Changed my name cus, I found out that I love ravens. And I got a new main OC
every week Scootaloo visit her dead parents. and she always meet With a pony who help her get over her lost. and this pony is a more than a good friend to her, she is like her mother. this pony have giving Scootaloo the chance to be loved be a mother again.
-Warning: Bad grammar!
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i like it and Helene2908 can you make a sequel for this story or add more chapters to this story in the future
4958925 maybe... If Im Nice... ;-)
4958976 ok
Please, please go over your story. You have a nice story, how ever the errors are making it almost unreadable, in the first three paragraphs you have six spelling errors. The pattern continues from there. Try running it through spell check or have someone else read it. Good luck.
at (makeing) dresses [making]
Sweetie's (choose) [choice]
was (alomst) grounded [almost]
(happend). and it was true [happened]
(s)he said (W)ith a sad tone first one [She] cap second one [with]no caps
Apple Bloom (shock) her head [shook]
and so forth
4959033 Sorry I have a stange pc, sometimes it does't take all inn, and things Get wrong, but I am also from noraway... (Not That good in english writeing) D:
(Reads short and long description)
This is going to sound bad if the answer to this is no, but Is English your second language?
4959147 maybe.... Yes
4959159
What language do you speak around your house?
OK kid that explains a lot. I see from your blog that you are fifteen. In the US you would be in the ninth or tenth grade.
I suggest this. Go to a teacher that you like and can talk to. Ask them who on the faculty would be the best to help you with your story. Also ask the computer teacher, or whatever class is closest to that title, if you could use one of the schools computers to write on. They might allow you to write on your pc and transfer your work to school on a thumb drive. You have no idea how happy it makes a teacher to see a student using what they are trying to teach.
Another method would be to get one of the proofreaders and editors on this site to help you look in the frequently asked questions for more information.
Another idea would be to use a public library or the schools library to work in. using there computers.
Use whatever method works best for you. But remember this you do have a talent for writing.
Good luck B.D.
I really like it like all of your stories!
4959097
This comment wasn't here when I posted that question.
Yeah, what 4959246 said. Sadly, I don't know Norwegian, Nynorsk, Bokmål, or whatever you'd call it (Im a silly Texan who speaks a little Japanese on the side), but I'd see if you can connect with someone here on FimFiction that could help you translate the ideas you have into English or ask a teacher or someone in your life that would be interested in seeing you grow as a writer. Trust me, if I was a teacher, I'd be absolutely thrilled you were interested in story telling, and in a second language to boot!
As it stands, I know I could rewrite your story, adapting it for English, but I'm afraid since I can't dig into what you truly mean to say in your native language, some of its meanings would be lost. Seriously, I started rewriting what you have, my interpretation came off differently...
For Example (Excerpt from part of the intro)
I stopped after that when I thought back to what I might be assuming you meant and getting wrong. Best bet would be either real life help or someone who is bilingual, fluent English and can at least collaborate in Nyorsk well enough to relay your intent.
Maybe you should consider requesting an editor
I'll say.
I'd like to read this, but the grammar is what turned me away. I wouldn't be able to read it without laughing, which I know isn't the right reaction when Scootaloo is visiting the grave of her dead parents.
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I can offer to help edit this story if you may allow it :3
good story, even with the bad grammar