A magical mishap sends Spike into the corrupted world of Mareth, trapping him there for one full year, separated from his friends in a body that isn't entirely his own. Will he last the year with his sanity intact?
5743755 Yeah, I did research it to see what he meant. And I'm definitely siding with keeping him as trying to be a good guy here. As shown in the chapter I just posted. I don't plan on him going mad with power or anything anywhere down the line, don't you worry about that.
5743655 Well, that's the thing: You already know them. What fun is it if I just show you things that you can already see for yourself by playing the game? This way, things stay fresh, and I don't have to worry about people saying I misrepresented characters from the game.
5743896 The thing with quite a few of the characters in the game, however, is that they aren't really explored too much beyond the PC going down on them or vice versa.
Though I can understand why you've chosen to branch of from them. You've mentioned before having to work with predefined character personalities, there's also the point to make that Mareth is definitely a lot bigger than the game makes out to be. If you ever talked to Dominika in the bar of Tel'Adre, some of her dialogue can give you a fair idea of just how big the world is, that's not to mention you only have so many locations to explore, one stock portion of a specific biome obviously isn't a good representative of diversity.
Still, my agreement aside. It would be nice to see some of those characters portrayed in different scenarios, assuming you felt there was enough leeway to work with them of course.
5744066 I'll concede there. I might have him run into some familiar faces at certain points. However, there's also one other thing that holds me back: I don't get as connected to the characters, so I don't really know that much about them despite having played many times to the point of getting over powered. It's honestly easier to build my own characters than it is to try and find every bit of information and personality traits of the existing characters to appease fans of the work. I love CoC for the setting and theme, not so much for the story aspects. Very few side characters actually interest me story-wise. To be honest, I actually end up skimming a lot of the text sections, even during the sex scenes. I'm actually usually more focused on fighting and leveling up, surprisingly.
5744091 No shame in that. If I had to criticize CoC, it would be: A. The large blocks of text that are usually repeated for every enemy of the same type. It is easy to just ignore them all together and just look for the bold spots to find what has changed (and sometimes they aren't even in bold!) B. A lot of characters' development, short of lovers, consists mainly of "This is my name and what I do, wanna have sex?" C. The ability to acquire so many lovers (with excellently written loving dialogue) diminishes the significance of them. After getting a few they are less lovers and more convenient sex scenes that come with some item perks. Often times I just forget I have Phylla until I really just look under the Lovers tab to see who I haven't interacted with for a while.
5744229 Yeah. At this point, the only time I play the game is when I want to try out a transformation I might not have tried before. Always more focused on my own character and what I can do to them.
When i read the first chapter i thought " meh, ill read it just because i like the author but this story isnt anything special." But now im kicking myself in the ass for thinking somthing so naive. This sounds like the making of an AMAZING story!!!
5744275 To my previous comment I was just saying that you don't have to exactly the same way but have it similar. I can't wait to see Spike upgrade his weardrobe to some unconvincing and indecent magical armor(like this just reverse image search the image for the full pic) that still protects his 'expose parts' due to it being magical and it is crotch-hugging tight and it inhabited/possessed by a female soul. And I can't wait to see more of Spike's transformations, likes getting more feminine to the point that he looks like a very feminine male and maybe get some permanent high-heels that grow out of the bottom of his feet that forces Spike to walks with a very feminine sway. And can you add some game logic in likes adding perks that Spike grains at the end of each chapter likes how they did in these 'Fallout: Equestria' stories? And if you looking for more ideas for some monsters try looking up 'Gideon's Bestiary by Gideon' and you can finds it on e-hentai if you having a hard time finding it. Or If you want I can just pm you the link to you. I can see Spike looking this after the year is almost up: derpicdn.net/img/view/2015/2/14/828312__solo_blushing_questionable_clothes_spike_solo+male_underwear_muscles_bulge_hyper.jpeg
With that out of the way, Spike sat down to a meal of gems, eying the bag the gremlin dropped suspiciously. He'd save it for now, but there was no way he'd try whatever was inside...
That night, Spike vowed never to abuse transformative agents.
Three months later, Spike had ass-length sandy blonde goo-hair, brown mouse fur, hooves, six demon horns, cat ears, a bee's abdomen with stinger and ovipositor, four lactating E cup breasts, a horse-cock, a dog-dong, a cat-penis, six baseball sized testicles, a goo-vagina, and two anuses.
"Any who, that's all I gotta say! I'm gonna go tell the Queen about you now! Better get that package ready... er, wherever it is... because we're gonna make you fuck us senseless~! Bye bye, my sexy stud muffin~!"
*One year later~*
Twilight: Alright! The portal's opening, Spike should be coming through it as planned *Seconds later, what emerges is a being of pure carnal power, so great, it'd make Slaanesh cream/jizz itself* Hey Twilight I'm back,. Oh and I brought along a surprise *He looks back to the mirror then cups his claws in front of his mouth* HEY EVERYBODY COME OVER HERE, MEET YOUR GRANDMA!!! Hehe, sorry about that, I ended up becoming a dad and started a family, a big one *The mirror began to shudder till it was bouncing around from its violent shaking, till a tidal wave of dragon/batpony hybrid foals spewed forth from the vortex, followed by regular batponies and bizarre looking ones* Yep, big family, so what'dya think mom? *Twilight fainted long after counting the first two hundred foals*
Comment posted by Chaos51268 deleted Jun 11th, 2016
5743755
Yeah, I did research it to see what he meant. And I'm definitely siding with keeping him as trying to be a good guy here. As shown in the chapter I just posted. I don't plan on him going mad with power or anything anywhere down the line, don't you worry about that.
5743655
Well, that's the thing: You already know them. What fun is it if I just show you things that you can already see for yourself by playing the game? This way, things stay fresh, and I don't have to worry about people saying I misrepresented characters from the game.
5743601 ehhh I'm fine with like 90% of fetishes as long as its not scat or watersports
5743896
The thing with quite a few of the characters in the game, however, is that they aren't really explored too much beyond the PC going down on them or vice versa.
Though I can understand why you've chosen to branch of from them. You've mentioned before having to work with predefined character personalities, there's also the point to make that Mareth is definitely a lot bigger than the game makes out to be. If you ever talked to Dominika in the bar of Tel'Adre, some of her dialogue can give you a fair idea of just how big the world is, that's not to mention you only have so many locations to explore, one stock portion of a specific biome obviously isn't a good representative of diversity.
Still, my agreement aside. It would be nice to see some of those characters portrayed in different scenarios, assuming you felt there was enough leeway to work with them of course.
5744066 I'll concede there. I might have him run into some familiar faces at certain points. However, there's also one other thing that holds me back: I don't get as connected to the characters, so I don't really know that much about them despite having played many times to the point of getting over powered. It's honestly easier to build my own characters than it is to try and find every bit of information and personality traits of the existing characters to appease fans of the work. I love CoC for the setting and theme, not so much for the story aspects. Very few side characters actually interest me story-wise. To be honest, I actually end up skimming a lot of the text sections, even during the sex scenes. I'm actually usually more focused on fighting and leveling up, surprisingly.
honestly I have thought about writing one of these for the longest time, but I could never figure out who to put over there or how to get them there.
This mirror thing with spike is genius.
I am looking forward to seeing familiar faces as well as new ones.
Also can't wait for when Spike gets hungry and has a snack...
Looks good. Will keep reading to see where this goes.
5744091 No shame in that. If I had to criticize CoC, it would be:
A. The large blocks of text that are usually repeated for every enemy of the same type. It is easy to just ignore them all together and just look for the bold spots to find what has changed (and sometimes they aren't even in bold!)
B. A lot of characters' development, short of lovers, consists mainly of "This is my name and what I do, wanna have sex?"
C. The ability to acquire so many lovers (with excellently written loving dialogue) diminishes the significance of them. After getting a few they are less lovers and more convenient sex scenes that come with some item perks. Often times I just forget I have Phylla until I really just look under the Lovers tab to see who I haven't interacted with for a while.
5744229 Yeah. At this point, the only time I play the game is when I want to try out a transformation I might not have tried before. Always more focused on my own character and what I can do to them.
5744275
I'm kind of the flip side. I like to get as far as I can without using any transformation items (except maybe grow+ and reducto)
When i read the first chapter i thought " meh, ill read it just because i like the author but this story isnt anything special." But now im kicking myself in the ass for thinking somthing so naive. This sounds like the making of an AMAZING story!!!
5744275
To my previous comment I was just saying that you don't have to exactly the same way but have it similar. I can't wait to see Spike upgrade his weardrobe to some unconvincing and indecent magical armor(like this just reverse image search the image for the full pic) that still protects his 'expose parts' due to it being magical and it is crotch-hugging tight and it inhabited/possessed by a female soul. And I can't wait to see more of Spike's transformations, likes getting more feminine to the point that he looks like a very feminine male and maybe get some permanent high-heels that grow out of the bottom of his feet that forces Spike to walks with a very feminine sway. And can you add some game logic in likes adding perks that Spike grains at the end of each chapter likes how they did in these 'Fallout: Equestria' stories? And if you looking for more ideas for some monsters try looking up 'Gideon's Bestiary by Gideon' and you can finds it on e-hentai if you having a hard time finding it. Or If you want I can just pm you the link to you.
I can see Spike looking this after the year is almost up:
derpicdn.net/img/view/2015/2/14/828312__solo_blushing_questionable_clothes_spike_solo+male_underwear_muscles_bulge_hyper.jpeg
Nope Nope Nope Nope Nope, soooo much nope! GJ, spike.
That night, Spike vowed never to abuse transformative agents.
Three months later, Spike had ass-length sandy blonde goo-hair, brown mouse fur, hooves, six demon horns, cat ears, a bee's abdomen with stinger and ovipositor, four lactating E cup breasts, a horse-cock, a dog-dong, a cat-penis, six baseball sized testicles, a goo-vagina, and two anuses.
*One year later~*
Twilight: Alright! The portal's opening, Spike should be coming through it as planned
*Seconds later, what emerges is a being of pure carnal power, so great, it'd make Slaanesh cream/jizz itself*
Hey Twilight I'm back,. Oh and I brought along a surprise
*He looks back to the mirror then cups his claws in front of his mouth*
HEY EVERYBODY COME OVER HERE, MEET YOUR GRANDMA!!! Hehe, sorry about that, I ended up becoming a dad and started a family, a big one
*The mirror began to shudder till it was bouncing around from its violent shaking, till a tidal wave of dragon/batpony hybrid foals spewed forth from the vortex, followed by regular batponies and bizarre looking ones*
Yep, big family, so what'dya think mom?
*Twilight fainted long after counting the first two hundred foals*