I am so horny happy to see this.

Oh yes, now that's what I'm talking about. Deliciously done, darling!

I love you, Chuckfinley, for making a sequel to that story. It was the best. So is this.

Is it weird that I'm about as turned on by the "unsexy" parts (the munch, the rules, the 'grit' of the kink) as I am by the "good stuff?"

“Listen to me, you slutty little bildungsphilister,” growled Cheerilee, “If you lie to me, I’ll see you sent straight back to ma—”

“Yellow!” cried Twilight.

Cheerilee stepped back, and Rarity let the cane fall to the floor.

“Am I too heavy with the cane, love?” she asked.

“No, just a-ah... Please don’t mention the K-word...” whispered Twilight.

Cheerilee’s eyebrows popped up. “The K-word? What’s—Ohh. Ah. Okay, no K-word.”

“Thanks,” said Twilight. “I’m ready. Green?”

That is so Twilight, nice one.

Everypony always learned something new and Cheerilee’s parties.

should be "at"

“Are those your data on the whiteboard?”

It's so weird to see "data" be plural.

Another great scene.

Yessssss, statistics clop.

Gorgeous.

Well, that was fun! Twilight calling yellow on the K-word cracked me up!

Though I always wonder, when I read a story like this, whether the author has done some research, or is writing based on personal experience...

I'm must be a big idiot. I have no idea what the k-word is.

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Kindergarten

5158384 yep a big ass moron.

IT FINALLY HAPPENED.

5092485 Please ignore this involuntary word-nerd response.

The singular form of data is datum. Data is the plural form.

Cribbed Paraphrased from the dictionary definition:

From the Latin data.
1. nominative plural of datum.
2. (used with a plural verb) individual facts, statistics, or items of information:
'These data represent the results of our analyses. Data are entered by terminal for immediate processing by the computer.'
3. (used with a singular verb) a body of facts; information:
'Additional data is available from the moderator.'

This word is more often used as an uncountable noun with a singular verb than as a plural noun with singular datum. This is where most people become confused over data's plural/singular status.

Thank you for suffering through reading this unnecessary comment.

only read this fanfic because of the adorable cover picture really cute little chibi ponies.

Idle thoughts, only vaguely related to the story : I wonder why it seems a popular idea for Rarity to be the dominant? It's a bit... cliche? The fussy, perfectionist, high-class lady being "Mistress". In my head, it'd be far more interesting to see her as the submissive one, especially with someone stereotypically "beneath" her, like Applejack or Rainbow, being the dominant.

Also, I think I mentioned this in another Chuckfinley story, but I'd love to see a full-blown safeword use (meaning red, not yellow) and the effects thereof. Safeword use doesn't have to be something bad - safewording doesn't even need to mean that something went wrong, merely that the limit of consent has been reached, and that's a perfectly okay thing to happen. Safewording can be a learning experience and, for me, at least, (but I'm weird) a very powerful expression of trust and love.

There's a difference between "I trust you to not hurt me too much" and "I trust you to stop at my word, no matter how much you're enjoying yourself or how 'into' the role you are, because you're always still there, hearing me, and you love me."

None of this is a direct request to the author; I'm just taking the opportunity to ramble.

You can has review!

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