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A sequel to an odd little mind control story? *gasps* Well, don't mind if I do. The theme seems to be crack-ships and I just can't help myself.
Should we include some hypnosis with these two? I will let you all decide. Thumbs up my post for yes, leave a reply to it for "very yes."Oh who am I kidding, I will be adding some at some point, might not be in the first chapter or two, but it will come in.How long will this go for? Not sure. What will be in it? Whatever comes up. I just know that the idea of Dash being a good pet for Trixie tickled me pink. I was considering continuing on with Rarity and Cadance instead, but I have that pair in a LOT of other stories at the moment, and I don't want to mess up my characterizations for those with them doing things in here.
Ooh nice Shadowbolt cover pic. Her...ahem...future attire shall we say, will need to be light weight or the others will notice and presume she's slacking for some reason. Also...
Warning: Metal bits may attract lightning.
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7706171 Got the anvil for that at me dad's place, check in front of my ute in bottom pick. Damn thing weighs at least 50 kg.
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Wonder what they'd use for bagpipes for 'It's a long way to the top'?
7706184 Never mind, answered my own stupid question.
I like this. We aren't really sure here whether Dash is being submissive because she likes it or Trixie is hitting her with some sort of magic whammy. If it wasn't for the fact that Trixie is about as subtle as a brick I would almost say it's both.
Shoot me if I'm wrong but should that be 'mumbo' or this an intentional Ozzie fallback on purpose, thing?
Daww, Soarin is flooring, feel bad for the poor fella.
'on' or is this something suggestive?
backwards (one word)
Me thinking RD has some residual hypnosis from Maud. Something like that happened in Greatest American Hero, FBI Bill got whammy-ed at a magic show and every time someone said 'scenario' he'd freeze until they said it again. Took em' ages to fix it.
Iiiiinteresting. Do go on. Please. I do love me a dominating/in charge Trixie
7706296 Fixed the pesky things. The "mambo" thing was buckin' LibreOffice correcting me. I should have googled it...
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Hypnotized Rainbow Dash? That needs a "very yes".
7706916 Kill the typos with Mambo burning farts!
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7706218 None can resist her Great and Powerful charm!
The subject matter is my thing, but holy crap this moves even quicker than the typical plotless clopfic. The relationship appears out of nothing going full steam, and the moment someone is hypnotized there's a full submissive persona in place.
So how long till this blows up in Trixie's face... further more how long until Twi figures out that it's her friend that's being controlled?
dang it damaged. love it.
Shade is 40% cooler. (It's always cooler standing under the shade?)
AJ, You didn't notice anything funny about the rain RD brought over?
7712123 Doesn't seem like something that would blow up. Rainbow has safe words and consented. It pretty much no different than Twilight and Maud.
Yeah, the fic is fun, but the hypnosis scene was kind of lacking compared to your other story. I was hoping for a longer, more mind-teasing induction.
7713090 Indeed, and like the other one there will be a much more in-depth scene involving it shortly. Trixie is not experienced with the games she wants to play; at best she is a gifted amateur. Twilight is explaining as best she can, but she is always on the wrong side of the fence from what Trixie needs to know. Only one pony will be able to solve this problem and allow Dash to have the owner she deserves: Maud Pie.
This IS Consensual right?
7713329 Absolutely.
It's quite good so far ... I didn't even realize how much I would love the idea of being made an non-verbal creature, but it's an amazing idea and you're doing it really well. Rainbow blurting some nonsense phrase about clouds and bolting away was pretty funny; I like that you can blend clop and character moments like that.
One little thing, just my opinion: isn't twice, once, twice again kind of long for a safe gesture? I've never been in a scene myself, I'll admit; that would require I have a social life. But I was under the impression that the safe word means 'Stop everything now.' So if it took that long to communicate, wouldn't that be an issue?
7712123 Twilight finding out who's under the illusion will be an interesting scene ...
7722282 Yes, that is a bad tap-out, a very bad one. Trixie really likes being in charge of somepony, particularly someone almost as Great and Powerful as herself (but not really, because pegasi aren't unicorns), but the mare is inexperienced in this position, very much so.
I don't understand why the story lingers over bdsm safety, as important as it may be, when the actual relationship and Dash's alter ego's creation and hypnosis were practically footnotes.
Are carefully laid out boundaries your fetish?
I have to admit, this went in a direction I didn't expect it to go. Hypnosis training for the one doing the hypnotizing? Capitalizing on trust and safe words?
I don't think I've ever seen a hypnosis-based fanfic that did that(or at least not many that I can remember), kudos! I'm really looking forward to more of this!
Though I'm slightly confused about Shade, is she part of a hypnotic suggestion put in her mind by Trixie or just a part of RD that Trixie "awakened"?
Have I told you that I love your work? I mean, damn, this is both cute and really hot. I don't find a lot of writers who can do that; they usually choose one or the other. Honestly, I didn't think about hypnosis in terms of clop very often before I found Twilight's Relaxation, and using it as one way to play in a BDSM relationship was just the perfect framework to my tastes. I am so glad that you're writing a sequel, and especially that the sub in this case is being made a trained animal. That, if I may get so personal, pushes my buttons.
...and that flipped a switch in my childhood/teenage memory.
There's a glitch in the Matrix, shouldn't that be 'these two words' or is that being pedantic, sorry.
...and the library caught fire, OH NO the liter-nanity!
Hope Shade's safe action isn't....
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7724979 As a former auto parts person forgive my analogy , but it's like changing from low range to high range in a 4WD. Still the same vehicle just different gearing as I see it.
Very interesting perspective... I'm looking forward to seeing how this goes...
Cheerilee will you have a school full of minions to do your bidding (not the perverse kind, the maid and butler do my things for me and get your homework done kind)?
Some ponies get discouraged when the stallion of their dreams turns out an egocentric jerk. Apparently Rarity simply decided that she wasn't aiming high enough yet.
Whenever I see a new chapter from Damaged, I gasp with delight and run to open it.
Rainbow is playing Frogger?
This is AJ's version.
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Excellent chapter as always. Still want to see a scene with Rarity and her fillies.
7738228 The next sequel will not feature them as the target, but likely the one after that will. I have an idea in mind for what Rares will be doing with her "fillies," but I want that to be the capstone. There is another mare who we have briefly seen, who needs to have her games revealed.
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Cheerilee then? Or Pinkie Pie?
Cheerilee because she was part of the study group and Pinkie Pie because it's always the chaos mage you least expect.
7739437 Cheerilee
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I love censor bars. I can tap them and read your response, then pretend I didn't tap them and that it says "Derpy". Or "Discord". Or "Flash Sentry" (just for the pained/enraged outcries of the masses).
7739465 I didn't say who her special somepony is...
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Discord! I called it. Discord in a Derpy costume. Or Derpy in her Caballeron costume. Or Caballeron in his Discord costume, just to make the confusion complete. They meet for lunch once a week with Daring Do and Ahuizotl.
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7745410 Blargle. Fixed!
This was a really fun story. I hope you revisit it in the future!
Aaaaaaaa such a good ending!
Okay, this was super weird but in a awesome way.
While TrixDash is not a couple I ship, and while I would have liked to see a chapter where RD convinced Trixie to let her be in control just for a bit to see what it was like, this still hit my hypnosis fetish in the right way.
8047498 Glad you enjoyed it!
Now that I've thought about it, I think this is my favorite fic to have hypnosis in it ever.
The only reason I'm not adding it to my favorites bookshelf is because I tend to prefer to keep my fetish fics and the fics that I'd read normally separate.
Though, I might make an exception for this one after a bit, since it's just that good.