stumble, really) into the Swamp and meet Kiha, then describe what happens between the two and add a bit more connection to the real game. Hell, have the Champion, Spike, AND Kiha meet at roughly the same time in a crazy, confused cluster-fuck battle.
Then again, it IS your story and you can write it however you want. But the ideas I've listed might give you even more ideas to incorporate into the story. I'll also send you a Private Message that'll be a copy of this comment in case you don't see it.
Yeah, I could also help you write, Tom. I can't do sex scenes or actual writing like you can, but I can come up with ideas or scenarios that could help you write up the next chapter.
Also, I'm VERY sorry that I just posted three comments in rapid succession, but I'm very enthusiastic about this story, and I'd like very much to see what happens next in the story!
5846964 5844799 I appreciate the thought and the enthusiasm. While I'm not sure how comfortable I would be turning this into a collaboration, I will say that your dedication is making me think about this more. I may give one of my previous ideas some further thought.
For Kiha and Ember, as I've said before, I don't have plans for them to meet Spike. At best, they'll be referenced. Although the gears are turning for a potential scene with them. And as for the Champion, if Spike and he meet, it won't be until towards the end of the story. Whenever that is, I have no idea how long I'll be making this.
I have a couple of questions: shouldn't it be Bat City instead of Cavern City at this point in the story; and, shouldn't it be throne instead of thrown? Just want to make sure.
it always irritated me that the game assumed all herms to be female. to the point of males who became herms being referred to with female pronouns. that's a large part of why i only ever became a herm if i was female to start with.
Well crap. Forgot fire ruby was actually a thing from the show. I'm not changing it though. Let's just ignore that then.
Is spike going to grow breasts?
5759607 Just wait until you see the latest chapter, if you haven't already.
Sure, not the extent you describe, but he's starting to get into it.
5759635 Assuming you haven't read anything yet, then yes, he already has.
I really want spike to get revenge for the Ifrits by killing the demons who killed them, and maybe become a full ifrit by the end.
5759893 Keep in mind he knows nothing about the ifrits and what happened to them, and there isn't even proof that they exist. So yeah. Probably not going to happen.
Do continue. I am a huge fan of CoC.
5759905 True. Still would be cool, though. Maybe eating enough fire rubies gives him visions of what happened or something.
Mmh... COC, I see ? (Pun not intended)
Saw only a few other stories based on it, around here. Usually good, if a bit ''slow'' to develop for one of them.
We will see how this one goes.
5759968 Well...if he can't get revenge for the Ifrits, maybe he can get revenge for the dragons instead. After all, the demons got rid of them too, and the first bat gremlin Spike met told him a bit about that as well. And who knows, maybe he will wander to the swamp, find and hatch Ember's egg, and start repopulating the dragon race? I just wonder if he will eventually get a weapon, or get any physical/magical skills (you know, besides "Fire Breath")?
oh my Spike gonna go nuts with those transformation items lol
i wonder if he gona get his hands on some fox berries and maybe get more pairs of boobs?
oh i sorta want to see a picture of how Spike looks now lol
5760184 Just slipping in this tidbit that I've said before, Ember will still be living with and be mated to the Champion from the main game, who is also here at the same time exploring in different areas.
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Nothing better than a belly dance. I think Shantae agrees with me.
I'm really liking this story, and I'm glad Spike is taking this particular transformation route, but it's getting kind of hard to picture what he actually looks like. Mainly the bat ears on a scaly body. That's a tough one. Also, how muscular would you describe him as now? Each ruby kept adding more and more. I can't tell if he's bulging muscle or just well toned by this point.
I'm quietly hoping for some incest with his daughters to make an appearance (why yes, Sophie was my favorite), but I understand that the fetish isn't very appealing to most. Wouldn't be surprised if it's avoided entirely.
Anyway, you've got a good grasp of the written word. It's always a pleasure to find stories this well written in a genre like this. Hope you can keep on trucking and writing material for this story. I'm enjoying it immensely so far. Kudos to you author.
I must say, this is pretty interesting so far.
I especially liked this chapter.
''Better, stronger... More !(than just male or female)'' :3
You have managed to combine these series into a very interesting whole. I am excited (in more than one sense) to see what happens next!
5760714 Eh. Found out about it from an horror story about vampires. Seemed more fitting than 'canines' for the situation at hand.
5760500 Why thank you!
In regards to your questions, no he's not bulging or anything. His muscles are noticeable yes, but it's a slow development. He just looks like he has the body of a woman who works out way too much. So probably more muscle than normal, but not exactly abnormal, if that makes sense. Just think amazon body type or something like that. And I think he's hit the limit on height and muscle size that fire rubies will get him.
As for the other thing about the daughters... We'll see
And as for his current appearance with the bat ears and such... That is hard to say to be honest. I'd try my hand at illustrating it, but there's no way that it would get past the 'no NSFW images or links to images' rule.
I do hope Spike at least stays on top and keeps being male. I mean, when I played the game, I tried to stick to the original gender as much as possible and enhance their parts (better dick/balls if guy, better boob for girl, etc). Never really got into the whole gender bending thing.
Since Spike is identifying as male, I just hope he doesn't try to get preggo any time soon. Yes, I know he has the parts, it's just the principle of it. Idk, i've always been more for futas instead of traps and pussyboys (or whatever the opposite of futa is)
Very glad someone's doing this concept and going original with it. Very interesting ideas so far. Could even be considered canon to CoC, since most of the action there happens aboveground and Spike's staying under.
Just hope this doesn't die like all the other CoC fics I've faved...
i have to admit the fire ruby bit is a original type tf item set in it
Oh, hey! Another CoC fan! :)
5761236 MOAR PLZZZZZ
I'm really loving this story... I need more.
I'm willing to bet that the Bat Gremlins would look something like this.
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5831309 Nah. They're covered in fluff, have long whippy tails, don't have horns, most of them are short, and most of them don't really have that much curves. That'd probably be the Queen's figure. But keep in mind, they're not succubi, they're closer to being anthropomorphic bats with a few goblin-like traits.
5832685 Ah. Okay. If I had the cash, I'd probably commission someone to make a drawing of one of your bat gremlins. Or do you think that there are any pictures out there that match up pretty closely to what you describe the bat gremlins as?
5832784 None that I know of. I might try an illustration of them sometime.
5833255 Ah. Okay. Thanks! Keep up the good work on this story!
I love how you're making Spike a feminine herm. I've always liked the idea of an anthro R63 Spike, and the way you describe his changes (both physical and mental) are just so GOOD!
Keep up the good work, and maybe we'll see Spike getting banged by the "Certain Someone" (Champion) in the future! I know that I'd love to see that, anyways!
*UPDATE! - 4:05 PM* I just realized: What if Spike and Kiha or Ember (from the game) actually met? It'd be SO freaking cool, and would probably add some more solid connections to the actual game world. But then again, the Champion would have already recruited the two by the time Spike (or the story, if enough time passed) got that far.
Still, it'd be HILARIOUS to see Ember freak out after seeing Spike, if the latter somehow joined the male Champion that Tomsketchit hinted at. Since she's supposedly the last surviving member of her race (though technically not anymore now that Spike is in Mareth), she'd probably babble semi-incoherently and then practically demand (beg, really) Spike to repopulate.
After that, constant and maybe daily antics involving Ember trying to convince/persuade/kidnap Spike to bang her and repopulate the Mareth dragon race.
Maybe that's something you can add later on, Tom? *Wink wink, nudge nudge*
5835751 Oh, you are a GENIUS!!!!
I kinda want to see Spike run into Ember's egg and or Kiha.
5837767 Could you enlighten me on who those are? I haven't gotten very far into Corruption of Champions.
5840119 They're both dragon woman in the game. With Ember you have the choice to make her male/female/herm, as well as anthro/non anthro.
5840173 Ah. Okay.
when can we get another chapter?
5840556 When I feel inspired enough to write. At the moment, I'm having trouble thinking of anything new to add. I mean, I had ideas, but I'm finding that I don't really know how to put them down any more.
Yeah, there's a reason I don't write fanfics often.
5841026 Well, would you like any assistance with writing a new chapter?
5837767
Kinda already mentioned that possibility in a previous comment of mine. But yeah, it would be AMAZING if Spike met Ember or Kiha.
5841026
Why not set up a possible meeting with the Champion and Spike? You've already mentioned him by leaving his old Comfy Clothes for Spike to find, so why not have the two dudes (well, a dude and a male-identifying herm) meet in about two or so chapters?
It'd add a LOT of possibilities to go on, including Spike accompanying the Champion on his little (mis)adventures or having Spike interact with the Champion's followers at the Camp.
You could also take a bit of inspiration from my comment:
Or, you could have Spike travel (stumble, really) into the Swamp and meet Kiha, then describe what happens between the two and add a bit more connection to the real game. Hell, have the Champion, Spike, AND Kiha meet at roughly the same time in a crazy, confused cluster-fuck battle.
Then again, it IS your story and you can write it however you want. But the ideas I've listed might give you even more ideas to incorporate into the story. I'll also send you a Private Message that'll be a copy of this comment in case you don't see it.
5844799
5841026
Yeah, I could also help you write, Tom. I can't do sex scenes or actual writing like you can, but I can come up with ideas or scenarios that could help you write up the next chapter.
Also, I'm VERY sorry that I just posted three comments in rapid succession, but I'm very enthusiastic about this story, and I'd like very much to see what happens next in the story!
5846964
5844799
I appreciate the thought and the enthusiasm. While I'm not sure how comfortable I would be turning this into a collaboration, I will say that your dedication is making me think about this more. I may give one of my previous ideas some further thought.
For Kiha and Ember, as I've said before, I don't have plans for them to meet Spike. At best, they'll be referenced. Although the gears are turning for a potential scene with them. And as for the Champion, if Spike and he meet, it won't be until towards the end of the story. Whenever that is, I have no idea how long I'll be making this.
This story is getting better and better, and I really like your original creations.
I have a couple of questions: shouldn't it be Bat City instead of Cavern City at this point in the story; and, shouldn't it be throne instead of thrown? Just want to make sure.
it always irritated me that the game assumed all herms to be female. to the point of males who became herms being referred to with female pronouns. that's a large part of why i only ever became a herm if i was female to start with.
im surprised they didnt add the fire ruby in it or even the modded versions