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I read the first paragraph.
AWWW YEAAAHHH.
You certainly know your stuff.
I get the sick feeling that Nebula was actually quite sane... But what a fight.
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Oh she'll get more lines, Luna's one of my favorite characters and I just didn't want to bring her too deeply into the story just yet. Trixie was one of my favorite characters to write, so thank you!
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Pretty much my main criticism. I also agree that not only Luna, but Celestia as well seem underrepresented. It seems to me after fake Twilight attempting to murder Celestia, Celestia's guilt over Twilight's "death", and Twilight subsequently saving both Celestia's physical and mental state that they should be very very close. The relationship still feels a bit formal and stiff to me.
From the passage at the end I find that Nebula waz sane(mostly).......either way I feel bad for him he waz doing wat he thought to help twilight even if it was wrong in ethics.
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You have a point, and I hadn't intended for their interactions to be quite so formal. I'll make the relationship more clear in later chapters, maybe brush up a couple earlier ones when I get a chance to edit.
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Awesome. And it is revealed to all be the most epic setup for a Twi-Luna story. J/K. But they should totally explore the magic of best friendship. Because Twilight is best pony (especially this Twilight) and deserves a best friend. What I'm trying to get at is that I eagerly await your next posting.
That is different from how Twilight is described most of the time... I wonder if he mood affects it or if it was just the soap she used...
Hmm... Are we suppose to know where she is recognizing the blanket from? Cause the only one that comes to mind would be the one Twilight made for that homeless pony...
Eee, Starshine! Hun, you need to post the Starshine story, I love eet sooo much! Maybe you can fix it up and post it between the end of this story and the sequel? Perhaps?
LOL I'm reading this for the first time since I was introduced to it by the release of the SBC chapter and I'm just laughing about my user name right now...
This is a very entertaining story so far, but the wildly inconsistent pacing seems to be intensifying; some parts are moving so fast it blurs together (for example, the skeleton bit.. Twi was bordering on Insane Troll Logic there), and other parts draw out details to a stilted excess. It feels a little bit like a dream in that regard, but as fitting as that is, it doesn't make for a very coherent read.
wonder how many people got the fact that the homless guy was the killer after this chapter
Ah yes that makes sense. Hey phone could you die ple..